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Character and Story Creation => Character Descriptions => Topic started by: Petros Greenvale on July 06, 2007, 01:33:58 AM



Title: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 06, 2007, 01:33:58 AM
Name: Petros Greenvale

Age:34

Gender: Male

Height: 2 peds,2 handspans

Weight:1 Pygge, 1 Hafeb, 2 Ods

Hair Color: Ginger

Eye Color: Green

Race: Elf

Tribe:Aellenrhim

Occupation:Musician-Mage


Title: Musical Mage


Physical Appearance:

Although Petros is 34 years old his appearance resembles that of a 17 year old human. Petros is extremely tall for his age and tribe , and because of this and his low weight he is incredibly thin and lanky. In fact many people around the School of Tunes have become accustomed to calling him “The beanpole”. Despite his lankiness he is in no way terribly gaunt. His face is relatively pale because of his hours of study, but he has a slight rosiness around the cheeks, and his striking green eyes are framed by thin but bushy ginger eyebrows. His cheekbones are slightly protruding and his chin ends in a slight cleft. His arms and legs are just as narrow as the rest of his body and as a result he is not physically strong. His hands are large and calloused (because of his harp playing) and his long and slender fingers end with shoddy and bitten nails. Petros has glowing ginger hair, it is shaggy and unkempt and ends just about four fingers up from the shoulder and you can just see the ends of his long ears pointing through. The ginger of his hair and the emerald green of his eyes make quite an interesting contrast. In general Petros is quite an attractive individual.


Clothing:
 
Petros just looks like your stereotypical wizard from afar but as you look more closely you can see that he differs from his fellow mages by the fact that his robes are coloured on the shades of the forest. His whole outfit comprises of three parts: A white inner tunic which can be removed or added depending on the weather, A green velvet upper robe with gold embroidery around the hem which is fastened by circular gold buttons embossed with an image of a tree. A lower robe that matches the upper one except from the fact that it has no buttons. This strange but interesting attire is topped off with a green mages hat which is made from a rougher material and has gold embroidery all the way round the edge. This gold decor is a saying his mother used to use, it is in styrash but in tharian it reads "magic is the voice of nature, but music is the voice of the soul". Despite his drastic career change he has not changed his outfit because he is...shall we say not the richest of men, also he just loves the colour! It is one of Petros's philosophies that shoes are restricting, so he is often found wandering around bare foot.

Personality:  

Petros is a timid but jolly person who is very mature for his age. His timidity results in him being very antisocial and he finds it difficult to make friends. If you do happen to befriend Petros however, you will find him to be an incredibly nice and kind guy. He will always go out of his to help someone and is often found giving extra tutoring to his fellow students at the School of Tunes in Bardavos, who are struggling with the complicated Santharian musical notation.

He is very hardworking and is usually found swamped in books on musical theory in the library or practicing his Harp ability in an empty class room or lecture theatre. He always puts his musical studies in front of socializing. For instance when the other students try to intice him to join them in sampling the ale available in the local tavern, he will always decline and return to his conversations with his professors or continue his studies. Whenever there is an assignment put forward by his professors he will complete it under the allocated time span and with extended content.

Petros is a neat and tidy person who cant stand clutter and everything in his little house is where it should be. He will often tidy his other house mates mess up whether they like it or not. This trait has created tension within the student accommodation on many an occasion.

Because of his attractive appearance he receives quite a lot of attention from the ladies (and some of the gentlemen as well!!) but because he is (relatively) innocent and timid he just doesn’t know how to act in those kind of situations. So instead of taking advantage of the flirting he is often seen running away like a scared puppy his face matching the red of his hair, usually followed by the laughter of his friends.

Even when you find a time when Petros is not practicing you'll find him indulging in his compositional abilities and you'll see him frantically jotting down all the notes that come into his head. Petros is a very talented musician who is good at all the instruments he tries but he is exceptionally talented at the Black Birch Baton. Not many people have heard him play because of his shyness and lack of confidence but his music has been commented as being “candy for the ears” by one of his professors.




Strengths:

. Petros is highly intelligent, which allows him to absorb extensive amounts of knowledge and reproduce it within a practical situation at a later date. It also allows him to achieve very good grades in the academy.

.He has basic knowledge in wind magic and has achieved a Ximaxian level 2. Allowing him to cast simple spells to protect himself in the rare occasions that he has to. Apart from this, and due to his detest of weaponry, he has very little means of defending himself.

.He is a highly skilled musician and he uses this to his advantage by giving Harp and Swarthystaff lessons to students around the school. This has been very successful as there has been a sudden explosion in the number of people playing wind instruments at the school.


Weaknesses:

.Petros is very shy and timid. This drastically effects his social skills and makes him rubbish at bartering, haggling and making friends.

.He is not robust and can be knocked out cold by a single blow, this also results in plenty broken bones and the fact that he bruises like a banana.

.Although Petros has a mind of steel he is very weak physically which means that he cant lift very heavy objects and it also makes him useless at hand to hand combat.

.Petros cant cope well under pressure and gets very nervous at times. because he is so used to taking things at his own pace. This results in him freezing on the spot when havig to do oral assignments in front of his peers e.t.c, although when he is playing his instruments however this stigma of performance mysteriously vanishes.



History:

Petros was born on the 6th day of the month of Dál'injerá (Rising sun). His mother and father had a great shock when Petros was born with ginger hair, which came as a bit of a suprise because they were both blonds. They took it as a gift instead of a burden and it just made them love him even more.

One day when Petros was only two years old his parents went out into the surrounding forest to forage for berries and nuts but neither of them ever returned. Petros's parents were respected members of the Aellenrhim community and many went out to search for them, but no traces were ever found. Many rumours circulated about their circumstances but no one ever found out the real cause of their disappearence. His parents aren't a subject that Petros will usually talk about.

Now an orphan and having no living relatives Petros was left all by himself in the world. He eventually became the responsability of his parents closest friends, a redbark brownie couple. They knew each other since back when they were in nappies and they would often go on adventures to find rare plants together in the warnaka mountains, were they would find their fair share of foes to fight.

His new mother was a renowned life mage, and her companion was a master Tailor and botanist. The couple were not capable of having their own children and thus, treated Petros like their very own kin. They moved into the now empty Greenvale Seeánfeárn and brought up their new giant of a son with the utmost care.

By the age of four Petros was already triple the size of his brownie parents, and he started to receive an education with other members of his clan. From his very first day Petros was teased and bullied and acquired the nickname "Freaky-Greenvale" because of his great height and red hair. Just to add to his uniqueness Petros failed the archery course, which was supposed to be the dunce course due to peoples natural talent with a bow. Despite this Petros excelled at every academical course and always achieved the top grades in his class.

Petros did not have a very happy childhood and was described by his teacher as being:"too reserved and solemn for his own good". One day Petros's mother was watching him from a window, being harassed by some other children as he was walking home from school one day. He noticed that the more he got agitated there appeared to be a major shift to wind within the surrounding carral. Because of her expertise on the matter she knew that Petros had natural ability in the magical arts, and it would be a crime to let it go to waste. So the next day his mother withdrew him from school (he had already outranked all his peers academically by now anyway), and started to share her vast knowledge of Brownie magic and life magic with him.

Although his brownie mother insisted on teaching him life magic, Petros did not believe in draining another life form to further your own needs. Petros declined any further magical education from his mother and started to further his own dream, which was to become a talented musician. His mother was not at all pleased with Petros's choice but she had to respect it. His brownie father (although now rather rusty) was once a talented Black birch Batonist and was more than happy to oblige when his son asked him to teach him how to play. But first he had to find himself an instrument for his brownie fathers Black Birch baton was about the size of his palm.

He inquired around the locals and discovered that his former teacher had one in her possesion. She was happy to give him it, but on one condition. That he come round to her Seeánfeárn and tend to her garden every once in a while. Petros agreed and received his very first Black Birch Baton. And so he began his practice and garden tending. As he tended to his ex-teachers leafy treasures, he began to become quite knowledgeable in the ways of a botanist. His life now revolved around studying musical theory and practicing his Black Birch Baton.

By the age of 17 Petros had become an aspiring young musician (academically and practically). Petros's brownie mother was sure that his nonstop practice and his anti socialness was unhealthy, so she urged him to go outside and mingle with elves his same age. However he would always stay put and continue his studies.

One day while he was rumaging for a book on the elvish musical principals in a storage house Petros stumbled upon a dusty but beautiful harp. It was made of shiny rosewood and stood about 1.2 peds high, along the soundpost were exquisite elven carvings of trees and animals and on the top of the support post was a little gold inlay which read in styrash "Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul". He hadn't heard her play but he had stories about his mothers masterful harp playing and the fact that she was known for her jolly, uplifting music all around the Aellenrhim community. Therefore he automatically assumed that it belonged to her, he dusted it down with the sleeve of his tunic and strugglingly carried it back to the Seeánfeárn and inquired about its origin with his brownie mother. It was indeed his mothers and it was crafted for her by his father as a romantic gift when they first got married. Petros carefully gave it a proper clean then returned to the storage house to retrieve the book on elvish music so that he could continue his studies.

A few days later Petros decided to take his mother up on the advice she gave him and he took a break from his Black Birch Baton and plodded out of his home at 6 in the morning with his mothers harp and went into the nearby forest to see if he could get a tune out of it. And a tune he could definitely got, within a few hours Petros could already get a few jolly jigs out of the thing.

By the age of 24 he had became quite an expert at both the harp and Black Birch Baton. On His 24th birthday he was awoken by the not so delightful news that his parents were sending him to Ximax to study at the academy of magic, although he really didn't want to go he didnt want to upset his mother further. It was at that point that Petros knew that he would have to balance the creative and academic aspects of his personality.

It was not the only great surprise of that day however, his mother had a little something for him too, an apology for her stance on his musical passion. She gave him a large green package tied tightly shut by an ivy vine. The minute Petros saw the package he knew exactly what it was (its like when you get a book or a pair of socks at Lurlinemas) it was a new Black Birch Baton. He was surprised what a beautiful instrument it was. It was made of a highly polished rich black birch wood with Aurium keys and it even had a top quality reed as well. And to top that off it even came with its own carrying case and a set of extra reeds. Petros has always wondered how his brownie mother could come across such a masterpiece, but didn't think it appropriate to inquire.

The next morning Petros lay on the floor to kiss his mother goodbye (because of his great height and her liliputionism) and set off on the long road to Ximax with his satchel on his back and and his harp tied to his shoulder by some ivy. Before this Petros had never set foot outside the bolder and he found the exotic new world more interesting than he thought. It is on his journey that he notices that his brownie mother has embroidered the phrase that was on the harp onto his.

Because of his mothers extensive knowledge of magic (and friends in high places), he was given a small room in the tower of wind magic at the academy.

When he arrived and had settled in, he found it to be nothing like he imagined...it was worse!!! In his eyes all it was was a bunch of stuck of mages wandering from place to place muttering magical theorem to themselves, although, he did not think this of all the new attenders of the academy however as some of the most kind and brilliant people he had ever met, were introduced to him in Ximax.

One day Petros was sitting alone in the gloomy wasted wizard tavern reading a book on wind magic. When he first met (his soon to be best friend) Morgana Elwood.

Petros was sitting alone at the bar engrossed in a book about wind magic and sipping on a glass of water. When the door swung open and in strolled a tom boyish, raven haired human woman (around his own physical age). She walked across the creaky wooden floor and sat down at the stool next to him, and waved the bartender over.

" Can i have an ale please good sir... and one for my good friend here to" *she gives Petros a slight nudge*. (He begins to go red with nervousness). and looks up slightly from his book and replies.
"emm...No thankyou i don't drink"

" Well you do now!" shes says with a grin. she gives the bartender a wink and he goes to fetch the beverages.

"So while were on a drinks buying basis, I'm Morgana , but every one just calls me Morgy" she holds out a small bony hand, which hangs awkwardly in the air as Petros analyses the situation. And after a few second he obliges, shaking her hand.

"I'm Petros...pleased to meet you"

Morgana just brushes off what Petros has just said and says snidely

" ha! call that a handshake? what are you...A woman?" she looks him over just to make sure that he isn't actually a woman and comes across his long ears poking through his shaggy hair.

"oh no wait, your just an elf, that explains it" she comments with a smile. A couple of dwarves who were sitting in the corner obviously found her comment amusing for they spat out the ale they were drinking and broke out into a fit of laughter. The bartender however (when he returns with the drinks) is not amused and shoots looks that could turn milk sour at the dwarves for giving him yet another job to do. Petros instantly turns the colour of beetroot and trys to ignore the laughter of the dwarves.

" Oh look our ales have arrived...wanna see who can finish theirs first" she says playfully

" eh... i really shouldn't..." but before Petros could finish Morgana  has already started to shout the countdown. on 1 Petros just thinks "oh what the hell",and on "go!!!" he has already started to down his tankard of ale. But alas when he is just about half way through his beverage, morgana has already slammed her tankard on the bar in triumph. And after a good thirty blinks Petros repeats this action. The ale has left him all warm inside and pleased that he is actually joining in the fun for once.

" About time!!" she yells

"best out of three?" he asks playfully

"Bring it on elf boy!!"

They order more ales and Petros is defeated each time.  After the third round Petros is starting to feel a little giddy and starts to tell Morgana about himself (whether she likes it or not).  He tells her about his parents and his brownie parents, he tells her about how he was sent to the academy, and he tells her about his musical aspirations. It is this that triggers her to tell him about her own life. He finds out that she to is an orphan although she was left to fend for herself with no brownie guardians to fall back on, that she is from the fair city of Bardavos, and most importantly she is currently studying at the school of tunes and she plays the flute.

" i may not look like it but i am a talented musician you know" she says with a slight hint of arrogance

"join the club!" Petros says through a smile

The converstion continues in this matter for a few minutes, until Morgy blurts out...

"oh by the way Petros i know that we've just met and all but i was wondering...would you like to come back to bardavos with me? I'm leaving tomorrow morning and Ive got a house and everything, you can stay with me! also I'm sure they would let you into the school of tunes and everything i know its sudden but.."

Petros is a little shocked by this question and absolutely joyous that he finally has a chance to leave this wretched city and follow his one true dream.  But then he sees images of his brownie father in his head and thought of how disappointed he'd be.


" i don't know morgana..." Petros mumbles reluctantly

" Tell you what you can sleep on it, i will have a horse and cart ready by tomorrow morning, and i will wait outside this tavern. If your not here by first light ill assume that you've decided to stay" she says this as shes getting up from her stool.

"i have to go and prepare now... ill see you tomorrow" shes says ruffling his hair. she leaves some coins on the table to pay for the ales and walks out the swing door.

" be there or be square" she shout's playfully from the street.

After he tipped the bartender he returned back to his little room in the academy. and drapes himself over his small bed. As he lies there thinking about what Morgana said,  he realises that tonight was by far the most fun he'd ever had in his life, and for once someone has showed him kindness. Within minutes his mind has been made up.

He Will go to bardavos!!

By early morning he has already gathered his things and leaves a note telling his professors of his departure pinned to his door and makes his way through the maze of corridors towards the Wasted wizard. When he arrives ,Morgana is exactly where she said he would be and her face lights up when she sees him.

"I was very sure werent coming...boy you proved me wrong!!!"

Petros just grinned at her and jumped into the back of the cart. It took 3 weeks and numerous stops but Petros and Morgana eventually reach bardavos. Morgana shares a small cottage just out of town with a few of her fellow students of the school of tunes.

After some persuasion and an audition Petros and his talents were accepted into the school of tunes, where he still happilly attends.


Weapons

Petros is very much a pacifist in nature, and has a hate for deadly weaponry.


Belongings:

42 string rosewood harp standing 1.2 peds high, constructed by his father for his mother as a romantic gift. It has forest carvings on the sound post. There are 42 brass levers on top of the strings which are attached to a blade and when the blade comes in contact with the string it raises it up a semitone. It is too big to be constantly carried around, so he only takes it with him when necessary and he usually just leaves it in his little house.

Brown messenger bag with two straps which make it capable to be hung around the back. it has two inner pockets capable of holding quills and ink and a larger main area for books.

Various books: The principle of Ahm
                    Brownie magic and its practitioners
                    the diary of a life mage
                    life magic principles
                     A documentary on the divine Arvins
                     A documentary on the divine Eyasha
                     Elemental magic for dummies
                    Musician's guide to Music
                     Aellenrhim anthems
                     A book containing blank manuscript paper

Exquisite, single piece Black Birch baton, with Aurium keys. it has its own carrying case and set of strength 7 reeds.


Familiars:

Everywhere this Aellenrhim mage goes, a family of chickens accompanies him on his journey. This troupe of fowl friends comprises of a cocky yet loving mother hen, originally named "Feathers" and 7 jolly little chicks named... Chubbles, Fluffles, Fuzzles, Puffles, Buffles, Muffles and Ingrid. Although their mother has plain white plumage, these joly little chicks are gifted with "eggstravagant" yellow down that make them easy to spot, whether it be by by Petros or their mother. Although theve grown an unbreakable bond between their new found Aellenrhim friend, they are still the ones calling all the shots. And always insist in hitch hiking in Petros's satchel, which they have also grown quite attched to.

Petros crossed fates with these feathered friends when he was visiting a rather nice festival up in Salsair...


Also, occasionally his best friend Morgana Elwood tags along with him on his journeys (although more commonly its the other way around!). And on these common occasions his feathered friends are spoilt like rich children, and recieve treat after treat from his animal loving human friend.


Magic:

Level 1-This level was very easy for Petros to achieve thanks to his mothers extensive knowledge and his natural ability. He paid attention in all lessons and handed in all homework in on time, and this obviously paid off as he achieved level one.
 Although Petros did not want to spend the rest of his life a mage he put as much effort into his magical training as his musical practice. Although fizzling spells were common he would always practice them until he got them right. A steady balance of nights in the library at study and full days practicing his spells in the tower of wind allowed him to achieve

 level 2- Although Petros has abandoned his magical education for his music, he still makes frequent visits to the academy. And has made a compromise with his mother that he will continue his studies whenever he is in town, as a result Petros's magical career is far from over.  







Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ life mage-Harper
Post by: Gervase Bertrand on July 06, 2007, 02:50:02 AM
Hi Petros:

I am not a moderator or anything but  I thought I would take a look at your CD.


I found it interesting but I have a few questions for you.


First why was his parents closest friends brownies?  Not that it matters really but this might be an interesting bit of information for your charactor.

I also recommend you read the "A Guide to Magic" post under the general questions area you may find more information to help you with the magic part. I think you may also find that for you will need to age your elf a little more to be as advanced as he is in magic levels.

I was wondering is brownie magic taught at the Academy of Magic? I thought it was only elemental magic and two Archmage schools.

You might also want to know that fourth level in magic is restricted so just remove that portion.

I also found:
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The Husband was a renowned life mage who used to work as a proffesor (professor) of life magic at the academy of magic in ximax and the wife was a master seamstress and botanist.

I was wondering is brownie magic taught at the Academy of Magic? I thought it was only elemental magic and two Archmage schools. You might want to check this out.

Good luck on your character development


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ life mage-Harper
Post by: Mina on July 06, 2007, 02:54:48 AM
There are several problems with playing a level 5 life mage. 

1. Life magic needs to be revised, so it's not currently available for play.  The information on the site is extremely old now. 

2. Non-Brownies can't reach such a high level in life magic, as far as I know. 

3. Level 5 is restricted anyway. 

Also, as Gervase points out, the Academy does not teach life magic. 


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ life mage-Harper
Post by: Ganinon on July 06, 2007, 03:04:32 AM
welcome to Snatharia. IM not a mod so you dont have to use everthing i say.I shall comment as i think a mod would.Suggestions in orange

Name: Petros Greenvale

Age:!7 elven (34 human) 2 things first i dont think 34 human years is equal to 17 elven years.if you evn mean 17 you have a ! instead of a 1.Elves can live to be a 100 years old a human not even a tenth of that age.and i think we only need human years.

Gender: Male

Height: needs to be either under appearance or right above it.as does weight hair color and eyecolor.

Weight:

Hair Color: Ginger

Eye Color: Green

Race: Elf

Tribe :Aellenrhim

Occupation: Life Mage/Harper


Title: Life Mage


Physical Appearance:
Petros is extremely tall for his age and tribe ,because of this and his low weight he is incredibly thin and lanky, infact many people around the academy have nicknamed him “beanpole”.Tripod Trilogy?lol srry couldnt resist Despite his lankiness he is in no way gaunt. His face is relatively pale because of his hours of study, but he has a slight rosieness around the cheeks, and his stricking green eyes are framed by thin but bushy ginger eyebrows. His cheekbones are slightly protruding and his chin ends in a slight cleft. His arms and legs are just as narrow as the rest of his body and as a result he is not very physically strong . His hands are large  and calloused (because of his harp playing) and his long and slender fingers end with shoddy and bitten nails. Petros has ginger hair (which is highly unusual for his tribe) it is shaggy and unkempt and ends just about four fingersfinders is not in Santhrian measurements.Do you mean nailsbreadths or Palmspans?  up from the shoulder and you can just see the ends of his long ears pointing through.The red of his hair and the emerald green of his eyes make quite an interesting contrast.In general Petros is quite an attractive individual.


Clothing:
Petros  basically wears the stereotypical wizards outfit, but what makes him stand out from the magic academy crowd is that his robes are couloured on the shades of the forest. His upper robes are made of dark green velvety material with gold embroidery around the edges and shades of brown along the seams. His lower robes are made of the same material and have the same colour and embroidery but have no brown on the seams. His hat is made of a more rougher material but it is still the same color as the rest of his outfit and it has calligraphic Styrásh writing embroidered arond the hem(in gold) which reads: “Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul”. His hat is slightly to big for him which results in it falling over his eyes and obstructing his vision. Too many a time has his hats distraction caused him to backfire a spell, resulting in dire consequences so it has become a habit of his to push his hat uolast 2 words down really make sense to me uo time time. It is one of petros’s philosophies that shoes are obstructing and he is usually found going about his business barefoot. If he has to do a task in which shoes are necessary there are a pair of tatty brown boots at the back of his wardrobe.


Personality:
Petros is a timid but jolly teenager who is very mature for his age. His timidity results in him being very antisocial and he finds it difficult to make friends. If you do happen to befriend petros however, you will find him to be an incredibly nice and kind person. He will always go out of his way to help someone and is often found giving extra help to his fellow students who might be adept at elemental magic but are not coping with life magic. He always well with every one and has not made any enemies (yet!)

He is very hardworking and is usually found swamped in books in the library or practicing his practical ability in the tower of life magic. He always puts his academical studies infront of socializing. For instance when the other students try to intice him to join them in sampling the  ale available in the wasted wizard, he will always decline and return to his conversations with the brownies or continue his studies. Whenever there is an assingnment put forward by his proffesors he will complete it under the allocated time span and with extended content. Although Petros is highly intelligent he finds it difficult to keep up with his peers on the subject on fire magic, and will be asked to sit out when the rest of the class are practicing fire spells (for his safety and that of the rest of the students).i believe you only study your magic which is life magic. BUt im not an expert on magic so you can wait to change this and see if anyone else points this out.

Petros is a neat and tidy person who can't stand clutter and everything in his little room is where it should be.

Because of his attractive exterior he receives quite a lot of attention from the ladies (and some of the gentlemen aswell!!) but because he is (relatively) innocent and timid he just doesn’t know how to act in those kind of situations. So instead of taking advantage of the flirting  he is often seen running away like a scared puppy with his tail between his legs and his hat over his eyes.

Even when you find a time when Petros is not studying you'll find him indulging in his one true love…music. Petros is a very talented musician how excels at all the instruments he tries but he is exceptionally talented at the harp. Not many people have heard him play because of his shyness and lack of confidence but his music has been commented as being  “candy for the ears” by one of his proffesors.




Strengths:

. Petros is highly intelligent, which allows him to absorb extensive amounts of knowledge and use it  later on. It also allows him to achieve very good grades in school.

.He is very talented at life magic and has already achieved level 5 which allows him to defend himself if he gets into the position were he has to.

.He is a skilled musician and he uses this to his advantage by giving music lessons on various instruments to students around the academy. This has been very succesfull because the academy saturates its students in academical studies and deprives them from all things cultural.

.He is fluent in quite few languages including dwarven,orcish

Weaknessess:

.Petros is very shy and timid. This drastically effects his social skills and makes him rubbish at bartering ,haggling and making friends.

.He is not robust and can be knocked out cold by a single blow, this also results in plenty broken bones and the fact that hespacebruises like a banana.

.Although Petros has a mind of steel he is very weak physically which means that he can't liftvery heavy objects and it also makes him useless at hand to hand.

.Pertros cannot wield a mellee weapon to save himself. Even if he could he would not have the strength to do any damage with it.

.Despite the famous archery skills of his tribe Petros is also useless at wielding a bow.you should probably make another strength to balence him out S&W ratio should be 1 to 1


History:
Petros was born on the 6th day of the month of Dál'injerá (Rising sun). His mother and father had a great shock when Petros was born with red hair, which not only was highly unusual for an Aellenrhim elf but they were both blondes. They took it as a gift insted of a burden and it just made them love him even more.

One day when Petros was only two years old his parents went out into the surrounding forest to forage for berries and nuts but neither of them ever returned. Petros's parents were respected members of the Aellenrhim community and many went out to search for them, but no traces were ever found. Many rumours circulated about the circumstances but no one ever found out the real cause of their dissappearence. His parents aren't a subject that Petros will usually talk about.

Now an orphan and having no living relatives Petros was left all by himself in the world. He eventually became the responsability of his parents closest friends, a redbark brownie couple. The Husband was a renowned life mage who used to work as a proffesor of life magic at the academy of magic in ximax and the wife was a master seamstress and botanist. The couple were not capable of having their own children and treated Petros like their very own. They moved into the now empty Seeánfeárn and bought up their new giant of a son with the utmost care.

By the age of four Petros was already double the size of his brownie parents, and he started to recieve an education with other members of his clan who were the same age as him. From his very first day Petros was teased and bullied and aquired the nickname " Freaky Greenvale" because of his great height and red hair. just to add to his uniquness Petros failed the archery course, which was supposed to easiest course because of his clans natural talent with a bow. Deapite this Petros excelled at every academical course and always achieved the top grades in his class.

Petros did not have a very happy childhood and was described by his teacher as being:"too reserved and solemn for his own good". One day Petros's father was watching him from a window,being harrased by some other children he walked home from school one day.I thought his father disappeared.The redbark brownie then? He noticed that the more agitated and sad Petros felt a nearby flower bed would wilt more and more. Because of his expertise on the matter he knew that Petros had natural abilty wth life magic and it would be a crime to let it go to waste. So the next day His father withdrew him from school (he had already outranked all his peers academically by now anyway), and started to train him in the way of life magic. Petros grasped the basics easily and could already cast simple spells within a month.i thought he was in school still from past things such as clothing and personality.

His life now revolved around studying and he would be at his desk reading and taking down notes from dawn till dusk.
By the age of 77 elven years.even if it was elven years its Way to young to be a mage Petros had become an aspiring young mage. Petros's brownie mother was sure that his kind of hardworking attitude and his anti-socialness was unhealthy, so she urged him to go outside and mingle with elves his same age but he would always stay put and continue his studies.

One day while he was rumaging for a book on the principal of Ahm in a storage house Petros stumbled upon a dusty but beautiful harp.  it was made of shiny rosewood and stood about 1.2 peds high, along the soundpost were excuisite elven carvings of trees and animals and on the top of the support post was a little gold inlay which read in styrash "Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul". He hadn't heard her play but he had stories about his mother's masterful harp playing and the fact that she was known for her jolly,uplifting music santharia overlast 4 words don't quite make sense to me. So he automatically assumed that it belonged to her, so he dusted it down with the sleeve of his tunic and strugglingly carried it back to the Seeánfeárn and inquired about its origin with his mother. It was indeed his mother's and it was crafted for her by his father as a romantic gift when they first got married. Petros carefully gave it a proper cleaning then returned to the storage house to retrieve the book on the Principle of Ahm so that he could continue his studies.

A few days later Petros decided to take his mother up on the advice she gave him and he took a break from his studies and plodded out of his home at 6 in the morning with his mothers harp and went into th nearby forest to see if he could get a tune out of it. And a tune he could definetly get out of it, within a few hours Petros could already get a few jolly jigs out of the thing,i don't believe in a few hours he could play songs out of it by himself with no guidence maybe 1 song in 3 hours and it was then that hespacerealised for the first time that he was good at something non-academical.

From then on in Petros kept a steady balance between his harp practice and his studies (but he did find some time for some extra studying!! ;))

By the age of twelve he had mastered both the harp and novitial life magic.I don't think he couldlearn it that fast .Remember elves live to be 1000 they take their time.and i hope you mean elf years and not human years.but i don't think your 1 elven years is equal to however human years you have on his twelfth birthday you have 3 spaces here he was awoken by the delightfull news that he was being sent to Ximax to study at the academy of magic. It was at that point that petros knew that his hours of hard work had payed off. It was not the only great surprise of that day however, his mother had a little something for him to. She gave him a large green package tied tightly shut by an ivy vine. As he lossenedloosend? the vine and the green wrapping he found a full set of robes and a hat all of his favourite colour,Green. He quickly tried them on and found them to be a perfect fit, except from the hat which was slightly too big (Well it is difficult to get something the right size if what your making is about the same size as you!!).

The next morning Petros lay on the floor to kiss his mother goodbye and set off on the long road to Ximax with his satchel on his back and and his harp tied to his shoulder by some ivy. Before this Petros had never set foot outside the bolder and he found the exotic new world more interesting than he thought. it is on this journey that he notices that his brownie mother has embroidered the phrase that was on the harp onto his hat and it is here when he starts to miss his family back home.

Because of his complete devotion to life magic he was given a small room in the tower of life magic at the academy, by the brownies (who quickly befriended Petros). so that he could be close to his studies.

Weapons:-none-


Belonings: 42 string rosewood harp standing 1.2 peds high, constructed by his father for his mother.It has forest carvings on the sound post. There are also 42 brass levers on top of the srrings which are attached to a blade and when the blade comes in contact with the string it raises it up a semitone. It is too big to be constantly arried around, so he only takes it with him when nescessary and he usually just leaves his little room.

Brown satchel with two straps which make it capable to be hung around the back. it has two inner pockets capable of holding quills and ink and a larger main area for books.

Various books: The principle of Ahm
                     Brownie magic and its practitioners
                     The diary of a life mage
                     Life magic principles
                     A documentary on the divine arvins


Magic:

Level 1-This level was very easy for Petros to achieve thanks to his father's extensive knowledge and his natural ability

Level 2-It was at this level that Petros's attitude towards work really started to pay off, for there started to be studying involved.

Level 3-It was at this level that extensive study and research was involved to even attempt it. But extensive study and research was not a new experience for Petros, but he still felt the difficulty of his work rising. He achieved the first tree levels under the careful eye of his redbark brownie father.

level 4-This was the first level that Petros studied for away from home, but he was still taught by Brownies so that had not changed.This level was probably the hardest for him to achieve because he did not have his father to help him. Fizzling spells became common at this level.

Level 5-After Hours upon hours of study in the library and practicng spells in the tower of life magic, petros achieved level 5. Although fizzling spells are still common he has ironed out most of the bugs. He is currently deep in study for the next level.all magic needs to be approved by a administrator.I think hes too young to be past 2 or 3 but im not a magic expert.

And there you are not a terrible start. use spell check i probable missed a ton of spelling errors.Srry if i say something Mina or Gervase said already i took a break from this and came back down to post this .


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ life mage-Harper
Post by: Darknighte on July 06, 2007, 03:36:23 AM
I enjoyed reading this and there is not alot more I can put that has not alredy been said. The main thing is just to cheak spelling.


Title: thankyou
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 06, 2007, 04:20:51 AM
Thankyou all for all your comments !!!
they are much appreciated :grin:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Ganinon on July 06, 2007, 11:50:03 AM
i think you still have soem Petros that are capitalized that i missed i saw one for sure.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 13, 2007, 08:47:25 AM
ok ive made most of the changes you told me to...


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 13, 2007, 02:06:37 PM
Hello Petros, and welcome to Santharia. Another elf, whoop dee doo. I feel SO happy. ;)
Comments from the Ironforge Pyromancer, in the fiery color of red.

I assume you have read the guide for magic and about your tribe. If not, then please do. Another thing, you can only use two message icons: the pencil, if you're not done, and the exclamation mark, if you want some comments.

Name: Petros Greenvale

Age:17 elven (34 human)(You are too young. Elves age up to hundreds of years. Also, elves learn much more slowly than humans.)

Gender: Male

Height: 2 peds

Weight:1 Pygge, 1 Hafeb, 2 Ods, 10 Mut.

Hair Color: Ginger(Hair color, as the title suggest, should be a type of color, not a type of root.)

Eye Color: Green

Race: Elf

Tribe :Aellenrhim

Occupation: Mage/Harper


Title: windMage


Physical Appearance:
Petros is extremely tall for his age and tribe ,because of this and his low weight he is incredibly thin and lanky, infact many people around the academy have nicknamed him “beanpole”. Despite his lankiness he is in no way gaunt. His face is relatively pale because of his hours of study, but he has a slight rosieness around the cheeks, and his stricking green eyes are framed by thin but bushy ginger(I can't picture what color is ginger.) eyebrows. His cheekbones are slightly protruding and his chin ends in a slight cleft. His arms and legs are just as narrow as the rest of his body and as a result he is not very physically strong . His hands are large  and calloused (because of his harp playing) and his long and slender fingers end with shoddy and bitten nails. Petros has ginger(I can't picture what color is ginger.) hair (which is highly unusual for his tribe) it is shaggy and unkempt and ends just about four fingers up from the shoulder and you can just see the ends of his ong ears pointing through.The red(red?) of his hair and the emerald green of his eyes make quite an interesting contrast.In general Petros is quite an attractive individual.


Clothing:
Petros  basically wears the stereotypical wizards outfit, but what makes him stand out from the magic academy crowd is that his robes are couloured on the shades of the forest. His upper robes are made of dark green velvety material with gold embroidery around the edges and shades of brown along the seams. His lower robes are made of the same material and have the same colour and embroidery but have no brown on the seams. His hat is made of a more rougher material but it is still the same color as the rest of his outfit and it has calligraphic Styrásh writing embroidered arond the hem(in gold) which reads: “Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul”. His hat is slightly to big for him which results in it falling over his eyes and obstructing his vision. Too many a time has his hat's distraction caused him to backfire a spell, resulting in dire consequences so it has become a habit of his to push his hat uo(uo?) time. It is one of petros’s philosophies that shoes are obstructing and he is usually found going about his business barefoot. If he has to do a task in which shoes are necessary there are a pair of tatty brown boots at the back of his wardrobe.


Personality:
Petros is a timid ut jolly teenager who is very mature for his age. His timidity results in him being very antisocial and he finds it difficult to make friends. If you do happen to befriend petros however, you will find him to be an incredibly nice and kind person. He will always go out of his way to help someone and is often found giving extra help to his fellow students who might be adept at other elemental magic but are not coping with wind magic(Students of fire, water, and earth magic will not seek aid from a wind magic. They are entirely different.). He always well(always well?) with every one and has not made any enemies (yet!)

He is very hardworking and is usually found swamped in books in the library or practicing his practical ability in the tower of life(life magic?) magic. He always puts his academical studies infront of socializing. For instance when the other students try to intice(enticed) him to join them in sampling the  ale available in the wasted wizard, he will always decline and return to his conversations with the brownies(Why would he be conversing with brownies?) or continue his studies. Whenever there is an assingnment put forward by his proffesors(professors) he will complete it under the allocated time span and with extended content. Although Petros is highly intelligent he finds it difficult to keep up with his peers on the subject on fire magic, and will be asked to sit out when the rest of the class are practicing fire spells(Student cannot learn multiple elements. They are restricted, not to mention impossible.) (for his safety and that of the rest of the students).

Petros is a neat and tidy person who cant stand clutter and everything in his little room is where it should be.

Because of his attractive exterior he receives quite a lot of attention from the ladies (and some of the gentlemen aswell!!) but because he is (relatively) innocent and timid he just doesn’t know how to act in those kind of situations. So instead of taking advantage of the flirting  he is often seen running away like a scared puppy with his tail between his legs and his hat over his eyes.

Even when you find a time when petros is not studying youll find him indulging in his one true love…music. Petros is a very talented musician how excels(how excels?) at all the instruments he tries but he is exceptionally talented at the harp. Not many people have heard him play because of his shyness and lack of confidence but his music has been commented as being  “candy for the ears” by one of his proffesors(professors).

(Please check all your spelling and grammar, as I'm here to comment, not to be an english teacher. Also, read the guide for magic first before creating a mage. Check also the entry for your tribe.)


Strengths:

. Petros is highly intelligent, which allows him to absorb extensive amounts of knowledge and use it  later on. It also allows him to achieve very good grades in school.

.He is very talented at wind magic and has already achieved level 3 which allows him to defend himself if he gets into the position were he has to.

.He is a skilled musician and he uses this to his advantage by giving music lessons on various instruments to students around the academy. This has been very succesfull because the academy saturates its students in academical studies and deprives them from all things cultural.

.He is fluent in quite few languages including dwarven,orcish and styrash

Weaknessess:

.Petros is very shy and timid. This drastically effects his social skills and makes him rubbish at bartering ,haggling and making friends.

.He is not robust and can be knocked out cold by a single blow, this also results in plenty broken bones and the fact that hebruises like a banana.

.Although petros has a mind of steel he is very weak physically which means that he cant very heavy objects and it also makes him useless at hand to hand.

.Pertros cannot wield a mellee weapon to save himself. Even if he could he would not have the strength to do any damage with it.(Not having the ability nor the knowledge to use a weapon is not a weakness, since ordinary people do not know how to use them either.)

.Despite the famous archery skills of his tribe petros is also useless at wielding a bow.(Same comment here.)


History:
Petros was born on the 6th day of the month of Dál'injerá (Rising sun). His mother and father had a great shock when petros was born with red(You said ginger, though I don't know what that is.) hair, whic not only was highly unusual for an aellenrhim elf but they were both blondes. They took it as a gift insted of a burden and it just made them love him even more.

One day when petros was only two years old his parents went out into the surrounding forest to forage for berries and nuts but neither of them ever returned. Petros's parents were respected members of the Aellenrhim community and many went out to search for them, but no traces were ever found. Many rumours(rumors) circulated about the circumstances but no one ever found out the real cause of their dissappearence(disappearance). His parents aren't a subject that petros will usually talk about.

Now an orphan and having no living relatives petros was left all by himself in the world. He eventually became the responsability(responsibility) of his parents closest friends, a redbark brownie couple(brownies living with elves?).They knew each other since back when both couples were in their prime and they would often go on adventures to find rare plants together in the warnaka mountains,were they would find their fair share of foes to fight.

 The Husband was a renowned life mage. wife was a master seamstress and botanist. The couple were not capable of having their own children and treated petros like their very own. They moved into the now empty Seeánfeárn and bought up their new giant of a son with the utmost care.

By the age of four petros was already double the size of his brownie parents, and he started to recieve an education with other members of his clan who were the same age as him. From his very first day petros was teased and bullied and aquired the nickname freaky greenvale because of his great height and red hair. just to add to his uniquness petros failed the archery course, which was supposed to easiest course because of his clans natural talent with a bow. Deapite this petros excelled at every academical course and always achieved the top grades in his class.

Petros did not have a very happy childhood and was described by his teacher as being:"too reserved and solemn for his own good". One day petros's father was watching him from a window,being harrased by some other children he walked home from school one day. He noticed that the more agitated and sad petros felt a nearby flower bed would wilt more and more. Because of his expertise on the matter he knew that petros had natural abilty wth life magic and it would be a crime o let it go to waste. So the next day His father withdrew him from school (he had already outranked all his peers academically by now anyway), and started to train him in the way of life magic. Petros grasped the basics easily and could already cast simple spells within a month.(Everything here is wrong. I highly suggest reading the guide about magic. Also, you said he is a wind mage, not a life mage.)

Although his brownie father insisted on teaching him life magic petros did not believe in draining another life form to further your own needs. So he decided to use the basics his father taught him and further his magical education but in the elemental form of wind(How did he learn wind magic? magic cannot be self taught.). His brownie Father was not too happy about his choice, but he respected his sons wishes and continued to teach him the ways of a mage.(Life mage and wind mage are entirely different schools of magic.)

His life now revolved around studying and he would be at his desk reading and taking down notes from dawn till dusk.
By the age of 9 Petros had become an aspiring young mage(Too young to be a mage.). Petros's brownie mother was sure that his kind of hardworking attitude and his anti socialness was unhealthy, so she urged him to go outside and mingle with elves his same age but he would always stay put and continue his studies.

One day while he was rumaging for a book on the principal(principle) of Ahm in a storage house petros stumbled upon a dusty but beautiful harp.  it was made of shiny rosewood and stood about 1.2 peds high, along the soundpost were excuisite elven carvings of trees and animals and on the top of the support post was a little gold inlay which read in styrash "Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul". He hadnt heard her play but he had stories about his mothers masterful harp playing and the fact that she was known for her jolly,uplifting music santharia over. So he automatically assumed that it belonged to her, so he dusted it down with the sleeve of his tunic and strugglingly carried it back to the Seeánfeárn and inquired about its origin with his mother(You said his mother is missing. Maybe this means his "brownie" mother?). it was indeed his mothers and it was crafted for her by his father as a romantic gift when they first got married. Petros carefully gave it a proper clean then returned to the storage house to retrieve the book on the principle of Ahm so that he could continue his studies.

A few days later Petros decided to take his mother up on the advice she gave him and he took a break fro his studies and plodded out of his home at 6 in the morning with his mothers harp and went into th nearby forest to see if he could get a tune out of it. And a tune he could definetly get out of it, within a few hours petros could already get a few jolly jigs out of the thing, and it was then that herealised for the first time that he was good at something non academical.(He learned to play the harp by himself in only one day?)

From then on in Petros kept a steady balance between his harp practice and his studies (but he did find some time for some extra studying!! )

By the age of twelve he had mastered both the harp and novitial wind magic. on His twelfth birthday  he was awoken by the delightfull news that he was being sent to ximax to study at the academy of magic. It was at that point that petros knew that his hours of hard work had payed(paid) off. It was not the only great surprise of that day however, his mother had a little something for him too. She gave him a large green package tied tightly shut by an ivy vine. As he lossened the vine and the green wrapping he found a full set of robes and a hat all of his favourite colour,Green. He quickly tried them on and found them to be a perfect fit, except from the hat which was slightly too big (Well it is difficult to get something the right size if what your making is about the same size as you!!).

The next morning Petros lay on the floor to kiss his mother goodbye(What? I can't understand this sentence.) and set off on the long road to ximax with his satchel on his back and and his harp tied to his shoulder by some ivy. Before this petro had never set foot outside the bolder and he found the exotic new world more interesting than he thought. it is on his journey that he notices that his brownie mother has embroidered the phrase that was on the harp onto his hat and it is here when he starts to miss his family back home.

Because of his fathers extensive knowledge of life magic, he was given a small room in the tower of life magic at the academy, by the brownies (who quickly befriended petros). so that he could be close to his studies.(There is no tower of life.)

Weapons:-none-


Belonings(Belongings): 42 string rosewood harp standing 1.2 peds high, constructed by his father for his mother.It has forest carvings on the sound post. There are also 42 brass levers on top of the srrings which are attached to a blade and when the blade comes in contact with the string it raises it up a semitone. It is too big to be constantly arried around, so he only takes it with him when nescessary nd he usually just leaves his little room.

Brown satchel with two straps which make it capable to be hung around the back. it has two inner pockets capable of holding quills and ink and a larger main area for books.

Various books: The principle of Ahm
                     Brownie magic and its practitioners
                     The diary of a life mage
                     Life magic principles
                     A documentary on the divine Arvins
                     A documentary on the divine Eyasha
                     Elemental magic for dummies


Magic:

Level 1-This level was very easy for petros to achieve thanks to his fathers extensive knowledge and his natural ability. He made use of the basics of life magic that his father taught him and used them to understand the principals of wind magic. It took alot of practice but he managed it relativley easily.(Like I said, life magic is different from wind magic.)

Level 2-It was at this level that petros's attitude towards work really started to pay off, for the amount of studying is nescessary  has increased drastically. But hours in the library reading books on wind magic has allowed him to achieve level 2 (You will only achieve level 2 once your professor approves you.)

Level 3-It was at this level that extensive study and research was involved to even attempt it. But extensive study and research was not a new experience for petros, but he still felt the difficulty of his work rising. Fizzling spells have become more common and still alot more practice is nescessary. Although petros spends the vast majority of his time at study he still needs to be more thorough in order to achieve the next level.

And there you go. Too many errors. Please correct them and again, read the guide about magic and your tribe.

Have a nice day.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Tifara Heike on July 13, 2007, 07:19:02 PM
Oh and Petros, according to here (http://www.santharia.com/adv/index.php?topic=2009.0#Magic%20Levels), 17 is too young for Level 3.

Another thing is that I really don't think brownies can mate with elves. This entry (http://www.santharia.com/races/racial_crossbreeding.htm) says that

Quote
Brownies are too small to physically mate with any other sentient race ... exceptions to these rules do exist, but they invariably involve serious magical intervention and are not possible by normal methods.

And Thorgas, ginger (http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/ginger) is not just a root, it's also a colour. :D


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 13, 2007, 09:35:41 PM
I see. I don't amuse myself with colors nor any other term they might have.

By the way, gingers do not exist in Santharia; at least, that is what I know. There is a chance that is is being developed in the Dev. board.

And I have already told him that 17 is too young. :)

Have a nice day.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 13, 2007, 10:01:13 PM
Thanks For your time thorgas!! :grin:
your comments are much appreciated!!
 
and by the way, not everyone wants to be dwarves you know...and besides elves are sooo much cooler!!!! :evil:
just kidding!!!


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 14, 2007, 07:56:39 PM
Please put up the pencil message icon if you're still editing your CD, or the exclamation mark message icon, if you want to receive some comments. I have mentioned this before in my previous comment.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Vesk Lyricahl on July 15, 2007, 05:13:24 AM
First of all, you've failed to take into account all of the comments that have been given to you, which means I'll have to repeat some of them. And I never did like repeating myself. Commenting in gold.

Name: Petros Greenvale

Age:17 elven (34 human) The way you have your age listed is confusing. It should say that he's 34 with the appearance of a 17 year old human (but the appearance part isn't necessary, only his actual age is). The way it reads now, I first thought he was 17 and looked like a 34 year old human, quite odd.

Gender: Male

Height: 2 peds

Weight:1 Pygge, 1 Hafeb, 2 Ods, 10 Mut. You're being a bit too exact with his weight. Just leave out the muts.

Hair Color: Ginger

Eye Color: Green

Race: Elf

Tribe :Aellenrhim

Occupation: Mage/Harper


Title: windMage


Physical Appearance:
Petros is extremely tall for his age and tribe ,because of this and his low weight he is incredibly thin and lanky, in(space)fact many people around the academy have nicknamed him “beanpole”. Despite his lankiness he is in no way gaunt. His face is relatively pale because of his hours of study, but he has a slight rosieness around the cheeks, and his stricking green eyes are framed by thin but bushy ginger eyebrows. His cheekbones are slightly protruding and his chin ends in a slight cleft. His arms and legs are just as narrow as the rest of his body and as a result he is not very physically strong . His hands are large  and calloused (because of his harp playing) and his long and slender fingers end with shoddy and bitten nails. Petros has ginger hair (which is highly unusual for his tribe) Actually, ginger hair isn't unusual for the Aellenrhim since they're such a mix of tribes these days. it is shaggy and unkempt and ends just about four fingers up from the shoulder and you can just see the ends of his long ears pointing through.The red I thought his hair was ginger? of his hair and the emerald green of his eyes make quite an interesting contrast.In general Petros is quite an attractive individual.


Clothing:
Petros  basically wears the stereotypical wizards outfit, but what makes him stand out from the magic academy crowd is that his robes are couloured on the shades of the forest. His upper robes are made of dark green velvety material with gold embroidery around the edges and shades of brown along the seams. His lower robes are made of the same material and have the same colour and embroidery but have no brown on the seams. His hat is made of a more rougher material but it is still the same color as the rest of his outfit and it has calligraphic Styrásh writing embroidered arond the hem(in gold) which reads: “Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul”. His hat is slightly to big for him which results in it falling over his eyes and obstructing his vision. Too many a time has his hats distraction caused him to backfire a spell, resulting in dire consequences so it has become a habit of his to push his hat up time. It is one of petros’s philosophies that shoes are obstructing and he is usually found going about his business barefoot. If he has to do a task in which shoes are necessary there are a pair of tatty brown boots at the back of his wardrobe.


Personality:
Petros is a timid but jolly teenager who is very mature for his age. His timidity results in him being very antisocial and he finds it difficult to make friends. If you do happen to befriend petros however, you will find him to be an incredibly nice and kind person. He will always go out of his to help someone and is often found giving extra help to his fellow students who might be struggling with the concepts of wind magic. He always gets on well with every one and has not made any enemies (yet!)

He is very hardworking and is usually found swamped in books in the library or practicing his practical ability in the tower of Wind magic. He always puts his academical studies in(space)front of socializing. For instance when the other students try to entice him to join them in sampling the  ale available in the wasted wizard, he will always decline and return to his conversations with the brownies or continue his studies. Why are brownies at Ximax? They have their own school. Whenever there is an assingnment put forward by his professors he will complete it under the allocated time span and with extended content.

Petros is a neat and tidy person who cant stand clutter and everything in his little room is where it should be.

Because of his attractive exterior he receives quite a lot of attention from the ladies (and some of the gentlemen aswell!!) but because he is (relatively) innocent and timid he just doesn’t know how to act in those kind of situations. So instead of taking advantage of the flirting  he is often seen running away like a scared puppy with his tail between his legs and his hat over his eyes.

Even when you find a time when petros is not studying you'll find him indulging in his one true love…music. Petros is a very talented musician who is good at all the instruments he tries but he is exceptionally talented at the harp. Not many people have heard him play because of his shyness and lack of confidence but his music has been commented as being  “candy for the ears” by one of his professors.




Strengths:

. Petros is highly intelligent, which allows him to absorb extensive amounts of knowledge and use it  later on. It also allows him to achieve very good grades in school.

.He is very talented at wind magic and has already achieved level 3 which allows him to defend himself if he gets into the position were he has to. He's too young to be a level three mage. Even though he is 34, he still has the knowledge of a 17 year old. Elves learn slower and more in depth than the other races. You have to either lower his level or up the age.

.He is a skilled musician and he uses this to his advantage by giving music lessons on various instruments to students around the academy. This has been very successfull because the academy saturates its students in academical studies and deprives them from all things cultural. How does he have time to be both a skilled musician and a talented mage? He is not old enough for just one of those, let alone both.

.He is fluent in quite few languages including dwarven,orcish and styrash. Again, too young to have mastered three languages. Also, the dwarves don't teach their language to just anyone. And why does he need to be fluent in these languages? Its also interesting that he doesn't speak Tharian, the common tongue in Santharia.

Weaknessess:

.Petros is very shy and timid. This drastically effects his social skills and makes him rubbish at bartering ,haggling and making friends.

.He is not robust and can be knocked out cold by a single blow, this also results in plenty broken bones and the fact that hebruises like a banana.

.Although petros has a mind of steel he is very weak physically which means that he cant very heavy objects and it also makes him useless at hand to hand.

.Pertros cannot wield a mellee weapon to save himself. Even if he could he would not have the strength to do any damage with it. As Thorgas already mentioned, this is not a weakness. The average person in Santharia cannot wield melee weapons. And you already mentioned his lack of strength as a weakness.

.Despite the famous archery skills of his tribe petros is also useless at wielding a bow. Again, not being able to wield a weapon is not a weakness.


History:
Petros was born on the 6th day of the month of Dál'injerá (Rising sun). His mother and father had a great shock when petros was born with red hair What happened to ginger?, whic not only was highly unusual for an aellenrhim elf There really isn't a hair color that is unusual for these elves, other than the unnatural.  but they were both blondes. They took it as a gift instead of a burden and it just made them love him even more.

One day when petros was only two years old his parents went out into the surrounding forest to forage for berries and nuts but neither of them ever returned. Petros's parents were respected members of the Aellenrhim community and many went out to search for them, but no traces were ever found. Many rumours circulated about the circumstances but no one ever found out the real cause of their disappearance. His parents arent a subject that petros will usually talk about.

Now an orphan and having no living relatives petros was left all by himself in the world. He eventually became the responsibility of his parents closest friends, a redbark brownie couple.They knew each other since back when both couples were in their prime and they would often go on adventures to find rare plants together in the warnaka mountains,where they would find their fair share of foes to fight.

 The Husband was a renowned life mage. wife was a master seamstress and botanist. The couple were not capable of having their own children and treated petros like their very own. They moved into the now empty Seeánfeárn and bought up their new giant of a son with the utmost care.

By the age of four petros was already double the size of his brownie parents He would be more than double their size at this age, remember that you could hold a brownie in the palm of your hand., and he started to receive an education with other members of his clan who were the same age as him. From his very first day petros was teased and bullied and acquired the nickname freaky greenvale because of his great height and red hair. just to add to his uniqueness petros failed the archery course, which was supposed to easiest course because of his clans natural talent with a bow. Deapite this petros excelled at every academical course and always achieved the top grades in his class.

Petros did not have a very happy childhood and was described by his teacher as being:"too reserved and solemn for his own good". One day petros's father was watching him from a window,being harrassed by some other children he walked home from school one day. He noticed that the more agitated and sad petros felt a nearby flower bed would wilt more and more. Because of his expertise on the matter he knew that petros had natural abilty wth life magic and it would be a crime to let it go to waste. So the next day His father withdrew him from school (he had already outranked all his peers academically by now anyway), and started to train him in the way of life magic.

Although his brownie father insisted on teaching him life magic petros did not believe in draining another life form to further your own needs. So he decided to use the basics his father taught him and further his magical education but in the elemental form of wind. although he could not teach himself wind magic he would reasearch it within his fathers army of books. His brownie Father was not too happy about his choice, but he respected his sons wishes and continued to teach him the ways of a mage. A life mage could not teach a wind mage. He'd need an actual wind mage to teach him; he couldn't have learned it on his own and his brownie father wouldn't be able to teach him.

His life now revolved around studying and he would be at his desk reading and taking down notes from dawn till dusk.
By the age of 9 Petros had become an aspiring young mage(academically not practically). Petros's brownie mother was sure that his kind of hardworking attitude and his anti socialness was unhealthy, so she urged him to go outside and mingle with elves his same age but he would always stay put and continue his studies.

One day while he was rumaging for a book on the principal of Ahm in a storage house petros stumbled upon a dusty but beautiful harp.  it was made of shiny rosewood and stood about 1.2 peds high, along the soundpost were excuisite elven carvings of trees and animals and on the top of the support post was a little gold inlay which read in styrash "Magic is the voice of nature but music is the voice of the soul". He hadnt heard her play but he had stories about his mothers masterful harp playing and the fact that she was known for her jolly,uplifting music santharia over. So he automatically assumed that it belonged to her, so he dusted it down with the sleeve of his tunic and strugglingly carried it back to the Seeánfeárn and inquired about its origin with his mother. it was indeed his mothers and it was crafted for her by his father as a romantic gift when they first got married. Petros carefully gave it a proper clean then returned to the storage house to retrieve the book on the principle of Ahm so that he could continue his studies.

A few days later Petros decided to take his mother up on the advice she gave him and he took a break fro his studies and plodded out of his home at 6 in the morning with his mothers harp and went into th nearby forest to see if he could get a tune out of it. And a tune he could definetly get out of it, within a few hours petros could already get a few jolly jigs out of the thing, and it was then that herealised for the first time that he was good at something non academical.

From then on in Petros kept a steady balance between his harp practice and his studies (but he did find some time for some extra studying!! ;)) So he taught himself to play the harp? It's possible, but it would take longer.

By the age of twelve he had mastered both the harp and novitial wind magic. Far too young to have mastered even one of these. on His twelfth birthday  he was awoken by the delightfull news that he was being sent to ximax to study at the academy of magic. And twelve is too young for an elf to attend Ximax. He could not attend until he has the knowledge of a twelve year old, which is a bit more years for elves. Use the Elf Age Calculator to find an appropriate age, he needs to at least have hit puberty. It was at that point that petros knew that his hours of hard work had payed off. It was not the only great surprise of that day however, his mother had a little something for him to. She gave him a large green package tied tightly shut by an ivy vine. As he lossened the vine and the green wrapping he found a full set of robes and a hat all of his favourite colour,Green. He quickly tried them on and found them to be a perfect fit, except from the hat which was slightly too big (Well it is difficult to get something the right size if what your making is about the same size as you!!).

The next morning Petros lay on the floor to kiss his mother goodbye (because of his great height and her liliputionism) and set off on the long road to ximax with his satchel on his back and and his harp tied to his shoulder by some ivy. Before this petro had never set foot outside the bolder and he found the exotic new world more interesting than he thought. it is on his journey that he notices that his brownie mother has embroidered the phrase that was on the harp onto his hat and it is here when he starts to miss his family back home.

Because of his fathers extensive knowledge of life magic, he was given a small room in the tower of life magic at the academy, by the brownies (who quickly befriended petros). so that he could be close to his studies. There is no tower of life magic at Ximax. The browines have their own school, so there is no need for one. Nor is it likely that there would be brownies as students there.

Weapons:-none-


Belonings: 42 string rosewood harp standing 1.2 peds high, constructed by his father for his mother.It has forest carvings on the sound post. There are also 42 brass levers on top of the srrings which are attached to a blade and when the blade comes in contact with the string it raises it up a semitone. It is too big to be constantly arried around, so he only takes it with him when nescessary nd he usually just leaves his little room.

Brown satchel with two straps which make it capable to be hung around the back. it has two inner pockets capable of holding quills and ink and a larger main area for books.

Various books: The principle of Ahm
                     Brownie magic and its practitioners
                     The diary of a life mage
                     Life magic principles
                     A documentary on the divine Arvins
                     A documentary on the divine Eyasha
                     Elemental magic for dummies


Magic:

Level 1-This level was very easy for petros to achieve thanks to his fathers extensive knowledge and his natural ability. He made use of the basics of life magic that his father taught him and used them to understand the principals of wind magic. It took alot of practice but he managed it relativley easily.

Level 2-It was at this level that petros's attitude towards work really started to pay off, for the amount of studying is nescessary  has increased drastically. But hours in the library reading books on wind magic has allowed him to achieve level 2.It was at this level that extensive study and research was involved to even attempt it. But extensive study and research was not a new experience for petros, but he still felt the difficulty of his work rising. Fizzling spells have become more common and still alot more practice is nescessary. Although petros spends the vast majority of his time at study he still needs to be more thorough in order to achieve the next level.

I'll leave your magic to the magic experts, but I do notice that you took out the description of how he obtained the third level.

There is quite a bit of work to do on your CD. Please account for all the comments before you message a mod asking for more. Either edit accordingly or tell why you aren't doing any particular edit. I gave up on fixing your spelling about halfway through, so please use a spell check on your CD. The forum even has one built in.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 15, 2007, 09:16:13 AM
Almost all of the comments Vesk gave you are included in my last comment on this CD. If you would not change them, then there is no chance of you getting titled.

Obvious errors such as the tower of life, the age, and such are wrong, yet you did not change them.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Zack Ramsey on July 15, 2007, 09:52:12 AM
I was going to go through your CD but my number one rule is if you want comments, respond to, in some fashion, comments already made on your CD. You don’t HAVE  to change your CD, though considering they are Mods who commented on your CD it would be very smart, but at least state why you don’t make the changes.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 16, 2007, 03:10:22 AM
I do make all the changes!!
i spent 3 hours last night going through all the comments that Mr.lychrial put in and i changed all of them. and dont see why you keep going on about the tower of life magic thing because i changed that ok!
im not just being ignorant you know, i do make an effort!!! :(
(ive just not got the hang of it yet!! :grin:)


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/ Windmage-Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 16, 2007, 06:09:30 AM
Im really sorry if i have caused anyone any trouble or have offended anyone in anyway :cry:. i have decide to make a fresh start to my C.D and will make sure i will change anything that anybody comments on. i will make sure i research more thoroughly on the topics of my C.D. I know first impressions are every thing and i hope that i can have a fresh start!!

sorry for my naievity!!!!! :)


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Artemis Darkios on July 16, 2007, 08:37:14 AM
This is the first Character description thing ive read so far, and its really good. I like the way you write so intelligently!!!

Youve filed me with inspiration!!!! :)

Artemis



Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Tifara Heike on July 16, 2007, 05:19:37 PM
Hi Petros!! Just some comments here, not a URI.

1. Lots of spelling mistakes, so take note!! Use the spell check. :D

2. Please spell Petros with a capital P. There are lots of "Petros" in your CD without a capital P.

3. Please check through your CD for punctuation mistakes. :D

4. Don't colour more than half of your CD dark green!! My eyes hurt!! I'm myopic, sadly. :(

5. Brownie parents? Are you a brownie or an elf? :/

6. Explain why you have ginger-coloured hair as it is a rarity for Aellenrhims. :D

7. Personality
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He will always go out of his way to help someone and is often found giving extra help to his fellow students at the school of tunes in Bardavos, who are struggling with the compicated Santharian musical notation.

8. Personality
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Because of his attractive exterior (exterior?? I should think "appearance" would be better. ;)) he receives quite a lot of attention from the ladies (and some of the gentlemen as[space here]well!!) but because he is (relatively) innocent and timid he just doesn’t know how to act in those kind of situations.

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Well, that's about all. Good luck on your CD!!  :grin:

Tifara


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 17, 2007, 06:50:04 AM
 Sorry,
i find this really confusing... Tifara tells me that i should mention my ginger hair because it is a rarity for Aellenrhim elves but Vesk says that i shouldnt... what should i take into account? :undecided:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Vesk Lyricahl on July 17, 2007, 08:02:07 AM
Red hair was rare for the Aellenrhim elves, before the influx of elves from other tribes. Nowadays though, nearly any feature can be seen in the tribe due to their varied heritage. So its incorrect for Petros to say ginger hair is rare among the Aellenrhim, and no explanation is necessary.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 18, 2007, 02:43:10 AM
Cool...thanks!!!!! :grin:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Vesk Lyricahl on July 18, 2007, 10:16:42 AM
Petros, are you still editing this CD? If so, you should switch your icon to that of the pencil.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/Aellenrhim/Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 21, 2007, 07:54:24 PM
sorry to be a pain but....emm,no ones commmented on my C.D for a while, and i would really like to get it finished so i can start r.ping. :D


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 22, 2007, 10:37:51 AM
Just one thing before I check your CD. 34 is very young for an elf. They live up to hundreds of years and mature very slowly. I've seen CD's of elves with life spans of up to 400 years.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Letitia De Lockhart on July 22, 2007, 10:41:56 AM
I don't think the age is that bad he would look like and have the knoloedge and training of a 17 year old human. Unless he want a charecter with a lot of skill, or something like that.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 22, 2007, 10:50:30 AM
I don't know what is difficult to understand from the words "they mature very slowly".

That means they grow, develop, learn, and whatever you want to add here in a slow rate. A 34 year old elf would be considered but a child in an elven society.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 22, 2007, 11:18:35 AM
I dug up this articles about weavers (stay with me im going somewhere with this  ;))
see the weaver only accept new human children once they are ten but ...elves when they are 40 sooo, if a 40 year old elf is the same as a 10 year old human then would 47 be a fair compromise? :huh:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Letitia De Lockhart on July 22, 2007, 11:22:49 AM
Sorry if I am wrong about the ages, you can blame the "Elven Aging Calculator" that I used.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Vesk Lyricahl on July 22, 2007, 11:34:39 AM
A thirty four year old elf is perfectly fine. We have eight year old humans, so why not youngsters of the elven race? But Thorgas is right in that the CD should reflect the age of the character, particularly in the skills he possesses. From what I remember of the chart about levels in regards to age, seventeen would be old enough for a human to reach level two, so its fine for the elf equivalent of a seventeen year old human to reach it as well. But I do question the elf's skill in music, considering that an elf would probably only consider himself highly skilled after practicing for centuries.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Mina on July 22, 2007, 01:49:25 PM
The Weaver entry probably isn't a very good reference in this case.  I think the Elven aging stuff was done much later. 


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Harper
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 22, 2007, 09:15:12 PM
Well about the music thing it really just depends on how you adapt to your instrument and how much you practice. For instance i achieved Grade 8 (highest grade) in clarinet in about 4 years...but they were 4 years of practice and working hard basically. so if i could do it in 4 im sure an elf could do it in 22 ( If he put in alot of effort that is!!). :D


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 25, 2007, 10:04:54 PM
*sighs* "ill never be approved at this rate!!" *sits down and grabs himself a bottle of ale, and begins to sing out of tune"...Crazy,Crazy for feellin so lonely...Crazy,Crazy for feelin so blue!!


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on July 25, 2007, 10:45:01 PM
When you said that he is a wind mage, I assumed that he really is one. I still find parts of your history about life magic, life magi and such. Please look at everything that we checked on that needs to be edited, or explain why you haven't do so.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 25, 2007, 11:10:30 PM
Sorry, i dont see a part where it says that he is a life mage, His brownie father was one though. :)


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Buri on July 25, 2007, 11:21:05 PM
Hello. This is Thorgas in his Pig costume, and I found this in your history.

Petros did not have a very happy childhood and was described by his teacher as being:"too reserved and solemn for his own good". One day petros's father was watching him from a window,being harassed by some other children he walked home from school one day. He noticed that the more agitated and sad Petros felt a nearby flower bed would wilt more and more. Because of his expertise on the matter he knew that Petros had natural ability with life magic and it would be a crime to let it go to waste. So the next day His father withdrew him from school (he had already outranked all his peers academically by now anyway), and started to train him in the way of life magic.

I have not read the entire CD because I feel that you are still not finished. I will check it after you have edited them.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Mina on July 26, 2007, 02:07:07 AM
It would be better if only the mother was a redbark, and the life mage.  I'm not sure if male redbark exist; certain entries suggest that they don't. 


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on July 26, 2007, 08:54:21 AM
Capitalization is your friend.  :fish:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on July 26, 2007, 09:39:26 AM
Will edit tomorrow!! :grin:

Kalina i dont get it.. (im a bit simple you see! ;)) Capitalization as in Capital systems, or the Global Philosophy of economical strength?


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on July 26, 2007, 11:41:17 PM
Grammatically. Beginning each sentence with the proper case of a letter.

"I will meet you at 6" instead of "i will meet you at 6"



Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on July 28, 2007, 11:23:37 PM
The capitalization is looking cleaner! Keep it up!  :pet:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 02, 2007, 06:50:36 AM
Right sorry everyone, im really going to get my finger out on this and hopefully get it finished some time soon!! :fish:
ive just been a bit busy in R.L and the dev board but im going to butcher my C.D until it fis in with the comments you made...remember the more the merrier*hint,hint!* ;)


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on August 04, 2007, 01:44:23 AM
Please make the few changes which were suggested by Thorgas, Mina, and Myself, and you should have your first approval.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 05, 2007, 11:20:37 PM
Cool.....Voila!! i have made the changes that Mina,Thorgas and your goodself have commented about!! and i brushed up on the grammar a wee bit too! :heart: :grin:
i was wondering...is it a wee bit too long? :huh:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on August 06, 2007, 02:14:28 AM
You missed a bunch of capitalizations. Please go back through again and fix them...

Also, some things were capitalized which should not have been.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 06, 2007, 03:39:22 AM
Cool...thanks Kalina!! :heart:
i corrected all the capitals that i could find ( but ive probably missed some! :undecided:)
oh by the way, did i have to highlight them?


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Altario Shialt-eck-Gorrin on August 06, 2007, 03:46:37 AM
No.  You don't need to color minor changes like that, only edits that directly affect the content, so that people can see if it adheres to the confines of your race/tribe etc


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 06, 2007, 03:56:04 AM
Phew!! *wipes forehead*  i thought that i would have to go back and highlight them all, thanks Altario!! :grin:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 13, 2007, 04:55:21 AM
Sorry to be a wee nuisence (again) but...no ones comented on tis in like a wee, and ireally would like to get it finished... so if its not to much hassle could you maybe give me a wee comment here and there? :heart:

sorry to bother you all!!! :grin:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on August 13, 2007, 07:07:35 AM
First approval as promised from earlier ^.^


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Mina on August 14, 2007, 01:31:56 AM
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He noticed that the more he got agitated the more wind ounia was in the surrounding carral resulting in the increase of wind speed.
It's not actually possible to observe car'all.  However, an unnatural increase in Wind speed would be a sign that something magical might be going on.   

Quote
It took 3 days and numerous stops but Petros and Morgana eventually reach bardavos.

The trip from Ximax to Bardavos would take significantly longer than 3 days, I think.  Most likely it will take weeks. 

I think it's also not very clear where your character grew up in, though that is less important.  Anyway, other than these minor things, I don't think there are any more problems with the CD. 


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 14, 2007, 03:33:44 AM
Oh Wow!!! :grin:
Thanks sooo much Kalina!!! :hug: :heart: (this is sooo cool!!)
emmm...i made all the wee changes that you asked me to Mina, thanks for your input!! :pet:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Mina on August 14, 2007, 06:04:54 PM
Looks okay now.  Second approval.   :)


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on August 14, 2007, 11:48:01 PM
Just remove the extra colored words and I will move this CD to the archives!


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on August 15, 2007, 06:08:31 AM
Oh wow...im blue, thanks Mina and kalina!! :)

*POOF* Colour has been completely removed...i think. ;) :fish:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on September 06, 2007, 06:10:38 AM
Moving up!


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on September 06, 2007, 06:42:51 AM
Thanks Kalina Hon!! :heart: :hug:

Ive added a familar...is it ok? if so and no other comments are needed, could you maybe move it back for me please?...sorry by the way, i think im pushing my luck!! :lol: :grin: :heart:


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Kalína Dalá'isyrás on September 06, 2007, 10:18:11 AM
Looks good, moving it back now.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Altario Shialt-eck-Gorrin on May 24, 2010, 01:30:20 AM
Brought up as per requested.


Title: Re: Petros Greenvale/ Aellenrhim/ Musician-Wind Mage
Post by: Petros Greenvale on May 24, 2010, 06:07:32 AM
Thanks Altario!!! :heart:

Minor changes to grammar and history, ready to be moved back.

Thanks again! :grin: