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« on: May 18, 2007, 06:58:49 AM »

Name: Salena Smith

Gender: Female

Age: 18

Race: Human

Tribe: Centoraurian

Eye color: Blue

Hair color: Brown

Height: 1 ped 2 fores

Weight: 1 pygge 4 ods

Occupation: Blacksmith Apprentice

Title: Enthusiastic Swordswoman

Physical Appearance: Salena has soft, brown hair and light blue eyes. Her hair rolls down her back. Salena may wear her hair in pigtails or wear it down. She has this beauty to her that seems unreal. Her skin is nicely toned, except where it is marred by a scar on her left leg, from a sword fight.

Clothes: She has a long sleeveless dress.  She wears sandals in the summer and spring but in winter and autumn she wears leather boots, a dress made from thick cotton and a leather cape on top. A well crafted sword is carried upon the right side of her supple waistline. However, she may wear short-sleeved cotton or leather blouses which end at a short skirt just over the knee. Her clothing is designed for riders and is made to provide protection from the elements of nature when on horseback. The color of her dresses may be a tan color to a dark brown.

Personality: She is very out going and stands up for her family and beliefs. Salena speaks her mind freely and loves life and takes it to the fullest. She lives day by day like there's no tomorrow. Salena is strong willed, very independent, courageous and hard working. She cherishes freedom and is willing to suffer for it. Salena doesn't eat horse meat but eats other kinds of meat and fish. Salena is a high spirited person.

   She celebrates Chemonar, which is a spiritual celebration and is mainly for paying homage to the dead and preparing for the forthcoming winter. She also celebrates Elenear, which consists of a great feast, which happens in the spring. She celebrates these ceremonies in honor of her parents and culture.

   Many people get annoyed with Salena since she likes to talk alot about how much she misses her parents and such but even though she talks alot people know she has a warm heart and so they put up with it because they don't want to hurt her feelings. She is a strong woman but at times she cries over her parents deaths and her lovers disappearance but no matter what happens she'll keep taking it one day at a time. She wants to find the ones that killed her parents but thinks they may have passed away already but she know her lover would never leave her so she doesn't understand how he could have disappear. She feels like everyone she really cared about has left her though she knows she has her sister and grandfather but has to go on her way and grow up.

Strengths: ~ Sword fighting~ She was taught the use of a sword. She is proficient with a sword but not an expert.

~ Craft blades and small tools~ Helps her to fix her tools and blades if needed so.

~ Can read people fairly well~ She is not fooled very easily by people.

Weaknesses:~ Depression~ Makes her quite emotional and causes her to stop what shes doing for a few days.

~  Strangling disease~ Watery eyes affect her vision and make it hard for her to breathe but only happens in the summer.

~Talks too much~ Affects her from being on guard when needed.

History: Salena's parents were killed by a pair of wanted bandits when she was eight and she had to take care of her sister, Melondy, who was five when their parents died. Their grandfather raised them after their parents were killed. Salena and Melondy have been with their grandfather for 10 years. Growing up Salena had to help around the house and the shop and learned how to use a sword, which she learned from her grandfather.

Salena always took care of herself and her sister, Melondy, when she wasn't working at the shop or taking care of the house and practicing her sword skills. She would practice all day if she could. Her grandfather taught her how to use a sword because he was a weapon smith so there was lots of swords lying around plus her grandfather was a soldier when he was young. Salena became very interested, and asked if her grandfather would be so kindly as to teach her.

       Salena had fallen in love,with a boy named Yackria but he had disappeared so now she's out searching the land for her long lost love. She had known Yackria for 3 months and has loved him ever since she met him. The two lovers had been together everyday. Yackria had promised her that they would be together forever and no one or nothing could tear them apart. Salena doesn't know where to start looking but she shall find the one that holds her heart. Yackria has dark, almost black hair, and has very beady brown eyes. Yackria was born in the same tribe as Salena, Centoraurian. There was a rumor that Yackria had left her but did not want to tell her, unfortunately Salena hadn't heard this rumor yet.

    Once Salena found out that Yackria had dissapeared she got very depressed and didn't want to do anything but sit and cry. Her sister and grandfather tried to please her but nothing they did seemed to work. One day in the summer when Salena was younger and was helping in the shop she started to have a hard time breathing. Her grandfather thought she was ill at first but then realized she had the strangling disease. She'd never get it in the winter but in summer. Soon they found out she was allergic to hay, grass etc. Salena and her sister was not used to going outside with their parents, they kept her and her sister inside because they thought it was very dangerous outside.  Most of her tribe would own horses but since she came from a poor family and her grandfather was a weaponsmith there was no need for a horse.

           On her eighteenth birthday Salena went out to search for her long lost love. Now she doesn't have much money since she gave it to Melondy, to take care of their grandfather while Melondy stayed behind and Salena went off into the dangerous world by herself but with strong hopes and will power.

Weapons: Centoraurian Cavalry Sabre.

Belongings: ~ Centoraurian Cavalry Sabre~
 ~ wet stone~
~ tinderbox~
~ a few coins~
~ bag to carry it all~ 
~ a little bit of food~  and
~ a change of clothes~

Familiar: none

« Last Edit: July 11, 2007, 01:32:05 AM by Mina » Logged

I am and always will be me. I have my faults and mood swings so if you cant handle me at my worst then you dont deserve me at my best. :) Salena's CD
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« Reply #1 on: May 18, 2007, 07:51:06 AM »

Please look at the Erpheronian(which you spelled wrong by the way) nomenclature section for a name suitable to that particular tribe.
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« Reply #2 on: May 18, 2007, 08:18:44 AM »

I changed tribes.  After reading, I liked this one better.
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I am and always will be me. I have my faults and mood swings so if you cant handle me at my worst then you dont deserve me at my best. :) Salena's CD
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« Reply #3 on: May 23, 2007, 04:10:42 AM »

Hello and welcome to Santharia. I would suggest you try to explain your weapon a bit more, if you look at the menu on the left hand side of the screen and click on miscellaneous you will get a list come up and click on Weapons & Armour, there you will find a list of different weapons, includeing lots of  swords.
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And I quote, Francesca Bruni, from the movie Casanova."Give me a man who is man enough to give himself just to the woman who is worth him, if that woman were me I would love him alone, and forever".
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« Reply #4 on: May 23, 2007, 04:26:09 AM »

Thank you, i will do that right away.
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« Reply #5 on: May 23, 2007, 04:47:50 AM »

Sorry there does not seem to be much else for me to do round hear at the moment, so I may be making a few more little suggestions. I do say you should list your strengths and weaknesses, possibly bullet point them so it is easier to read, and do the same thing with your belongings. Also try to accentuate your history a lot more, for example what did she do in the time that she lived with her grandfather, for how long did she live with her grandfather, what happened to her sister, how old was she when she fell in love with this boy and how long did she know him for. They are just some things I can think of at the moment but there is quite a lot more you could do.
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And I quote, Francesca Bruni, from the movie Casanova."Give me a man who is man enough to give himself just to the woman who is worth him, if that woman were me I would love him alone, and forever".
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« Reply #6 on: May 23, 2007, 04:52:45 AM »

Thank you and if there is anything eles you could comment on please do. I need all the help i can get.
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« Reply #7 on: May 23, 2007, 04:59:50 AM »

This is just a little picky comment but I think you could use a bit more descriptive language, for example if something is nice you do not just have to say nice you could say majestic, graceful, radiant, vibrant and so on they are just some examples.
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« Reply #8 on: May 23, 2007, 05:10:53 AM »

ok I'll work on that. i just finished what you commented  on before lol. Thank you for your help.
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« Reply #9 on: May 23, 2007, 05:15:08 AM »

Sorry I am working you a bit too hard; I guess you could call this practise for when you get an Uri. lol
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« Reply #10 on: May 23, 2007, 07:58:06 AM »

Is it necessary to say the spiritual ceremonies she celebrates? If it is something her people celebrate then you would only want to write about the ones she doesn't participate in, and give reasons why...
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« Reply #11 on: May 23, 2007, 08:16:37 AM »

No see her people celebrate the carimonies but she does too. lol
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« Reply #12 on: May 23, 2007, 08:54:05 AM »

Please use the Spell Check.  There is a Spell checkign feature next to the post button.
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« Reply #13 on: May 24, 2007, 06:26:08 AM »

Thank you I will.
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« Reply #14 on: May 24, 2007, 08:15:25 AM »

Occupation:Blacksmith Apprentice   this is the correct spelling. I didn't see much wrong, but just made a quick glance.
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