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Sekros Degrivok
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« on: March 14, 2010, 06:24:20 PM »

Name: Sekros Degrivok

Gender: Male

Age: 32

Race: Orc

Tribe: Chyrakisth

Occupation: Bounty Hunter

Title: Fearmonger

Height: 2 Peds, 2 Palmspans, 8 Nailsbreadths, 3 Grains

Weight: 1 Pygge, 6 Hebs, 3 Ods, 3 Mut

Eye colour: His right eye is a fiery red colour, and his left eye is white

Hair colour: Black
 

Physical appearance: A towering, and slender orc with a very dark green chest and charcoal green arms and legs. Sekros' features are dark and brooding. His white, blind left eye, and fiery red right eye are each set deeply into his skull and his face is covered in dark scars, one which runs across his blind eye, which he obtained from sect challenges. His pointed cheekbones jut out nearly directly beside his eyes and his brow curves down jaggedly towards his nose giving him always an angered, or annoyed appearance. His long, thin, black hair falls down his back and lies on his shoulders, tied in several irregular places by leather bands. His arms are muscular but only share the build of a well-built human. His chest and shoulders sharing the build of an orc, are large and powerfull. His chest seems awkwardly athletic compared to his limbs, and his shoulders are wide and jagged.

Clothing:
Armored: He wears a thin black linen mask that covers his entire face(including his eyes) protecting his eyes from the sun and allowing him to see while outside, which he covers with a sinister looking, horned helmet that allows his ears to protrude from the sides. He wears the flexible cloth tunic made of thin metal wires (almost chainmail) that is weaved specifically by the Chyrakisth and a thin pair of linen pants under his spiked plate armor. His armor is decorated with crude paintings of demons using only black and red paint. Over his armor he wears a heavy iron necklet and iron bracers to protect his vital arteries, and a thick leather belt adorned with the frontal half of a human skull held together crudely by melted iron.

Casual: When travelling, and hunting he wears everything he would normally wear under his armor. His linen mask, which he removes when entering caves, his steel woven armor, his thin pair of linen pants, and his leather belt. In case of a confrontation he wears his iron necklet and iron bracers. When near cities or expecting confrontation with people(who he does not believe are dangerous) he wears his cloak with it's hood up hiding all evidence, except the unnatural height of his ethnicity, that he is a Chyrakisth orc. There is no way for him to hide is falchion and bow other than leaving them behind, which would be very dangerous... so he doesn't even try to hide them.

Personality: Sekros lives only to indulge himself in the pain of others, and strike fear into his victim's hearts. His hand is always guided by Malicious and bloodthirsty intent and he believes others should either submit to him, or he has every right to make them his personal toys, to cripple and defile however he pleases. He is not driven by greed, but the causation of pain and fear, although he does find a sense of satisfaction in money. Money stained with the blood of innocents gives him a greater satisfaction. Sekros is bipolar and therefore experiences seasonal depressed and ecstatic states. Sekros is very hard to make friends with, the only thing that would ever make this possible would be for him to have a strong respect for you, Sekros only respects physical power, and the most effective way to show this is for you to match, or defeat him in a duel. orcs have an inate distrust of magic and it's practitioners and this is very true for Sekros. He sees magic as cowardly, and a weapon of the weak, and therefore doesnt respect it.

Strengths:
Sword Skills: Sekros is a veteran of many raids and consequently has a large amount of skill with swords of all fashions, particularly large two-handed swords, and longswords. This will obviously give him a great advantage in combat.

Unarmed Skills: Sekros is a veteran of several sect hierarchy challenges and therefore has a large amount of skill with his fists, claws and teeth and has learned to use environmental factors to his advantage. This, like his sword skill is very usefull in combat.

Interrogation/torture skills: Sekros is educated in the limits of human and elven bodies and vital arteries and organs which are to be avoided in torture. He can easily torture a captured prisoner to his whim and avoid these, or in battle target them to quickly destroy someone who has become an obstacle.

Bloodlust: Sekros, because of his crippling losses and unending struggle during his childlife, has an insatiable bloodlust that he can almost never control. Though this impairs him socially it grants him increased strength and feral instinct in combat.

Inhuman strength and agility: As a Chyrakisth Sekros is as agile as any elf and as strong as an orc. This can help Sekros in many ways, in battle, or even by granting him the strength to lift a tree obscuring his passage out of the way, or leaping over a high wall.

'Eye' for the night: Sekros' right eye is sensitive to light, because of his tribal and racial heritage, therefore at night he can see as perfectly as an elf could see during the day with his right eye.

Weaknesses:
Blinded left eye: Because of all the years he has spent fighting he has accumulated a vast number of scars and a blinded left eye. This affects him by slightly obscuring the left side of his vision and has caused him to lose his sense of depth perception.

Ego: As an orc, and especially a Chyrakisth, Sekros believes all other races inferior, and does not view them as a challenge, this can cause him to underestimate a stronger opponent, and because of a massive sense of pride will never decline a challenge.

Languages: Sekros was taught to speak Kh'omchr'om by his father, and naturally learned to speak the Chyrakisth language. This allows him to speak to orcs of other tribes as well as his, but is still unable to speak Tharian, and languages of other races.

Bloodlust/Bipolar: Sekros, because of his crippling losses and unending struggle during his childlife, has an insatiable bloodlust that he can almost never control, and has manic depression. Sekros' bloodlust impairs his judgement and his alertness in and outside of combat. The combination of his bloodlust and bipolar disorder makes Sekros a person impossible to socialize with. In Sekros' depressed state he verbally, and at times physically lashes out at strangers,  and even his greatest companions, and some times loses the will to fight. In his ecstatic state he searches for creatures or people he can torture or kill simply for pleasure.

Mentally Lazy: Sekros is does not enjoy mental labour, not understanding the importance of knowledge a book or scroll can grant him. He is therefore illiterate and can only speak the Chyrakisth and Kh'omchr'om languages. He prefers to physically study things in order to gain that knowledge, although this is usually slower and requires much trial and error. Though Sekros has no trouble performing physical tasks.

Scarred body: Sekros' scars often cause him great pain a while after any physical effort(or during it if over exerting himself). Such as at the end of a battle after the rush of adrenaline has left him.

'Eye' for the night: Sekros' right eye is very sensitive to light, therefore in bright lights Sekros is effectively blinded. Though he wears a black linen mask to prevent this.

History: Sekros was born in a massive sect in the Zsharkanion Peaks. His mother died when he was 4 years old in a sect challenge, killed by a much younger female orc. Sekros was instructed by his father Tagras Degrivok in the arts of torture and his father, who was very well educated, also taught him to speak Kh'omchr'om. An orcish language, but not that used by the Chyrakisth.

As a torturer Sekros' father was a sadistic fiend of horrifying ideals, and Sekros eventually grew to become his father, but much more skilled in the aspect of combat. Sekros' father died when Sekros had reached the age of 11 when he challenged an orc much higher in the sects hierarchy and therefore much more experienced in battle. The orc who had killed Sekros' father knew Tagras as an honoured and powerful warrior, and therefore out of honour for him sheltered Sekros, and tutored him in the art of combat. Sekros grew in to a powerful warrior and hunter and at the age of 14 challenged and won his first sect battle, gaining his first scar. After this battle Sekros' mentor released him from his care.

Sekros continued to work both as a torturer and a warrior, raiding caravans and foolhardy travelers from the mountains and hunting down escaped prisoners. At the age of 16 on a new moon, Sekros, after gaining several additional scars and a higher ranking in the sect, was ascended into adulthood and accepted the mate of the same rank in his sect. Several months after Sekros' ascension, after a raid on a human caravan, Sekros returned to the sect with the decapitated heads of three of his orcish companions, their blood staining his blade. This was ignored, and Sekros was able to keep or sell the all of the items from the caravan...instead of splitting them four ways.

At age 17 Sekros challenged Tkar Kerrket to a sect battle. In the fight both seemed to be equals, though Tkar was several years older, they appeared to have the same speed and the same strength. They clawed, and lunged at each other and threw each other around the arena until neither of them could go on. The battle ended with both of them falling down totally exhausted. After the fight Tkar and Sekros started a rivalry that eventually turned in to a partner-, and then friendship. At age 21 Sekros had his first child, but shortly after it was born he had challenged and defeated a higher ranking sect member, causing him to leave his mate. Sekros and Tkar both continued to gradually climb the sects hierarchy, Tkar always trailing slightly behind, with nothing eventful disturbing Sekros until he aged to 26, when Sekros was brutally injured after foolishly challenging his past mentor in the sect, who was a much older, a much more experienced fighter than him and who was also a highly greater rank.

After several months of regeneration Sekros returned to his old life, although he was scarred with a wicked cut that ran down his forehead, through his left eye and across his cheek which left his left eye blinded. Ashamed he avoided sect challenges, usually forcing lower members of the sect to fight for him if challenged and not challenging higher members at all, while Tkar slowly climbed up the sect.

A year after, Sekros; with only Tkar beside him, had attacked a human caravan. There were several human guards that stood no chance for Sekros and his friend, but upon slaying the last of the lesser guards a heavily armored knight mounted upon a large horse turned around the side of the caravan, he bore a large, beautifully carved falchion, that he swung through the air with ease, Sekros and Tkar both chuckled at the challenge. Sekros' and the knight's blades clashed, and Sekros threw him from his horse. While the human's attention was directed at Sekros, Tkar lept at the human, his blade raised high above his head. Sadly, the human turned to the orc, with lightning speed, and struck his sword through his chest, Tkar yelled, and grabbed the shoulders of the human with his claws, the human, now locked with the orc, was helpless against Sekros.  

Enraged Sekros put his blade through the chest of the human, who fell limply to the ground. Sekros turned to Tkar who informed him that they were brothers by bloodline, that they shared the same mother and that was why they did not share the same family name. Tkar died in Sekros' arms, and Sekros filled with rage carved out the face of the still living human and split the frontal half of his skull off with the human's sword and  later covered the skull in iron and attached it to his belt, the armor the human was wearing is now adorned with horns and spikes and is worn by Sekros, and the human's sword is now Sekros' most trusted weapon.

After the death of his brother Sekros sank in to a deep depression that he stabalized by beginning to challenge higher members of the sect again and maiming or brutally killing them. though he had sunk in the hierarchy fairly quickly. After two years of falling in and out of depression he had reached far beyond all his previous rankings, and was recognised as a powerfull, feared warrior, though his previous mentor now stood in his way. In a state of depression Sekros challenged his previous mentor who was now fairly old, and without a hint of remorse cut him down, and killed him. After killing his previous mentor Sekros gained his rank and social status of his mentor. Sekros began sinking in and out of depression again and stopped challenging higher ranked orcs then himself and just defended his rank, though that, because of his known ferocity, was not often.

Sekros continued to live in the Zsharkanion Peaks for two years suffering from his seasonal depressions before he decided to decline his sect rank and leave. After several years as a torturer Sekros had learned of a spying ship of which the crew had entirely been hypnotized by drugs and the dark witchcraft of the Chyrakisth. Using this ship Sekros was able to travel to Sarvonia, under cover. After arriving on Sarvonia Sekros was forced to hide himself in forests and had decided to employ himself as an assassin or bounty hunter, collecting his bounties in hidden locations. Today he is only currently being employed by one man and the presence of a Chyrakisth on Sarvonia is totally unknown.

Fighting Tactics: Sekros typically charges in to battle with his falchion raised above his head, fighting by using his rage as well as his blade. Sekros attempts to instill fear in to his enemies disabling them mentally and at times physically. In battle Sekros will commonly trade blows with an enemy avoiding heavy strikes, and allowing the enemy to catch him with off-blows in order to strike down with all his might. This is one of the reasons he has accumulated several scars, but it also one of the reasons he is so efficient in battle. Sekros does anything he can to win in a fight, even though his falchion is meant for two-handed fighting, he will oftenly use it in one of his hands to lash out with his claw, or will use the environment around himself to distract a foe, knock them off balance, or even blind them.

Weapons: A large two-handed falchion reforged with a heavy layer of steel to reinforce it, to add a sinister serrated edge, and engrave (non-magical)curses upon the blade reading: K'Resz'rech Ar'm'Ashz Ch'ron-P'thok (translated from the Kh'omchr'om language in to "I dig the tombs of the unworthy humans/elves" ).

Belongings: A leather belt adorned with a human skull, Chyrakisth wire armor, heavy iron necklet and bracers, and a large, grey, hooded cloak.
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« Reply #1 on: March 14, 2010, 07:13:15 PM »

Hey Sekros! Welcome to Santharia.

Just a couple of things:

Firstly, it's been my experience that the mods and admins don't like you using decimals in your measurements. There is a measures converter and a list of Santharian measures smaller than the pygge and the ped.

Also, and I know the mods don't like this, your history is one big block of text at the moment, not to mention that you've pressed 'Enter' in the middle of a sentence more than once. Put some spaces in - it makes it much easier to read. Basically, the easier you make it for the mods, the easier they will make it for you!

Over his armor he wears heavy bracelets and a necklet covered in gems to protect his vital arteries, and a thick leather belt adorned with the frontal half of a human skull and carrying This here doesnt really make sense. Try replacing the present participle ("ing") with "and he carries". It reads more easily.an assortment of blades.

Strengths and Weaknesses: These need addressing. Separate your strengths out - try reading some approved CDs to see what I mean.

So for example, instead of:
Strengths: Every Chyrakisth studies the arts of magic and witchcraft and therefore Sekros has a wide knowledge of poisons and potions, he very oftenly poisons his weapons. he is a veteran in weapon and hand to hand fighting because of raiding and sect hierarchy challenges.
try:
Strengths:
Potions and Poisons: Since every Chyrakisth studies the arts of magic and witchcraft, Sekros has a wide knowledge of poisons and potions and very often poisons his weapons.

Combat Skills: Sekros is a veteran of many raids and sect hierarchy challenges, and consequently has a large amount of skill in physical combat, both armed and unarmed.I think this is what you were trying to say with "hand to hand AND weapon skills?

Also something about his fighting style? Not vital, but we want fleshed-out characters whom we can visualise.

The bow you mention definitely needs to be mentioned as a strength, as do the daggers - maybe "Ranged Combat" and an overview of how good he is with them. Maybe whether he throws his daggers from the tip or the pommel - details are what make thiis world believeable.

Also, pine is very soft and rots very easily. How do you get around this? Do you have oil for it? You need to mention that.

Lack of magic skills is NOT a weakness. We compare our character to a typical Joe Bloggs or Tommy Atkins human peasant - who has NO magic, NO weapons and NO education.

Your S&Ws are very unbalanced. Taking out the lack of magic skills, and ignoring the "accumulation of scars" unless they cause him pain sometimes, you only have one weakness. I  admit a blind eye is hefty, but with combat, bows, knives, fists, and poisons I would say the S outweighs the W.

And gems - how many? How much are they worth? Would he sell them for money? Do they have sentimental value (I doubt it, in this case)? Just "gems" is not informative. If he has a vast wealth in gems, that's a strength.

That's about all I can get at the moment. I'll see if I can give it another once-over later.

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« Reply #2 on: March 15, 2010, 02:58:02 AM »

Since he was from the peaks I wanted to choose a wood for his bow that I believed suited that area. That's why I chose pine, but you are correct it does rot fairly easily, so would cedar work? I also added his ego and illiteracy as  weaknesses Ego: As an orc, and espescially a Chyrakisth Sekros believes all other races inferior, and does not view them as a challenge, this can cause him to underestimate a stronger opponent, and because of a massive sense of pride will never decline a challenge. And added a section about his fighting tactics, warg riding skill and ranged combat as a strength, is there anything else that requires correcting before I re-post it? 
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« Reply #3 on: March 15, 2010, 04:25:43 AM »

One thing. Do not repost your CD. Go to the top right of your first post, click the button that says modify (This is Anirdulf, by the way). Then make your changes from there. As it is, I can't see whether you've addressed all the issues.

I may as well say this now - please, for the sake of all the commentators, mods and admins, remember to colour your edits. It makes a real difference to how fast we can comment on your CD if we can see wheter you've addressed the comment already made. Again, the easier you make it for the mods, the easier the mods make it for you.

Read through my comments again, address the issues and mdify your first post. I'm not an expert on where you come from, but cedar, after a little digging, is an "excellent" bow wood and pine, it turns out, not only rots but is "too brittle"! Anyway, if you have cedar where you live that would be much better.

A big ego is good, and maybe (because by my count you now have two) a 3rd weakness? Perhaps his scars hurt him when he overexerts, or stop him from being as flexible as he was?

Post when you've done that and I wiil try to take a look (but I can't promise, because I have school).

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« Reply #4 on: March 15, 2010, 04:27:07 AM »

Thanks, I will do that :D
(by the way this is Sekros)
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« Reply #5 on: March 15, 2010, 04:37:29 AM »

I guessed...
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« Reply #6 on: March 15, 2010, 04:50:29 AM »

By the way I also added pain from his scars, and illiteracy , but i'm not sure if that would be a true weakness, and i added more strengths so im thinking of removing ranged combat
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« Reply #7 on: March 15, 2010, 05:11:59 AM »

Pain - definitely a weakness

Illiteracy - Remember Joe Bloggs peasant-farmer? He can't read or write. However, your expansion on the theme - that he isn't willng to learn in lessons - IS a weakness. Perhaps make him lazy, and unwilling to work hard mentally (mention that this means he's illiterate)

Maybe limit your ranged strength? Good idea giving him few arrows - however, how few? Only enough to kill a party of three people, or only enough to kill a small merchant caravan guard? Quantify.

Have you dropped the daggers? I didn't see them in the S&Ws *goes to check* Nope, not there. Unless they're here *lifts the corner of the rug* or here *starts pawing through the drawers*. Might be a good idea to cut them, of only give him one (I mean, who carries seven knives?)
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« Reply #8 on: March 15, 2010, 05:15:53 AM »

Yeah I cut the knives, and I gave him 12 arrows, which is enough to perhaps use in 2-4 encounters, then he's screwed. