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Title: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 05, 2007, 11:06:38 PM
Name: Seh’nara Celebrindal

Gender: Female

Age: 119  (25 human years)

Race: Elf

Tribe: Tethinrhim/Injerín (Is Tethinrhim but got adopted into the Injerín after her parents' death)

Hair Colour: Copper

Eye Colour: Hazel

Weight: 1 pygge, 7 hebs

Height: 1 ped, 9 palmspans, 5 nailsbreadths

Occupation: Ranger

Title: Swift Ranger

Physical Appearance And Clothes
Seh’nara has a slightly oval face and soft copper hair, which has grown a little past her shoulders. She also has large hazel eyes. Her eyes are unreadable but when she is especially angry, they will turn into blazing infernos.(Figuratively, of course.) Her most prominent feature is a black rose tattoo cutting through the right eye. She got that tattoo on a whim, thinking that it would look good on her. It did.

Usually, you will see her in brown pants and green shirts with a utility belt. The only time she dresses up is when it’s a must. Although she lives in a peaceful village, she always has her Scourge slung around her body easily reachable, “just in case” as she always says.

She prefers her hair to be let down, but if she has to, she will tie it up in wind braids. She has one earhole, and the earring that she wears is usually a string braid with a fang hanging from it that her mother gave to her for her 10th birthday. Around her neck is a ruby locket that her father gave her with portraits of him, her mother and one family portrait. This is her most treasured possession and when she is feeling down, she will look at her parents’ strong and gentle gazes. That always makes her feel better.



Personality

Seh’nara is a shrewd person. Because she had to grow up prematurely, she gained a sense of cunningness to survive. To survive, she learnt, is to not let others know what you know, let them know only what they need to think that you know nothing. Although that particular trait has saved her from trouble, it had also gotten her into trouble.

Often, even if she’s angry, she does not show her temper, but it does not mean that she does not have one. The only sign that she is angry is that her eyes will suddenly gain a burning quality and if she looks at you, her gaze will be so piercing that many will turn away. Rarely will she "blow up" as she prefers to keep things non-violent.

Being naturally sociable, she finds it easy to make friends but she finds it hard to trust them completely. Anyone can be her friend, but to gain her complete trust is more difficult. If she gives you her trust and true friendship, and you break the trust and ruin the friendship, she will find it very hard to trust you again. She can hold a grudge for a very long time, depending on her disposition towards you. If she is holding a grudge against you, be prepared for aloofness, contempt and coldness. Rarely will she forgive a person just because a period of time has gone by, and if she does, count yourself lucky.

She sometimes can be a loner and at those times, will allow only Silver, her Ashmarian Wolf, to be with her. Sometimes she will also disappear for long periods at a time, and no one has succeeded in figuring out where she goes. She has an explosive laugh which can startle  people, and she also possesses a great sense of humor, though she doesn’t show it.

Often, you will see her walking around town, just staring into space, or you can find her in the orphanage, playing with the children. They remind her of herself, because they also do not have parents.

Strengths
   She’s a superb fighter and can make a weapon out of almost anything at hand, though she may not be proficient with any object unlike her Scrouge. She also improvises well and fast.
   Her senses are very acute and rarely will anything escape her sharp ears and eyes.
She is more agile and quicker than most.
   Her hands are firm, and she has plenty of experience pickpocketing, lockpicking, and moving in the shadows. These skills come in handy in tight situations.
   Her knowledge of herbs and plants is extensive, and she never hesitates to use it. It has helped her when she was badly injured while hunting solo in her youth. She had soptted and recognised a patch of plants that had healing properties. Said injury is also the cause of her cramps.
 She is proficient with short blades such as daggers, though she is not the best.


Weaknesses

   She can be too confident at times and may bite off more than she can chew, thus getting herself into trouble.
   When she becomes really angry, her anger blinds her to anything and everything and she will not listen to reason.
   When she is sleepy, she tends to get reckless. At times like that, she would jump where others would go around. That has got her into trouble a lot of times.
 She gets angry if you wake her up too early, and may attack the person who awakened her. She needs 7 1/2 hours of sleep to keep her cool.
 She can get really obnoxious when she’s stressed, and says all the wrong things, usually to the wrong person. This has also gotten her into no end of trouble, and has even gotten her thrown out of a city once.
 She is prone to leg cramps because of a injury she had when she was young. Those cramps crop up at the most unlikely (and inconvenient) times, like in the middle of a fight.
Often, she has vivid nightmares that comes from the day her parents died. When she wakes up, she is especially vunerable and is physically and mentally weak.

History
Seh’nara was a normal elf, and being born into the Tethinrhim tribe, she was raised amongst her own kind. Although her tribe does not encourage public affection, her parents always felt that children should be showered with love and concern, so they always praised her and encouraged her in whatever she did. During her youth, she was unusually gifted. Her hands were deft, her feet quick. In fighting, she has this uncanny ability to vaguely sense what the enemy will do next. If she is stuck in any way, be it climbing, swimming or fighting, she improvises fast and quick and gets out of the situation safely. This made her one of the best in physical activities.  She is skilled in herbal law, hunting, fishing and foresting as she was trained in all of these aspects. She also spent most of her free time training with her Scrouge.

She was 20 years old when she got her tattoo. She just had a fight with her parents, and was taking a walk in the surrounding area to cool down when she saw a little boy crouching down, looking at a rose. Curious, she asked the boy," What are you doing?" The boy answered, "I'm taking care of this rose. My mother told me that she likes roses, so when this rose is big, I'm going to give it to her." Seh'nara was touched that such a young boy could be so filial, and as she walked back she reflected on her behaviour. She was ashamed that she shouted at her parents over a small matter. So, on a whim, she decided to get her rose tattoo, partly because she thought that it would look good on her, and mostly because she wanted to remind herself of the boy's filial piety.  

At 30 years old, she went out hunting solo. She was tracking some deer somewhere north of her home when a bear started to go on a rampage, with her in its path. She fought bravely, and finally defeated the bear. It was a really close call, and she sustained several serious injuries. While she was on the ground, nearly unconscious with pain, she soptted a patch of plants that she knew could heal her. Crawling over, she quickly consumed the plants with some water and promptly fell asleep. By then the search party had found her and brought her home. Her wounds were treated and healed, but as a side effect, she frequently had leg cramps after that.

When she was about 112 years old after she joined the Injerín (around 22 human years), she saw a male Ashmarian Wolf cub with a trader while on her travels. As the cub was weak and scrawny, the trader had wanted to kill it. Her heart went out to the cub and she brought it home. She named it Silver because of the colouring of its fur and he has been with her ever since.

She had lived her childhood in the Anturian Forest and wanted to become a Kaierian Warrior but sadly, her dreams was crushed by her parents death. One day she thought she had seen a Unicorn on the opposite bank of a lake and she wanted to check it out. Later on, she was convinced that all she saw was an ordinary horse so the guilt was increased. Her parents, wanting to humor her, had agreed to row her over to the other shore. Halfway into the river, something went wrong with the boat and there was a hole in the hull. Her mother had been swept away by the current but her father managed to get Seh’nara and himself to shore.

Putting her into a safe spot, he told her to wait for him. With that, he jumped into the river and that was the last time Seh’nara had seen him alive. Having waited for a few hours, she fell asleep and after waking up, she started to go downstream in hopes of finding her parents holed up under a tree somewhere, but no such luck. While searching, she was found by a search party who was looking for her and her parents. After learning of her missing parents, the search party helped Seh'nara look for 3 days, but to no avail. The search party then wanted to go back, but Seh'nara was determined to at least find out what happened to them, so she continued on her own. After searching for another 2 days, she finally found her mother's bracelet half buried in the ground. Then, she accepted the inevitable. She wanted to go back, but felt that she was the cause of her parents' death and did not dare.

After wandering around for a little while, hunger had gotten hold of her, and after failing to find any food, she resorted to stealing from a travelling caravan. That was the first time she had ever stolen. Over the course of the next few months, she stole constantly to feed herself and Silver, for the faithful animal had found her. She continued with this lifestyle until she saw Luthien. He had come to South Sarvonia to trade. Exhausted, she stumbled over to him, and after some gentle questioning, he found out about her recent past and decided to adopt her.

Thus began her new life with the Injerín. Although the hurt for her parents’ death slowly numbed, the guilt had never quite gone away. Also, the pain and grief she felt made her feel that she was not worthy for the status as a Kaierian Warrior. When Luthien brought her back, another adopted girl, Alassiel, warmly welcomed Seh’nara as a sister. They soon became the best of friends, and Alassiel was one of the first Seh'nara truly trusted.

Despite the fact that they were of the same age, Seh'nara was physically and mentally the younger one. That arrangement worked fine because Seh'nara was content with being the younger one and secretly had always wanted an older sister. Although Luthien gave Seh’nara the choice of learning performing arts as an occupation, she refused, because she preferred to hunt or fish outdoors instead of being “stuck inside a stuffy room with no way of escaping learning how to sing ‘La la la’ properly”. Despite that, she started to learn the flute to occupy herself in her free time. Because she is a Ranger, she travels often, and reccently went back to South Sarvonia. Now, her main purpose in life is to see the world, make new friends, experience new cultures and maybe gather enough courage to go back and try to become a Kaierian Warrior.


Belongings and Weapons
Seh’nara dislikes things that will occupy one or both of her hands. She prefers to just carry everything in her belt. Her weapons consist of her Scourge, and two daggers which she reccently learnt how to double wield.  Always present on her body no matter what is her fang earring and ruby locket. She keeps some lockpicks in her belt and some money. She also has one w'aer kept in the handle of her Scrouge just in case she needs it.

Familiar

Silver is a male Ashmarian Wolf and has been with Seh’nara since she rescued him. Although he was weak when Seh’nara found him, he has become a strong wolf under her loving care. Seh’nara brushes his fur everyday and it is sleek and smooth. He got his name from the unusual colouring of his fur. His head to his midsection is completely black, then it fades to silver and finally turning into white. Silver is usually silent and rarely makes a sound normally unless he’s playing with people. When he growls, it means that danger is eminent, but not that near. But if he barks, it means that danger is almost on top of them. He is very gentle with children and playful too.

Silver has never forgotten how she had saved him form certain death by the trader and is extremely loyal and protective of Seh’nara and would do anything for her, even dying. The same goes for Seh’nara, and the bond they have is strong and unbreakable. When they travel, he either scouts in front or walks beside her. Often, Seh’nara talks to Silver as if he was one of her kind, and in fact, Seh’nara swears that he is as intelligent as her. They are inseparable, and you never see one without the other.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 05, 2007, 11:50:35 PM
Hey there, sis!  :grin: I have a few more comments.

I don't think puppy-dog eyes would be very appealing when you are an old woman. :) A minor thing; I already told you, Injerín is spelt with the little accent on the 2nd 'i'. You've only changed the first 'Injerín' in the CD. And you haven't mentioned how close we are!  ;)


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on March 06, 2007, 06:56:12 AM
She's not old.  By human standards she's only about 20(rough guess, don't hold me to exact age)


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Oeah on March 06, 2007, 11:30:26 AM
Ahai Elfess! I'm just gonna say something that I noticed right away.... Three pygges is equal to three hundred pounds, this is the average weight for an Ogre. I'm pretty sure that was just a mistake.

                                 Buh-bye!


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 06, 2007, 03:49:24 PM
@ Alassiel: Yeah, I haven't thought of that.... anyways, I changed it. Thanks!

@ Oeah: I missed that, thanks for pointing it out to me! 


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Dajkar Sandson on March 08, 2007, 12:19:09 PM
I noticed a couple things while reading through this CD (which is splendidly written, by the way! Never thought I'd use that word though....)

You said that,
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She is skilled in archery, herbal law, telepathy
Telepathy is a mental magic and I'm not sure if it's allowed or not.

If I may ramble on some more, how did she find an Ash'Marian wolf that far south? They're generally only found in the Northern half of Sarvonia.

I apologize in advance if any of me' comments offend or annoy ya'.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 09, 2007, 01:01:45 AM
We, the Injerín, are in the Northern half of Sarvonia. And I did ask my dear adopted sis about the telepathy, but she gave a satisfying reply;
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A highly skilled tribe members generally skilled in at least five of the following: Bowyer, armourer, fisher, forester, groom, hunter, leather worker, mapmaker, mason, weapon smith as well as in herbal law, climbing, telepathy, general fighting abilities and survival in general. The soverign and his/her family are all educated in every one of these areas.

Oh no wait. Ack! Seh'nara, I think you'd better find your familiar after you've been adopted. When you found Silver, you were still with the Tethinrhim. The Tethinrhim are down south. You'll have to alter bits of your history.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Rhapsody Mythlinis on March 09, 2007, 05:29:42 AM
I think you guys are missing the point when it comes to Telepathy, I will have to ask the developers about it, but Telepathy isn't something which can be taught in a sense, unless you use wind magic, but then it really isn't telepathy.

You just can't realistically and logically be trained to speak to others using the power of your mind. Anyone that has telepathy, is either born with it or use specific magics to create a similar effect.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 09, 2007, 03:28:59 PM
@ Dajkar: I suppose there's something wrong about how I find Silver.... i'll have to change it. Thanks for tellin' me!

@ Rhapsody: I didn't know..... anyways, if the developers say no, I'll just have to take it off. Thanks.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 10, 2007, 09:34:24 PM
Hey, sis! ;) My comments will be in this color.

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Name: Seh’nara Celebrindal

Gender: Female

Age: 75

Race: Elf

Tribe: Tethinrhim/Injerín
Say something about being adopted into the Injerín, otherwise people will think you're only half Tethinrhim.

Hair Colour: Copper

Eye Colour: Hazel

Weight: 1.7 pygges

Height: 1.95 peds

Occupation: Ranger
Are you sure you could make money out of being a ranger?

Title: Seh’nara the Swift
This is partly my fault, cuz I had something like that as well, but apparently this isn't the title Mods/Admins are looking for. Do something like 'Wild Ranger'. Or whatever your occupation is.

Appearance And Clothes
Seh’nara has a slightly oval face, soft copper hair which is grown slightly past her shoulder and large hazel eyes. Her eyes are unreadable but when she is especially angry, it will turn into a blazing inferno. But her most prominent feature is a black rose tattoo cutting through the right eye. She had gotten that tattoo on a whim, thinking that it would look good on her. Her judgement was not wrong.

Usually, you will see her in brown pants and green shirts with a utility belt. The only time she dresses up is when it’s a must. Although she lives in a peaceful village, she always has her Scourge slung around her body easily reachable, “just in case” as she always says.

She prefers her hair to be let down, but if she has to, she will tie it up in wind braids. She does wear earrings, but she only has one, and the earring is usually a string braid with a fang hanging from it that her mother gave to her for her birthday. Around her neck is a ruby locket that her father gave her with portraits of him and her mother and one family portrait. This is her most treasured possession and when she is down, she will look at her parents’ strong and gentle gazes. That always makes her feel better.

Often, you will see her walking around town, just staring into space or in the orphanage, playing with the children. They remind her of herself, because they also do not have parents.

Personality
Seh’nara is a shrewd person. Because she had to grow up prematurely, she gained a sense of cunningness to survive. To survive, she learnt, is to not let others know what you know, let them know only what they need to think that you know nothing. Although that particular trait has saved her from trouble, it had also gotten her into trouble. Often, even if she’s angry, she does not show her temper, but it does not mean that she does not have one. Her temper is awful and she will blow up if you irritate her too much. The blow up is sudden because before she blows up, she does not give any warning. The only sign that she is angry is that her eyes will suddenly gain a burning quality and if she looks at you, her gaze will be so piercing that many will turn away.

