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« Reply #30 on: August 08, 2007, 01:02:43 PM »

Your definitely not a pain. grin You and Thorgas have been such great help to me and thank you for spotting that mistake I cant believe I did that *slouches in dissapointment*
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« Reply #31 on: August 08, 2007, 05:05:59 PM »

Well done Rainier, well done. I've checked it and I think you're ready for an approval.

Wait patiently. Someone will be bound to look at this CD. :)
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« Reply #32 on: August 08, 2007, 05:14:13 PM »

Thank you Thorgas it means alot to hear that from you.
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« Reply #33 on: August 08, 2007, 05:40:09 PM »

Oops, I missed one small thing.

Arnel was killed and raped by a pack of Gob Ocs.

Why would they rape a woman who is not of their own kind?
Lastly, replace pack with group.

have a nice day.
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« Reply #34 on: August 08, 2007, 05:42:17 PM »

 Shocked ok thank you I will change that right now.
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« Reply #35 on: August 09, 2007, 03:04:46 AM »

I might be a bit rusty on this btu we'll see. Comments in Orange

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Name: Rainier
Gender: Male
Age: 131
Race: Elf
Tribe: Tiraelhon/Eophyrhim
Occupation: Ranger
Title: Shadow Ranger

Height: 1.9 peds
Weight: 1 pygge,3 Hebs, 1 Ods, 5 Mut
Hair color: White
Eye color: Deep Blue

Overview: Orphaned at birth Rainier knows nothing of his family except that which was told to him by his surrogate father, the ranger formally known as Illicted. He was told that his father was an Eophyrhim elf that his mother had met while in their travels together. He has been told of his mothers beauty and kindness for which he takes after.

Appearance: Being darker than most he takes after his Tiraelhon heritage and pretty much all aspects of his appearance but when it comes to his skin color he is a very dark brown from being in the sun all the time but if he isn't in the sun alot he becomes pale taking after his Eophyrhim heritage, when he does finally get back into the sun it takes him awhile to darken up again. He has long free flowing white hair and all of these aspects are tied together by his deep blue eyes.

                   Standing true at 1.9 peds and weighing 1 pygge, 3 Hebs, 1 Ods, and 5 Mut he is well built and very toned. His face is very slender giving him and elegant look. Taking after the Tiraelhon in himI don't think you need the in him but that is very nit picky and doesn't matter much. IF you keep you should put a comma after him. his ears are pointed on both the top and the bottom but the bottom is not that long. He has only his left ear pierced but it is pierced all the way around. On his chest he has a pair of antlers tattoed on as a tribute to his chosen diety Arvins. Upon his abdomen he has 4 diagonal scars. Even though he is 131 years old he looks that of a 23 year old human and has the knowledge and training of a 26 year old human.

                    If you were to ever see him he is always dressed in leather armor making it easy for him to move around since his chosen weapon is the Night Claw Blades which was given to him by Illicted who received them as payment for a job he had done. He also carries around a long bow and hidden away from sight 4 straight Zarathian Daggers. He is always seen with his Kor' och fey Mologh and on some occasions his pet Myrddin Falcon which he uses to search surrounding areas.

Personality: Rainier is a very quiet person but very friendly. He loves nature and everything that comes with it but is not afraid to fight for what he feels is right and/or just. He is a very trusting person and tries to befriend any and all that will talk to him which isn't very many due to the fact that he closely resembles a dark elf. When it comes to loyalty his first and foremost goes to Arvins after that it goes to his friends and he counts his horse and falcon as his friends for they are his main family since he is a ranger. When he does have other friends that wish to travel with him he takes their well being into his own hands believing it is his job to make sure that they are taken care of and safe even if they are well accomplished fighters. He believes that his friends lives are more important than his.

                             When it comes to his familiy which consist mainly of his familiars he treats them better than himself.  Whenever there is danger around he ask them if they wish to continue on and takes their reactions as their answer and if they say no he will put them into a safe place and go on ahead by himself so that he can make it a safe path for them.  No matter how much food there is he always makes sure that they get fead first and have as much as they want even if it is all of the food.  He tries his hardest to keep their apperance in pristine condition always wanting them to look beautiful, he does this by washing them at least once a week.
You might want to have an example of their reactions when they mean no and yes.
Strenghts and Weaknesses:

Strengths:
          Very talented with his Night Claw Blade (he was trained for 37 years almost every day by Illicted until he died)
          Good at tracking due to the fact that he is able to track just as good at night as in day thanks to his Eophyrhim heritage and he is able to spot small details that most miss and on occasion he uses his Myrddn Falcon to help him.Might rephrase this to say Good at tracking both day and night, thanks to his Eophyrhim heritage
          Excellent at understanding and befriending animals because he knows to treat them all with respect and since he does this he is respected by the animals.

Weaknesses:
          Can be to trusting since it is hard for him to make friends he try's hard to be accepted.
          Overly cautious of his friends safety so he puts himself in harms way often. Just a bit nit picky there.
          Not able to communicate well Why is he unable to communicate well?
         
         Doesn't need to be spaced this widly. He is afraid of large civilizations since he feels there is a high possibility that he might be killed for his dark elf appearance, due to this fear he can become very ill because of malnourishment, but when he does enter a city its at the dead of night so that he has a better chance of not being recognized.

History: Rainier's mother was of Tiraelhon descent and was out on a fishing and salt gathering expedition on the Theranian Sea with her family when they were caught in a storm and taken out to the Burning Sea. When she awoke she found herself on a merchant vessel headed towards the province of Enthronia, in Santharia.
               
                   Upon arriving in Enthronia she met a human ranger by the name of Illicted who offered to help her in any way that he could due to the fact that he was entranced by her beauty. She graciously accepted and was then taken along for all of Illicted's travels. During their travels Illicted was taken by the Paelelon forest home of the Eophyrhim Dark Elves. He was in as good a standing as you could be with the dark elves since he had once bought one of their hunting hounds. He had formed a rare but life lasting friendship with the Eophyrhim elf he bought the hound from. He was therefore invited by this friend to stay for the night but only the night since outsiders weren't welcomed by the Eophyrhim.

                 This is where Rainier's mother met his father. He was also like Illicted entranced by her beauty for he had never met an elf from Aeruillin in his life nor had anyone else of his race. It was on this one night that in a moment of passion they both set upon eachother. Not knowing of the pregnancy Illicted and Rainier's mother left the forest heading north for the Province of Nermeran. Days after entering Nermeran his mother gave birth to Rainier and died. Illicted knowing who the father was decided that it was best that he took care of Rainier instead of giving him to the Eophyrim thinking that they would not accept him since he was born to an outsider.

                 Rainier than grew up traveling all over of Santharia with Illicted learning the ways of the ranger. He was first and foremost taught how to use a long bow by Illicted. He was than taught from the age of 13 in the use of Illicted's Night Claw Blades in which he focused most of his attention rather than on the long bow in which he is sufficient with but not an expert.

                During his travels he was involved in many quarrels with rogues and bandits due to the fact that these were the jobs that him and Illicted would take on to earn their money. He has also survived many encounters with wild animals but one horrific account with a bear left him with 4 diagonal scars on his abdomen. After Illicted died while sleeping at the age of 87This is how old Illicted is right? Rainier had been told that when Illicted did die that he was to bury him only in his armor and that he was to take the Night Claw Blades as his own.

               Rainier then kept traveling and doing various jobs hunting down thieves and rogues for money. He than came upon the City of Jernais in the Vardynn Province where he met Arnel. Arnel was the daughter of a fairly wealthy merchant. She was at the age of 24 and Rainier was that of 100. She was not afraid of his appearance which instantly attracted him to her. He than Stayed in Jernais for around 25 years working with Arnels father more or so as a guard to protect his shop from thieves. Her father specialized in the selling of foreign creatures and weapons which brought him a steady and reasonably well income.

              Rainier seeing no need to spend his money that he was paid on anything other than food since he was permitted to stay with Arnel and her father saved his money. After turning 125 Rainier felt that he had overstayed his welcome. He than said his farewell but to his suprise Arnel came with him. Before he left he realized he needed to use a fair amount of his money for he had accumulated far to much to be taken with him on his travels so he decided to buy a Kor' och fey Mologh and a Myrddin Falcon. As a gift from Arnels father for protecting his shop all those years and added security for his daughter Rainier was given 4 straight Zarathian Daggers.

               After leaving Jernais, Rainier and Arnel headed north into Nermeran. Both of them being in love for some time now took this opportunity to get closer. On their journey together they both found out eachspace. and i think i missed another one farther up btu can't remember where.others deepest secrets. Rainier confessed to her that for all the years that she has known him he has never seemed like an emotional person because he felt that showing emotions made him seem week.  He than told her of all the pain that he felt since losing Illicted, how hadn't wanted to live anymore but was to afraid to take his own life. She than found out that on that eventful day they met she changed his life forever, she had given him another person to love. This story sounded all to familiar to her for she had been going through the same thing after losing her mother. All of this brought them even closer.  After hearing all of this Arnel felt that she was finally able to tell Rainier that she loved him, and know to much to her surprise he confessed his love for her.  From than on out they took every opportunity toOMIT to they had to show their love in one way or another. One day however they traveled to far in Nermeran and wound up in the Tandala Highlands. That night Rainier went out on a scouting expedition to find food and see where they were, while he was gone Arnel was attacked and killed by a group of Gob-ocs.  Rainier arrived to late to even injure one of them but soon enough to be given three of Arnell's earing's, and her mother's ring.  On her death bed she told him again that she loved him and that she wouldn't trade anything to take back her death and their adventures. 

Weapons: A pair of Night Claw Blades which he was trained with by Illicted and is his primary weapon and is the one he is most skilled at using, a Long bow which he was trained with but never mastered it so he is only moderately good with it, and his 4 Zarathian daggers in which he has no training but he keeps them as extra protection just in case he is ever captured because they are on the inside of his boots they are hidden.Change to they are hidden on the inside of his boots.

Familiars: A Kor' och fey Mologh named Night breeze due to the fact that it is all black except for a white blotch on its forehead, and a Myrddin Falcon named Stargaze, it was trained when he bought it and Night breeze from Arnels father.huh? and you should give a short discription of Stargaze.

Belongings: His leather armor, his 12 earing's 3 of which he got from Arnel, Arnel's mothers silver ring, his Night Claw Blade's, long bow, and 4 Zarathian daggers. Finally Night breeze his Kor' och fey Mologh and Stargaze his Myrddin Falcon.

NIce CD. To me it looks like youa re almost ready fro first approval.
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« Reply #36 on: August 09, 2007, 03:28:47 AM »

I've made the changes I thought you'd like to see i hope they are satisfactory.
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« Reply #37 on: August 09, 2007, 03:43:02 AM »

just one more thing that i didn't notice

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« Reply #38 on: August 09, 2007, 03:45:37 AM »

Thank you again Ganinon I cant believe i didnt notice some of those mistakes.
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« Reply #39 on: August 09, 2007, 03:49:35 AM »

no problem mistakes happen. :)
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« Reply #40 on: August 09, 2007, 10:46:06 PM »

Oops, I missed one small thing.

Arnel was killed and raped by a pack of Gob Ocs.

Why would they rape a woman who is not of their own kind?
Lastly, replace pack with group.


Aren't the Swampdwellers the result of Orcs raping hobbits?
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« Reply #41 on: August 10, 2007, 12:24:56 AM »

Yes. Mullogs are orc-hobbit crossbreeds.
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« Reply #42 on: August 10, 2007, 09:53:18 AM »

What of it? Is SHE a hobbit?
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« Reply #43 on: August 11, 2007, 01:30:43 PM »

Just bumping myself up from the second page so a mod might see me  grin.
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« Reply #44 on: August 13, 2007, 06:20:39 AM »

Its been a couple of days without any comments or criticisms just bumping myself up from the second page.
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