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Title: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 05, 2006, 09:45:23 PM
Name: Thorgas Ironforge
Age: 190
Gender: Male
Race: Dwarf
Tribe: Mitharim
Occupation: Mage
Title: Ironforge Pyromancer


Character Description:
Thorgas has a fascination for fire that was discovered at an early age, so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life, instead he was sent by his family to Ximax to teach him magic. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had made him an outsider to his own people.

Physical appearance:
Thorgas is a fat dwarf who stands at one and a half peds and weighs at two and a half pygges. He measures four spans at the shoulder, his skin is pale, his eyes are green, and his hair and beard are brown. The length of his beard is one-half peds.

Clothes:
Thorgas wears a dark green cap on his head. His everyday clothes is a green shirt, with a matching dark green pants held up by a brown sash, all which is covered with a dark green hooded robe. On his shoulders he wears a grey mole skin cloak, a symbol of a dwarven mage, and on his feet, a pair of white socks and a pair of boar hide black boots.

Personality:
Thorgas is a glutton who could usually be found in a tavern, drinking beer and eating the local delicacy. A typical dwarf, he doesn't trust other races easily and is known for his stubborness, but people will never find a better ally if they should win his trust. This dwarf is a very straight-forward person, and would prefer truth over flattery, honesty over blunt deceit. Many times has his relation with others terminated, merely because they would engage him with a series of talks instead of getting straight to the point. Despite his old age and sickness, he still tries to work hard, preferring to carry his own burden than to have other 'non-dwarves' help him. He is a quiet person that would prefer sitting on a chair in the corner of a room drinking than chatting with others. Like others of his tribe, his gluttony can only be matched with his love for gold.


Strengths:
Fire Magic Proficiency: Thorgas is well trained in the use of fire magic and he will not have any second thoughts in using it against any who wants to try it.

Strong Willed: Dwarves are also known to be strong minded, so when a dwarven mage casts a spell, he is very focused in doing it.

Dwarven Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic and are usually unaffected and are highly resistant to fire, ice, mind and body spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception.

Great Constitution: Dwarves are known to digest poison very well, and they are hard to injure.

Well Versed in Tharian Compared to other Dwarves: During the years that he stayed above ground, he has learned how to speak words in Tharian. His speaking skills needs more work though, as the people whom he talked with have a hard time restraining their chuckles.

Well Educated: All dwarf children are taught how to read and write by the teachers of their community, and it is further honed by the sages of the academy.


Weaknesses:
Ale: Once he hears a squeaking tavern sign he forgets everything he is supposed to do,pushes open the door, and starts gulping beer immediately.

Loner: Since Thorgas embraced magic and studied it thoroughly, so he has been sort of avoided by his own people, who distrust it.

Natural Resistance: Dwarves are highly resistant to fire, and beneficial fire spells cast by Thorgas on himself may fail.

Staff: Thorgas strongly believes that his staff helps him concentrate. Take it away from him, and he won't be able to concentrate in casting his spells; in other words, an easy target.

Breathing Problems: Lately Thorgas has been experiencing breathing and other health problems, and thus he can't he expected to do heavy labor.

Walking Difficulty: Thorgas has also been experiencing difficulties in walking, sometimes requiring the use of his staff for support.

Stubborness: Sometimes he doesn't know when to quit until something went wrong; health problems, headaches, events that can be avoided if he learns not to bite more than he can chew.


History:
Thorgas' parents are very much fascinated, and at the same time worried, about their son's unusual behavior. As a boy, Thorgas was very much fascinated by what fire can do; how can it burn? why does it light? How does it help in the forging of weapons used by his people? This thoughts always played in his mind. His family, somewhat concerned about his unusual behavior, tried to pry him from this fascination. As expected of a dwarf, he stubbornly refused, and after much effort they gave up on it, although from time to time they talked to him about it. This carried on until he became a teenager.

When Thorgas grew from being a boy to a teenager, his father found him a job as a blacksmith's apprentice. Though Thorgas tried very hard to learn the trade, his thoughts always led him to thinking about fire. His master scolded him from time to time when he would make mistakes, melting weapons, forging an axe with no edge, burning scabbards for swords and such. "You call that a hammer?" The smith said as he points to the big puddle of molten metal on the floor. "Well, it was a hammer a while ago..." Thorgas replied.

One day, after helping his master set the metalwork on a table for the purpose of selling them, he sat down to rest. He took a wooden handle of a shovel, thinking about the burned scabbard that his master threw away earlier. "Fire." He thought. "If only I could control fire, it would be great." He looked at the handle and imagined it to be a burning torch. Without thinking, he held one close to the forge's flames. Suddenly, the wood caught on fire. Thorgas, surprised, accidentally threw the burning wood on the table. The fire suddenly blazed. The blacksmith, alarmed, shouted for help and everyone rushed to the smithy bringing buckets of water and saving the blacksmith's wares.

"It's that pyromaniac's fault!" the smith angrily told Thorgas' family. "He did that on purpose! I won't be surprised if he turns out playing with the weird dwarven mages of our tribe! I don't want to see your beard in the entrance of my cave again!"
   
After the smith left, his father approached him and said," I supposed you're not cut out to be a blacksmith, son, but it can't be helped. Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax, but she said you can't learn magic.. We know you strangely love fire, and I know you can learn magic, which can be honed to perfection if utilized properly, and you did burn that smith's furniture. You can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy, if you want to leave. "Here's a letter with money in it, to give to the archmage in charge of the tower. "You can read it, but don't lose it! Oh, and before I forget, this is for you." He said, handing over a beautifully crafted iron staff, carved with runes and with a psyrpent-made crystal attached on top." It's staff traded to me by a passing merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore. And I bought you a tome too."

It was easy for him to leave the mines ,because even though he was still a part of the community, others usually avoided the "strange pyromaniac" and would have been glad to have him gone, and such made little friends. He joined a merchant caravan heading for Ximax. Thorgas was 20 years old at that time, arrived at the academy, and upon entering the Tower of the Guard, he saw many portraits, but was surprised to find a portrait of a powerful looking dwarven archmage. "That's Unghur Firehands, one of the few dwarves who mastered magic." Thorgas turned around and saw a very old human wizard whom he guessed as a professor at the academy. "If you will study hard here, you might have your portrait hanged there too." The old man said with a chuckle and walked away.

 Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to one of the apprentices. The apprentice nodded and lead him to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."

Thorgas studied very hard at the academy, learning spells and transcribing the reagents in his tome. He also spent some time practicing and improving his concentration.
Years passed, and finally he's reached level six, at the age of 80. He decided to go home for a while and then afterwards continue his studies at the academy.

He got home just in time for supper, and was welcomed by his family, but the other dwarves, seeing the 'pyromaniac' in their mines again gave a sigh and went on with their chores, some prepared buckets of water, just in case. Thorgas stayed there until he became 90 years of age.

Time came for his of Age of Choosing. As expected, with those dwarven 'wolves' prowling about and his reputation as a pyromaniac, he didn't find any mate, nor did the females want him 'accidentally' burning their furnitures. As a result, he has no mate, and therefore decided to focus only in his studies. He decided that he would returned to Ximax, with his pet pig Buri, now his companion, to continue studying fire magic, but right now he will remain searching a perfect place and perhaps dig a cave for himself in which to call home.

Thorgas was travelling along a path when he heard a bunch of squeals nearby. He approached the source, with staff in his hand, and found a rather large piglet lying on its side, beside it a broken crate and some fruit seeds scattered. The pig, after seeing Thorgas kneel down to take a look, jumped up and looked at him, and then looked at his pouch. Immediately, it approached the bag and ate Thorgas' meal out of it. Thorgas laughed, realizing that it wasn't hurt, just hungry. He decided to keep the pig as a familiar and called him Buri, and afterwards continued his journey.

Years passed, and Thorgas grew old, old, and very old indeed. With old age comes its related problems. He sometimes experiences these symptoms as he moved about the world, seeking the perfect place to settle down.

Religion: All dwarves worship Urtengor, or as they call him, Trum-Baroll. The Dwarf Father loves his creation very much, and in return they give him their unwavering loyalty. Thorgas, like all the others of his clan, showed his devotion to the Father by copying their holy book called The Rock Tales. Whenever a page of the book becomes elligible, he would patiently write another copy to replace the worn page. Every morning before he begins his study, he would read a chapter from the book. The same goes for every night before going to bed.

Magical Skills:
Thorgas' studies in the Academy of Ximax has proven to be invaluable for his chosen path, the path of a mage. His diligence in the study of fire magic had made him rise quickly from being a novice mage to becoming a graduate of Ximax at level six. The use of fire magic had also made him a very versatile ally. He can help defend his comrades in the battlefield by casting offensive spells, like Quilrosh's Fireball, while keeping himself in a relatively safe distance, as he cannot parry incoming blows. Using the same fire magic, he can also aid his allies after battle by casting beneficial spells, like Burning Regeneration, which grants injured friends a faster regeneration ability, thus reducing blood loss and healing wounds quickly. Despite this abilities, he tries to maintain it's use only for defending his friends, family, community, and himself. He can also use it to do common yet important things like lighting a fire for cooking.

After his graduation from Ximax, he continues to practice spell casting and concentration to improve himself in the arts of wizardry. His detemination and perseverance has paid off, as he quickly began to surpass his mentor's teachings, inspiring him to look elsewhere for more knowledge in all things arcane.


Weapons:
- Staff: staves usually used by mages because they believe it actually helps in their concentration, these things can also be used to hit an opponent in the face. Thorgas' staff, which he named Torosar, is made of metal, carved with runes, with a psyrpent-made crystal on top.

Belongings:
- Staff
- Wood pipe
- Oil Lantern
- Feather pen
- Bottles of ink
- Several sheets of parchment
- Tome of Reagents (called The Ironforge's Codex)
- Hand-written copy of The Rock Tales
- Spectacles
- Several pouches containing different reagents
- Skin of ale
- Skin of water
- Various cooking and eating utensils
- Bag of dried meat and fruits
- Fishing pole
- Roll of bedding
- Deer hide bag to put in everything


Familiars: He has a big, male pig named Buri, a pretty useless familiar but nevertheless a cute companion and a great friend. He stands at 2 fores high, has a length of 1.5 peds, and has a weight of 220 ods. His fur is a shaggy, coarse, brown color. The most distinctable, and perhaps the most threatening part of the pig, is his long yellowish tusks, with a length of about 2 palmspans. He his highly protective of his friend Thorgas and would glare at strangers with deep, brown eyes that seems to pierce your soul, ready to charge and butt at the slightest hint of danger. So far he hasn't gored anybody yet.             


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Huma Mager on April 06, 2006, 05:31:23 AM
Thorgas Ironforge your CD is off to a great start I would like to see it when you get finished but it is great so far.I look forward to rping with you mate.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Kareesh Valendar on April 06, 2006, 05:50:23 AM
Good start, thus far. Would be interested to see why this Dwarven cleric chose to come out of his cave. Keep up the good. I'll make comments when I can. I'm not very versed in Dwarves but I'll do what I can!

Shall I end this haunting nightmare for you?

Visit the world of Ardua



Title: Thorgas Ironforge Tips
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 06, 2006, 06:49:23 PM
Hallo there! Thanks for the comments!
(Grabs a mug of beer and drinks) *burp*
Please give me some tips in developing my CD.
Oh, and I have another question: how do you edit a CD after receiving comments?



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge Tips
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 06, 2006, 09:02:23 PM
To edit: click the edit button under your name.

If you don't see the button, check out the faq in my sig.

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 06, 2006, 10:04:23 PM
Hallo there, Huma!
Many thanks for giving such a good compliment! You really know how to make a dwarf feel good! Makes me want to drink!
Hey, After I'm accepted by the Admins, maybe we can go to the tavern and have a drink aye?
:biggrin  

"Show me a man who walks into a sick tent with no thought of his own health and I'll show you a BRAVE man."

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/6/06 14:05


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Huma Mager on April 07, 2006, 03:25:23 AM
Aye mate lets.My character has a hard time making friends.So you have to take your time with to be your friend.
If you want to get alot of messages get your history at least two parragraphs.I'll com back and check it in a little while.

If you seek death you will receive life,
If you seek life you will receive death,

Edited by: Huma Mager at: 4/6/06 19:30


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on April 08, 2006, 05:20:23 PM
Thorgas - I PMed Talia so she will take a specific look at your CD as it contains clerical magic.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Huma Mager on April 09, 2006, 02:07:23 AM
Very good thorgas.I got you another thing for you list your clerical magic.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Torganth on April 09, 2006, 02:24:23 AM
Hello there!  Lovely profile, your name is eeirly familiar though :D

anyway, a few suggestions, one is your age.

In dwarven society, the dwarves live with their parents untill about 90, when they go and carve out homes of their own and try and attract a female.  since there are more females than males, the males that dont tend to leave.  

Your history is a bit bare...why does Thorgas adventure?  When did he leave?  Also, you might want to get your pig a bit latter in life, most dwarves never go above ground.  So being in the forest doesnt quite cut it.

The only other thing is your axe is made of mithril...mithril is VERY rare you need to say how you got it in your history.

So, to recap...my suggestions:
-Make him older, i'd say 100 or more
-Add more to your history
-Switch things around a bit, find the pig after you leave.
-Add more abotu how you got the axe and how you got training for it.

That's it!  if you need help about the dwarven mating stuff either look at my history or go to the main page and look at the dwarven mating stuff

Looks good so far!  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Kareesh Valendar on April 09, 2006, 03:39:23 AM
Yesh yesh. Mithril is very hard to come by now-a-days.

Quote:
Mithril: Anything made out of or containing mithril should be given proper explanation, as this metal is no longer mined and extremely rare and valuable.


That's from the Restrictions, Elven Aging, Titles & Magic Level Ages topic.

EDIT: Oh, yes. Here's something else that will help ya figure out how you got the Ax:

Quote:
Note: For both Mithril items and moonblades, acquisition of such items through inheritance is not considered a good nor sufficient reason for approval in CDs.

Shall I end this haunting nightmare for you?

Visit the world of Ardua

Edited by: Kareesh Valendar at: 4/8/06 19:40


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 11, 2006, 07:19:23 PM
Aye, could someone comment on my CD? Ach! I really need some advice, or someone who would check it.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Torganth on April 12, 2006, 12:55:23 AM
Everything looks alright...you still need to fix your history, dwarves dont normally go out side, so you would have to find the pig later, it really isnt that hard to say that when you left you found a hurt pig, healed him, then trained him.  Also you need to put in why you left, most dwarves dont leave their homes unless they didn't get a mate.  Other than that your weaknesses look a bit shakey, one of the admins will probably say something about it, but i dont see anything wrong with them.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Ta'lia of the Seven Jewels on April 12, 2006, 06:50:23 AM
A healer and a cleric is not the same. You may be a healer with some empathic magic as the entry says, to feel better, what is needed while healing, but you are not a cleric as are the Nehtorians. Just avoid all the clerical stuff and you are way closer to be approved! Darven clerics have different tasks which you can't fulfil while roleplaying!

I just started to read your CD, and I recommend dearly to reread the entries about dwarves, for what you describe here, is a hman and not a dwarf. There would no old man knock at his parents door f.e., for he would be part of the community anyway etc.  

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Edited by: Talia Sturmwind  at: 4/11/06 22:54


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 12, 2006, 08:09:23 PM
Huh? what do you mean by "shakey"?
I also changed most of the history, so please check it out. many thanks

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/12/06 13:15


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Brighid McLir on April 14, 2006, 01:43:23 AM
My only question is, why is it hard for him to make friends? He seems like a spiffy fellow, and there's nothing to indicate an issue opening up to others.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Valerian Folken on April 14, 2006, 02:21:23 AM
Something to consider.....
In my opinion, this isn't really a weakness

No Shield: With an axe like Earthsplitter, and a hammer like Rockbasher, who needs a shield? unfortunately this makes him vulnerable to most attacks, because the fact that he has only two hands, and both hands are full.

its merely a preference, in my humble opinion. A previous char had an inability (he can't) to parry (a hobbit, I believe it was).

If you wanted to keep that, perhaps an relative inablility to use a shield (couldn't adapt to the mindset of using a shield).
Sorry, its just that as is, it isn't really a weakness, as (as I understand it) he could put a hammer down and use a shield, he just doesn't want to.  

And there, but for the grace of the Goddess, go I. Where demons fear to tread, and angels fear to fly..



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 14, 2006, 04:23:23 AM
Quote:
Age: 90

I didn't find how old dwarves get, but 90 is about the age they have on their Age of Choosing. You'll need to up this a bit considering you want to be skilled both in healing as in fighting.
Quote:
Double Weapon Proficiency: Thorgas wields two types of weapons. One is an axe, called Earthsplitter, is useful for embedding a cold piece of steel to an opponent's body while the warhammer, named Rockbasher, would easily knock some sense (or knock out the senses) into his enemies.

How good is he with them? I suggest not making him too good with his weaponry as your primarily a healer.
Quote:
Excellent Spell Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic are highly resistant to spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception.

Just a note: this is only for spells that affect the mind or the body directly. This won't help much for fireballs and stuff like that (although fireballs are probably a bad example as dwarves are usually unaffected by cold and fire).
Quote:
No Shield: With an axe like Earthsplitter, and a hammer like Rockbasher, who needs a shield? unfortunately this makes him vulnerable to most attacks, because the fact that he has only two hands, and both hands are full.
Unskilled in Ranged Combat: Earthsplitter is nearly as tall as Thorgas, and Rockbasher is very heavy, so there is no way to throw weapons that big, and enemies with ranged weapons find that good.
Backstab Vulnerability: Thorgas is usually concentrated when fighting with enemies, focusing himself to his target, with assassins doing their work focusing on his back.

These are not weaknesses. Most people don't have a shield, most people don't know how to use a bow and most people haven't got a clue how they would fight multiple opponents. There are also very little assassins running about, and most likely those will only attack you when paid for it. Chances on such a backstab happening during a fight are almost nonexistant.
Quote:
Thorgas studied under the dwarf, learning all he can. The dwarf taught him the healing properties of herbs and roots, how to prepare cures and remedies, binding wounds and identifying poison.

Poison? If I'm not mistaking they digest such thing pretty well, but even so, why would dwarves become poisoned? There aren't any snakes and such underground.
Quote:
Thorgas decided to travel and search for a new cave to call his home.

I could be wrong about this, but don't dwarves just expand their existing caves? If you just want it as a reason to find the pig you could say he was gathering plants and stuff for healing thingies.

The biggest problem I see is that there isn't really a reason for him to leave his home (which you will need to do to join a story). Dwarves normally stay in their caves and don't travel.
Quote:
- Spectacles

These thing are very rare. How did he get them and why?

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Rhapsody Mythlinis on April 14, 2006, 04:35:23 AM
I believe Vesk has mentioned before that Dwarves live to about 250 years. And up to as far as 300 for the rare old timers.

So 90 is indeed quite young

You gain strength, courage, and confidence by every experience in which you really stop to look fear in the face. You must do the thing which you think you cannot do.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 14, 2006, 04:49:23 AM
Just reminded that I forgot to put the pencil icon back on. Just change it back when you're done editing (and please colour changes so we can easily find them back).

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Ta'lia of the Seven Jewels on April 14, 2006, 09:44:23 AM
Thorgas, that won't work:
Quote:
Years passed, and Thorgas was near to his Age of Choosing. He told his dad he is not yet ready to find a mate, that there is still so much to learn. His father nodded, obviously understanding what his son wants and knowing that he knows what is best for himself.


A dwarf wouldnever leave his community without a severe reason. He would not want to look, if he could live with a different dwarven tribe, not even with his relatives some strals away. You need to find a solution here.  

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 14, 2006, 03:06:23 PM
hmm... didn't think about that. Ah well back to the basics for me I suppose.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Ta'lia of the Seven Jewels on April 15, 2006, 12:59:23 AM
Thorgas, you still need to find a cause, why you left. May I propose the old but always fitting reason - that he got no wife (three males /two females ration of birth) and he didn't want to see his beloved one marry another? Or vice versa - he fled from an unwanted love?

***Astropic of the day***
"For me there is only the traveling on paths that have heart, on any path   that may have heart. There I travel, and the only worthwhile challenge is to traverse its full length. And there I travel looking, looking, breathlessly. ~Don Juan"



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 15, 2006, 01:17:23 PM
Hey, Welcome. This is a very good character, still the issue of the shell isn't very good, with a hamer and an axe I don't see the need of a shell.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 15, 2006, 07:25:23 PM
How would I delete comments? I changed my character into something else.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 16, 2006, 02:09:23 AM
This character looks like fun to read.  I'm gonna look through it tonight.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 16, 2006, 03:55:23 AM
I comment in lime

Name: Thorgas Ironforge
Age: 120
Gender: Male
Race: Dwarf
Tribe: Mitharim
Occupation: Mage
Title: Dwarven Pyromancer
Portrait:

Character Description:
Thorgas' magical talent and affinity to fire(Is he a gifted One?) was discovered in an early age, so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had made him an outsider to his own people.

Physical appearance:
-Height: 1.5 peds
-width: 4 spans at the shoulder
-Hair color: brown
-Eyes: brown
-Weight: 2.5 pygges
-Skin: pale
-Beard: 0.5 peds, brown

Here you might want to do something about his physical features.  Something a little more de*****ive.  Does he have any distinguishing marks? and things like that.

Clothes:
- Dark Green Woolen cap
- Green woolen shirt
- Dark green woolen pants
- Brown woolen cloak
- White woolen socks
- Boar hide black boots

Once again you might want to be slightly more de*****ive, but it is not necessary.

Personality:
Glutton: He could usually be found in a tavern drinking a mug or two and eating stews.
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Loud: Also in the tavern everybody would have a happy time listening to his stories and jokes.
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Kind: Inside this fat dwarf is a very warm heart that welcomes anybody. Thorgas never turned down anybody who knocks on his door asking for healing or help.
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Honest: Anybody will feel confident going to him and asking for directions because they know he will give them a honest and good opinion.
You have made this very similar to a strengths an weaknesses section.  You might want to put this into paragraph form, or shift all these down and write a paragraph about the personailty in general.

Strengths:
Fire Magic Proficiency: Thorgas is well trained in the use of fire magic and he will not have any second thoughts in using it against any who wants to try it.
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Loyalty: Thorgas will never leave a companion with a heavy problem without sharing the burden.
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Excellent Spell Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic are usually unaffected and are highly resistant to fire, ice, mind and body spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception.

Weaknesses:
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Ale: Once he hears a squeaking tavern sign he forgets everything he is supposed to do, pushes open the door, and starts gulping beer immediately.
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Poor Combatant: He is poor both in melee and ranged fighting because he spent all his time studying magic. Most people do not consider this a weakness because the average Santharian cannot use any weapons either.
Loner: Since Thorgas embraced magic and studied it thoroughly, he has been sort of avoided by his own people, who distrust it. Why hasn't he made other friends?  I'm sure he could have made friends where ever he learned magic.

History: (Add a small section about his origins.  It just needs to be a few sentances of background information) As a boy, Thorgas was very much fascinated by what fire can do; how can it burn? why does it light? How does it help in the forging of weapons used by his people? This thoughts always played in his mind. His family, somewhat concerned about his unusual behavior, tried to pry him from this fascination. As expected of a dwarf, he stubbornly refused, and after much effort they gave up on it(wouldn't they be stubborn too?).

When Thorgas grew from being a boy to a teenager, his father found him a job as a blacksmith's apprentice. Though Thorgas tried very hard to learn the trade, his thoughts always led him to thinking about fire. His master scolded him from time to time when he makes mistakes, melting weapons, forging an axe with no edge, burning scabbards for swords and such.
One day, after helping his master set the metalwork on a table for the purpose of selling them, he sat down to rest. As did his usual behavior, playing with fire from the forge(?? this sentance is confusing). To his surprise, he saw a spark coming out of the forge and moved slowly to the table and proceeded to burn it. The fire suddenly blazed. The blacksmith, alarmed, shouted for help and everyone rushed to the smithy bringing buckets of water and saving the blacksmith's wares.
"It's that pyromaniac's fault!" the smith told Thorgas' family. "He did that on purpose! I won't be surprised if he turns out playing with the weird dwarven mages of our tribe!"
After the smith left, his father approached him and said," I supposed you're not cut out to be a blacksmith, son, but it can't be helped. Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax( I don't think darves attend it), but she said you didn't have any magical talent(Magic is taught usually, not given inately unless you are a gifted one.  That will require an explanation as to how you found out). Well, since you did have some sort of talent, for you did burn that smith's furniture, you can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy. Oh, before I forgot, this is for you." He said, handing over a beautifully crafted iron staff with a psyrpent-made crystal on top." It's staff traded to me by a passing merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore."

Thorgas, he was 15 years old at that time, arrived at the academy, and upon entering the Tower of the Guard, he saw a portrait of a powerful looking dwarven archmage. "That's Ungur Firehands, one of the few dwarves who mastered magic." Thorgas turned around and saw a very old human wizard whom he guessed a professor at the academy. "If you will study hard here, you might have your portrait hanged there too."(I'm pretty sure dwarves have thier own section of the tower) The old man said with a chuckle and walked away. Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."
Thorgas studied very hard at the academy, learning spells and writing them in his tome. He also spent some time practicing and improving his concentration.
Years passed, and finally he's reached level six, at the age of 40. He decided to go home for a while and then continue his studies at the academy.

Thorgas was travelling along a path to his home when he heard a bunch of squeals nearby. He approached the source, with staff in his hand, and found a rather large piglet lying on its side, beside it a broken crate and some fruit seeds scattered. The pig, after seeing Thorgas kneel down to take a look, jumped up and looked at him, and then looked at his pouch. Immediately, it approached the bag and ate Thorgas' meal out of it. Thorgas laugh, realizing that it wasn't hurt, just hungry. He decided to keep the pig as a familiar and called him Buri, and afterwards continued his journey home.

Time came for his of Age of Choosing. As expected, with those dwarven 'wolves' prowling about and his reputation as a pyromaniac, he didn't find any mate, nor did the females want him. As a result, he returned to Ximax, with his pet pig Buri, now his companion, to continue studying fire magic.  (When does he leave or is he en-route.  Its hard to play a character if they are somewhere far away studying from where the story is.)

(You need a section on what spells he knows.  And a short magic de*****ion)

Weapons:
- Staff: staves usually used by mages because they believe it actually helps in their concentration, these things can also be used to hit an opponent in the face. Thorgas' staff is made of metal, with a crystal on top.

Belongings:
- Wood pipe
- Oil Lantern
- Tome of magic(does this have his spells?)
- Feather pen
- Bottles of ink
- Pouch of sulfur
- Skin of ale
- Skin of water
- Bag of dried meat and fruits
- Deer hide pouch to put in everything

Familiars: He has a big pig named Buri, a pretty useless familiar but nevertheless a cute companion and a great friend.\

overall its good, but you need to add a magic section and be a little more descriptive for the first few sections instead of just bulletpointing.  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 16, 2006, 06:34:23 AM
Hmm... Like I said, I don't know if Mitharim have mages (as in Ximaxian mages) since dwarves aren't too fond of magic (and you need to travel for that and that's not something dwarves easily do). From the general entry:
Quote:
Due to the fact that they originated from the element of Earth at the beginning of times, dwarves are - just like stone - usually unaffected by cold and fire and they destrust every kind of magic by heart, so that magic spells often fail when cast onto dwarves.

I know they have some kind of clerics, but those are not Ximaxian mages.

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 16, 2006, 10:52:23 AM
OK thanks mr. singing orc. but I really read it in the occupations section that they have mages, and also in the description of Ximax, there are dwarven mages, but thats for the earth tower, and about the dwarven archmage (my Idol hehehe :worship   ) Ungur Firehands. :p  

Drasil: Aye those comments did helped me in making my character. thanks a lot. hmm... an elf who likes to drink.. my kind of people. :D

Mods Please comment hard and fast! :D  The sooner I play the better! :broadgrin  

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/16/06 3:54


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 16, 2006, 01:30:23 PM
hello, i have changed my character, thorgas, and i would like you to come back and see if there are any more problems. and, while i am saying this, i would like any of you to come to Xun Darkwoe (Made by Xun Darkwoe, not Dark Elf Xun) and see if there are any problems.

hello, i noticed that your character is off to a really good start, i hope that the admin accepts it. i just wanted to tell you that i am finished with the update. thank you for letting me message you and for helping me.

back again aye? hope you are still on. i had to completely remake my character. hey, after the admins accept us, how about some ale?
can you check out my new description and see if it is good?:rolleyes

Edit by Marvin: no reason to tripple post. You can just edit your post and it will be bumped to the top as well.

Edited by: Marvin Cerambit  at: 4/16/06 11:09


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 16, 2006, 08:08:23 PM
The mages in Ximax are the Zirghurim. It might be possible that other have them to, but I think not. Best to ask Talia or even better Judith (as she seems to be back).

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 16, 2006, 08:15:23 PM
Is that a Dwarven Tribe, Mr. Singing Orc? Then I'll just change Thorgas' Tribe and all that. :fish  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 17, 2006, 02:52:23 AM
Yes, that's a tribe. It's not on the site yet though, so you best ask the admins first (I don't really expect that it won't be allowed considering it looks almost done, but just to be sure). You'll need to read throught the topic first though as they are a bit different from the common dwarves (so you might need some more tweaking then just changing the name of your tribe). You could even make suggestions if you want ;)

And you really don't want to hear me sing.

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 17, 2006, 03:46:23 AM
hello, Thorgas. I changed my character using everything that you said, and, as you said, newbies got to help eachother. i just wanted you to check my CD out and see if it is good now. please comment, i need help. oh and by the way, your char is
:jawdrop  good.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 17, 2006, 09:58:23 AM
Thorgas, as I know VERY little about dwarves, I shall ezmail Judith in hopes she will have a look here. Since there seems to be a question about this CD, I shall put the question mark up for you so everyone knows you have a specific question. Once Judith or an Admin OKs the dwarf mage thing I shall return for a complete go over of what you have.

Beautifully written character as a matter of fact.:)

~Bows gracefully and departs~  

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Malavon Despana on April 17, 2006, 10:15:23 AM
Aye master dwarf  i agree with Twen , a Beautifully written character , i do enjoy new wizards cd .

Talks to himself and smiles with irony  - New victims for me .

But talking seriously, it really is a great cd and i do hope to see you in the rp boards no time soon my friend.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 17, 2006, 08:29:23 PM
To Lady Araerwen:
Aye, thank you very much, Lady Araerwen. I hope that Lady Judith will answer soon, so you can set your corrections on my CD.

To Master Despana:
Master Despana, I would enjoy RPing with you, with two conditions: :b    
First: Ale. lots and lots of ale. :biggrin    
Second: If you are going to talk to me, sheath your weapon first, because I believe it's as tall as I am. And DON'T use that on me if you don't want to see a watermelon cut in half. (I wear green) *brrr* :speechless    
Ach, seriously, I think I'll enjoy RPing with you also. :)  

To Master Cerambit:
*Looks at the fangs the size of Thorgas' pipe*
Uhh... ok, I think I would not like to hear you sing... You also would not want to see a watermelon cut in half. :speechless  

To Himself:
I wish the admins would accept my CD.  :|  

To everybody:
Have a nice day. :fish  

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/17/06 15:05


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 18, 2006, 12:39:23 AM
ahh i'm back again Master Ironforge. however, i am not only thinking abot you checking mine, but I checking yours. you see, i have been trying to help people with their CD's and also, since you are probably my best friend here, i would like to focus on yours.

I have noticed only a few mistakes though.

Oh by the way, i would not want to stab you because i had to change my weakness magic to fire, please don't kill ME!:worship :worship

first: i am kind of wondering. if you distrust magic like all dwarves, why do you use it so?

second: it would lengthen your history a bit if you told how your dad got all the silver ore and bought that staff.

third: have a nice day :fish .



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 18, 2006, 01:06:23 AM
Greetings, Master Darkwoe. Well, short answers for your questions.
First: I believe we cannot kill fellow santharians, but then again, I could be wrong about that. ;)
Second: He was discovered having a gift at a very young age; The magical talent and affinity to fire, so he learned to love it. :)
Third: As mentioned in the story, His dad got the staff from a merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore. They live in a mine, like other dwarves, so they can mine for metal ores, but I would add this to the history section.
Fourth: Many thanks for pointing out the flaws in my CD.
Fifth: We could form the "have a Nice Day :fish " club. just kidding :biggrin
Sixth: I'm looking forward to RPing with you, and I'm also looking forward to drinking good ale with you, but it's on you. :biggrin
Seventh: Have a nice day. :fish  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 18, 2006, 05:38:23 AM
if you want me to by you some drinks, you had better some good reason for it. and yes you are right that we cannot kill fellow santharians, i was just joking.

oh and the "have a nice day :fish " is a great idea, ha!

oh and please, call me Xun



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Huma Mager on April 18, 2006, 06:07:23 AM
Sorry I haven't been posting lately been gone weeks and weeks.I have a reason for you.You could have left to find adventure.I'll buy the ale for you and Xun.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 18, 2006, 06:44:23 AM
Thank you very much, Huma, i was starting to wonder, with this dwarf i would be broke long before he was finished.:biggrin  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Huma Mager on April 18, 2006, 06:48:23 AM
Xun I am broke. Take a look at my CD.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 18, 2006, 12:01:23 PM
Aye, That Huma is a great guy! :biggrin
*Looks around him*
Oy, Another round of beer for everybody! Master Mager will pay for it!
Hmm... well you could always sell your wagon if you need money. :biggrin  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 18, 2006, 12:48:23 PM
well... i guess i could spend a few coins. *turns around and grabs a beer* hmm, you want some thorgas? *gulp* woo, here you go waiter *gives 50 coins to waiter* woo, i get drunk to quick.:number1  wait, what am i doing!?!



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 18, 2006, 11:53:23 PM
It's been days since a moderator checked my CD. When will they be here?.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Marvin Cerambit on April 19, 2006, 02:46:23 AM
Well, there's still the question if Mitharim have mages or if you can play those Zirghurim.

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Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Huma Mager on April 19, 2006, 03:24:23 AM
I'm going to check your CD with my lime
Name: Thorgas Ironforge
Age: 120
Gender: Male
Race: Dwarf
Tribe: Mitharim
Occupation: Mage
Title: Dwarven Pyromancer


Character Description:
Thorga's gift of having the magical talent and affinity to fire was discovered in an early age, so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had made him an outsider to his own people.

Physical appearance:
-Height: 1.5 peds
-width: 4 spans at the shoulder
-Hair color: brown
-Eyes: brown
-Weight: 2.5 pygges
-Skin: pale
-Beard: 0.5 peds, brown

Clothes:
- Dark green woolen cap
- Green woolen shirt
- Dark green woolen pants
- Brown mole skin cloak
- Dark green robe
- White woolen socks
- Boar hide black boots

Personality:
Glutton: He could usually be found in a tavern drinking a mug or two and eating stews.

Loud: If you could have him as a friend, you could stay all day in a tavern listening to his stories and laughs.

Kind: Inside this fat dwarf is a very warm heart that welcomes anybody.

Honest: Anybody will feel confident going to him and asking for directions because they know he will give them a honest and good opinion.


Strengths:
Fire Magic Proficiency: Thorgas is well trained in the use of fire magic and he will not have any second thoughts in using it against any who wants to try it.

Strong Willed: Dwarves are also known to be strong willed and stubborn, so when a dwarven mage casts a spell, he is very focused in doing it.

Excellent Spell Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic and are usually unaffected and are highly resistant to fire, ice, mind and body spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception.

Great Constitution: Dwarves are known to digest poison very well, and wounds inflicted upon them heal quickly.


Weaknesses:
Ale: Once he hears a squeaking tavern sign he forgets everything he is supposed to do,pushes open the door, and starts gulping beer immediately.

Loner: Since Thorgas embraced magic and studied it thoroughly, so he has been sort of avoided by his own people, who distrust it.

Poor Blocking: Thorgas doesn't have a shield, and even if he has one, he doesn't know how to use it. He can't parry incoming blows.

Staff: Take it away from him, and he won't be able to concentrate in casting his spells; in other words, an easy target.


History: Thorgas' parents knew ,from day they saw him start a fire on their rug without using anything, that he has some sort of a gift. A gift of magical talent. As a boy, Thorgas was very much fascinated by what fire can do; how can it burn? why does it light? How does it help in the forging of weapons used by his people? This thoughts always played in his mind. His family, somewhat concerned about his unusual behavior, tried to pry him from this fascination. As expected of a dwarf, he stubbornly refused, and after much effort they gave up on it, although from time to time they talked to him about it. This carried on until he became a teenager.

When Thorgas grew from being a boy to a teenager, his father found him a job as a blacksmith's apprentice. Though Thorgas tried very hard to learn the trade, his thoughts always led him to thinking about fire. His master scolded him from time to time when he makes mistakes, melting weapons, forging an axe with no edge, burning scabbards for swords and such. "You call that a hammer?" The smith said as he point to the big puddle of molten metal on the floor. "Well, it was a hammer a while ago..." Thorgas said.
One day, after helping his master set the metalwork on a table for the purpose of selling them, he sat down to rest. He took a wooden handle of a shovel, thinking about the burned scabbard that his master threw away earlier. "Fire." He thought. "If only I could control fire, it would be great." He looked at the handle and imagined it to be a burning torch. All of a sudden, a flame appeared on the wood. Thorgas, surprised, accidentally threw the burning wood on the table. The fire suddenly blazed. The blacksmith, alarmed, shouted for help and everyone rushed to the smithy bringing buckets of water and saving the blacksmith's wares.
"It's that pyromaniac's fault!" the smith told Thorgas' family. "He did that on purpose! I won't be surprised if he turns out playing with the weird dwarven mages of our tribe!"
After the smith left, his father approached him and said," I supposed you're not cut out to be a blacksmith, son, but it can't be helped. Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax, but she said you didn't have any magical talent. We know you have a gift, a talent, which can be honed to perfection if utilized properly, and you did burn that smith's furniture, you can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy. Oh, before I forget, this is for you." He said, handing over a beautifully crafted iron staff, carved with runes and with a psyrpent-made crystal attached on top." It's staff traded to me by a passing merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore."

