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Lywáen Vála'miés
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« on: October 21, 2009, 05:53:27 AM »

Name: Lywáen Vála'miés

Nicknames: Lynn

Race: Elf

Gender: Female

Tribe: Aeolrhan

Age: 54

Knowledge and Skills: Like a 22 year old human.

Age by Appearance: 21

Hair Colour: Cyhalloi Snow but dyed a deep purple.

Eye Colour: Violet

Height: 1 Ped, 1 Fore, 3 Palmspans, 1 Nailsbreadth, 3 Grains.

Weight: 1 Pygge, 4 Ods, 3 Mut.

Occupation: Wind Mage level 3 / Minstrel

Title: Faebourne

Appearance
The youthful elf’s smile is a culmination of plump lips, radiant high cheekbones that glisten with a slight rose hue and a subtle visage that exudes tenderness. The five decades of Lywaen’s life have done naught to diminish the childlike grin that appears over her soft, pink lips. They are quite frequently perched just high enough to reveal a set of faultless pearly whites beyond. A face that demonstrates a lifetime of joy and happiness, tinged ever-so-tenderly with hints of regality. It is rare to see sorrow or sadness upon her porcelain like countenance, even in the solemn hours that she reflects upon her homeland and all those she left behind.

Lynn has always been vain and really very self engrossed, yet the Fae did bless the elfess with excellent curves, an energetic yet petite bosom and an endearing but tart voice. Once cyhalloi snow tresses are now dyed a deep hue of violet, in the proper light hints of glimmering white can still be garnered by the observant. Despite the fact that these lengthy locks have grown extensively, they are still not as long as Lynn desires. They cascade to a few palmspans beneath her buttocks when poised in an elaborate braid beginning between her petite shoulder blades. Lywaen’s bangs are neatly trimmed and come to respite a nailsbreadth above her eyes. Soothing flowing locks tumble down in front of each of her shapely ears, framing the mage's face.

Lynn’s shapely ears jut out directly from her thick tresses in a sorrowful poised nature. Their surfaces are unmarred from any form of trinkets, as is the way of her people. Each of them droops faintly and continues to plunge vaguely with every fleeting decade. Their texture is silk like and generally of a very pallid hue, a representation the mage works hard to maintain in array. The composure of these eloquently displayed appendages is slightly comical, although very befitting of the jovial being that possesses them. As many consider a truly pale Aeolrhan to be exceptionally attractive, Lywaen struggles persistently to remain pallid.

Almond-shaped, sparkling violet eyes are eloquently set into Lynn’s graceful features emanating a quality of infinite mirth. For those that speak to the elf maiden at length, soon find this gleeful hint to be truthful. A sympathetic twinkle glistens profoundly within them, even in the blithest of discussions. Long flowing eyelashes, frame these youthful works of innate art. It is easy to read the young elfess’s temperament merely by way of these portals; her mood is habitually visible within these bewildering windows. Each of these expressive orbs are poised proportionality to each side of a flawlessly aligned pudgy nose.

The elf is a smidgen undersized for her tribe; standing at slightly under one ped, one fore, three palmspans and two nailsbreadth. The verity that this has increased vaguely in recent years is scarcely noticeable. Lynn has an incredibly trim build; though reasonably buxom the elf is still a dash on the slender side. There are no hints of sinewy muscles rippling beneath her radiant pallid flesh, providing immense certification to the Aeolrhan’s forte in youth and the carefree upbringing she had amongst her tribe. A quality of happiness and opulence emits from the elf at all times, as she holds a merry grandiose demeanor, even under the most amiable of situations.

Clothing
A semi-formal gown brought with her from home is Lynn’s general attire when amongst civilized lands. The full-length spilk outfit is a glistening shade of violet, an evocative hue reminding one of a shadowed cerubell, reflecting the obscured radiance of twilight. The outfit is form fitting over her reasonably sized bust, ongoing in the same manner to the elf’s articulate waistline. Although the elfess wears a corset to guarantee suitable propriety her slight shape could effortlessly do without it. The garment flows over each petite shoulder and rides overtop of her bosom, snugly seated on her shoulders with the entire length highlighted in snowy white lace. The sleeves are nestled securely about her lithe arms till a palmspan beyond her nimble wrists. From mid bicep a second layer of ether-flake fabric flares out along the full length of her forearms in a wide cuff.

From the waistline down the gown is no longer tightly wrapped about her, instead it is slightly loose permitting Lywaen a free range of movement. About her curvaceous hips three golden strands of fabric cascade from her belly button in large arcs ending near the small of her back. This same golden fabric is woven across her bust line and arches upwards framing the open area of the top, ending about the stylized collar over the elf’s delicate neck. The centerpiece of this collar is a large crystal, icy blue in colour in respite near her adam’s apple. The hem is straight, just a few nailsbreadths above the ground and double stitched, with lace accents, for durability.

Alternately the elf wears an outfit common in design to her tribe. It consists of a very revealing skirt made of spilk with ether-flake trim along the hem. This article of clothing only reaches to about mid-thigh and has an extremely low waistband. It is a profoundly deep violet in colour with numerous fyrite accentuates along the waist and hemline. The top paired with this divulging skirt is also purple with pink highlights along the bottom of the shirt, even with her lowest rib. The sleeves end just below each shoulder and are also trimmed with fyrite hued lace. The blouse is tied in the rear by a woven thread of fyrite pink leather, gently cascading through nine hoops.

There are four accessories that the elf constantly wears, although many others show up at random with her ever shifting curiosity. First off is the tiara perched gingerly upon her brow. From each ear it flows over her flawless forehead into a subtle point mid-brow only a couple nailsbreadths below her hairline. Just above her shapely ears two curved metallic horns rise near two palmspans into sharpened rearward facing spikes. Along the rear of the circlet rests a veil of ether-flake fabric spanning from the crown of Lynn’s head to just below her neckline.

She also wears two bracelets made of dual twines of heavy cloth. One of the cloths is fyrite and the other sky blue, attached to each wrist they cascade down to near a palmspan beyond her delicate digits. In addition to these, at the base of her lengthy braid and at its summit are solitary light blue flowers, fashioned from a silk like cloth. On each of her nimble feet are violet boots made from silkstone, granting Lynn a sturdy set of boots under most any conditions. This footwear is laced up the front with fyrite leather straps rising to above her shins.  

Personality
Like all Aeolrhan, the elf is an adamant worshiper of the Fae, yet unlike most she earnestly believes she is a Fairnaé. She lives everyday with this belief and acts accordingly. Even her outfits accentuate this conviction as the mage attempts to present herself as one of these beings. Although her tribe is extremely gregarious, Lynn is even more-so inclined in this aspect. Lywaen has a particular fondness for male wood elves, frequently seeking those she meets to engage in sordid love affairs. These interludes can last but a single evening or possibly up to a year, completely dependent upon how swiftly the elfess finds another object or person of interest.

Habitually her temperament is glitzy and alluring; Lynn treats most everyone she meets as gone astray friends. At times, she takes liberties, spouting out of the blue for no apparent reason with an inundation of laughter over the smallest of things. Those that know her well, find that she is quite an excitable creature that thoroughly enjoys life and what it has to propose, taking the good with the bad amid a cheerful attitude, for the most part. She is habitually amused, finding the straightforward things in life to be objects of pleasure. Nothing seems to aggravate the elf, at least in ways she openly displays.

There is an uproar that seems to follow her, a bedlam that fills another’s soul when in her presence. Lynn’s voice is kindhearted and affectionate; even though she habitually speaks openly about everything she thinks. The mage also has an aura of innocence around her, making it easy for Lywaen to connect with others. This is an overriding strength for her disposition; she’s a shining and joyous person that generally brings optimism in her wake. Infrequently can she pass by another person in need and disregard them. Many just shake their heads when she lowers herself to a beggar and enters a lighthearted conversation. Yet the young elf knows, in her heart, that such tiny things can change people's lives for the better.

Anger is something she uncommonly experiences, thus Lywaen’s actions are not based on the boiling of her blood, unless there are explicit grounds for her to act so unreasonably. Still sudden outbursts do happen and come out of no where, she usually is quite rational for someone of her inclinations. The young sorceress wishes the best for everyone she meets and is one that most everyone takes pleasure in company with. She has few enemies, usually those she has inadvertently scorned. Swift to try and discover some good in anyone she encounters has caused the elf to be a bit careless and hasty with trust. Though this has backfired numerous times, she still has not learned from her blunders.

With a wandering nature and no place to call home, it is not infrequent to see the young mage associating with diverse groups of people. Usually she travels with them for short stints, if only to move on towards another town with company. Lynn’s glitzy personality creates a fantastic facade for stage work, allowing her to meld with most drifting entertainers. Prejudice and narrow-mindedness is something the elf does not believe in and finds no race to be better than another. She considers each to have explicit traits that make them exceptional. This particular personality quirk allows her to get along well amongst these assorted crowds.

All of the elf’s joviality is genuine and there are times when she just sits back enjoying the day for what it is. Musicians and entertainers of all sorts are exceedingly appealing for the young elf, causing her to go colossal distances out of the way just to study them. Yet even a simple ditty around an evening campfire, draws a twinkle from her expressive violet eyes. Though she would definitely join in on such revelry in the way of song or dance, it would unquestionably bring Lynn to imbibe copious amounts of wine. Loosening up the elf’s gregarious nature and bringing on fits of laughter. Elven wine is a favorite at these times; still any decent vintage would suit the mage's palette alongside the road.

Magic Section
Lynn was trained amongst her tribe in the ways of magic. Although this has caused the elf to learn at a slower rate, she does understand the aspects of Wind with more clarity than numerous other practitioners. With about four decades beyond the training needed to obtain her present level, to say she excels beyond a sI using mage from Ximax would be putting the elf’s skills lightly. Seldom would she be in danger of losing control of an incantation, while practicing her usual repertoire of spells. There are even a few that Lywaen surpasses most at and can cast more swiftly than one would expect.

The most unique of her manipulations and exhibited with adamant control is her ability to weaken Winds property of perception. By influencing the property of perception in an area, approximately a three ped radius, she can persuade onlookers into perceiving that ethereal wings are spread wide from her shoulder blades. Others mentally view her as having a glimmering shroud of dancing lights, flittering about her supple form. If she uses this tactic to directly influence a person’s Cár'áll, they might view the mage as an otherworldly being of divine descent. This happens to be the Aeolrhan’s apex of goals.

Another property of Wind that the mage has mastered is comprehension. By weakening this aspect of Wind, in an area, the elf can cause confusion momentarily in a large group of onlookers. Most often these objects of confusion manifest as objects of lust for those observing them. This permits Lynn to escape in the disorder, while leaving others bewildered at what transpired. If she were to target a specific individual and remain focused on them whilst fleeing, the elfess could cover a great distance in the near two minutes that the spell can be maintained. These illusions vary with each casting of this spell, as the Aeolrhan must endeavor to distract them with their hearts desire to persuade her targets with this magic.

Lywaen frequently uses the property of motion when she ventures into the realm of music. By strengthening and weakening this property on the strings of her harp, the musician fluctuate the resonance produced on the instrument. With these manipulations the tones can be hauntingly reverberant or seemingly flawless and crisp. When she strengthens this property over an area while singing, a whispering tenor can be heard for many ped, allowing the mage to conserve her voice. In contrast she can also weaken the property of motion so as to converse with a small cluster of people and go unheard from afar.

With the elf’s mental affliction of truly believing she is a Fairnaé, her magic revolves around keeping this illusion up. If a gregarious, magical and powerful persona can be expressed through Wind magic, odds are Lywaen has practiced it in some regards. If a gentle breeze within her locks is needed to catch the wandering eyes of would be suitors, the mage is not above such minor tricks. A surreal rustle of leaves floating about her form on a moonlit night to attract observes, not an endeavor above Lynn’s moral standing.

In recent times the mage has learned another peculiar usage for her magic. By strengthening the property of spiritual clarity in the Wind ounia within her own car’all, the flighty elf has learned this assists her in retaining a diverse amount of information. This clears the elf’s mind from all distractions, permitting her to retain more information as she is less diverted by the world around her. Although this does not make her a savant on any topic she reads or hears, it does allow her to preserve far more than she typically does. This has helped her to memorize complex songs on the harp and the words to accompany them. Yet she must still practice these things extensively and shortly after using this spell, to obtain expertise in their presentations.

Although the mage focuses in keeping up the illusion of being a fae, she is also quite capable of manipulating the aspects of comprehension and perception to cause her targets to misunderstand what transpires before their very eyes. This grants the elfess a vast amount of control over singular targets and small crowds, during her performances. Lynn is more inclined towards deception, seduction and other clever uses of her magic and rarely chooses violent rebuttals when other pathways present themselves. Lywaen recognizes and uses some spells that fall just beyond her level of learning but has no formal training to go beyond her present understanding.

Strengths
Wind Mage: With about five decades of tutelage in Wind Magic, the elf is on par with a level three mage. Her areas of study focused specifically in seduction, deception and motion, although she has some skill in the full array of Wind’s aspects. With Lynn’s desire to appear as a creature of the void, there are some peculiar influences on her overall usages of magic.

Musician: The elfess performs with her harp at every opportunity, usually at twilight around large groups of people. With only a couple decades of practice, she is far from truly accomplished in the instrument. Still it should be noted that Lynn has a seemingly natural propensity in its utilization. This is only enhanced more-so by the manipulation of her performances by magical means. Although the mage has no formal training in song, she does exhibit a delightful voice, untrained but still enchanting to all those who listen. The majority of Lywaen's exhibitions are very carefree with an extremely lighthearted tone.

Amiable: Lynn is an extremely friendly person that loves to entertain most everyone around her. With a childlike sense of humor and congenial smile it would be hard for anyone to deny that the elf’s demeanor is anything less than a ray of sunlight. Although she is still young, Lywaen has extensively traveled and it is likely for her to share a tale or attentively listen to others doing the same. Rarely in a person’s life would they encounter such a carefree and sociable creature.

Radiant: In the lands of Sarvonia the elf probably defies description for most men. A lithe curvaceous form, that radiates sophistication are only tips of an iceberg in communicating what many gather in Lynn’s company. Foreign transcendent features effortlessly tell viewers that she is unquestionably of alien splendor. With a distinctive alluring inflection to her voice, most men in Sarvonia find it exceptionally hard to not pause when addressed directly. Couple this with the mage’s use of magic to enhance her natural attributes and men commonly gawk merely in her passing.

Literacy: Although there was very little reading and writing required for her to learn magic as a child, these teachings were part of her overall education. With her ever shifting interests it isn’t surprising that the elf knows a modest amount about a wide array of topics and far less than she should on some. Lynn is a rather accomplished writer with a latent talent for the composition of music. Over each passing decade the Aeolrhan continues to grow in aptitude on both these subject matters.

Rindima-bia: Though the elf is only fair in this weapons usage, her magic does add some unique applications to this utensil. Lynn’s strength is miniscule and limits her skill and range when hunting with this device. Still when combined with her Wind Magic its range, accuracy and impact can be vastly enhanced. The elfess uses a sharpened steel version of the boomerang, utilizing her magic to ensure a safe catch with every throw.

Weaknesses
Fragile: Although it is common for most Aeolrhan to be physically weak, Lywaen is even more fragile than others. Her evident frailty is not solely manifested in the elf’s appearance, never in life has she carried more than the weight of her personal items. The most strenuous task the elfess has endeavored, on a daily basis, is the dying of garments when she was a child. An average human boy in his earliest teenage years could effortlessly overpower Lynn with slight hope for her to defy him. The mage could attempt to flee from any transgressors but she would not do so for long. A moderate jog, over a fair distance, would exhaust her completely, leaving aching muscles for many days.

Lethal Games: Lynn always strives to become closer to the High Fae and she has acquired a bizarre, if not deadly habit in this venture. The elf picked up the strange inclination of imbibing yellow scorpion venom mixed with fruit nectar and other sweet drinks. The affects of this practice vary with each ‘high’ the mage receives. These experiences range from hallucinations, euphoria and sometimes painful cramps. These fantastic trips can last upwards of eighteen hours, yet she knows following one with another could be lethal.

Although she does not have an addictive drive to continue this odd endeavor, she does partake in it quite frequently. Since arriving on the Sarvonian continent the elfess has taken to using black scorpion venom as a substitute. Habitually Lynn mixes it with wine to enhance the weaker species affects.

Wandering Mind: One might think this applies to some deep seeded desire to see new things but this is not entirely true. Like all of her tribe this wandering is rooted in her psyche and pertains to everything that passes under the elf’s scrutiny. These can include a beautiful flower, trinket or even things as simple as a person, garnering Lynn’s attention for moments, hours and possibly years. This can lead her down some perilous roads or even cause tension amongst the mage’s friends when she shirks given duties to observe the sunlight on a stream. If people remind Lywaen of given objectives she will work diligently towards their completion, but should she be left to her own choices odds are distractions will pull her off course.

Nymphomaniac Inclinations: The promiscuous nature of the elf’s tribe continues in everyday life for her within Sarvonia. As Lynn has come into adulthood, the age for seeking a lifelong partner, she insistently finds herself in amorous relationships with a variety of wood elf males. Married or single does not seem to matter for the elfess, as she flirts, follows and continually endeavors to get this style of gentlemen to love her. The downside to this wanton nature is that Lywaen consistently seems to move on within hours, days or weeks to find another would be admirer. Though this activity is beyond her mental control it has brought some hostility towards the mage and continues to do so.

History
Born in 1615 A.S. on the 6th day of Smól'evathón, Lynn was raised in typical Aeolrhan fashion. Her mother, Lyzra, was a fairly well to do dyer of clothing and hair. The elf’s father, Greyn, was a merchant of miniscule renown. In typical fashion, at the age of five she was being taught to read, write and do basic sums. The lessons were often done by a variety of the elders and with relative infrequency by her parents. She was also trained in the religion of the High Fae and garnered an extreme reverence for these fantastical beings. For the next five years life continued on with little to no general change in the daily regiment.

At the age of ten the elfess was introduced into two separate activities, one for the survival of her tribe and the other for the betterment of her family. First she was taught to track and capture the yellow scorpion, a main food source for the Aeolrhan. This actually gained the elf her first bit of jewelry, a bracelet made from the discarded stingers of these delicacies. Secondly she was trained by her mother in dying, which included clothing and was Lynn’s first time in colouring her own hair. This eccentric habit has stuck with Lywaen, with fanaticism, to this day.

By the age of fourteen some of the adults in the community started to tutor the elfess in the ways of Wind Magic. Like so many things in Lynn’s life the general religious and carefree nature of wind was an allure that she fell into fervently. Also in these years she was introduced to the phantasmal effects of scorpion venom, mostly a habit of trying to be part of the less than savory click found on the docks of Shan'Furionnis. Soon Lywaen began to hallucinate about being a true entity of the Fae, often using what little magic she knew to enhance this façade.

Near her twenty-fifth birthday the young maiden was introduced to her tribal, weekly festivities. These boarded on feasts of gluttony only overshadowed with amorous overtones, that the already gregarious elf fell headlong into. She had already grown into a rather shapely if not voluptuous young woman with an overly friendly nature, perfect for such ravenous occasions. In an extremely short amount of time, Lynn was designing clothes to be worn for these events and was imbibing scorpion venom mixed with wines while she attended. Lywaen's perception that she was indeed a Fae only became strengthened during these times, with the aid of magic others tended to agree.

In the year 1645 A.S. the elfess became infatuated with a sailor that arrived on the docks of Shan'Furionnis. The man was of the Ylfferhim tribe and became a matter of obsession for the young maiden. She spent many days wandering the port, engaging the sailor at every opportunity. Only a week on shore and the man’s ship made ready to return to his homeland. Like all Aeolrhan, Lynn didn’t let something minor, like an ocean voyage; dissuade her from the object of her fascination. She stowed away aboard the ship revealing herself only a full day into the vessel’s extensive voyage. Fully underway the captain refused the man’s pleas to return her home.

After many months at sea with infrequent stopovers in small ports for the crew to maintain the ship and gather supplies the crew arrived in the city of Strata. Once again the elf’s curiosity led her off into the vast marketplace within this bustling city. An object of particular interest caught the maiden’s eye and with exquisite guile she carried away the harp she had begun to obsess over. It’s lustrous surface kept Lynn enthralled as she wandered throughout the stalls and stores of this magnificent city. Never in her life had she ever observed a place of such grandeur nor one so filled with readily available objects of wonder.

It didn’t take long for the elfess to find yet another fixation that gathered her attention and led her even further from home. A wandering band of musicians caught her awareness, causing her to follow them out of the busy city and into the desert. With Lynn’s experience in such terrain she easily obtained a valued position in the traveling band. Eventually she acquired some lessons in the ways of the harp from Cysra, an elderly bard that taught Lywaen many of the basics regarding the instrument. For many months the mage continued the sojourn with her new found friends, ultimately they arrived in the city of Bardavos.

To say that this new city held sway over Lywaen would be a vast understatement. From the first moment she heard the echoes of song ringing from the halls the elfess was enthralled. It did not take the elf long to find a particular shop that held her interest beyond compare. The store dealt in the restoration of instruments and Lynn’s constant visits eventually garnered her odd jobs cleaning up about the place. Over the next three years she moved on to the care and upkeep of a variety of instruments, earning her a small salary. She also took the time to practice with the harp she had purchased, gradually leading to her fully restoring the aged item.

Like all things in an Aeolrhan’s life it was destined for change and for Lynn it once again came from a random traveler, a handsome wood elf to be precise. Gryn was a traveling minstrel that appeared in the shop one day, seeking a new mouthpiece for a flute. Although Lywaen took the job with a courtesy smile, her lustful eyes never left the man as he wandered about the shop inspecting other instruments. When the mage had finished the replacement of the worn part of the flute, which took her quite sometime, she returned it to its owner with a beaming grin. It didn’t take the elfess long to gather her things and set off after the wood elf.

Soon Lynn found herself following the minstrel out of the city and heading even more-so into the Central Sarvonian continent. Over the next few months she fell in a deeply romantic relationship with Gryn, frequently assisting as backup in various shows he would perform in the plethora of towns they visited. All of this wandering eventually brought the pair to the port city of Ciosa. Like all things for Lywaen this busy city soon drew her attention from the man she has seemingly loved. The coming and goings of the foreign ships on the docks was a matter of great interest for her. This area brought the elfess to purchase a boomerang that the merchant was kind enough to alter to fit the maiden’s size and strength.

Who knows how long her once love searched for her? Not that Lynn even reflects on him at this point, she simply set about surviving the only ways she knew how. From tavern to tavern the elf traveled, playing her harp and using Wind Magic to gain a small following. Generally she partook in the concoction of scorpion venom and wine to open her mind before important recitals. These surreal performances gained the minstrel a few invites to small manors and the surrounding areas. After near two decades Lywaen can be found about anywhere in Sarvonia plying her trades and spreading her image as a magical creature.

Weapons
Rindima-bia: A steel boomerang specifically designed for Lywaen, which is most commonly used for hunting food. It is razor sharp along its edges with a flowing design, of woven branches, engraved on its surface.  

Belongings
-   The gown, blouse and skirt listed in her clothing section.
-   A large leather satchel of dried black scorpions.
-   Another large leather satchel filled with dried vegetables.
-   A third large leather satchel filled with dried fruits.
-   A small wooden box with a fair amount of tooth cabbage.
-   A well maintained harp with two sets of new strings.
-   A waterskin filled with fresh drinking water.
-   A steel boomerang with a wetstone and a phial of oil.
-   Two small metallic tubes brimming with scorpion venom.
-   A pair of stonesilk boots, described in the appearance section.
-   A thin leather belt about her waist with near a dozen pouches, containing the mage’s reagents.
-   One large backpack to carry the majority of her personal items.
-   Three large vials of purple dye, meant for her clothing and hair.
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« Reply #1 on: October 30, 2009, 01:54:18 PM »

*Bump* Ready for comments.
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« Reply #2 on: October 30, 2009, 02:14:51 PM »

I'm right on top of it then, so here we go.
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« Reply #3 on: October 30, 2009, 02:49:23 PM »

I'll be commenting and making corrections on your grammar and general use of English in green. The things you should probably remove (for grammatical or punctual purposes) will be in red.

Name: Lywáen Vála'miés

Nicknames: Lynn

Race: Elf

Gender: Female

Tribe: Aeolrhan

Age: 54

Knowledge and Skills: Like a 22 year old human.

Age by Appearance: 21

Hair Colour: Cyhalloi Snow but dyed a deep purple.

Eye Colour: Violet

Height: 1 Ped, 1 Fore, 3 Palmspans, 1 Nailsbreadth, 3 Grains.

Weight: 1 Pygge, 4 Ods, 3 Mut.

Occupation: Wind Mage level 3 / Minstrel

Title: Faebourne Oh goody! We don't get to see very many magic prodigies on this site (at least, that's what I think it means)

Appearance
The youthful elf’s smile is a culmination of plump lips, radiant high cheekbones that glisten with a slight rose hue and a subtle visage that exudes tenderness. The five decades of Lywaen’s life have done naught to diminish the childlike grin that appears over her soft, pink lips. They are quite frequently perched just high enough to reveal a set of faultless pearly whites beyond.

T'would improve the quality of the read if you broke up these lengthy paragraphs, my friend.

Also, she has a face that demonstrates a lifetime of joy and happiness, tinged ever-so-tenderly with hints of regality. It is rare to see sorrow or sadness upon her porcelain like countenance, even in the solemn hours that she reflects upon her homeland and all those she left behind.

Lynn has always been vain and really very self engrossed, yet the Fae did bless the elfess with excellent curves, an energetic yet petite bosom and an endearing but tart voice. Just for clarification, are you detailing this as a reason for her being self absorbed, or contrasting. It would be nice if you were more clear here. Once cyhalloi snow tresses are now dyed a deep hue of violet, in the proper light hints of glimmering white can still be garnered by the observant. Despite the fact that these lengthy locks have grown extensively, they are still not as long as Lynn desires. They cascade to a few palmspans beneath her buttocks when poised in an elaborate braid beginning between her petite shoulder space blades. Lywaen’s bangs are neatly trimmed and come to respite a nailsbreadth above her eyes. Soothing flowing locks tumble down in front of each of her shapely ears, framing the mage's face.

Lynn’s shapely ears jut out directly from her thick tresses in a sorrowful poised nature. Their surfaces are unmarred from any form of trinkets, as is the way of her people. Each of them droops faintly and continues to plunge vaguely with every fleeting decade.

This would be a good a place as any to break it apart.

Their texture is silk like and generally of a very pallid hue, a representation the mage works hard to maintain in array. The composure of these eloquently displayed appendages is slightly comical, although very befitting of the jovial being that possesses them. As many consider a truly pale Aeolrhan to be exceptionally attractive, Lywaen struggles persistently to remain pallid. Jovial, depressed, and vain? I can see how they can appear at their own designated times, but it's a bit confusing for them to be simultaneous. But that's just a light observation, not really an issue.

Almond-shaped, sparkling violet eyes are eloquently set into Lynn’s graceful features, emanating a quality of infinite mirth. For those that speak to the elf maiden at length, soon find this gleeful hint to be truthful. A sympathetic twinkle glistens profoundly within them, even in the blithest of discussions. Long flowing eyelashes, frame these youthful works of innate art. It is easy to read the young elfess’s temperament merely by way of these portals; her mood is habitually visible within these bewildering windows. Each of these expressive orbs are poised proportionality to each side of a flawlessly aligned pudgy nose. Well said!

The elf is a smidgen undersized for her tribe; standing at slightly under one ped, one fore, three palmspans and two nailsbreadth. The verity that this has increased vaguely in recent years is scarcely noticeable. Lynn has an incredibly trim build; though reasonably buxom the elf is still a dash on the slender side.

Another good spot to make a divide.

There are no hints of sinewy muscles rippling beneath her radiant pallid flesh, providing immense certification to the Aeolrhan’s forte in youth and the carefree upbringing she had amongst her tribe. A quality of happiness and opulence emits from the elf at all times, as she holds a merry grandiose demeanor, even under the most amiable of situations.

Clothing
A semi-formal gown brought with her from home is Lynn’s general attire when amongst civilized lands. The full-length spilk outfit is a glistening shade of violet, an evocative hue reminding one of a shadowed cerubell, reflecting the obscured radiance of twilight. The outfit is form fitting over her reasonably sized bust, ongoing in the same manner to the elf’s articulate waistline. Although the elfess wears a corset to guarantee suitable propriety her slight shape could effortlessly do without it.

This would also be a good place to break it apart, seeing as you begin to describe the fit of her garments.

The garmet flows over each petite shoulder and rides overtop of her bosom, snugly seated on her shoulders with the entire length highlighted in snowy white lace. The sleeves are nestled securely about her lithe arms till a palmspan beyond her nimble wrists. From mid bicep a second layer of ether-flake fabric flares out along the full length of her forearms in a wide cuff.

From the waistline down the gown is no longer tightly wrapped about her, instead it is slightly loose permitting Lywaen a free range of movement. About her curvaceous hips three golden strands of fabric cascade from her belly button in large arcs ending near the small of her back. This same golden fabric is woven across her bust line and arches upwards framing the open area of the top, ending about the stylized collar over the elf’s delicate neck. The centerpiece of this collar is a large crystal, icy blue in colour in respite near her adam’s apple. The hem is straight, just a few nailsbreadths above the ground and double stitched, with lace accents, for durability.

Alternately the elf wears an outfit common in design to her tribe. It consists of a very revealing skirt made of spilk with ether-flake trim along the hem. This article of clothing only reaches to about mid-thigh and has an extremely low waistband. It is a profoundly deep violet in colour with numerous fyrite accentuations along the waist and hemline. The top paired with this divulging skirt is also purple with pink highlights along the bottom of the shirt, even with her lowest rib. The sleeves end just below each shoulder and are also trimmed with fyrite hued lace. The blouse is tied in the rear by a woven thread of fyrite pink leather, gently cascading through nine hoops. Hmmmmm... Do we have a bit of a hoochi mama here??? :D

There are four accessories that the elf constantly wears, although many others show up at random with her ever shifting curiosity. First off is the tiara perched gingerly upon her brow. From each ear it flows over her flawless forehead into a subtle point mid-brow only a couple nailsbreadths below her hairline. Just above her shapely ears two curved metallic horns rise near two palmspans into sharpened rearward facing spikes. Along the rear of the circlet rests a veil of ether-flake fabric spanning from the crown of Lynn’s head to just below her neckline.

She also wears two bracelets made of dual twines of heavy cloth. One of the cloths is fyrite and the other sky blue, attached to each wrist they cascade down to near a palmspan beyond her delicate digits. In addition to these, at the base of her lengthy braid and at its summit are solitary light blue flowers, fashioned from a silk like cloth. On each of her nimble feet are violet boots made from silkstone, granting Lynn a sturdy set of boots under most any conditions. This footwear is laced up the front with fyrite leather straps rising to above her shins.  

Personality
Like all Aeolrhan, the elf is an adamant worshiper of the Fae, yet unlike most she earnestly believes she is a Fairnaé. She lives everyday with this belief and acts accordingly. Even her outfits accentuate this conviction as the mage attempts to present herself as one of these beings. Although her tribe is extremely gregarious, Lynn is even more-so inclined in this aspect. Lywaen has a particular fondness for male wood elves, frequently seeking those she meets to engage in sordid love affairs. These interludes can last but a single evening or possibly up to a year, completely dependent upon how swiftly the elfess finds another object or person of interest. Score! I knew she was a hoochi mama. :P

Habitually her temperament is glitzy and alluring; Lynn treats most everyone she meets as gone astray friends. At times, she takes liberties, spouting out of the blue for no apparent reason with an inundation of laughter over the smallest of things. A little creepy. Those that know her well, find that she is quite an excitable creature that thoroughly enjoys life and what it has to propose, taking the good with the bad amid a cheerful attitude, for the most part. She is habitually amused, finding the straightforward things in life to be objects of pleasure. Nothing seems to aggravate the elf, at least in ways she openly displays.

There is an uproar that seems to follow her, a bedlam that fills another's soul when in her presence. Lynn’s voice is kindhearted and affectionate; even though she habitually speaks openly about everything she thinks. The mage also has an aura of innocence around her, making it easy for Lywaen to connect with others. This is an overriding strength for her disposition; she’s a shining and joyous person that generally brings optimism in her wake. Infrequently can she pass by another person in need and disregard them. Many just shake their heads when she lowers herself to a beggar and enters a lighthearted conversation. Yet the young elf knows, in her heart, that such tiny things can change people's lives for the better.

Anger is something she uncommonly experiences, thus Lywaen’s actions are not based on the boiling of her blood, unless there are explicit grounds for her to act so unreasonably. Still sudden outbursts do happen and come out of no where, she usually is quite rational for someone of her inclinations. The young sorceress wishes the best for everyone she meets and is one that most everyone takes pleasure in company with. She has few enemies, usually those she has inadvertently scorned. Swift to try and discover some good in anyone she encounters has caused the elf to be a bit careless and hasty with trust. Though this has backfired numerous times, she still has not learned from her blunders.

With a wandering nature and no place to call home, it is not infrequent to see the young mage associating with diverse groups of people. Usually she travels with them for short stints, if only to move on towards another town with company. Lynn’s glitzy personality creates a fantastic facade for stage work, allowing her to meld with most drifting entertainers. Prejudice and narrow-mindedness is something the elf does not believe in and finds no race to be better than another. She considers each to have explicit traits that make them exceptional. This particular personality quirk allows her to get along well amongst these assorted crowds.

All of the elf’s joviality is genuine and there are times when she just sits back enjoying the day for what it is. Musicians and entertainers of all sorts are exceedingly appealing for the young elf, causing her to go colossal distances out of the way just to study them. Yet even a simple ditty around an evening campfire, draws a twinkle from her expressive violet eyes. Though she would definitely join in on such revelry in the way of song or dance, it would unquestionably bring Lynn to imbibe copious amounts of wine. Loosening up the elf’s gregarious nature and bringing on fits of laughter. Elven wine is a favorite at these times; still any decent vintage would suit the mage's palette alongside the road.

You make here sound like a down right angel, but the personality is extensive, mostly consistent, well written, and altogether interesting. Thanks for the good read.

Magic Section
Lynn was trained amongst her tribe in the ways of magic. Although this has caused the elf to learn at a slower rate, she does understand the aspects of Wind with more clarity than numerous other practitioners. With about four decades beyond the training needed to obtain her present level, to say she excels in Sphere One applications would be putting the mage’s skills lightly. Seldom would she be in danger of a fizzle, while practicing her usual repertoire of spells. There are even a few that Lywaen surpasses most at and can cast more swiftly than one would expect.

The most unique of her manipulations and exhibited with adamant control, is her ability to strengthen Winds property of perception.  By influencing the property of perception in an area, approximately a three ped radius, she can persuade onlookers into perceiving that ethereal wings are spread wide from her shoulder space blades. Others mentally view her as having a glimmering shroud of dancing lights, flittering about in her supple form. If she uses this tactic to directly influence a person’s Cár'áll, so that they might view the mage as an otherworldly being of divine descent. This happens to be the Aeolrhan’s apex of goals.

Another property of Wind that the mage has mastered is comprehension. By weakening this aspect of Wind, in an area, the elf can cause confusion momentarily in a large group of onlookers. This permits Lynn to escape in the disorder, while leaving others bewildered at what transpired. If she were to target a specific individual and remain focused on them whilst fleeing, the elfess could cover a great distance in the near two minutes that the spell can be maintained. The semantics vary with each casting of this spell, as the Aeolrhan must endeavor to distract those she wishes to persuade with this magic.

Lywaen frequently uses the property of motion when she ventures into the realm of music. By strengthening and weakening this property on the strings of her harp, the musician fluctuates the resonance produced on the instrument. With these manipulations the tones can be hauntingly reverberant or seemingly flawless and crisp. When she strengthens this property over an area while singing, a whispering tenor can be heard for many ped, allowing the mage to conserve her voice. In contrast she can also weaken the property of motion so as to converse with a small cluster of people and go unheard from afar.

With the elf’s mental affliction of truly believing she is a Fairnaé, her magic revolves around keeping this illusion up. If a gregarious, magical and powerful persona can be expressed through Wind magic, odds are Lywaen has practiced it in some regards. If a gentle breeze within her locks is needed to catch the wandering eyes of a would be suitor, the mage is not above such minor tricks. A surreal rustle of leaves floating about her form on a moonlit night to attract observes, not an endeavor above Lynn’s moral standing.

In recent times the mage has learned another peculiar usage for her magic. By strengthening the property of comprehension in the Wind ounia of her own car’all, the flighty elf has learned this assists her in retaining a diverse amount of information. Although this does not make her a savant on any topic she reads or hears, it does allow her to preserve far more than she typically does. This has helped her to memorize complex songs on the harp and the words to accompany them. Yet she must still practice these things to obtain expertise in their presentations.

Although the mage focuses in keeping up the illusion of being a fae, she is also quite capable in more physical aspects of Wind. Spells such as Clap of Thunder, Static Bolt and Thievish Winds are not unknown to the elf, yet used far less than more subtle incantations. Lynn is more inclined towards deception, seduction and other clever uses of her magic and rarely chooses violent rebuttals when other pathways present themselves. Lywaen recognizes and uses some Sphere Two spells that fall within her level of learning but has no formal training to go beyond her present understanding.

Strengths
Wind Mage: With about five decades of tutelage in Wind Magic, the elf is on par with a level three mage. Her areas of study focused specifically in seduction, deception and motion, although she has some skill in the full array of Wind’s aspects. With Lynn’s desire to appear as a creature of the void, there are some peculiar influences on her overall usages of magic. Could you be so kind as to tell us what these peculiar influences are? Maybe not in the strengths section, but it certainly warrants explanation in her magic section.

Musician: The elfess performs with her harp at every opportunity, usually at twilight around large groups of people. With only a couple decades of practice, she is far from truly accomplished in the instrument. Still it should be noted that Lynn has a seemingly natural propensity in its utilization. This is only enhanced more-so by the manipulation of her performances by magical means. Although the mage has no formal training in song, she does exhibit a delightful voice, untrained but still enchanting to all those who listen. The majority of Lywaen's exhibitions are very carefree with an extremely lighthearted tone.

Amiable: Lynn is an extremely friendly person that loves to entertain most everyone around her. With a childlike sense of humor and congenial smile it would be hard for anyone to deny that the elf’s demeanor is anything less than a ray of sunlight. Although she is still young, Lywaen has extensively traveled and it is likely for her to share a tale or attentively listen to others doing the same. Rarely in a person’s life would they encounter such a carefree and sociable creature.

Radiant: In the lands of Sarvonia the elf probably defies description for most men. A lithe curvaceous form, that radiates sophistication are only tips of an iceberg in communicating what many gather in Lynn’s company. Foreign transcendent features effortlessly tell viewers that she is unquestionably of alien splendor. With a distinctive alluring inflection to her voice, most men in Sarvonia find it exceptionally hard to not pause when addressed directly. Couple this with the mage’s use of magic to enhance her natural attributes and men commonly gawk merely in her passing.

Literacy: Although there was very little reading and writing required for her to learn magic as a child, these teachings were part of her overall education. With her ever shifting interests it isn’t surprising that the elf knows a modest amount about a wide array of topics and far less than she should on some. Lynn is a rather accomplished writer with a latent talent for the composition of music. Over each passing decade the Aeolrhan continues to grow in aptitude on both these subject matters.

Rindima-bia: Though the elf is only fair in this weapons usage, her magic does add some unique applications to this utensil. Lynn’s strength is miniscule and limits her skill and range when hunting with this device. Still when combined with her Wind Magic its range, accuracy and impact can be vastly enhanced. The elfess uses a sharpened steel version of the boomerang, utilizing her magic to ensure a safe catch with every throw.

Weaknesses
Fragile: Although it is common for most Aeolrhan to be physically weak, Lywaen is even more fragile than others. Her evident frailty is not solely manifested in the elf’s appearance, never in life has she carried more than the weight of her personal items. The most strenuous task the elfess has endeavored, on a daily basis, is the dying of garments when she was a child. An average human boy in his earliest teenage years could effortlessly overpower Lynn with slight hope for her to defy him. The mage could attempt to flee from any transgressors but she would not do so for long. A moderate jog, over a fair distance, would exhaust her completely, leaving aching muscles for many days.

Lethal Games: Lynn always strives to become closer to the High Fae and she has acquired a bizarre, if not deadly habit in this venture. The elf picked up the strange inclination of imbibing yellow scorpion venom mixed with fruit nectar and other sweet drinks. The affects of this practice vary with each ‘high’ the mage receives. These experiences range from hallucinations, euphoria and sometimes painful cramps. These fantastic trips can last upwards of eighteen hours, yet she knows following one with another could be lethal.

Although she does not have an addictive drive to continue this odd endeavor, she does partake in it quite frequently. Since arriving on the Sarvonian continent the elfess has taken to using black scorpion venom as a substitute. Habitually Lynn mixs it with wine to enhance the weaker species affects.

Wandering Mind: One might think this applies to some deep seeded desire to see new things but this is not entirely true. Like all of her tribe this wandering is rooted in her psyche and pertains to everything that passes under the elf’s scrutiny. These can include a beautiful flower, trinket or even things as simple as a person, garnering Lynn’s attention for moments, hours and possibly years. This can lead her down some perilous roads or even cause tension amongst the mage’s friends when she shirks given duties to observe the sunlight on a stream. If people remind Lywaen of given objectives she will work diligently towards their completion, but should she be left to her own choices odds are distractions will pull her off course.

Nymphomaniac Inclinations: The promiscuous nature of the elf’s tribe continues in everyday life for her within Sarvonia. As Lynn has come into adulthood, the age for seeking a lifelong partner, she insistently finds herself in amorous relationships with a variety of wood elf males. Married or single does not seem to matter for the elfess, as she flirts, follows and continually endeavors to get this style of gentlemen to love her. The downside to this wanton nature is that Lywaen consistently seems to move on within hours, days or weeks to find another would be admirer. Though this activity is beyond her mental control it has brought some hostility towards the mage and continues to do so.

She seems a little too powerful to me (but I'm not the great expert of S&W's here, so we'll have to see. It just appears a little overpowered as a result of being a triple threat: a great illusionist, fairly good musician (with added magical effects), and fairly apt user of her Rindima-bia (with the assistance of magic). Along with that, she is very charismatic (also enigmatic), a well educated reader, and quite the seductress. Doesn't that sound a bit over the top?

History
Born in 1615 A.S. on the 6th day of Smól'evathón, Lynn was raised in typical Aeolrhan fashion. Her mother, Lyzra, was a fairly well to do dyer of clothing and hair. The elf’s father, Greyn, was a merchant of miniscule renown. In typical fashion, at the age of five she was being taught to read, write and do basic sums. The lessons were often done by a variety of the elders and with relative infrequency by her parents. She was also trained in the religion of the High Fae and garnered an extreme reverence for these fantastical beings. For the next five years life continued on with little to no general change in the daily regiment.

At the age of ten the elfess was introduced into two separate activities, one for the survival of her tribe and the other for the betterment of her family. First she was taught to track and capture the yellow scorpion, a main food source for the Aeolrhan. This actually gained the elf her first bit of jewelry, a bracelet made from the discarded stingers of these delicacies. Secondly she was trained by her mother in dying, which included clothing and was Lynn’s first time in colouring her own hair. This eccentric habit has stuck with Lywaen, with fanaticism, to this day.

By the age of fourteen some of the adults in the community started to tutor the elfess in the ways of Wind Magic. Like so many things in Lynn’s life the general religious and carefree nature of wind was an allure that she fell into fervently. Also in these years she was introduced to the phantasmal effects of scorpion venom, mostly a habit of trying to be part of the less than savory click found on the docks of Shan'Furionnis. Soon Lywaen began to hallucinate about being a true entity of the Fae, often using what little magic she knew to enhance this façade.

Near her twenty-fifth birthday the young maiden was introduced to her tribal, weekly festivities. These boarded on feasts of gluttony only overshadowed with amorous overtones, that the already gregarious elf fell headlong into. She had already grown into a rather shapely if not voluptuous young woman with an overly friendly nature, perfect for such ravenous occasions. In an extremely short amount of time, Lynn was designing clothes to be worn for these events and was imbibing scorpion venom mixed with wines while she attended. Lywaen's perception that she was indeed a Fae only became strengthened during these times, with the aid of magic others tended to agree.

In the year 1645 A.S. the elfess became infatuated with a sailor that arrived on the docks of Shan'Furionnis. The man was of the Ylfferhim tribe and became a matter of obsession for the young maiden. She spent many days wandering the port, engaging the sailor at every opportunity. Only a week on shore and the man’s ship made ready to return to his homeland. Like all Aeolrhan, Lynn didn’t let something minor, like an ocean voyage; dissuade her from the object of her fascination. She stowed away aboard the ship revealing herself only a full day into the vessel’s extensive voyage. Fully underway the captain refused the man’s pleas to return her home.

After many months at sea with infrequent stopovers in small ports for the crew to maintain the ship and gather supplies the crew arrived in the city of Strata. Once again the elf’s curiosity led her off into the vast marketplace within this bustling city. An object of particular interest caught the maiden’s eye and with exquisite guile she carried away the harp she had begun to obsess over. It’s lustrous surface kept Lynn enthralled as she wandered throughout the stalls and stores of this magnificent city. Never in her life had she ever observed a place of such grandeur nor one so filled with readily available objects of wonder.

It didn’t take long for the elfess to find yet another fixation that gathered her attention and led her even further from home. A wandering band of musicians caught her awareness, causing her to follow them out of the busy city and into the desert. With Lynn’s experience in such terrain she easily obtained a valued position in the traveling band. Eventually she acquired some lessons in the ways of the harp from Cysra, an elderly bard that taught Lywaen many of the basics regarding the instrument. For many months the mage continued the sojourn with her new found friends, ultimately they arrived in the city of Bardavos.

To say that this new city held sway over Lywaen would be a vast understatement. From the first moment she heard the echoes of song ringing from the halls the elfess was enthralled. It did not take the elf long to find a particular shop that held her interest beyond compare. The store dealt in the restoration of instruments and Lynn’s constant visits eventually garnered her odd jobs cleaning up about the place. Over the next three years she moved on to the care and upkeep of a variety of instruments, earning her a small salary. She also took the time to practice with the harp she had purchased, gradually leading to her fully restoring the aged item.

Like all things in an Aeolrhan’s life it was destined for change and for Lynn it once again came from a random traveler, a handsome wood elf to be precise. Gryn was a traveling minstrel that appeared in the shop one day, seeking a new mouthpiece for a flute. Although Lywaen took the job with a courtesy smile, her lustful eyes never left the man as he wandered about the shop inspecting other instruments. When the mage had finished the replacement of the worn part of the flute, which took her quite sometime, she returned it to its owner with a beaming grin. It didn’t take the elfess long to gather her things and set off after the wood elf.

Soon Lynn found herself following the minstrel out of the city and heading even more-so into the Central Sarvonian continent. Over the next few months she fell in a deeply romantic relationship with Gryn, frequently assisting as backup in various shows he would perform in the plethora of towns they visited. All of this wandering eventually brought the pair to the port city of Ciosa. Like all things for Lywaen this busy city soon drew her attention from the man she has seemingly loved. The coming and goings of the foreign ships on the docks was a matter of great interest for her. This area brought the elfess to purchase a boomerang that the merchant was kind enough to alter to fit the maiden’s size and strength.

Who knows how long her once love searched for her? Not that Lynn even reflects on him at this point, she simply set about surviving the only ways she knew how. From tavern to tavern the elf traveled, playing her harp and using Wind Magic to gain a small following. Generally she partook in the concoction of scorpion venom and wine to open her mind before important recitals. These surreal performances gained the minstrel a few invites to small manors and the surrounding areas. After near two decades Lywaen can be found about anywhere in Sarvonia plying her trades and spreading her image as a magical creature.

Weapons
Rindima-bia: A steel boomerang specifically designed for Lywaen, which is most commonly used for hunting food. It is razor sharp along its edges with a flowing design, of woven branches, engraved on its surface.  

Belongings
-   The gown, blouse and skirt listed in her clothing section.
-   A large leather satchel of dried black scorpions.
-   Another large leather satchel filled with dried vegetables.
-   A third large leather satchel filled with dried fruits.
-   A small wooden box with a fair amount of tooth cabbage.
-   A well maintained harp with two sets of new strings.
-   A waterskin filled with fresh drinking water.
-   A steel boomerang with a wetstone and a phial of oil.
-   Two small metallic tubes brimming with scorpion venom.
-   A pair of stonesilk boots, described in the appearance section.
-   A thin leather belt about her waist with near a dozen pouches, containing the mage’s reagents.
-   One large backpack to carry the majority of her personal items.
-   Three large vials of purple dye, meant for her clothing and hair.

The history and belongings sections are solid, so I have no qualms to bring up. Also, I'm confident that no one else will have any quibbles with them either, so that's that.


I enjoyed reading CD, so thanks for that. Your vocabulary is aggressive and expressive (woot! I rhymed) and she is about as consistent a character as you could hope for. I imagine once you take into account whatever comments of mine you deem to, you'll be ready for a speedy approval.

Have fun with your enigmatic new character, my friend. And I ( rather selfishly) hope you can join us at the Banshee's Crest soon :D You probably write better prose than I could play any of Rachmanninoff, so I give you some big kudos.
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« Reply #4 on: October 30, 2009, 03:38:23 PM »

Thanks for the extensive comments Alex!

Here are a few of my responses and reasons to your comments.
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Could you be so kind as to tell us what these peculiar influences are?
This is answered throughout her magic section. The insistent desire to appear as a Fae being has caused her to focus mainly in a select few areas.
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Lynn has always been vain and really very self engrossed, yet the Fae did bless the elfess with excellent curves, an energetic yet petite bosom and an endearing but tart voice. Just for clarification, are you detailing this as a reason for her being self absorbed, or contrasting. It would be nice if you were more clear here.
To add clarity to this would garner a quoting of the mental stimuli, which should be written in the personality section. no? I think her personality section contains some indication of her self-absorption. If it isn't clear in that section, please let me know.

Your suggestions for paragraph separations don't seem to meld with me. I do not see why they are needed in the areas you suggest. Maybe it is just my mental imagery of the character that blurs your reasoning. If you are stating them as a requirement then I shall gladly do so.

The seemingly randomness of her personality quirks was my endeavor to express the odd behavior of her tribe.

If others feel the Strengths and Weaknesses to be unbalanced, I have another weakness in reserve. So if more is wanted from others I shall be happy to oblige.

All other grammatical errors were addressed, although not coloured due to them being but single words.
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Thanks for the extensive comments Alex!

Here are a few of my responses and reasons to your comments.
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Could you be so kind as to tell us what these peculiar influences are?
This is answered throughout her magic section. The insistent desire to appear as a Fae being has caused her to focus mainly in a select few areas.
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Lynn has always been vain and really very self engrossed, yet the Fae did bless the elfess with excellent curves, an energetic yet petite bosom and an endearing but tart voice. Just for clarification, are you detailing this as a reason for her being self absorbed, or contrasting. It would be nice if you were more clear here.
To add clarity to this would garner a quoting of the mental stimuli, which should be written in the personality section. no? I think her personality section contains some indication of her self-absorption. If it isn't clear in that section, please let me know.

Your suggestions for paragraph separations don't seem to meld with me. I do not see why they are needed in the areas you suggest. Maybe it is just my mental imagery of the character that blurs your reasoning. If you are stating them as a requirement then I shall gladly do so.

The seemingly randomness of her personality quirks was my endeavor to express the odd behavior of her tribe.

If others feel the Strengths and Weaknesses to be unbalanced, I have another weakness in reserve. So if more is wanted from others I shall be happy to oblige.

All other grammatical errors were addressed, although not coloured due to them being but single words.

As for the influences on her magic, thank you for specifying them to me. And as for the other comment, it was more of a mild observation. It's perfectly fine to have an eclectic character, as people are often just like that.

As for the paragraph breaks, that was more of a suggestion and not a requirement. The breaks weren't at the best places, I must say. I guess the paragraphs weren't all that lengthy, so it's no problem. Just trying to help with the flow of the prose.
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« Reply #6 on: November 01, 2009, 05:23:14 AM »

Taking a look at your magic section, as requested. :)

Magic Section
Lynn was trained amongst her tribe in the ways of magic. Although this has caused the elf to learn at a slower rate, she does understand the aspects of Wind with more clarity than numerous other practitioners. With about four decades beyond the training needed to obtain her present level, to say she excels in Sphere One applications would be putting the mage’s skills lightly. Seldom would she be in danger of a fizzle, while practicing her usual repertoire of spells. There are even a few that Lywaen surpasses most at and can cast more swiftly than one would expect.

If she was trained among her tribe, she wouldn't actually know what Sphere 1 is. Elves train magic differently than the Ximaxian system. I would say to make it clear that she has skills that coincide with a Ximaxian mage trained in Sphere 1, but that there are some differences due to the elven training. It's up to you and moderator approval what those differences are, but keep elven philosophy in mind. Probably things like more concentration on harmonizing spells, and less on combat or outright 'magical' effects that significantly alter the environment.

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Another property of Wind that the mage has mastered is comprehension. By weakening this aspect of Wind, in an area, the elf can cause confusion momentarily in a large group of onlookers. This permits Lynn to escape in the disorder, while leaving others bewildered at what transpired. If she were to target a specific individual and remain focused on them whilst fleeing, the elfess could cover a great distance in the near two minutes that the spell can be maintained. The semantics vary with each casting of this spell, as the Aeolrhan must endeavor to distract those she wishes to persuade with this magic.

Considering my above comment, I would give a bit more of a cultural feel to this. Nothing wrong with what you have here mechanically, I'd say just make the *kind* of confusion one that has ties with her tribe. For instance, maybe she confuses people by playing on their desires? Sort of like mirages?

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Although the mage focuses in keeping up the illusion of being a fae, she is also quite capable in more physical aspects of Wind. Spells such as Clap of Thunder, Static Bolt and Thievish Winds are not unknown to the elf, yet used far less than more subtle incantations. Lynn is more inclined towards deception, seduction and other clever uses of her magic and rarely chooses violent rebuttals when other pathways present themselves. Lywaen recognizes and uses some Sphere Two spells that fall within her level of learning but has no formal training to go beyond her present understanding.

As I mentioned above, I would personally say get rid of the more violent spells. Under elven training, it's unlike she will learn these. The subtle spells are much more to her character, and elven character as a whole, and I don't think you will need the direct flashy spells in her portrayal.


Those are my only comments. It's all pretty much correct, my only issue, as I said, is the fact that learning magic from elves will be quite different from learning it in Ximax. So, things like 'Spheres' she wouldn't know about, and her spells would slant towards elven applications and principles. Otherwise, it's good. :)
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« Reply #7 on: November 01, 2009, 06:38:40 AM »

Yeah, what Josie said. In full agreement here.  ;)
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« Reply #8 on: November 02, 2009, 01:44:55 PM »

Edits made to Jose's comments have been integrated in green. Ready for more comments.

I did not give exacts on what mirages/illusions Lywaen would use to cause confusion or misunderstandings within her targets. As Jose mentioned, an elf would be more sublime and I think one taught as an elven mage would weigh the circumstances before deciding exactly what could or should be done. Using the ideal that something that is already happening would be wiser to strengthen than to makeup something on the spot and 'forcing' a car'all to respond in kind.
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« Reply #9 on: November 02, 2009, 10:45:57 PM »

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Lywaen frequently uses the property of motion when she ventures into the realm of music. By strengthening and weakening this property on the strings of her harp, the musician fluctuate the resonance produced on the instrument. With these manipulations the tones can be hauntingly reverberant or seemingly flawless and crisp. When she strengthens this property over an area while singing, a whispering tenor can be heard for many ped, allowing the mage to conserve her voice. In contrast she can also weaken the property of motion so as to converse with a small cluster of people and go unheard from afar.

You touch on a sort of bardic music here. As far as I know, the wind property of motion does not affect actual sound. I suppose manipulating sound could be an application of the wind school, but no proposal for development has been put forth to this effect. Of course, we known in real life that sound is carried by reverberations in the air, but nothing is known of that kind in the Santharia world.

Kalina proposed a similar concept in this thread long ago. Perhaps if she could give a thought on it. As for me, I would have a discussion on this in the dev board first.  :)

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In recent times the mage has learned another peculiar usage for her magic. By strengthening the property of comprehension in the Wind ounia of her own car’all, the flighty elf has learned this assists her in retaining a diverse amount of information. Although this does not make her a savant on any topic she reads or hears, it does allow her to preserve far more than she typically does. This has helped her to memorize complex songs on the harp and the words to accompany them. Yet she must still practice these things to obtain expertise in their presentations.

You wouldn't be able to retain information gleaned from this spell once it wears off. You could retain stuff for enough time to write it down or recite it, but the spell or manipulation expires, the information would be forgotten. At least that's how I understand it.
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« Reply #10 on: November 03, 2009, 06:29:33 AM »

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You touch on a sort of bardic music here. As far as I know, the wind property of motion does not affect actual sound. I suppose manipulating sound could be an application of the wind school, but no proposal for development has been put forth to this effect. Of course, we known in real life that sound is carried by reverberations in the air, but nothing is known of that kind in the Santharia world.
Bardic music does not play into magic, IMHO. Naming as Kalina has presented in the past is magic created through song whereas this character is using magic to assist in sound creation. Since a car'all is made up of all four elements , I would imagine any of the four elements could alter how sound travels, much like what this character does. Earth - could strengthen solidity in the strings or weaken this same property to cause different resonance in the strings IE .. more or less vibration. By doing this in a surrounding car'all, strengthening the solidity would muffle the sounds created. The other two elements have similar examples.

But in the end it is not magic being brought about by music in either case, simply the manner in which it flows from an object or within a car'all. Hence the property of sound is being altered indirectly. (Changing the property of motion in the strings, changes the sounds produced. Changing the motion in the air about her changes the distance at which the sound travels, not the sound itself.) This is an indirect happenstance of the incantation, much like light from a fireball.

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You wouldn't be able to retain information gleaned from this spell once it wears off. You could retain stuff for enough time to write it down or recite it, but the spell or manipulation expires, the information would be forgotten. At least that's how I understand it.
I'll add some clarity to the fact that she must practice what she hears almost immediately or repetitively to garner anything useful from this spell.

Some feedback would be greatly appreciated Jose or Azhira? If the wording I have used does not define how this magic is not directly influencing the aspect of sound just let me know. It is influencing the objects through which the sound is created and travels.
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« Reply #11 on: November 03, 2009, 06:51:22 AM »

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Lywaen frequently uses the property of motion when she ventures into the realm of music. By strengthening and weakening this property on the strings of her harp, the musician fluctuate the resonance produced on the instrument. With these manipulations the tones can be hauntingly reverberant or seemingly flawless and crisp. When she strengthens this property over an area while singing, a whispering tenor can be heard for many ped, allowing the mage to conserve her voice. In contrast she can also weaken the property of motion so as to converse with a small cluster of people and go unheard from afar.

You touch on a sort of bardic music here. As far as I know, the wind property of motion does not affect actual sound. I suppose manipulating sound could be an application of the wind school, but no proposal for development has been put forth to this effect. Of course, we known in real life that sound is carried by reverberations in the air, but nothing is known of that kind in the Santharia world.

Kalina proposed a similar concept in this thread long ago. Perhaps if she could give a thought on it. As for me, I would have a discussion on this in the dev board first.  :)

Azhira, a spell was proposed as well by Petros back in the day, which accomplishes a similar effect as seen here.

While we don't actually know how sound works in Santharia, we have to assume until otherwise that it follows the same principles as in real life. And if so, alterations in the air would affect the way the sound is carried.

While magi may not know how sound works, experimenting with magic will result in learning that certain conditions help sound travel, and certain ones do not. (Afterall, instruments are designed to manipulate sound to various degrees and have been around for ages, long before musicians actually knew all the intimate mechanics of it).

In the same way that different strings or tautness on a harp alter the sound a harp makes, manipulating the property of Motion in the air around the individual will affect the sound in various ways. Increasing the influence of Wind in a string will make it more conducive to vibrating, which would alter the sound it makes, for instance.


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In recent times the mage has learned another peculiar usage for her magic. By strengthening the property of comprehension in the Wind ounia of her own car’all, the flighty elf has learned this assists her in retaining a diverse amount of information. Although this does not make her a savant on any topic she reads or hears, it does allow her to preserve far more than she typically does. This has helped her to memorize complex songs on the harp and the words to accompany them. Yet she must still practice these things to obtain expertise in their presentations.

You wouldn't be able to retain information gleaned from this spell once it wears off. You could retain stuff for enough time to write it down or recite it, but the spell or manipulation expires, the information would be forgotten. At least that's how I understand it.

The information would not be forgotten. Comprehension does not 'replace' memory. It aids it. It is no different from the variety of chemicals and study techniques that exist in the modern world to aid in retaining memory. Playing music while studying makes it harder to retain information, because it is distracting. That does not mean that you suddenly have less capacity for retaining information, it just means that your mind is not at a state that permits it to retain as much.

I cannot recall if or if not Comprehension is an actual property of Wind, but as for Wind being able to affect the mind in ways that aid the caster in retaining information, by placing it in a state that is more conducive to learning and understanding, then yes it can be done. But yes, as Lywaen says in her next post, there will still need to be work on her part to make sure that she does not forget that information after learning it.
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« Reply #12 on: November 03, 2009, 07:23:24 AM »

It still makes no sense to me. Comprehension is not the same as retention. By using magic to help in understanding something you read does not mean you retain it, as the section seems to imply. Also, much of the abilities seem to fit under the Sphere 3 category of Perception, not comprehension. Understanding something has wings is not the same as perceiving it. Influencing the perceptions of multiple people seems above the skill of a lvl 3 mage.
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« Reply #13 on: November 03, 2009, 07:51:23 AM »

It still makes no sense to me. Comprehension is not the same as retention. By using magic to help in understanding something you read does not mean you retain it, as the section seems to imply. Also, much of the abilities seem to fit under the Sphere 3 category of Perception, not comprehension. Understanding something has wings is not the same as perceiving it. Influencing the perceptions of multiple people seems above the skill of a lvl 3 mage.

Which is a problem of our leveling system. A level 3 mage is a *master* of Sphere I. The moment they step into level 4, they are not doing anything to increase their ability to use Sphere I spells, they have become a novice at Sphere II spells. And level 4 spells might be weaker than certain level 2 or 3 spells.

The leveling system isn't linear. A level 6 mage is only marginally better than a level 3 mage at Sphere I, but they are also a master of Sphere II, and only because they've had more time to practice. Think of it like this-- two people study history of World War II, and both have perfect knowledge of the subject. However, one has been a master of that field for 10 years longer than the first. He hasn't learned anything *new* about the subject, but he might be better at recalling specific details simply because he's used it for longer. Then again, the person who just became master might be better at other things than the person who has been doing it for longer, because the newer person has just come out of several years of dedicated training and it's all fresh on his mind, whereas the older person may have forgotten some things. So overall, they both have the same knowledge, but there is a slight difference in the application of that knowledge, for good or ill on *both* sides.

Influencing the perception of multiple people, by the way, is not a process done by targeting each person individually. Rather, you target an area under which several people are currently located, which thus affects all of them. This is not particularly difficult, though the size of the area depends on the mage's skill.

Point is, you have to remember that we have a tri-skill system, not the standard linear leveling system. Think of it instead like DnD multiclassing: A CL 6 mage is actually a level 3 SI/3 SII mage. (with each Sphere only having a maximum of 3 levels, and the third level is a pre-req for taking the next class)



As for your other comment. Comprehension is not the same as retention, no. The mechanics are correct but it might be the property that is in error here. What Lywaen describes already is appropriate for a Wind mage, it's just whether or not the actual property of 'Comprehension' is the right property in this case. I cannot find Comprehension as an actual property we have ever stated. So another word could easily be used here instead to be more clear.

The property of Comprehension could be used to know how to play a remembered music in the proper way, but you're right, it isn't the actual retention of that fact, which is knowledge.

Perhaps instead of Comprehension, Lywaen, you could use the property of Clarity. And state that this is Clarity of the mind which you are enhancing, which helps in limiting distractions and thus allows you to naturally be able to retain information better.


Azhira, which abilities do you see as falling under Sphere III? Remember that it is not on a level of skill, but on the mechanics used. The retaining memory one would be Sphere III *if* you were actually magically adding knowledge. But increasing the mind's capability to naturally retain knowledge is Sphere I. If that is unclear in Lywaen's CD, then it should be altered to fall along those lines.

I suppose the wings might be beyond a Sphere I mage. But that would require an update to the Wind Magic School entry. I don't think we've really discussed the mechanics of how Sphere I Wind spells can actually create the specific illusions mentioned in Rayne's entry.
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« Reply #14 on: November 03, 2009, 07:56:15 AM »

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This spell can both be used on a caster or on another human or animal target. Some professors at the Ximaxian Academy use this spell to help their pupils both learn more quickly and to help them focus better. Students will also use this spell on themselves before tests or quizzes, or even before class.
There is precedence in Wind magic that it can and does permit it's students the ability to learn quickly. As there is no evident property listed in the spell for this particular incantation, I am open for ideas in this regard.

The winged aspect I will relate to the Reflection spell. Instead of requiring the mage to read someone's mind to create the illusion the mage is instead exhibiting images from their own mind. Taking the complexity of stealing another's thoughts out of the equation and instead revealing the mage's thoughts/imagery to others.

Sorry for not changing back to the character in question, my humble apologies.
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