Being naturally sociable, she finds it easy to make friends but she finds it hard to trust them. Anyone can be her friend, but to gain her trust is more difficult. If she gives you her trust and true friendship and you break the trust and ruin the friendship, she will find it hard to trust you again. She can hold a grudge for a long time if the thing that you did is serious enough. If she is holding a grudge against you, be prepared for aloofness, contempt and coldness. Rarely will she forgive a person just because a period of time has gone by, and if she does, count yourself lucky.

She sometimes can be a loner, and at those times, will allow only Silver, her Ash'marian Wolf (this is the first time you mention Silver, so you can't expect people to know what he is), to be with her. Sometimes she will also disappear for long periods at a time, and no one has succeeded in figuring out where she goes. She has an explosive laugh that can startle a person, and she also possesses a great sense of humor, though she doesn’t show it.


Strengths
   She’s a superb fighter and can make a weapon out of almost anything at hand. She also improvises well and fast. Also, if she teams up with Silver, almost nothing can stop them.
   She is very determined and will complete anything that she starts.
   Her senses are very acute and rarely will anything escape her sharp ears and      eyes. She is also more agile and quick than most.
   Her hands are stable, and she has plenty of experience pickpocketing, lockpicking, and moving in the shadows. This could prove helpful when shadowing someone.
   She’s very logical, and can piece almost anything together when other lesser people would have given up.
   One of her most formidable weapons is her silver tongue. She can turn even a bad thing to a good thing if she deems it necessary. This has gotten her out of trouble more than once and will prove helpful in coming years.
   Her knowledge of herbs and plants is extensive, and it had healed her before.



Weaknesses
   She finds it hard to trust people. This could be her downfall next time.
   She hates being told what to do. People could use this against her.
   She still blames herself for her parents’ death, and carries a lot of emotional baggage with her.
   If she hates a person hard enough, she will do the opposite of whatever the person asks her to do, or twist the instructions.
   She has always detested maps, and has no idea how read them. She prefers to rely on her senses.
   She has a horrible temper if she is woken up too early, and that may strain relationships.
   She can get really rude if she’s stressed, and that can also strain relationships.

History
Seh’nara was a normal elf, and being born into the Tethinrhim tribe, she was raised among many other children. Although her tribe does not encourage public affection, her parents had always felt that children should be showered with love and concern, so they always praised her and encouraged her in whatever she did. From young, she was unusually gifted. Her hands were deft, her feet quick. This made her one of the best in physical activities. She is skilled in archery, herbal law, telepathy, hunting, fishing and foresting.

When she was about 10, she saw a male Ashmarian Wolf cub with a trader. As the cub was weak and scrawny, the trader had wanted to kill it. Her heart went out to the cub and she brought it home. Her parents had objected at first, but after a lot of persuading and ample use of puppy-dog eyes, her parents reluctantly agreed to let her keep it. She named it Silver because of its fur and it has been with her ever since.

She had lived her childhood in the Anturian Forest and wanted to become a Kaierian Warrior but sadly, her dreams was crushed by her parents death. You see, one day she had seen an Ashmarian Wolf that looked extraordinarily like Silver and she wanted to check it out. Her parents, knowing how important this was for her, had agreed to row her over to the other shore. Halfway into the river, something had gone wrong with the boat and there was a hole in the hull. Her mother had been swept away by the current but her father had managed to get Seh’nara and himself to shore. Putting her into a safe spot, he had told her to wait for him. With that, he had jumped into the river and that was the last time Seh’nara had seen him alive. Having waited for a few hours, she fell asleep and after waking up, she started to go downstream in hopes of finding her parents holed up under a tree somewhere, but no such luck. After searching for 3 days, she found a bracelet of her mother’s and accepted the inevitable. As soon as she had collected herself, she realized that she was lost!

After wandering around for a little while, hunger had gotten hold of her, and after failing to find any food, she had resorted to stealing from a travelling caravan. That was the first time she had ever stolen. Over the course of the next few months, she stole constantly to feed herself and Silver, for the faithful animal had found her. Then, she saw Luthien. Exhausted, she stumbled over to him, and after some interrogation, he found out about her recent past and decided to adopt her.

Thus began her new life with the Injerín. Although the hurt for her parents’ death slowly numbed, the guilt had never quite gone away. Also, the pain and grief she felt made her feel that she is not worthy for the status as a Kaierian Warrior. When Luthien brought her back, another adopted girl, Alassiel, warmly welcomed Seh’nara as a sister. They soon became the best of friends, and Alassiel was one of the first Seh'nara truly trusted. Despite the fact that they were of the same age, Seh'nara was physically and mentally the younger one. That arrangerment worked fine because Seh'nara was content in being the younger one and secretly had always wanted an older sister. Although Luthien gave Seh’nara the choice of learning performing arts as an occupation, she refused, because she preferred to hunt or fish outdoors instead of being “stuck inside a stuffy room with no way of escaping learning how to sing ‘La la la’ properly”. Despite that, she started to learn the flute to occupy herself in her free time. Now, her dream is to go out and see the world, make new friends, experience new cultures and maybe gather enough courage to go back and become a Kaierian Warrior.


Belongings and Weapons
Seh’nara dislikes things that will occupy one or both of her hands. She prefers to just carry everything on her belt. Her weapons consist of a longbow, her Scourge, and the Judgment Quill which she calls the "Nightwhirl". Always present on her body no matter what is her fang earring and ruby locket.

Familiar
Silver is a male Ashmarian Wolf and has been with Seh’nara since she rescued him. Although he was weak when Seh’nara found him, under her loving care, he has become a strong Wolf. Seh’nara brushes his fur everyday and it is sleek and smooth. He got his name from the unusual colouring of his fur. His head to his midsection is completely black, then it fades to sliver and finally turning into white. Silver is usually silent and rarely makes a sound normally unless he’s playing with people. If not, when he growls, it means that danger is eminent, but not that near. But if he barks, it means that danger is almost on top of them. He is very gentle with children and playful too. He is also extremely loyal and protective of Seh’nara and would do anything for her, even dying. The same goes for Seh’nara and the bond they have is strong and unbreakable. When they travel, he either scouts in front or walks beside her. Often, Seh’nara talks to Silver as if he was a human, and in fact, Seh’nara swears that he is as intelligent as any human. They are inseparable, and you never see one without the other.

I'll be back on more commenting later, cuz I have to rush off now. :buck:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 10, 2007, 09:43:04 PM
Wild Ranger? I wouldn't consider myself 'wild' per se. I really have no idea about what to put besides 'swift'. Any ideas anyone?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 10, 2007, 09:59:47 PM
I wasn't actually telling you to put yourself as Wild Ranger, it was just an example.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Weivóc'Neán on March 10, 2007, 10:16:50 PM
Well actually, your half right Alassiel, they do want you to put something about their occupation, or if wanted, more of their personality, or entire life. My title is "the Unborn" (not sure if i get to keep or need to change yet), but lets says there is a farmer, who for their entire childhood, had been moved from family to family, for some reason or another, they could give their self the title of "the Unwanted". Their are other ways to go about it, but it just might have been the exact one you had.

About your question Seh'nara, why not combine old title with occupation, maybe "Seh'nara the Swift Ranger"? You can try other stuff such as "Agile Marksman"?

EDIT: I did look back at your CD Alassiel, and it was your old title, which I see why it wouldn't be aloud. Also, why would you want people to call you that, the title is the name you give yourself, which actually on another note, Seh'nara, you can keep "seh'nara the Swift". This is acceptable, because that is something you would want others to call you.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 11, 2007, 05:25:53 AM
I quite liked the idea of being called a Temperamental Bard. It's my mind. Even I don't know how it works, but when I find out, I'll let you know, Weivóc'Neán. ;)


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on March 11, 2007, 02:23:15 PM
Ok Seh'nara,

Rhapsody contacted us admins and brought up the topic of the Telepathy in regards to your tribe...

All of our "elf" experts on the Dev board are currently MIA, so there is no one truly qualified to help us define what is the purpose of the Telepathy within this particular elven tribe. So, at this point, we the administration must ask you to just simply drop it.

Reasons being:
1) It is only mentioned once in the entire entry
2) It isn't fully explained on who it effects and how it effects (What it does exactly)
3) Other tribes/races with such an ability are on the restrictions list ("conditional")

It will only comlicate things for you to keep it in your CD, and from what I can tell, it really doesn't add a whole lot to your character.


I'm sorry if this is an inconvience, but it has been discussed and decided upon for this time.

Thank you.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Mina on March 11, 2007, 03:12:50 PM
@Weivoc: As I understand it, the title isn't what others call your character.  It's an OOC thing, some fancy (or not) description of your character that appears under your display name.  It could be the same as an IC title your character has (my own, which translates to 'Wind mage', could be an example of such a title), but it doesn't necessarily have to be so. 


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 11, 2007, 05:18:04 PM
@ Weivóc: Swift Ranger... I like it! Thanks!   :grin:

@ Kalína: I'll change it. I was prepared for this anyways. Thanks.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on March 12, 2007, 02:40:03 AM
O.O me like!  I'll definatly look into this ASAP.  Very well done!  Also, I'm not an expert on the whole telepathy issue, but if you wish for your character to have a unique form of magic there are many floating around.  Off the top of my head, I know of a group of telekinetics, the True Visions, the Woid Walkers, The shadowmancers, the hunter clerics, the druids ect.  Just check out the people section for more.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 12, 2007, 02:48:06 AM
I thank you on behalf of my adopted sister. She was getting a bit worried because no one was commenting on her CD. Sorry Seh'nara, I just had to comment.  :)

Are there any corrections for her CD? And Drasil, are you a Moderator now? Cuz the CD forum thingy said you had risen from Mini-Mod to Mod.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on March 12, 2007, 04:32:25 AM
Nope, I'm still a mini.  But with Kar on a temporary leave of absense, Kelancy stepping down, and Les disappearing, we minis have alot more influence than ususal.

I haven't looked indepth yet, but she seems to have a high quality in her writing.  All that is left is to check the facts.  If she has done all her research she should be approved in no time.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 12, 2007, 06:50:20 PM
 :D Thanks, Drasil! I hope I got all the facts right.... I did plenty of research, but I'm still afraid that there's a loophole somewhere. Also, after thinking, I decided to drop telepathy. I already have the five of the required skills of my tribe. Thanks again!


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 15, 2007, 10:57:42 PM
I've done the edits. Anything else I need to do?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 16, 2007, 02:55:21 AM
Ok Seh'nara, this is nothing wrong, but is it just me, or do your bullet points for your strengths and weaknesses say '1 month' in Chinese?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: patt0192 on March 16, 2007, 03:23:09 AM
Nice chick, Seh'nara! I hope we get approved soon  :grin:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 17, 2007, 09:04:57 PM
@ Alassiel: Honestly, I don't know. To me, it seems that every time I open the page, the bullet changes. I have absolutely no idea what happened.

@ Jiro: Thanks! I really wanna be approved soon too. So fingers crossed for both of us, yeah?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: patt0192 on March 17, 2007, 10:47:56 PM
lol  :huh: you can't control your bullets  :lol:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 18, 2007, 12:28:33 AM
Yup. Kinda embarrassing actually. I mean, you'd think that even if I can't control the weather or something like that I can at least control my own bullet points.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: patt0192 on March 18, 2007, 04:27:14 AM
lol, you've gotta be firm with them.
smash em over the head :hammer: a few times, or hit em with a fish :fish:
 :grin:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 18, 2007, 04:41:52 PM
I am firm with them. Every time I close the page, I always say, "Do NOT change you little insects," but they always do. It's frustrating!  :buck:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 21, 2007, 09:21:11 PM
*Bump*  I'M READY FOR COMMENTS AND APPROVAL, PEOPLE!!!! HELLO~??


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 22, 2007, 01:04:18 AM
Notice: I already gave my adopted sister's CD a private Uri-check, so I can't really find anything wrong with it now, so it's now in the hands of the 'public'.

*Puts up flashing billboard which says "Approvals needed! Check Seh'nara's CD!!!"


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 22, 2007, 07:48:12 PM
Thanks. HELLO?? I am ready for my approval!!! HELLO??


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Simonne Miller on March 23, 2007, 01:45:10 AM
PLEASE!!! Don't be so impatient. There are people who have been waiting longer than you have, who don't go shouting at us every time they update. If you want our attention that badly, this is not the way to go about it. If your CD has not been commented on in three days, ask it NICELY in the right topic, which is 'Character Descriptions in Waiting'. No shouting, please, we don't like being shouted at any more than other people and we have lives of our own, so we are not online all the time.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on March 23, 2007, 02:16:17 AM
Comments in Orange

Name: Seh’nara Celebrindal

Gender: Female

Age: 75

Race: Elf

Tribe: Tethinrhim/Injerín (Is Tethinrhim but got adopted into the Injerín after her parents' death) Then, for our purposes, she Is Tethinrhim as that is what will affect her looks, personality and the like.  Also, realize that the two tribes have very different appearances and she will know she is not a member of that tribe.  This will probably play a large role in her younger years.  Also, her tribe is a very proud group.  Why would they ahve let one of their own be spirited away to some distant land?  Finally, the two tribes you have chosen live in two completely seperate continenets and the likeliness of her moving from one to another is very slim.  You will need to have a very strong explanation for this migration.  I would just suggest you choose a South Sarvonian Elf tribe.

Hair Colour: Copper

Eye Colour: Hazel

Weight: 1 pygge, 7 hebs

Height: 1 ped, 9 palmspans, 5 nailsbreadths (This is a bit exact.  Generally, we ask that you round it off to the nearest palmspan unless you wish to provide a reasoning as to how she knows her exact weight in mideval society.  Remember, they didn't have scales.)

Occupation: Ranger (hmmm...Maybe it would be best if you stayed with your tribe seeing as they correspond well with your occupation.  The tribe's archery school in Manthria or basic training as a Ronn would make this highly plausible.)

Title: Seh’nara the Swift Ranger (You seem to have misinterpreted the purpose of the title section.  The title is not what people know her by, but more of a sign of respect.  For example, priests or ministers are called Reverends and nobles are called Lord.  Simply remove her name from this and you should be fine.)

Physical Appearance And Clothes
Seh’nara has a slightly oval face, soft copper hair which is grown slightly past her shoulder and large hazel eyes. Her eyes are unreadable but when she is especially angry, they will turn into blazing infernos. But her most prominent feature is a black rose tattoo cutting through the right eye (Sounds painful.  Is it even possible to get a tattoo on your eye?  :shocked: ). She had gotten that tattoo on a whim, thinking that it would look good on her. Her judgement was not wrong. (Huh?  A bit of an explanation would be nice.  Also, you seem to enjoy the use of the pluperfect tense, however, I would suggest you simply use the past or the present)

Usually, you will see her in brown pants and green shirts with a utility belt. The only time she dresses up is when it’s a must. Although she lives in a peaceful village, she always has her Scourge (You need to choose between your two tribes.  You say you live with the Injerin, but so far, your entire CD is Tethinrhim.  I'd simply remove them from your CD.  If their is a particular experience you had there that is crucial for your character, simply make it one of her journies.) slung around her body easily reachable, “just in case” as she always says.

She prefers her hair to be let down, but if she has to, she will tie it up in wind braids. She has one earhole, and the earring that she wears is usually a string braid with a fang hanging from it that her mother gave to her for her 10th birthday. Around her neck is a ruby locket that her father gave her with portraits of him, her mother and one family portrait. This is her most treasured possession and when she is feeling down, she will look at her parents’ strong and gentle gazes. That always makes her feel better.

Often, you will see her walking around town, just staring into space, or you can find her in the orphanage, playing with the children. They remind her of herself, because they also do not have parents.  (This should go in the personality section.)



Personality
Seh’nara is a shrewd person. Because she had to grow up prematurely, she gained a sense of cunningness to survive. To survive, she learnt, is to not let others know what you know, let them know only what they need to think that you know nothing. Although that particular trait has saved her from trouble, it had also gotten her into trouble.

Often, even if she’s angry, she does not show her temper, but it does not mean that she does not have one. Her temper is awful and she will blow up if someone irritates her too much.  The blow up is sudden because she barely gives any warning before blowing up. The only sign that she is angry is that her eyes will suddenly gain a burning quality and if she looks at you, her gaze will be so piercing that many will turn away. (This doesn't seem like a very elven trait.  Elves are known for their mellow attitudes and slow progression towards anger.  While you seem to sort of have that here, the "blowing up" is not very elven, unless their is significant human influence in her life.)

Being naturally sociable, she finds it easy to make friends but she finds it hard to trust them completely. Anyone can be her friend, but to gain her complete trust is more difficult. If she gives you her trust and true friendship, and you break the trust and ruin the friendship, she will find it very hard to trust you again. She can hold a grudge for a long time if the thing that you did is serious enough(this is a pretty confusing sentance). If she is holding a grudge against you, be prepared for aloofness, contempt and coldness. Rarely will she forgive a person just because a period of time has gone by, and if she does, count yourself lucky.

She sometimes can be a loner and at those times, will allow only Silver, her Ashmarian Wolf, to be with her. Sometimes she will also disappear for long periods at a time, and no one has succeeded in figuring out where she goes. She has an explosive laugh which can startle  people, and she also possesses a great sense of humor, though she doesn’t show it.


Strengths
   She’s a superb fighter and can make a weapon out of almost anything at hand. She also improvises well and fast. If she teams up with Silver, almost nothing can stop them. (avoid using superlatives.  Especially in your case, seeing as your elf is so young.  Remember, their are many MANY MANY many experienced fighters in Caelereth.  For example, my character has 45 years of combat experience and is still in his prime.  A wolf and a child(which you are by elven standards) would hardly be able to overcome him.  In addition, I can also think of quite a few characters who are better fighters than Drasil and could easily overcome him.)
   She is very determined and will complete anything that she starts.
   Her senses are very acute and rarely will anything escape her sharp ears and eyes. She is also more agile and quicker than most.
   Her hands are firm, and she has plenty of experience pickpocketing, lockpicking, and moving in the shadows. This could prove helpful if and when she needs to do something stealth based.
   She’s very logical, and can piece almost anything together when other people would have given up.
   One of her most formidable weapons is her silver tongue. She can even turn a bad thing to a good thing if she deems it necessary. This has gotten her out of trouble more than once and might prove helpful in coming years.
   Her knowledge of herbs and plants is extensive, and it has saved her life before.

(Your skills seem a bit extensive for an elf of your age.  Remember, elves learn slower than humans, thus having all these skills seems quite unlikely.)

Weaknesses
   She finds it hard to trust people. This could be her downfall one day.
   When she becomes really angry, her anger blinds her to anything and everything and she will not listen to reason.
   She still blames herself for her parents’ death, and carries a lot of emotional baggage with her.
   If she hates a person hard enough, she will do the opposite of what the person asks her to do, or twist the instructions.
   She has always detested maps, and has no idea how read them. She prefers to rely on her senses and the enviroment. (Eg. The sun, the stars, the moon)
   She has a horrible temper if she is woken up too early, and that may strain relationships.
   She can get really rude if she’s stressed, and that can also strain relationships.
(Hmm...you don't seem really balanced.  You have many formidible strengths and only a few weaknesses.)

History
Seh’nara was a normal elf, and being born into the Tethinrhim tribe, she was raised amongst her own kind. Although her tribe does not encourage public affection, her parents had always felt that children should be showered with love and concern, so they always praised her and encouraged her in whatever she did. During her youth, she was unusually gifted. Her hands were deft, her feet quick. In fighting, she has this uncanny ability to vaguely sense what the enemy will do next. If she is stuck in any way, be it climbing, swimming or fighting, she improvises fast and quick and gets out of the situation safely. This made her one of the best in physical activities. She is skilled in archery, herbal law, hunting, fishing and foresting as she was trained in all of these aspects. (See above comments about age.  You definatly need to age up)

When she was about 10 years old, she saw a male Ashmarian Wolf cub with a trader. As the cub was weak and scrawny, the trader had wanted to kill it. Her heart went out to the cub and she brought it home. Her parents had objected at first, but after a lot of persuading and ample use of puppy-dog eyes, her parents reluctantly agreed to let her keep it. She named it Silver because of the colouring of its fur and he has been with her ever since.  (I don't think its very likely that an Ashmarian wolf would have been so far down.  In addition, the wolf would have to be old or dead by now as generally wolves don't live for 65 years.)

She had lived her childhood in the Anturian Forest and wanted to become a Kaierian Warrior but sadly, her dreams was crushed by her parents death. One day she thought she had seen an Ashmarian Wolf(Ashmarian wolves live up north, not by her.  This is extremely unplausible) across a river that looked extraordinarily like Silver and she wanted to check it out. Her parents, knowing how important this was for her, had agreed to row her over to the other shore. Halfway into the river, something had gone wrong with the boat and there was a hole in the hull. Her mother had been swept away by the current but her father had managed to get Seh’nara and himself to shore.

Putting her into a safe spot, he had told her to wait for him. With that, he had jumped into the river and that was the last time Seh’nara had seen him alive. Having waited for a few hours, she fell asleep and after waking up, she started to go downstream in hopes of finding her parents holed up under a tree somewhere, but no such luck. After searching for 3 days, she found a bracelet of her mother’s and accepted the inevitable. As soon as she had collected herself, she realized that she was lost!

After wandering around for a little while, hunger had gotten hold of her, and after failing to find any food, she had resorted to stealing from a travelling caravan. That was the first time she had ever stolen. Over the course of the next few months, she stole constantly to feed herself and Silver, for the faithful animal had found her. Then, she saw Luthien. Exhausted, she stumbled over to him, and after some gentle questioning, he found out about her recent past and decided to adopt her.  (...How far from her tribe could she have rowed.  I'm sure that she could have found her way back or that the traders could have escorted her.  Also, three days is a long time.  Surely someone would have noticed she was missing and gone out to look for her.)

Thus began her new life with the Injerín. Although the hurt for her parents’ death slowly numbed, the guilt had never quite gone away. Also, the pain and grief she felt made her feel that she was not worthy for the status as a Kaierian Warrior. When Luthien brought her back, another adopted girl, Alassiel, warmly welcomed Seh’nara as a sister. They soon became the best of friends, and Alassiel was one of the first Seh'nara truly trusted.

Despite the fact that they were of the same age, Seh'nara was physically and mentally the younger one. That arrangement worked fine because Seh'nara was content with being the younger one and secretly had always wanted an older sister. Although Luthien gave Seh’nara the choice of learning performing arts as an occupation, she refused, because she preferred to hunt or fish outdoors instead of being “stuck inside a stuffy room with no way of escaping learning how to sing ‘La la la’ properly”. Despite that, she started to learn the flute to occupy herself in her free time. Now, her dream is to go out and see the world, make new friends, experience new cultures and maybe gather enough courage to go back and try to become a Kaierian Warrior.


Belongings and Weapons
Seh’nara dislikes things that will occupy one or both of her hands. She prefers to just carry everything in her belt. Her weapons consist of a longbow, her Scourge, and the Judgment Quill. She usually calls the Judgement Quill by its other name, the "Nightwhirl". Always present on her body no matter what is her fang earring and ruby locket. She keeps some lockpicks in her belt and some money. She also has one w'aer kept in the handle of her Scrouge just in case she needs it.  (to many weapons for an elf to be proficient with at such a young age. I would suggest you focus on one if you want her to have any skill)

Familiar
Silver is a male Ashmarian Wolf and has been with Seh’nara since she rescued him. Although he was weak when Seh’nara found him, he has become a strong wolf under her loving care. Seh’nara brushes his fur everyday and it is sleek and smooth. He got his name from the unusual colouring of his fur. His head to his midsection is completely black, then it fades to silver and finally turning into white. Silver is usually silent and rarely makes a sound normally unless he’s playing with people. When he growls, it means that danger is eminent, but not that near. But if he barks, it means that danger is almost on top of them. He is very gentle with children and playful too.

Silver has never forgotten how she had saved him form certain death by the trader and is extremely loyal and protective of Seh’nara and would do anything for her, even dying. The same goes for Seh’nara, and the bond they have is strong and unbreakable. When they travel, he either scouts in front or walks beside her. Often, Seh’nara talks to Silver as if he was one of her kind, and in fact, Seh’nara swears that he is as intelligent as her. They are inseparable, and you never see one without the other.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 23, 2007, 10:56:40 PM
In all sincerity, I am sorry for screaming like a 5 year old kid who didn't get the lollipop flavour that she wants. My bad. I am so sorry.  :buck:  Gotta be more patient. And I should have looked at that thread. My bad again.  :buck: 


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 23, 2007, 11:02:16 PM
Plus I've done the edits. Drasil, thanks for looking through, though I didn't really get the pluperfect thing... I have no idea what the grammar thingies are all about. It doesn't really show, because I still know how to phrase things, but I do it all on instinct.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on March 23, 2007, 11:06:14 PM
What he means Seh'nara is that you float between using the past tense and the present tense. (If you don't know what they mean, look them up on google, as we use the terms frequently here on the board.)

Just stick to one tense because it makes the whole of your CD much easier to read and understand.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 23, 2007, 11:20:26 PM
So because my history is in the past tense, I have to write everything in the past tense?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on March 23, 2007, 11:43:06 PM
*rubs temples* No, I was simply explaining to you what he was pointing out as you did not understand.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 24, 2007, 01:06:22 AM
I think I get it. Alassiel pointed out that I was using too much "hads".


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on March 24, 2007, 01:25:20 AM
But I'm not entirely sure if that's what it means.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on March 24, 2007, 03:57:00 AM
Yeah. Basically.  The pluperfect is "have verbed"  Also, you need to stick to a single tense. You can't switch back and forth.  Generally, seeing as this is an "entry" it helps to use formal writing and words.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 29, 2007, 07:15:39 PM
Okay! So sorry I didn't post or edit for so long. I got banned from the computer 'cos my dad felt that I should be concentrating on my studies. Especially my mother tongue.  :buck:    Anyways, I did some edits. I took away most of the hads. Is there anything else I need to do?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on March 29, 2007, 10:04:33 PM
I will be going through your CD here in the next couple of days.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 30, 2007, 03:00:05 PM
Oh, that's great. Thanks!


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 31, 2007, 10:30:45 PM
Bumped~


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kazhmet on March 31, 2007, 11:48:22 PM
I think that this CD is heaps well written! Well Done! Im new to this game and have no idea what im doing but all the same, Awesome Character!


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on March 31, 2007, 11:52:30 PM
Thanks! :grin:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kazhmet on April 01, 2007, 12:01:00 AM
Hey anytime! You'd think these mods would move faster wouldn't you?
 :grin: I hope you'll check my character out, except i only made him today. lol
good luck with getting approved!

Yea sorry i kinda forgot to mention my charactr name, hes called "kazhmet"


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 01, 2007, 01:05:29 AM
I wish they'd move quicker, but I do realise that there are many people who wants to be approved and after all, we do have other obligations. So I'm just gonna wait patiently. I checked out your character, and it looks nice, but how the heck can his eyes be glowing red?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 01, 2007, 01:14:05 AM
Please keep chatting out of CDs.  And I'd like to have you know, I am wasting my Saturday providing the first to pages of CDs with URIs so I'd appreciate it if you didn't insult us.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on April 01, 2007, 01:17:19 AM
Were Seh'nara's last posts considered as chatting? She was talking about CDs, and she was defending you Mods.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 01, 2007, 01:18:37 AM
Exactly what I wanted to post, but Alassiel beat me to it. I'm sorry if I insulted you again, though.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Mina on April 01, 2007, 04:58:49 AM
Name: Seh’nara Celebrindal

Gender: Female

Age: 119  (25 human years)

Race: Elf

Tribe: Tethinrhim/Injerín (Is Tethinrhim but got adopted into the Injerín after her parents' death)

Hair Colour: Copper

Eye Colour: Hazel

Weight: 1 pygge, 7 hebs

Height: 1 ped, 9 palmspans  I just noticed Drasil's comment.  Actually, we do require the actual height, not one that is rounded off to the nearest palmspan.  It's just the use of decimals that is frowned on. 

Occupation: Ranger

Title: Swift Ranger

Physical Appearance And Clothes
Seh’nara has a slightly oval face and soft copper hair, which has grown slightly past her shoulders.  There is perhaps one too many 'slightly' here.  I think it might sound better if you remove the first one.    She also has large hazel eyes. Her eyes are unreadable but when she is especially angry, they will turn into a blazing infernos. Her most prominent feature is a black rose tattoo cutting through the right eye. She got that tattoo on a whim, thinking that it would look good on her. It did.

Usually, you will see her in brown pants and green shirts with a utility belt. The only time she dresses up is when it’s a must. Although she lives in a peaceful village, she always has her Scourge slung around her body easily reachable, “just in case” as she always says.

She prefers her hair to be let down, but if she has to, she will tie it up in wind braids. She has one earhole, and the earring that she wears is usually a string braid with a fang hanging from it that her mother gave to her for her 10th birthday. Around her neck is a ruby locket that her father gave her with portraits of him, her mother and one family portrait. This is her most treasured possession and when she is feeling down, she will look at her parents’ strong and gentle gazes. That always makes her feel better.



Personality

Seh’nara is a shrewd person. Because she had to grow up prematurely, she gained a sense of cunningness to survive. To survive, she learnt, is to not let others know what you know, let them know only what they need to think that you know nothing. Although that particular trait has saved her from trouble, it had also gotten her into trouble.

Often, even if she’s angry, she does not show her temper, but it does not mean that she does not have one. The only sign that she is angry is that her eyes will suddenly gain a burning quality Do you mean literally or just figuratively?  If it's the latter, it's alright.   and if she looks at you, her gaze will be so piercing that many will turn away. Rarely will she "blow up" as she prefers to keep things non-violent.

Being naturally sociable, she finds it easy to make friends but she finds it hard to trust them completely. Anyone can be her friend, but to gain her complete trust is more difficult. If she gives you her trust and true friendship, and you break the trust and ruin the friendship, she will find it very hard to trust you again. She can hold a grudge for a very long time, depending on her disposition towards you. If she is holding a grudge against you, be prepared for aloofness, contempt and coldness. Rarely will she forgive a person just because a period of time has gone by, and if she does, count yourself lucky.

She sometimes can be a loner and at those times, will allow only Silver, her Ashmarian Wolf, to be with her. Sometimes she will also disappear for long periods at a time, and no one has succeeded in figuring out where she goes. She has an explosive laugh which can startle  people, and she also possesses a great sense of humor, though she doesn’t show it.

Often, you will see her walking around town, just staring into space, or you can find her in the orphanage, playing with the children. They remind her of herself, because they also do not have parents.

Strengths
   She’s a superb fighter and can make a weapon out of almost anything at hand. She also improvises well and fast.
   Her senses are very acute and rarely will anything escape her sharp ears and eyes. She is also more agile and quicker than most.  The second sentence should probably be listed as a separate strength, I think.  
   Her hands are firm, and she has plenty of experience pickpocketing, lockpicking, and moving in the shadows. This could prove helpful if and when she needs to do something stealth based.
   Her knowledge of herbs and plants is extensive, and it has saved her life before.



Weaknesses

   She finds it hard to trust people. This could be her downfall one day.   Sounds more like a personality trait to me, actually.   
   When she becomes really angry, her anger blinds her to anything and everything and she will not listen to reason.
   She still blames herself for her parents’ death, and carries a lot of emotional baggage with her.  A little more elaboration here so we know how exactly it is a weakness would be good.  
   If she hates a person hard enough, she will do the opposite of what the person asks her to do, or twist the instructions.  Again, doesn't seem much like a weakness. 
 She has always detested maps, and has no idea how read them. She prefers to rely on her senses and the enviroment. (Eg. The sun, the stars, the moon)  Not sure if not being able to read maps is a weakness.  You'll have to check with the others. 
 She has a horrible temper if she is woken up too early, and that may strain relationships.
 She can get really rude if she’s stressed, and that can also strain relationships.
You'll need to explain a little more about how these two are weaknesses, I think.   

 She is prone to leg cramps because of a accident she had when she was young. Those cramps crop up at the most unlikely (and inconvenient) times, like in the middle of a fight.
Once in a while, she has vivid nightmares that comes from the day her parents died. When she wakes up, she is especially vunerable and is physically and mentally weak.

History
Seh’nara was a normal elf, and being born into the Tethinrhim tribe, she was raised amongst her own kind. Although her tribe does not encourage public affection, her parents always felt that children should be showered with love and concern, so they always praised her and encouraged her in whatever she did. During her youth, she was unusually gifted. Her hands were deft, her feet quick. In fighting, she has this uncanny ability to vaguely sense what the enemy will do next. If she is stuck in any way, be it climbing, swimming or fighting, she improvises fast and quick and gets out of the situation safely. This made her one of the best in physical activities.  She is skilled in herbal law, hunting, fishing and foresting as she was trained in all of these aspects.

When she was about 100 years old (around 22 human years), she saw a male Ashmarian Wolf cub with a trader while on her travels.  As the cub was weak and scrawny, the trader had wanted to kill it. Her heart went out to the cub and she brought it home. She named it Silver because of the colouring of its fur and he has been with her ever since.  Ashmarian wolves are found in Northern Sarvonia.  If the trader had wanted to kill it, why bring it all the way to Santharia before doing so?  Perhaps it would be better if she found the wolf later, after she had joined the Injerin.  The timing would fit better too, it seems.   

She had lived her childhood in the Anturian Forest and wanted to become a Kaierian Warrior but sadly, her dreams was crushed by her parents death. One day she thought she had seen a Unicorn on the opposite bank of a lake and she wanted to check it out. Later on, she was convinced that all she saw was an ordinary horse so the guilt was increased. Her parents, wanting to humor her, had agreed to row her over to the other shore. Halfway into the river, something went wrong with the boat and there was a hole in the hull. Her mother had been swept away by the current but her father managed to get Seh’nara and himself to shore.

Putting her into a safe spot, he told her to wait for him. With that, he jumped into the river and that was the last time Seh’nara had seen him alive. Having waited for a few hours, she fell asleep and after waking up, she started to go downstream in hopes of finding her parents holed up under a tree somewhere, but no such luck. While searching, she was found by a search party who was looking for her and her parents. After learning of her missing parents, the search party helped Seh'nara look for 3 days, but to no avail. The search party then wanted to go back, but Seh'nara was determined to at least find out what happened to them, so she continued on her own. After searching for another 2 days, she finally found her mother's bracelet half buried in the ground. Then, she accepted the inevitable. She wanted to go back, but felt that she was the cause of her parents' death and did not dare.

After wandering around for a little while, hunger had gotten hold of her, and after failing to find any food, she resorted to stealing from a travelling caravan. That was the first time she had ever stolen. Over the course of the next few months, she stole constantly to feed herself and Silver, for the faithful animal had found her. Then, she saw Luthien. Exhausted, she stumbled over to him, and after some gentle questioning, he found out about her recent past and decided to adopt her.

Thus began her new life with the Injerín. Although the hurt for her parents’ death slowly numbed, the guilt had never quite gone away. Also, the pain and grief she felt made her feel that she was not worthy for the status as a Kaierian Warrior. When Luthien brought her back, another adopted girl, Alassiel, warmly welcomed Seh’nara as a sister. They soon became the best of friends, and Alassiel was one of the first Seh'nara truly trusted.

There is a slight problem with this.  The Injerin are located in North Sarvonia, while the Tethinrhim are in South Sarvonia.  It would not be possible to wander from one continent to the other (on foot anyway).  If you want her to have met Luthien in South Sarvonia, you should explain what he was doing there.  If they met in North Sarvonia, then you should explain how she managed to get there, and for that matter why she was there.  

Despite the fact that they were of the same age, Seh'nara was physically and mentally the younger one. That arrangement worked fine because Seh'nara was content with being the younger one and secretly had always wanted an older sister. Although Luthien gave Seh’nara the choice of learning performing arts as an occupation, she refused, because she preferred to hunt or fish outdoors instead of being “stuck inside a stuffy room with no way of escaping learning how to sing ‘La la la’ properly”. Despite that, she started to learn the flute to occupy herself in her free time. Because she is a Ranger, she travels often.  Now, her main purpose in life is to see the world, make new friends, experience new cultures and maybe gather enough courage to go back and try to become a Kaierian Warrior.

It seems at the end of the history your character is located in North Sarvonia.  This is alright.  However, all our current stories take place in South Sarvonia, so it is generally much more practical to have your character trave to Santharia in the history.   

Belongings and Weapons
Seh’nara dislikes things that will occupy one or both of her hands. She prefers to just carry everything in her belt. Her weapons consist of her Scourge, and the Judgment Quill.  She usually calls the Judgement Quill by its other name, the "Nightwhirl".  These are rather exotic weapons.  The Scourge at least does not seem too out of place since she grew up amongst the Tethinrhim.  However, I don't see any reason she should have a judgement quill, much less call it a nightwhirl.  You should provide a reason if you want her to have the weapon.  You should also state how proficient she is in each weapon in the Strength section, and maybe mention something about training in the use of the weapons in her history.   Always present on her body no matter what is her fang earring and ruby locket. She keeps some lockpicks in her belt and some money. She also has one w'aer kept in the handle of her Scrouge just in case she needs it.

Familiar

Silver is a male Ashmarian Wolf and has been with Seh’nara since she rescued him. Although he was weak when Seh’nara found him, he has become a strong wolf under her loving care. Seh’nara brushes his fur everyday and it is sleek and smooth. He got his name from the unusual colouring of his fur. His head to his midsection is completely black, then it fades to silver and finally turning into white. Silver is usually silent and rarely makes a sound normally unless he’s playing with people. When he growls, it means that danger is eminent, but not that near. But if he barks, it means that danger is almost on top of them. He is very gentle with children and playful too.

Silver has never forgotten how she had saved him form certain death by the trader and is extremely loyal and protective of Seh’nara and would do anything for her, even dying. The same goes for Seh’nara, and the bond they have is strong and unbreakable. When they travel, he either scouts in front or walks beside her. Often, Seh’nara talks to Silver as if he was one of her kind, and in fact, Seh’nara swears that he is as intelligent as her. They are inseparable, and you never see one without the other.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 01, 2007, 12:51:36 PM
Edited!  :)  Hopefully it's alright now.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on April 02, 2007, 05:27:06 AM
I noticed that Mina did a run through with you, but I did notice that not all of her comments were integrated. Might want to double check her comments and such. ^.~

Strengths
   She’s a superb fighter and can make a weapon out of almost anything at hand, though she may not be proficient with the object unlike her Scrouge.  (Which she is skilled with, as she had trained long and hard with it.) She also improvises well and fast.
   Her senses are very acute and rarely will anything escape her sharp ears and eyes.
   She is more agile and quicker than most.
   Her hands are firm, and she has plenty of experience pickpocketing, lockpicking, and moving in the shadows. These skills come in handy in tight situations.This could prove helpful if and when she needs to do something stealth based.
   Her knowledge of herbs and plants is extensive, and it has saved her life before. How does she use this knowledge? Perhaps give a small example here other than "it has saved her life".



Weaknesses
   She can be too confident at times and may bite off more than she can chew, thus getting herself into trouble.
   When she becomes really angry, her anger blinds her to anything and everything and she will not listen to reason.
   She still blames herself for her parents’ death, and carries a lot of emotional baggage with her. If anyone knows her past, they can easily taunt her, forcing her to relieve the old memories. ?
   When she is sleepy, she tends to get reckless. That has got her into trouble a lot of times. This is true for just about everyone. Is there a specific example in how her situation is probably more severe than the average person? Because I don't see this being an actual "weakness".
    She has always detested maps, and has no idea how read them. She prefers to rely on her senses and the enviroment. (Eg. The sun, the stars, the moon) Ok, maps are definitely not a commonality and you will find more people without them than with them. Perhaps she just has no sense of direction in general?
     She has a horrible temper if she is woken up too early, and she may just attack you if she "doesn't like your face". How early is too early? How many hours of sleep does she "require" before the fact? Perhaps say "She needs 'X' number of hours of sleep in order to keep her cool.


That is what I got so far...gotta run XD


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 02, 2007, 06:39:11 PM
Yup, done the edits. I double checked Mina's comments, and I'm pretty sure I put everything in, but feel free to prove me wrong. Anything else I need to change?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on April 03, 2007, 03:04:23 AM
Just making sure... I don't have the time to point out things you missed from other people, as that is your job to double check that information.

Now, to pick up where I lieft off and make a few more comments.

Strengths
   She’s a superb fighter and can make a weapon out of almost anything at hand, though she may not be proficient with any object unlike her Scrouge. She also improvises well and fast.
   Her senses are very acute and rarely will anything escape her sharp ears and eyes.
She is more agile and quicker than most.
   Her hands are firm, and she has plenty of experience pickpocketing, lockpicking, and moving in the shadows. These skills come in handy in tight situations.
   Her knowledge of herbs and plants is extensive, and she never hesitates to use it. It has helped her when she was badly injured while hunting solo in her youth. Did she use them as poisons? or what? I want details and you give me even more vague discriptions.
 She is proficient with the Judgement Quill, though she is not the best. This one is new O.O It wasn't there yesterday... I have a few concerns about this particular weapon. 1) From the way the entry is worded, it doesn't sound like it is widely used, and only a few are actually in existance at this time. 2) To use it effectively, you need to be highly trained with it, as it is weapon heavily reliant on speed and agility. You can say she is learning how to use it, but I doubt she would be proficient enough with it yet to use it without catching it wrong at some point. Also, how did she manage to get one? Did you add this to her history?


Weaknesses
   She can be too confident at times and may bite off more than she can chew, thus getting herself into trouble.
   When she becomes really angry, her anger blinds her to anything and everything and she will not listen to reason.
   She still blames herself for her parents’ death, and carries a lot of emotional baggage with her. If anyone knows her past, they can easily taunt her, and get her really angry quick, which most probably will cause her to attack. How can someone taunt someone about a person's death? This is very confusing. And why wouild she tell people that her parents died? Especially if they are complete strangers...people honestly don't care that much. Or do they just absent-mindedly say something which catches her off guard with memories?
   When she is sleepy, she tends to get reckless. Too reckless. In cases like that, she would rather jump and die instead of going around and live. That has got her into trouble a lot of times. O.O That isn't the best analogy...
 She has a horrible temper if she is woken up too early, and she may just attack you if she "doesn't like your face". To avoid this, never wake her before she has slept 9 hours. Ok, this weakness will need to be reworded, as I feel you meant to make this sound "comical" but with the way it is worded, it sounds childishly absurd, as most people generally won't sleep beyond 6-7hrs at the most.
 She can get really rude obnoxious when she’s stressed, and says all the wrong things, usually to the wrong person. This has also gotten her into no end of trouble, and has even gotten her thrown out of a city once. So, she has an obnoxious side to her?  
 She is prone to leg cramps because of a accident she had when she was young. Those cramps crop up at the most unlikely (and inconvenient) times, like in the middle of a fight. This sounds like a hefty accident. Is it mentioned in your history?
Often, she has vivid nightmares that comes from the day her parents died. When she wakes up, she is especially vunerable and is physically and mentally weak.

Ok, that is my comments for now.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 03, 2007, 04:56:27 PM
Edits done! I took out the Judgement Quill and put in daggers instead, and the part where I got my injury is in blue, rephrased the weaknesses, added to the strengths and completely took out the momories weaknesses. Anything else?


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on April 03, 2007, 11:40:04 PM
Looks much better! Thanks for your patience!

First approval.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Simonne Miller on April 04, 2007, 12:16:41 AM
There are two things I'd still remark on before giving you the second approval:

1) Did you write the story of the tattoo in her history? If so, I seem to have missed it, but I think it's an important enough event to mention, don't you?

2) 19 is still quite old for a wolf. They reach an age of 16 on average. If he is still in his prime, I'd make him something of 10 to 12 years old.

With regard,
Simonne


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 04, 2007, 05:59:19 AM
Just wanted to step in and give you a Congradulations Seh'nara, seeing as you will be approved shortly.  Despite the long hours you spent waiting for comments, you rarely got testy and were an extremely good person to work with as you integrated comments almost instantaneously and weren't afraid to ask questions.  Can't wait to see you in the Herald for further instruction =P


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 04, 2007, 05:48:58 PM
Thanks soo much everyone!  :grin:  Thanks!


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 04, 2007, 06:38:45 PM
Alright, I did the edits. At least, the parts that I could, which was only point 1. I'm confused about the wolf's age. Cos Drasil said:

I don't think its very likely that an Ashmarian wolf would have been so far down.  In addition, the wolf would have to be old or dead by now as generally wolves don't live for 65 years.

But you say that they reach 16 years old. So, I'm not sure, and the Ashmarian Wolf entry didn't have anything bout the age. That's about it.

Thanks again for my approval! :grin:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on April 04, 2007, 11:09:32 PM
I believe Drasil's comment wasn't saying that they *sometimes* reach the age of 65, which is kinda absurd actually. Simonne was going off how long wolves live on Earth (which should be the basis for most beasts in Santharia if lifespan is not written and there is a similar animal on earth.

19 is old for a wolf, so unless you wish him to be so old he/she can barely move, then it is up to you.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 04, 2007, 11:12:16 PM
 :shocked:   Ok, I get it. He shall be only 5 years old! Thanks.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Simonne Miller on April 05, 2007, 02:52:21 AM
There you go, second approval.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on April 05, 2007, 02:54:19 AM
*Squeals* I can't wait to RP with you, Seh'nara!


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 05, 2007, 03:56:51 AM
...You all misunderstood my comment.  Shame on you!  = P

I calculated the age of her wolf the way she had it and at that point in time it would have been sixty five years old, which I said was impossible.  I said she needed to make her wolf younger because they would not live that long.


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Mina on April 05, 2007, 04:31:28 AM
You are now title.  Have fun.  :)


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Alassiel Telrúnya on April 05, 2007, 04:35:07 AM
Woo Hoo! Go Seh'nara!!!!!!!! :number1:


Title: Re: Seh'nara Celebrindal
Post by: Seh'nara Celebrindal on April 05, 2007, 08:28:15 AM
YES!!!!!! Thanks a lot everyone!! Can't wait to RP with you guys!!!  :grin: