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Author Topic: Mallorix Volinkov/ Centoraurian/ Peasant  (Read 8450 times)
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Mallorix Volinkov
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« Reply #15 on: August 24, 2009, 10:39:07 AM »

Done!
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"I despise merchants. All of them are fat, rich men who yell about things and take your money."
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Kalína Dalá'isyrás
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« Reply #16 on: August 24, 2009, 11:17:03 AM »

Some of your codes are messed up, hun.
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« Reply #17 on: August 28, 2009, 09:41:28 AM »

Fixed!
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Deklitch Hardin
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« Reply #18 on: August 31, 2009, 07:25:57 AM »

I've got a few minor comments for you, Mallorix, none of which will stop me giving you a first approval.

Firstly in the start of your personality section ...
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Mallorix is quite simple. He knows very little other than farmwork, and as a result, he is often confused by other people. Despite that, he is clever, and he quickly gets into and out of trouble. When confused, he asks lots of questions, which may annoy people. He also is bored by people who talk too much and over-complicatte what they are trying to say.

Then at the end of your personality section ...

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He would like to learn to read more, as he had not learned much from his mother, who had anticipated him traveling due to his adventerous nature.
A line space in here please)
Strengths & Weaknesses:

Then in the history section ...

She taught her son what she could, but she had to do it in secret, as her husband did not approve of Mallorix "wasting" his time learning to read. Thus his knowledge of letters was poor. <-- Full stop/period needed here. Then please add in a linespace before the next section.

If you are updating Mallorix in the future at any time, would you mind greatly choosing a colour other than that one to do your updates in? It is a bit hard on the eyes. :D
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« Reply #19 on: September 04, 2009, 09:18:47 AM »

Fixed. And next time, I'll use a more visible color
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« Reply #20 on: September 08, 2009, 12:24:09 AM »

Forgive me for taking so long in getting to this. Everything looks fine, Mall. Go ahead and remove the colour so we can move you down to the archives again ^^
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« Reply #21 on: September 13, 2009, 10:15:00 PM »

To the archives we shall go!
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