It was easy for him to leave the mines ,because even though he was still a part of the community, others usually avoided the "strange pyromaniac" and would have been glad to have him gone, and such made little friends. He joined a merchant caravan heading for Ximax. Thorgas, he was 15 years old at that time, arrived at the academy, and upon entering the Tower of the Guard, he saw many portraits, but was surprised to find a portrait of a powerful looking dwarven archmage. "That's Ungur Firehands, one of the few dwarves who mastered magic." Thorgas turned around and saw a very old human wizard whom he guessed as a professor at the academy. "If you will study hard here, you might have your portrait hanged there too." The old man said with a chuckle and walked away. Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."
Thorgas studied very hard at the academy, learning spells and writing them in his tome. He also spent some time practicing and improving his concentration.
Years passed, and finally he's reached level six, at the age of 40. He decided to go home for a while and then continue his studies at the academy.

Thorgas was travelling along a path to his home when he heard a bunch of squeals nearby. He approached the source, with staff in his hand, and found a rather large piglet lying on its side, beside it a broken crate and some fruit seeds scattered. The pig, after seeing Thorgas kneel down to take a look, jumped up and looked at him, and then looked at his pouch. Immediately, it approached the bag and ate Thorgas' meal out of it. Thorgas laughed, realizing that it wasn't hurt, just hungry. He decided to keep the pig as a familiar and called him Buri, and afterwards continued his journey home.

Time came for his of Age of Choosing. As expected, with those dwarven 'wolves' prowling about and his reputation as a pyromaniac, he didn't find any mate, nor did the females want him accidentally burning their furnitures. As a result, he has no mate, and therefor decided to focus only in his studies. He returned to Ximax, at the age of 100 with his pet pig Buri, now his companion, to continue studying fire magic.


Weapons:
- Staff: staves usually used by mages because they believe it actually helps in their concentration, these things can also be used to hit an opponent in the face. Thorgas' staff is made of metal, carved with runes, with a crystal on top.

Belongings:
- Wood pipe
- Oil Lantern
- Tome of magic
- Feather pen
- Bottles of ink
- Pouch of sulfur
- Pouch of ashes
- Skin of ale
- Skin of water
- Bag of dried meat and fruits
- Deer hide pouch to put in everything

Familiars: He has a big pig named Buri, a pretty useless familiar but nevertheless a cute companion and a great friend.

Over al I think it is a geat CD.If you and me become frinds you could use my wagon.

Edited by: Huma Mager at: 4/19/06 12:07


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Rhapsody Mythlinis on April 19, 2006, 04:31:23 AM
Huma - when you are commenting on CDs, it is prefered you use a color people can actually see. Navy is too dark and blends in with the black too easily.

You gain strength, courage, and confidence by every experience in which you really stop to look fear in the face. You must do the thing which you think you cannot do.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 19, 2006, 09:33:23 AM
:rollin  I saw nothing in the CD, so I assume Master Thorgas have nothing to do...

Coming back, be patient Thorgas, while you're witing you're practising RPing, now would you like another round, I pay. Just don't make a dissaster arround or Mods and Admins will kick me.:lol



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 19, 2006, 11:49:23 AM
Hello Master Ironforge. it is your great friend, Xun Darkwoe. would you like another round of beer? i have enough money. come on, you know you want to.:biggrin  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 19, 2006, 11:13:23 AM
Good! I got three guys asking me to drink ale.
It's free too :biggrin       Ah I could drink all day

Oh, and Mr. Orc, I did found these in the Mitharim Tribe Occupation list:

Quote:
Mage
The Mage works with tools, items, spell components, reagents, and other physical material to create magic and change his/her environment. Requires excellent memory and concentration skills. Often low in emotional expression or solitary. Either gender.


And there. But give me a final descision if I can or cannot use a Mitharim dwarven mage, so I can edit and put the finishing touches on my CD.

Have a nice day.:fish    

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/19/06 12:19


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 19, 2006, 12:15:23 PM
Didn't knew we had newspaper arround here... Master Thorgas, is there an anousement for a Wind Wizard waiting for title?? :rollin  

Remember, one is good, two is party, but three means you will fall when you make a steep.

Why you don't go to Ximax... there you can meet many people, and is the best school of magic arround here, and you wouldn't have problems with mods.

Edited by: so orril miesefer  at: 4/19/06 4:32


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 19, 2006, 11:12:23 PM
Should I list my spells in my CD? if so, can I have more than 1 level 1 spell?



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 20, 2006, 04:14:23 AM
... Dunno, what element are you??? Please, don't use earth since it will have major modifications.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 20, 2006, 09:29:23 AM
It is not necessary to list ALL the spells you know. Also you would most likely know most of the first level spells, as these are but a small list of what could be possible. I would encourage you to do some reading about how magic functions on Santharia. This would give you a much greater range of understanding when you try to RP a mage charrie. If you have any other questions pertaining to magic or just things about your character, feel free to ask them here.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 20, 2006, 09:37:23 AM
I agree with Orril when you should stay away from Earth for the time being as it is still under development.  (and this is coming from the earth obssesed developer)  I would suggest that you stick with either wind or fire as they have the largest variety of spells and therefore are much easier to work with.

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 20, 2006, 10:47:23 AM
Hello Thorgas. i have gotten a new picture for my character. tell me what you think why don't you? our character is beautifully written i think but i am sure the mods have found mistakes, as they do with everyone.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 20, 2006, 10:53:23 AM
Also to directly answer your question.  Yes you may have as many spells of each level as you desire, just remember that memorizing lots of spells takes time.  As long as your character is higher or as high as the level required, you can learn the spell.  Also, to prevent yourself from being an Elemental mage god person, try to limit the number of spells you have.  In other words, don't give yourself eveery spell from levels 1-8 as it is unlikely for a person to learn everysing one(especially of fire and wind)

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 20, 2006, 10:57:23 AM
Ok.. I'm not saying that I'll put everything.
So can I put the ! posticon back on?

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/20/06 4:01


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 20, 2006, 01:03:23 PM
Another thing, I suggest you go to fire, because it fits better an dwarf (sorry if I spell that wrong).

If you do so, Twen is going to be your teacher, if you go with wind I'm going to be your proffesor.:rollin  Ok forget that, no more ale for me...

Any question you have about magic, feel free to send me a message or ask here, Twen, Marv or me will help you.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 20, 2006, 04:43:23 PM
Ya I did go to fire.. I'm a pyromancer. ;)  and Lady Araerwen is a necromancer. I read it in her CD, or did I mixed it all up? Still, it's pretty useful coz there is a link in her sig. that says "school of fire magic". My dwarf is getting old and dusty just sitting here, waiting for an approval. I think I'll change his portrait into another with a white beard.

And I don't think the mods and admins will answer, as they are very busy and the majority of them are currently unavailable.  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on April 21, 2006, 12:25:23 AM
Only one Mod is really unavailable. :p

I have been getting to your CD. I will go through it in the next day or two.

~nods knowingly~



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 12:59:23 AM
Hello Thorgas! i have been changing my character and i would like you to see if you can check it. i have changed it a lot. And be honored that Kalina will help you. she helped me too and she helps a whole ton. :nod  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 21, 2006, 01:27:23 AM
Hello Thorgas! My comments shall be in the ever-ugly color: orange

Name: Thorgas Ironforge
Age: 100
Gender: Male
Race: Dwarf
Tribe: Mitharim
Occupation: Mage
Title: Dwarven Pyromancer
Portrait:

Character Description:
Thorgas' gift of having the magical talent and affinity to fire was discovered in an early age, so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had made him an outsider to his own people.

Physical appearance:
-Height: 1.5 peds Some mods dislike the use of decimal points, so stating this as one and a half peds would be more fitting. IMHO
-width: 4 spans at the shoulder
-Hair color: brown
-Eyes: brown
-Weight: 2.5 pygges As above: Near two and a half pygges
-Skin: pale
-Beard: 0.5 peds, brown An once again: about a half ped in length

Clothes:
- Dark green woolen cap
- Green woolen shirt
- Dark green woolen pants
- Brown mole skin cloak I think mole skin is predominantly grey
- Dark green robe
- White woolen socks
- Boar hide black boots

Personality:
Glutton: He could usually be found in a tavern drinking a mug or two and eating stews.

Loud: If you could have him as a friend, you could stay all day in a tavern listening to his stories and laughs.

Kind: Inside this fat dwarf is a very warm heart that welcomes anybody.

Honest: Anybody will feel confident going to him and asking for directions because they know he will give them a honest and good opinion.


Strengths:
Fire Magic Proficiency: Thorgas is well trained in the use of fire magic and he will not have any second thoughts in using it against any who wants to try it.

Strong Willed: Dwarves are also known to be strong willed and stubborn, so when a dwarven mage casts a spell, he is very focused in doing it.

Excellent Spell Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic and are usually unaffected and are highly resistant to fire, ice, mind and body spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception. It should be noted that sometimes his own fire magics may be ineffective when used upon himself.

Great Constitution: Dwarves are known to digest poison very well, and wounds inflicted upon them heal quickly.

Healing Capabilities: Thorgas studied fire magic and learned the spell 'Burning Regeneration', and thus can use it on himself as well as to others. This is trully not a strength as any fire mage could heal themselves via this incantation. So no need to list this as its own strength.

Weaknesses:
Ale: Once he hears a squeaking tavern sign he forgets everything he is supposed to do,pushes open the door, and starts gulping beer immediately.

Loner: Since Thorgas embraced magic and studied it thoroughly, so he has been sort of avoided by his own people, who distrust it.

Poor Blocking: Thorgas doesn't have a shield, and even if he has one, he doesn't know how to use it. He can't parry incoming blows. This is not a weakness as most people have no skill in defending themselves.

Staff: Thorgas strongly believes that his staff helps him concentrate. Take it away from him, and he won't be able to concentrate in casting his spells; in other words, an easy target.

A nice set of strengths and weaknesses, but you will need another weakness after making the above stated edits.IMHO

History: Thorgas' parents knew ,from day they saw him start a fire on their rug without using anything, that he has some sort of a gift. A gift of magical talent. It is highly unlikely that he could create a fire without any magical training. But maybe he did this in a mundane fashion and his parents noted his great fascination for the flames? As a boy, Thorgas was very much fascinated by what fire can do; how can it burn? why does it light? How does it help in the forging of weapons used by his people? This thoughts always played in his mind. His family, somewhat concerned about his unusual behavior, tried to pry him from this fascination. As expected of a dwarf, he stubbornly refused, and after much effort they gave up on it, although from time to time they talked to him about it. This carried on until he became a teenager.

When Thorgas grew from being a boy to a teenager, his father found him a job as a blacksmith's apprentice. Though Thorgas tried very hard to learn the trade, his thoughts always led him to thinking about fire. His master scolded him from time to time when he makes mistakes, melting weapons, forging an axe with no edge, burning scabbards for swords and such. "You call that a hammer?" The smith said as he points to the big puddle of molten metal on the floor. "Well, it was a hammer a while ago..." Thorgas said.
One day, after helping his master set the metalwork on a table for the purpose of selling them, he sat down to rest. He took a wooden handle of a shovel, thinking about the burned scabbard that his master threw away earlier. "Fire." He thought. "If only I could control fire, it would be great." He looked at the handle and imagined it to be a burning torch. All of a sudden, a flame appeared on the wood. Once again it is not likely that he could create fire without any magical teachings. Only a Gifted One would have these types of random magical mishaps, yet they are restricted. Thorgas, surprised, accidentally threw the burning wood on the table. The fire suddenly blazed. The blacksmith, alarmed, shouted for help and everyone rushed to the smithy bringing buckets of water and saving the blacksmith's wares.
"It's that pyromaniac's fault!" the smith angrily told Thorgas' family. "He did that on purpose! I won't be surprised if he turns out playing with the weird dwarven mages of our tribe! I don't want to see your beard in the entrance of my cave again!"
After the smith left, his father approached him and said," I supposed you're not cut out to be a blacksmith, son, but it can't be helped. Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax, but she said you didn't have any magical talent. We know you have a gift, a talent, which can be honed to perfection if utilized properly, and you did burn that smith's furniture. You can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy, if you want to leave. Oh, before I forget, this is for you." He said, handing over a beautifully crafted iron staff, carved with runes and with a psyrpent-made crystal attached on top." It's staff traded to me by a passing merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore."

It was easy for him to leave the mines ,because even though he was still a part of the community, others usually avoided the "strange pyromaniac" and would have been glad to have him gone, and such made little friends. He joined a merchant caravan heading for Ximax. Thorgas, he was 15 years old This age may be a bit young but I am not a dwarven expert. I would guess that he would be into his twenties before entering any magical school. at that time, arrived at the academy, and upon entering the Tower of the Guard, he saw many portraits, but was surprised to find a portrait of a powerful looking dwarven archmage. "That's Ungur Firehands, one of the few dwarves who mastered magic." Thorgas turned around and saw a very old human wizard whom he guessed as a professor at the academy. "If you will study hard here, you might have your portrait hanged there too." The old man said with a chuckle and walked away. Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."
Thorgas studied very hard at the academy, learning spells and writing them in his tome. There is no need to write spells in a tome, maybe simple things to remember such as reagents and formula but not the spell per'se. He also spent some time practicing and improving his concentration.
Years passed, and finally he's reached level six, at the age of 40. He decided to go home for a while and then afterwards continue his studies at the academy.

Thorgas was travelling along a path to his home when he heard a bunch of squeals nearby. He approached the source, with staff in his hand, and found a rather large piglet lying on its side, beside it a broken crate and some fruit seeds scattered. The pig, after seeing Thorgas kneel down to take a look, jumped up and looked at him, and then looked at his pouch. Immediately, it approached the bag and ate Thorgas' meal out of it. Thorgas laughed, realizing that it wasn't hurt, just hungry. He decided to keep the pig as a familiar and called him Buri, and afterwards continued his journey home.

He got home just in time for supper, and was welcomed by his family, but the other dwarves, seeing the 'pyromaniac' in their mines again gave a sigh and went on with their chores, some prepared buckets of water, just in case. Thorgas stayed there until he became 90 years of age. Time came for his of Age of Choosing. As expected, with those dwarven 'wolves' prowling about and his reputation as a pyromaniac, he didn't find any mate, nor did the females want him 'accidentally' burning their furnitures. As a result, he has no mate, and therefor decided to focus only in his studies. He returned to Ximax, at the age of 100 with his pet pig Buri, now his companion, to continue studying fire magic.
Having the history ending with him being in Ximax severly limits his travels. Something more vague would help explain how he gets into a storyline.

Weapons:
- Staff: staves usually used by mages because they believe it actually helps in their concentration, these things can also be used to hit an opponent in the face. Thorgas' staff, which he named Torosar, is made of metal, carved with runes, with a psyrpent-made crystal on top.

Belongings:
- Wood pipe
- Oil Lantern
- Tome of magic (affectionately named The Ironforge's Codex) Not a necessity as mages do not need tomes to study their magics.
- Feather pen
- Bottles of ink
- Several pouches containing solid reagents
- Vials of liquid reagents The majority of fire reagents are not liquids of any kind. As liquid implies water, which happens to be the opposing force of fire. Sulfur, salt and ash are all good examples of fiery reagents.
- Skin of ale
- Skin of water
- Bag of dried meat and fruits
- Deer hide pouch to put in everything

Spells (as written in The Ironforge's Codex ):
- (Level 1) Rise Flame
Set fire to your enemies, light a campfire, or roast a pig -- it's an all purpose spell!

- (Level 1) Searing
The smell of burned flesh is not pleasant, but gloating while your enemies burn is good!

- (level 2) Boiling Blood
The blood is like fire within my veins! Burning... Hot... Rage... DIE!

- (Level 2) Light
Always a welcoming sight at the end of a tunnel.

- (Level 3) Quilrosh's Fireball
As far as I'm concerned there is no other spell -- this one has it all.

- (Level 4) Burning Regeneration
We -- every man, woman, and child, are evidence of the incredible power of regeneration. Cut us and we may bleed -- but we heal!

- (Level 6) Blazing Shield
Let them think you're weak, get them to surround you, and then you make them pay for it!

Familiars: He has a big pig named Buri, a pretty useless familiar but nevertheless a cute companion and a great friend.

I hope my comments aid you on the quest for a title. If you have any questions feel free to ask them here as I am always happy to help a fellow fire mage.:)

~Bows gracefully and departs~

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 06:20:23 AM
Then Thorgas, I leave you in the best hands of fire magic, Twen's hands



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Edited CD. Please Check...
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 21, 2006, 10:20:23 AM
I comment in red  Don't forget to color your changes!


Name: Thorgas Ironforge
Age: 100
Gender: Male
Race: Dwarf
Tribe: Mitharim
Occupation: Mage
Title: Dwarven Pyromancer
Portrait:

Character Description:
Thorgas' gift of having the magical talent and affinity to fire was discovered in an early age(gifted ones are restricted.  Change this to something that does not suggest that he is a gifted one.), so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had made him an outsider to his own people.

Physical appearance:
-Height: 1.5 peds (See weight)
-width: 4 spans at the shoulder
-Hair color: brown
-Eyes: brown
-Weight: 2.5 pygges (Do approximate weights.  For example say for this "about 2 and a half pygges)
-Skin: pale
-Beard: 0.5 peds, brown (see weight.)

Clothes:
- Dark green woolen cap
- Green woolen shirt
- Dark green woolen pants
- Brown mole skin cloak
- Dark green robe
- White woolen socks
- Boar hide black boots

Personality:
Glutton: He could usually be found in a tavern drinking a mug or two and eating stews.

Loud: If you could have him as a friend, you could stay all day in a tavern listening to his stories and laughs.  (What does this have to do with being loud.  Maybe he often turns heads in a tavern because his voice booms over all others.  What you have here has nothing to do with being loud, it is being entertaining)

Kind: Inside this fat dwarf is a very warm heart that welcomes anybody.

Honest: Anybody will feel confident going to him and asking for directions because they know he will give them a honest and good opinion.


Strengths:
Fire Magic Proficiency: Thorgas is well trained in the use of fire magic and he will not have any second thoughts in using it against any who wants to try it.

Strong Willed: Dwarves are also known to be strong willed and stubborn, so when a dwarven mage casts a spell, he is very focused in doing it.  (You must know that it is still possible to break his concentration through pain and other means)

Excellent Spell Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic and are usually unaffected and are highly resistant to fire, ice, mind and body spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception.

Great Constitution: Dwarves are known to digest poison very well, and wounds inflicted upon them heal quickly.  (Is this just versus enemy spells or does it also affect spells targeting himself.)

Healing Capabilities: Thorgas studied fire magic and learned the spell 'Burning Regeneration', and thus can use it on himself as well as to others.  (These would be considered fire proficient, however if you give him a basic knowledge of healing(with bandages and such) you can keep this.  Maybe he would have learned it while he was studying to be a mage?)


Weaknesses:
Ale: Once he hears a squeaking tavern sign he forgets everything he is supposed to do,pushes open the door, and starts gulping beer immediately.

Loner: Since Thorgas embraced magic and studied it thoroughly, so he has been sort of avoided by his own people, who distrust it.

Poor Blocking: Thorgas doesn't have a shield, and even if he has one, he doesn't know how to use it. He can't parry incoming blows. (not a weakness as the average santharia cannot use a weapon at all)

Staff: Thorgas strongly believes that his staff helps him concentrate. Take it away from him, and he won't be able to concentrate in casting his spells; in other words, an easy target.  (Is this a belief, such as a personally invented myth, or is this true?)


History: Thorgas' parents knew ,from day they saw him start a fire on their rug without using anything, that he has some sort of a gift. A gift of magical talent.(Not allowed.  Gifted ones are restricted and since this is your first character you need to remove anytraces of the gifted one) As a boy, Thorgas was very much fascinated by what fire can do; how can it burn? why does it light? How does it help in the forging of weapons used by his people? This thoughts always played in his mind. His family, somewhat concerned about his unusual behavior, tried to pry him from this fascination. As expected of a dwarf, he stubbornly refused, and after much effort they gave up on it, although from time to time they talked to him about it. This carried on until he became a teenager.

When Thorgas grew from being a boy to a teenager, his father found him a job as a blacksmith's apprentice. Though Thorgas tried very hard to learn the trade, his thoughts always led him to thinking about fire. His master scolded him from time to time when he makes mistakes, melting weapons, forging an axe with no edge, burning scabbards for swords and such. "You call that a hammer?" The smith said as he points to the big puddle of molten metal on the floor. "Well, it was a hammer a while ago..." Thorgas said.
One day, after helping his master set the metalwork on a table for the purpose of selling them, he sat down to rest. He took a wooden handle of a shovel, thinking about the burned scabbard that his master threw away earlier. "Fire." He thought. "If only I could control fire, it would be great." He looked at the handle and imagined it to be a burning torch. All of a sudden, a flame appeared on the wood. Thorgas, surprised, accidentally threw the burning wood on the table. The fire suddenly blazed.(See above.  No gifted one) The blacksmith, alarmed, shouted for help and everyone rushed to the smithy bringing buckets of water and saving the blacksmith's wares.
"It's that pyromaniac's fault!" the smith angrily told Thorgas' family. "He did that on purpose! I won't be surprised if he turns out playing with the weird dwarven mages of our tribe! I don't want to see your beard in the entrance of my cave again!"
After the smith left, his father approached him and said," I supposed you're not cut out to be a blacksmith, son, but it can't be helped. Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax, but she said you didn't have any magical talent. We know you have a gift, a talent, (Gifted one)which can be honed to perfection if utilized properly, and you did burn that smith's furniture. You can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy, if you want to leave. Oh, before I forget, this is for you." He said, handing over a beautifully crafted iron staff, carved with runes and with a psyrpent-made crystal attached on top." It's staff traded to me by a passing merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore."

It was easy for him to leave the mines ,because even though he was still a part of the community, others usually avoided the "strange pyromaniac" and would have been glad to have him gone, and such made little friends. He joined a merchant caravan heading for Ximax. Thorgas, he was 15 years old at that time, arrived at the academy, and upon entering the Tower of the Guard, he saw many portraits, but was surprised to find a portrait of a powerful looking dwarven archmage. "That's Ungur Firehands, one of the few dwarves who mastered magic." Thorgas turned around and saw a very old human wizard whom he guessed as a professor at the academy. "If you will study hard here, you might have your portrait hanged there too." The old man said with a chuckle and walked away. Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."
Thorgas studied very hard at the academy, learning spells and writing them in his tome. He also spent some time practicing and improving his concentration.
Years passed, and finally he's reached level six, at the age of 40. He decided to go home for a while and then afterwards continue his studies at the academy.

Thorgas was travelling along a path to his home when he heard a bunch of squeals nearby. He approached the source, with staff in his hand, and found a rather large piglet lying on its side, beside it a broken crate and some fruit seeds scattered. The pig, after seeing Thorgas kneel down to take a look, jumped up and looked at him, and then looked at his pouch. Immediately, it approached the bag and ate Thorgas' meal out of it. Thorgas laughed, realizing that it wasn't hurt, just hungry. He decided to keep the pig as a familiar and called him Buri, and afterwards continued his journey home.

He got home just in time for supper, and was welcomed by his family, but the other dwarves, seeing the 'pyromaniac' in their mines again gave a sigh and went on with their chores, some prepared buckets of water, just in case. Thorgas stayed there until he became 90 years of age. Time came for his of Age of Choosing. As expected, with those dwarven 'wolves' prowling about and his reputation as a pyromaniac, he didn't find any mate, nor did the females want him 'accidentally' burning their furnitures. As a result, he has no mate, and therefore decided to focus only in his studies. He returned to Ximax, at the age of 100 with his pet pig Buri, now his companion, to continue studying fire magic. (He needs to leave so that he can travel.  You cannot Rp a character from inside Ximax.)


Weapons:
- Staff: staves usually used by mages because they believe it actually helps in their concentration, these things can also be used to hit an opponent in the face. Thorgas' staff, which he named Torosar, is made of metal, carved with runes, with a psyrpent-made crystal on top.  (Is the crystal made of quartz?  Quartz is a common reagent and therefore it would make sense if you had it adorn your staff.)

Belongings:
- Wood pipe
- Oil Lantern
- Tome of magic (affectionately named The Ironforge's Codex)
- Feather pen
- Bottles of ink
- Several pouches containing solid reagents
- Vials of liquid reagents
- Skin of ale
- Skin of water
- Bag of dried meat and fruits
- Deer hide pouch to put in everything

Spells (as written in The Ironforge's Codex ):
- (Level 1) Rise Flame
Set fire to your enemies, light a campfire, or roast a pig -- it's an all purpose spell!

- (Level 1) Searing
The smell of burned flesh is not pleasant, but gloating while your enemies burn is good!

- (level 2) Boiling Blood
The blood is like fire within my veins! Burning... Hot... Rage... DIE!

- (Level 2) Light
Always a welcoming sight at the end of a tunnel.

- (Level 3) Quilrosh's Fireball
As far as I'm concerned there is no other spell -- this one has it all.  (Note that this spell is only used by magi defensively as the chaotic energies emitted by the spell are believed to be evil and its use is believed to be reckless)

- (Level 4) Burning Regeneration
We -- every man, woman, and child, are evidence of the incredible power of regeneration. Cut us and we may bleed -- but we heal!

- (Level 6) Blazing Shield
Let them think you're weak, get them to surround you, and then you make them pay for it!

Familiars: He has a big pig named Buri, a pretty useless familiar but nevertheless a cute companion and a great friend.

I can see that many of my previous comments went unchanged and therefore, at the risk of being redundant, I will not comment again unless you provide your reasoning or change it, or if I am overuled by a mod.  Also just as a general fact, put you changes in a different color.

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 11:38:23 AM
Guys! Thorgas is here! Woo-hoo! * goes around and buys a beer, gives the beer to thorgas. goes around and sings.* sorry, i had to do that. Greeting Thorgas, and please, don't call me master Darkwoe. it is to formal. call me Xun. how are you? i see you have gotten a lot more posts on your character, so have i.:biggrin  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 10:48:23 AM
Haha! a very noisy elf! noisy, but fun. gimme that beer! :biggrin   *gulp*
Well I'll go take a look at your CD, just for the sake of reading it. I'm tired of going through my CD. :biggrin  
Ok, Xun. just respecting Santharians here. :)

Oh and Drasil, I edited my CD, based on your's and Lady Araerwen's comments.

And Lady Araerwen, I think I'm finished editing.

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/21/06 3:15


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 11:56:23 AM
actually, my CD says that i am very silent. but hey we aren't RPing, are we?



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 12:02:23 PM
Heya people!!! Guess what? I'm going to be approved soon!!! or at least I think so, if i get approved before you two I'll be aiting you in the Thirsty Herald, and come to help you to go there.

But now... A ROUND OF ALE FO ALL!!! I'll pay.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 12:04:23 PM
Thank you Orril, So your a pal, i guess? well anyways, if you are, that meens another elf!



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 12:10:23 PM
Great! Ale! You create our adventures, Master Miesefer! :biggrin
And no Xun, we are not RPing... for now. :nod
Buri: Oink.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 12:18:23 PM
hehehe, nah, you two have a VERY big imagination... and please, don't call me master, we're now friends right?:D  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 12:20:23 PM
Another ELF! yes! Orril, i know you are a elf, i read your CD. by the way. it is great.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 12:22:23 PM
Oink. I mean of course :broadgrin



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 12:22:23 PM
Of cource I'm an elf, most of the wind mages are elven... I think that's for the philosofical explanation about races... dunno where I saw it, but when i find it again, I'll pass you the link.:thumbup  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 12:23:23 PM
This evening, at 7:00, i rode my bike, around my place. i ran over a lizard. i felt guilty. i went back in my house and go online. i get cheered up, for my great friend, Thorgas, was on.:smile  I really did run over a lizard.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 12:25:23 PM
...
Don't worry, is one lizard, if you're going to feel guilty for every accident... then I don't like to see you killing mosquitoes... or ants or spiders or... Well, never go to a forest arround Mexico city because you'll end suiciding:rollin  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 12:26:23 PM
NOW you really made me cry! *sob**waah**sniff*
hmm... just kidding. how many lies does that make?
And poor lizard. :|  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 12:33:23 PM
i i don't care for insects. especially mosquitos. wanna see my arm. i hate 'em. and i don't kill spiders, for they kill pesky flies. i only feel sorry for reptiles and mammals. including birds.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 12:37:23 PM
oh, and by the way, i live in the forest. in california, too. which meens it is near Mexico, which meens similiar areas.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 12:41:23 PM
Whoa there. You turned my thread into a chat room! :b
How can you live in the forest?
And all the time I thought I was getting comments.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 12:45:23 PM
:rollin  birds aren't repptiles nor mammals, are birds...

Then, California does have similarities to Mexico, but isn't the same as here, we really have mosquitos, and BIG ones, we call the Zancudos, because they seem to be standing in those sticks some people use to walk on carnivals.

We only kill two kinds of spiders: Black widows and Red berry, cause both are dangerous for humans, and bees, isn't good to have them arround, and these days my garden is filled with flowers and bees... I fear bees and wasps, dunno why, but I hate them.

I kill any bug close to MY garden... you know, is hard to keep a garden without many bugs, but thanks to some techniques this year I don't have as many as I had the last year...

Then, if you hate bugs, the worst place is the hot house in my school at these days, you CAN'T walk because we have swarms of diferents bugs there (maybe we should open a bug zoo...:lol )



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 01:14:23 PM
Ok, first off, don't you insult California, Thorgas, second, i know all about that Orril. if you check on the map of california, i am near Sacremento. hehe, that is a town, but i live near it, in a forest. and yes we kill Black widows. though i have never heard of Red Berry.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 21, 2006, 01:20:23 PM
Well, Red Berry is literal traslation, so maybe in english is named in other way... Sorry Thorgas, I'll pay another two ale rounds for asking you forgive us.  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 01:24:23 PM
i hate my stupid computer.

First off, i have dial-up as you know, because i live in the forest, which meens my computer is super slow. my computer freezes. i have dealt with this. i just cancel out a few programs with task manager and viola! but then, my computer just turns off. i try to turn it back on but the moniter just keeps on saying check for signal. i then look in the back off my computer and saw a plug was unplugged. i replug it and try to turn on the computer. it wont turn on! after i tried a few times it finally turned on *scratches arm* stupid mosquito bites. thus, the computer crisis ends.

Oh and by the way. i found a new website. don't know if you'll like it, but here it is. www.kingsofchaos.com/  if you do like it, mail me, i am The_Elven_Warrior_Of_Adun. i know. weird name. by the way. i meen mail me on Kingsofchaos, just to make sure.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 21, 2006, 01:25:23 PM
heck all double that, *buys another beer and gives it to Thorgas* *whispers to Orril* do you think he will get drunk soon?:lol  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge (New Character)
Post by: Bard Judith on April 21, 2006, 02:38:23 PM
Dwarves are almost always Earth Mages, though the runner-up would be Fire, so it's not completely improbable.  However, there are a lot of little things that aren't consistent with Caelerethian Thergerim - as opposed to, say, the Dwarves of Mithril Hall from the Forgotten Realms universe... (sour face)

Not to :hammer  completely bash your character concept, Thorgas, but Santharian dwarves are NOT the stereotypical heavy-drinking, overweight, rather quarrelsome buffoons that R.A. Salvatore and other D&D-style writers find so amusing to portray.

Rather, they are conservative, devout, meticulous craftspeople who are completely loyal to family and clan (think of the Scottish Presbyters of whom George MacDonald so often wrote, or the old Dutch Calvinists).  As elves are not merely 'pointy-eared humans', so too, dwarves are not short alcoholics - they have their own very detailed and ancient culture, a strong faith, a clear worldview, and a unique system of reproduction.

Please read the relevant tribe/clan entries before deciding how best to begin editing Thorgas the character.   Though the Zirghurim (magic-users dwelling on the Ximaxian peninsula) are not yet up on the site, they can be found in the Races, Tribes and Clans Forum on the Dev Board - Zirghurim Dwarven Clan .  It's a long entry but will hopefully give you some details you can use for your CD.   I'd also strongly recommend reading through the specific Thergerim entries on the site: government, sexuality, diet, and so on are all available and make fascinating reading (if I must say so myself...)  One warning - the so-called Overview is completely out of date and will be a priority of mine to replace/revise once the Zirghurim are up...

I'll comment specifically, line-by-line, if you'd like, but please do some reading/research first and see if you can give Thorgas a more unique and authentic Caelerethian flavour!  Thanks!

Judith DwarvenMistress



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 21, 2006, 01:48:23 PM
Character Description:
Thorgas' the "the" should be "has a" magical talent and an affinity to fire that was discovered in "in" should be "at" an early age, so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had "had" should be "has" made him an outsider to his own people.

Personality:
Glutton: He could usually be found in a tavern drinking a mug or two and eating stews.

Loud: If you could have him as a friend, you could stay all day in a tavern listening to his stories and laughs. As Drasil mentioned: There should be some mention of how boisterous he is in telling his stories.

Kind: Inside this fat dwarf is a very warm heart that welcomes anybody.

Honest: Anybody will feel confident going to him and asking for directions because they know he will give them a honest and good opinion.

History: Thorgas' parents are very much fascinated, and at the same time worried, about their son's unusual behavior. As a boy, Thorgas was very much fascinated by what fire can do; how can it burn? why does it light? How does it help in the forging of weapons used by his people? This thoughts always played in his mind. His family, somewhat concerned about his unusual behavior, tried to pry him from this fascination. As expected of a dwarf, he stubbornly refused, and after much effort they gave up on it, although from time to time they talked to him about it. This carried on until he became a teenager.

When Thorgas grew from being a boy to a teenager, his father found him a job as a blacksmith's apprentice. Though Thorgas tried very hard to learn the trade, his thoughts always led him to thinking about fire. His master scolded him from time to time when he makes "makes" should be "would make" mistakes, melting weapons, forging an axe with no edge, burning scabbards for swords and such. "You call that a hammer?" The smith said as he points to the big puddle of molten metal on the floor. "Well, it was a hammer a while ago..." Thorgas said.
Space
One day, after helping his master set the metalwork on a table for the purpose of selling them, he sat down to rest. He took a wooden handle of a shovel, thinking about the burned scabbard that his master threw away earlier. "Fire." He thought. "If only I could control fire, it would be great." He looked at the handle and imagined it to be a burning torch. Without thinking, he held one close to the forge's flames. Suddenly, the wood caught on fire. Thorgas, surprised, accidentally threw the burning wood on the table. The fire suddenly blazed. The blacksmith, alarmed, shouted for help and everyone rushed to the smithy bringing buckets of water and saving the blacksmith's wares.
Space
"It's that pyromaniac's fault!" the smith angrily told Thorgas' family. "He did that on purpose! I won't be surprised if he turns out playing with the weird dwarven mages of our tribe! I don't want to see your beard in the entrance of my cave again!"
Space
After the smith left, his father approached him and said," I supposed you're not cut out to be a blacksmith, son, but it can't be helped. Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax, but she said you didn't have any magical talent. We know you strangely love fire, and I know you have a talent, which can be honed to perfection if utilized properly, and you did burn that smith's furniture. You can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy, if you want to leave. Oh, before I forget, this is for you." He said, handing over a beautifully crafted iron staff, carved with runes and with a psyrpent-made crystal attached on top." It's staff traded to me by a passing merchant in exchange for a good deal of silver ore. And I bought you a tome too."

It was easy for him to leave the mines ,because even though he was still a part of the community, others usually avoided the "strange pyromaniac" and would have been glad to have him gone, and such made little friends. He joined a merchant caravan heading for Ximax.
Space
Thorgas, he "he" should be deleted was 20 years old at that time, arrived at the academy, and upon entering the Tower of the Guard, he saw many portraits, but was surprised to find a portrait of a powerful looking dwarven archmage. "That's Ungur Firehands, one of the few dwarves who mastered magic." Thorgas turned around and saw a very old human wizard whom he guessed as a professor at the academy. "If you will study hard here, you might have your portrait hanged there too." The old man said with a chuckle and walked away.
Space
Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."
Space
Thorgas studied very hard at the academy, learning spells and transcribing the reagents in his tome. He also spent some time practicing and improving his concentration.
Space
Years passed, and finally he's reached level six, at the age of 60. Sixty should be around eighty to early ninties. IMHO He decided to go home for a while and then afterwards continue his studies at the academy.

Thorgas was travelling along a path to his home when he heard a bunch of squeals nearby. He approached the source, with staff in his hand, and found a rather large piglet lying on its side, beside it a broken crate and some fruit seeds scattered. The pig, after seeing Thorgas kneel down to take a look, jumped up and looked at him, and then looked at his pouch. Immediately, it approached the bag and ate Thorgas' meal out of it. Thorgas laughed, realizing that it wasn't hurt, just hungry. He decided to keep the pig as a familiar and called him Buri, and afterwards continued his journey home.

He got home just in time for supper, and was welcomed by his family, but the other dwarves, seeing the 'pyromaniac' in their mines again gave a sigh and went on with their chores, some prepared buckets of water, just in case. Thorgas stayed there until he became 90 years of age. His age should be altered to reflect an older age at the time of his graduation from Ximax.
Space
Time came for his of Age of Choosing. As expected, with those dwarven 'wolves' prowling about and his reputation as a pyromaniac, he didn't find any mate, nor did the females want him 'accidentally' burning their furnitures. As a result, he has no mate, and therefore decided to focus only in his studies.
Space
He decided that he would returned to Ximax, with his pet pig Buri, now his companion, to continue studying fire magic, but right now he will remain within the mines and perhaps dig a cave for himself in which to call home.

Integrate Lady Judiths comments and I shall return to go over this once more.

~Bows gracefully and departs~

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/21/06 5:56


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 03:07:23 PM
Lady Judith:
Hmm... does that mean I have to use the Zirghurim?.
Pardon, Lady Judith, but I did read the Mitharim dwarven tribe, and found a mage in the occupations list.
And I also understand that dwarves are not just hairy pigs whos only job is to eat and sleep, that's why I placed in his personality the traits 'honest' and 'kind'.

Lady Araerwen:
Thanks Lady Araerwen, I'll go fix the sentence structure.
I'll just wait for comments, and for the moment I'll just edit my CD. Thank you very much.

Xun:
And Xun, why in the world would I, or anybody else, insult California? not worth my time and couldn't care less about it. I'm just wondering how do you live in the forest. NO offense intended, of course.

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/22/06 2:46


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Bard Judith on April 21, 2006, 10:20:23 PM
No, and I wasn't clear on that, so thanks for asking: you don't 'have to' use the Zirghurim, it simply sounded as though that's the clan you were interested in.  Mages may be from any clan in Sarvonia - however, the Zirghurim contain a far larger percentage.  In the same way, Thorgas may be a Fire mage though Earth is far more common. (Dwarven Air users are rare and they simply cannot master anything but the most basic Water).

Certainly you may make your CD with whatever personal characterizations you choose, including gluttony, honesty, and the like.  It is just that for once I'd like to see a 'typical Santharian dwarf' instead of a 'typical D&D' one.  And if that seems to impinge upon your creativity, do pardon me, but I have written extensively upon the Thergerim culture, edited and commented both in the Dev Board and here, and rarely had my concepts respected in the RPG field - disheartening to say the least.

Thanks for reading through my extensive entries on the dwarves - the Mitharim are a good start.  Again, I shall be happy to go through your CD and comment in more detail if you so desire.

Judith, Friend of Dwarves




Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 09:54:23 PM
Pardon again, Lady Judith, but I assure you that all the information I have of Thorgas is purely from the Santharian description of dwarves, and in my personal opinion, a very well written piece of information, complete and very detailed. I have never played, read, nor watched the D&D, whatever it means. Also, This is my first time of playing a RPG, so I would not know of any D&D's or other similar items. I just wanted a bit of... 'uniqueness' for my dwarf, that is, fun to be with, as it reflects my own personality. :)  But if it will make you feel any better, I will edit Thorgas to match a perfect "Santharian dwarf".

And Yes, Milady, feel free to browse through my CD and make any corrections, If necessary.

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/21/06 14:30


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on April 21, 2006, 11:10:23 PM
I think she also means - any fantasy books/movies/ etc. take dwarves all in a similar light to that of D&D. They all see them in the same personality and ideals - and that is how people tend to picture them. And, people find it difficult to switch gears to our dwarves since they are on a completely different plane than the others.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 21, 2006, 10:50:23 PM
Then I'll edit my CD as to be the same as Lady Judith's Santharian dwarf.

Thank you, Lady Merenwen, for pointing it out. I guess I'll go work out those problems.
Buri: Oink.

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/22/06 2:53


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 22, 2006, 11:20:23 AM
Well, in LOTR, Dwarves are painted like a bit glutons and well, a very fearful force when angry, but of cource this isn't LOTR.

Also, if he likes to be alcoholic, I don't see a reason he won't, personaly I hate alcohol, but love some drinks like Sidra, that is very poor in alcohol but still have a bit that gives it and adictive flavour :drool  

Also, is a good weakness, but we have many alcoholics in santharia at the moment, can't remember how many people chosed that as weakness... See, that happens if you don't have TV to entertain masses...:lol  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 22, 2006, 07:28:23 PM
When Thorgas is talking.
When Buri is grunting, squealing, and the like.

So Orill:
I've only watched LOTR inthe movies, but I've never read the book, and I saw only two dwarves in the entire movie, well, that is, only two before I fell asleep.
And about being an alcoholic, I try to drink only in parties and special occasions, and every time my parents are not home, not everyday. :)

Lady Judith: Feel free to check my CD, and make corrections as necessary.

Lady Merenwen: The same as Lady Judith.

Oink... Grunt...
Be patient, Pig! Please comment on my CD, and I feel I'm ready to be titled. :nod :pet






Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on April 23, 2006, 12:17:23 AM
Quote:
Thorgas has a magical talent and an affinity to fire that was discovered at an early age, so he never worked in the mines nor dug tunnels as part of a dwarven life. He studied diligently to become the best mage he could, but sadly this had made him an outsider to his own people


I am not sure what was decided on this. I know we are very careful about "affinities". I would check through all the comments made but I don't have all day to comment today. If someone could just give a "ya/nay" on this for *me* - that would be awesome.

********
I don't know if it is just me, but I always feel when people *list* out attributes - they leave the description sparse and more to be desired. With your S/W this is fine but when it comes to your Appearance, clothing, and personality - so much more could be added and described than what you list. It arrises more questions about "What does this look like? What's its purpose? Why this way and not that?". There is always much more to a character than what you can put into a list and say "His eyes are *this* color" or "He is kind".

If you insist on these lists - add more detail to it. Yes, I realize this is being *VERY* nit-picky, but I see it very ... incomplete as you will, this way. So much more could be added to the appearance section that what you have meticulously listed.

Do you catch my drift?

****

That is really my only problem with the CD. If you somehow - add - to what you have listed (add some side notes to what you have listed in your appearance and add more than just what you have in personality.) Your personality shouldn't read like your S/W, as they should be kept separate all together but I feel as if they are blending because of the same format and the lack of a more thorough explanation with your personality. There is *ALWAYS* more to a person than a list of attributes.


That is my 2 sans on this CD. Other than that, nothing wrong and my approval will be given. (as long as Judith is happy)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 23, 2006, 02:37:23 AM
Well, about "affinities" I supose that would make him a Gifted one, if so, you need to change that because Gifted ones are very rare. If your affinity is more like the "the element likes me and I like the element" is more common.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 23, 2006, 11:19:23 AM
Our friend, Orill, Thorgas, Just got titled! we need to buy him a beer! ;)  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 23, 2006, 12:09:23 PM
Nah, I pay, TWO rounds now!!!



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 23, 2006, 12:39:23 PM
Ach! Oy, you two, you're turning my thread into a chatroom again!
Oink!
:nod :pet

I see. Then I'll just expand my appearance, clothing, and personality and I'll be on my merry way? great! thanks Lady Merenwen.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 23, 2006, 12:47:23 PM
Welcome Thorgas! Woo-hoo, I'm already drunk. sorry you missed the party! *Buys Thorgas a beer*



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 23, 2006, 01:37:23 PM
i noticed you changed your character a lot according to the mods. hope you will be on your merry way A.S.A.P (as soon as possible)

By the way, thorgas, in your spare time, can you check out my charcter again? i had to change it a lot because of the mods and admins. though i think i will get approved soon.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 23, 2006, 01:43:23 PM
Hmm... a party eh? Do that when we arrive in the Thirsty Herald. I heard they have great dwarven beer there, all brewed to perfection. :nod
Oink. :pet
And i've heard there are great food there, as well.
Oink..
And Lady Merenwen will give me a + soon! haha all those research paid off!
OINK!
Quiet, Pig! He's hungry again..
Oink... Squeal... Snort.

To all Mods:
Please comment on my CD. thanks.
Oink.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 01:05:23 AM
Sorry about the bit of a wait there Thorgas, I actually decided to do something on a weekend for a change.;)   I read it through and it looks nicely done to me. One more approval and you should be good to go.

Height and weight needs to be done with decimals. I know I asked you to change this long ago, yet that is how people want things done from now on. So if you would readd them I would be a might bit thankful.

As Lady Kalina was waiting for an opinion. Opinon: The magical talent reference should be removed. So that would be my final suggestion for you.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/23/06 17:08


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Mina on April 24, 2006, 02:06:23 AM
I don't think anyone's pointed these out yet.  

Quote:
Excellent Spell Resistance: Dwarves distrusts all kinds of magic and are usually unaffected and are highly resistant to fire, ice, mind and body spells cast upon them, and Thorgas is no exception.

I wouldn't call it spell resistance.  It's more like their bodies are difficult to damage, and that their minds are hard to alter, due to their nature.  Distrust of magic, I think, probably has little to do with it (ie. the mention of it in the entries is probably a relic from the older days of the site), and since your character is a mage, he probably does not distrust magic that much anyway.  

Quote:
Great Constitution: Dwarves are known to digest poison very well, and wounds inflicted upon them heal quickly.

I can't find this stated anywhere.  In any case, while being resistant to poison seems to make sense, quick healing doesn't.  Dawrves are more strongly aligned with the element of Earth than any other races, and are probably harder to injure, but probably also do not heal as easily.  It's probably best to check with Judith about this though.  

Quote:
Your mother and I talked about sending you to the Magical School of Ximax, but she said you didn't have any magical talent. We know you strangely love fire, and I know you have a talent, which can be honed to perfection if utilized properly, and you did burn that smith's furniture. You can start packing your things and tomorrow start travelling to the academy, if you want to leave.

This part doesn't really need to be changed, but I thought I'd suggest something.  The tribe, of course, has some magi, though not many, and if a dwarf wished to learn magic, he would probably go to one of them, instead of to Ximax.  It could be that the parents determined that the tribe's magi would not be able to teach your character well, since they are almost certainly all Earth magi, while your character has shown a strong preference for another element, and hence decided to send him to Ximax.  I think I should also point out that getting an education at Ximax is not cheap, so you might want to mention something about how your character got the money for it.  

Quote:
Thorgas proceeded to the tower of flame and talked to the archmage who is in charge of the tower. "He looked very old indeed." thought Thorgas. "and what a nice beard." he added. "Yours is not bad either," said the elder. Thorgas was surprised at how this man knew his thoughts. The Old man smiled, "how unusual it is for a dwarf to come here. But then again, anybody who is worthy may come here and learn. A room has been prepared for you; rest yourself and tomorrow class will be in session."

Several issues here.  Firstly, I don't think you could just walk into the school and get invited to lessons.  Possibly, the parents had sent a letter to the school or something, which arrived before your character did, allowing the school to make the preparations.  Also, I think it's probably unlikely to be able to speak to an Archmage directly---they are pretty busy people, after all.  Perhaps it could have been someone else instead?  Telepathy is also impossible, at least with Fire magic.  And, finally, you seem to imply that the Archmage is human.  While this is not impossible, it is far more likely that he is Volkek-oshra, given that they make up most of the population of Fire magi in Ximax.  It's probably best not to mention his race, so as to avoid contradicting any future entries we might write about him.  

Quote:
[a list of spells]

I'm not sure if you are aware of this, but a mage is likely to have learnt more spells than what is listed on the site.  Those just happen to be the ones that the developers have written about.  Hence, it's probably not a very good idea to give your character a list of spells.  However, if you wish, you could perhaps say that those spells you listed are just the spells he favours, and/or are better at, instead of being all he knows.  




Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 01:16:23 AM
Mina the quote following, I felt might be due to the wisdom of the archmage and could be accomplished simply from knowing dwarves a good bit.
Quote:
Telepathy is also impossible, at least with Fire magic. And, finally, you seem to imply that the Archmage is human.
The mage could just of watched the students eyes and it just appeared magical to the dwarf that the mage "seemed" to know his thoughts. An archmagi would know how to stroke the ego of his students. But this is just IMHO.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/23/06 17:24


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: so orril miesefer on April 24, 2006, 04:21:23 AM
Very well done, I don't see problem with the poison resistence, but magical resitence don't work.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 04:44:23 AM
So Orril, the resistence thing is in the dwarf entry and it shows their link to earth, stability. Basically a showing of earths resistence to change. Hence this is possible and is accurate with what is onsite.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge
Post by: Ta'lia of the Seven Jewels on April 24, 2006, 06:01:23 AM
Twen, I see, the first approval comes from you, so the magic has to be ok. for the second approval I want to have Judy and will ask her to do the last check on this CD. We do want to have Santharian dwarves after all :)  

***Astropic of the day***
"For me there is only the traveling on paths that have heart, on any path   that may have heart. There I travel, and the only worthwhile challenge is to traverse its full length. And there I travel looking, looking, breathlessly. ~Don Juan"



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 11:27:23 AM
Lady Aylwin:
Pardon, Lady Aylwin, but isn't 'distrust' and 'resistance' just the same?
And about the wound thing, I will change it. Thanks for pointing it out.
I edited various parts of my CD, according to your suggestion.
Lady Araerwen:
Ok, so I'll remove the magical talent. Thanks.

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/24/06 3:34


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 02:23:23 PM
Well Lady Talia, I must bow to your confidence in me but .... I must remove my approval as I overlooked something that MUST be in all mage CDs. You must have a magic section in your CD. There is one in Twen's CD if you need something to reference Thorgas, it is presently in the CD forum. Work with me quickly on this and I will place the + again before Judith comes.

Hint for uniqueness: Look Here as I could see a dwarf very interested in being proficient in concepts spawned from that spell. Might give you some ideas for your magic section.

Completely my mistake Thorgas, sorry.:crazy    

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/24/06 6:38


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 03:52:23 PM
Hmm... thats a bit of a downer... ah well back to the basics for me I suppose.
So all I need is a magic section in my CD? like Twen's magical skills? Och.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 03:19:23 PM
Basically it is an overview, Twen's is a bit technical as when I wrote her the first time ..... Necromancy had near nothing written on it. Is he a comabt mage and if so what are some things he likes to do in battle? Is he more like: A fire mage that enjoys the forge, for if he is then he would have spells he is great with (the spell I linked you to) and ideas of magic that would pertain to this. As I said: I am sorry Thorgas.:(  

I didn't see you were on, I have this thread marked for me to get ezmails for any posts here, now. So if you want to work at it I am on and will stay so till you wish.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/24/06 7:22


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 04:21:23 PM
Ah nothing to be sorry about, Lady Araerwen, humans make mistakes. :)  
Oh, And I'm finished with the editing, Milady.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 04:28:23 PM
Delete:Red   Add:Orange
This is the only problem I see ... as he is the same level as any graduate.
Quote:
His detemination and perseverance has paid off, as he quickly became one of the most potent spell casters dealing with fire. began to surpass his mentors teachings. Inspiring him to look elsewhere for more knowledge in all things arcane.

Something like that added in replacement would work wonders for me. Be back soon to read your edits.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 03:40:23 PM
Thorgas, this little mage has me thinking something. As I have rambled about off and on, them being influenced by earth. As earth represents stability, would a dwarven mage have less fizzles as this aspect of stability is expressed in the strength of the mind in a dwarf. A question I may need to ask the devvies .... ~goes to read corrections~

Quote:
After his graduation from Ximax, he continues to practice spell casting and concentration to improve himself in the arts of wizardry. His detemination and perseverance has paid off, as he quickly became one of the most potent spell casters dealing with fire, Your character hasn't yet learned sphere III spells, this happens at 7th level. Doubtful that he is one of the most potent, but stating as I did above shows that he is heading that way. As most people do not have the understanding to ever advance pass 6th level. This at least shows your character is still progressing.yet keeping the use of fire magic for the benefit of his friends, family, and community, not for destruction.This red section does not fit with the above paragraph of him using his magics in battle.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/24/06 7:46


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 03:47:23 PM
I was thinking about it during the time I was writing my CD, but I think I mentioned it in the S&W section.
I see. Then I'll remove the red section.


Again, thank you for pointing it out.
Oink.

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 4/24/06 7:49


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 03:53:23 PM
Quote:
yet keeping the use of fire magic for the benefit of his friends, family, and community, not for destruction. As it shows that he fights with his magics. "not for destruction." seems out of place. not for self-gain, only in defense of his friends, something that does not state that he is non-combative as you stated he is.


lol Not exactly what I expected you to do but umm ..... ok. I give you your + again. Once again my humble apologies Thorgas.:worship     Now only a visit from Masterbard Judith away my good dwarf.

P.S.: Dear Judith, I am a bit lacking in knowledge on the bards of Santharia. If you have time when you reply, would you be so kind as to tell me the titles of the bards. I know Masterbard is above Bard and there are certain rings gained by the skill of the bard. Just some nice information I would like, as people seem to create bards fairly often or inquire to do so. Before learning they are not the D&D, atypical magic wielding bards.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 4/24/06 8:30


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 05:20:23 PM
Nothing to worry about, Lady Araerwen. Even elves make mistakes. We are not perfect after all. :biggrin
My apologies for taking so much of your time.

Squeal.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 05:54:23 PM
Pardon, Lady Araerwen, but I'm done with the adjustments.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on April 24, 2006, 05:57:23 PM
Thorgas, I can only pray that everyone I work with on Santharia is as easy to get along with as you are. Pleasure working with ya, goodluck with the title and The Thirsty Herald.

(: :The first morning after acquiring her familiar, the mage awoke with fleabites and mange.: :)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 24, 2006, 06:05:23 PM
Thanks for the comment, Lady Araerwen, and don't push yourself too hard. :)  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on April 24, 2006, 11:12:23 PM
Well - I found nothing wrong and thank you for the edits ^.^ Pleasure working with you dear and I hope to run into your on the boards ^.^

Best of luck - Test your title here and you may be on your merry way. ^.^



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on April 25, 2006, 12:22:23 AM
congratz! can't wait to see you at the herald

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 25, 2006, 01:21:23 AM
Yay! Checked at last!
Oink! Snort!
Hmm.. one more question. How would I test my title?
Oink.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on April 25, 2006, 01:25:23 AM
LOL - you just did. >.>

We just want you to make a post here so we Admins know it works before we move your CD to the archives.  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 25, 2006, 01:28:23 AM
Wow! didn't know that!
hmm... better lay off the ale for a while.
:broadgrin
Grunt.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on April 25, 2006, 01:28:23 AM
congrats! you made it! i gues i'll have to wait a bit longer though. promise me, don't leave the thirsty herald until you see me. heck, what am i saying? once i am there Orril and i will have to drag you out!:lol  well, tell Orril i think i am almost done considering i have done everything my admins wanted me to do.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 25, 2006, 01:33:23 AM
Leave the Thirsty Herald?! Ach, I'll stay there until the ale runs out! And I'll wait for you too! :b
Oink! Oink!
Buri is exited too! He knows there is a lot of food in that tavern.
Squeal!



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Kalna Dal'isyrs on January 01, 1970, 09:00:00 AM
Here ya go Thorg



The Santharian Dream ~ Role Playing Basics
Character Creation Guide ~ Restrictions and Age Calculator



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on May 05, 2006, 10:14:23 AM
Ok thanks.
Oh, a question. Do I need to re-link my CD to the sig?

Behold... Admire... Fear... and Wonder. Witness the fire burning in me... Burning... To Avenge.

The Ironforge Pyromancer

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 5/5/06 2:22


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on May 06, 2006, 08:47:23 AM
Yes you need to relink your CD in your signature, plus I am unable to return this to the archives but I shall put up the + for you. At least way the Admins. will know you are ready.

(`._he pe e pon the rowd ike a ragon, ncient and u o eath_.)



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: so orril miesefer on May 06, 2006, 09:20:23 AM
... What happened?

What's my magic? My treasure. What's my God? My freedom. My law? the strength and the wind. My mother country the sky So Orril Mis'fer, Sky master.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on May 06, 2006, 09:24:23 AM
Quote:
... what happened?


Same question. I am quite perplexed about that. hehehe... I think he edited the CD, but i don't know what, i think just about his pet, Buri, which is getting annoying! Snort!... oink! SHUT UP!!!



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on May 06, 2006, 09:26:23 AM
Orril? or wait, Orill? crap i forgot how to spell your name, can you check my CD please? while you are on. sorry i didn't take our advice about Drasil.:(  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: so orril miesefer on May 06, 2006, 09:27:23 AM
Dont be so mean... he's luky, Shadow didn't piked it as dinner, nor Storm... If he survives to a night in strals will be miracle :devilish  Nah, Shadow won't eat a pig... not in my precense.

What's my magic? My treasure. What's my God? My freedom. My law? the strength and the wind. My mother country the sky So Orril Mis'fer, Sky master.



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on May 06, 2006, 08:32:23 AM
Sorry, I get annoyed with the constant messeages in thorgas' comments saying Snort! I fed you 30 minutes ago!! no offense, thorgas, it is kinda cool and original.

Edited by: Xun Darkwoe at: 5/6/06 0:34


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on May 06, 2006, 09:34:23 AM
what was with that?

New dancing bunnies!! :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  :pet  



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Twn Arerwn on May 06, 2006, 09:44:23 AM
I am going to state this one time and one time only. PEOPLES CDs ARE NOT CHAT ROOMS!!! Now someone has to scan for my post to know what the heck is going on here. If you do not have comments pertaining to the CD please do not post in them ..... EVER!

P.S.: Looking through this CD that is 7 pages long now. I have discovered that in order to find what was talked about for this character. That I must read near 4 pages of things that have ABSOLUTELY nothing to do with it.

(`._he pe e pon the rowd ike a ragon, ncient and u o eath_.)

Edited by: Twen  Araerwen  at: 5/6/06 2:26


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on May 06, 2006, 12:10:23 PM
Yay! Thanks twen!

P.S. I told you guys not to turn my thread into a chat room. Anyways I'm so sorry Lady Araerwen.


Oink.

And before I forget, guys, I updated Buri's appearance to contain a pair of sharp, yellowish tusks. So Orill, he could charge and butt your wolf, and Xun, try not to say the 'shut up' word so loud... he might not like it. :evil

Oink.

Behold... Admire... Fear... and Wonder. Witness the fire burning in me... Burning... To Avenge.

The Ironforge Pyromancer

Edited by: Thorgas Ironforge at: 5/6/06 4:14


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on May 06, 2006, 12:16:23 PM
I am so sorry, Thorgas, I will now buy you TWO, hear that, TWO mugs of ale after my character is done. check it out sometime, i completely changed my history and other thing, so it is a lot different, still an elf, still same tribe, age, different clothes, history, one less weapon, different title, well, you get the point. By the way... *Whispers to thorgas* (did you know that I think that Huma might be gone? he hasn't been on for a while...) *Bursts out crying* WHERE IS HUMA!!!!!! :drool  :drool  Sorry Twen. I will do no more unless to thorgas about his CD, which is very good:) .

Edited by: Xun Darkwoe at: 5/6/06 4:34


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: Yalari Maelea on May 07, 2006, 06:59:23 PM
Sorry dude. No more chatting in you CD.
Hey btw, I heard that...
*goes on chatting*

Let's all be friends!



Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge : Reply for Lady Judith & Lady Kal
Post by: so orril miesefer on May 08, 2006, 02:37:23 AM
To prevent turning threads in chat rooms I created this thread chat room here we can coment and say anithing without taking space.

What's my magic? My treasure. What's my God? My freedom. My law? the strength and the wind. My mother country the sky So Orril Mis'fer, Sky master.



Title: Re: The Thorgas Ironforge Tales: Part V Finished Editing
Post by: Mina on April 06, 2007, 06:39:34 PM
Moved back to CD forum as requested. 


Title: Re: The Thorgas Ironforge Tales: Part V Finished Editing
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 06, 2007, 07:32:16 PM
Thank you Mina. I have a question, though. I changed his age, so should I inform his brother(Gamaliel) about it? He and I RP together in the Herald, and I was thinking that he updates his age because he is Thorgas' older brother.

Oh, edits are done!  :D


Title: Re: The Thorgas Ironforge Tales: Part V Finished Editing
Post by: Simonne Miller on April 06, 2007, 08:55:15 PM
could you change the 'won't be expected' into 'can't be expected'? Makes more sense that way

Otherwise, I don't have a problem with it :)


Title: Re: The Thorgas Ironforge Tales: Part V Finished Editing
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 06, 2007, 09:25:28 PM
DOne.  :D


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on April 08, 2007, 03:56:53 AM
Is it ok if any of you move this CD to the archive again, I need to re-link this with my sig for easier future reference. Thank you.. anybody.


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Azhira Styralias on August 22, 2008, 11:08:04 AM
Ok, Thorgie CD has been yanked back up from the Archives per request!  ;)


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on August 22, 2008, 11:10:40 AM
Thanks Azzhy. :D

Edit: Finished. Fixed some sentences, added two minor strengths and a religion section (both colored).


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Twn Arerwn on August 23, 2008, 02:42:15 PM
Hiya Thorgie! Your new additions raise these concerns for me. The school of Ximax is predominantly human, although most likely based heavily in elven writings, whilst the fire element probably has some Orcish influence. Most (All) of their textbooks and teachings would be utterly Tharian and with the amount of time you have there, it is unlikely your character would lack in that regard. If anything he would excel in Tharian, for a dwarf anyhow.
~Sincerely~
Co f cr'tuuln:Twen Araerwen

Sidenote: As you have it written Buri is 100-110 years old. :lol:


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Thorgas Ironforge on August 26, 2008, 10:07:08 AM
Awch, never thought about that. :) I'll think of something.

Edit: Ok, I moved the paragraph about the piggy down so that it would be in a chronological order, I think. :P

Reworded Tharian section. :cool:


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Azhira Styralias on August 29, 2008, 01:32:45 AM
We all done here, Thorgie? Looks like it to me...nice revision!  :thumbup:

:nod: First Approval :nod:


Title: Re: Thorgas Ironforge, Mitharim Sorcerer
Post by: Twn Arerwn on August 29, 2008, 07:29:02 AM
~Second Approval ~ Archived~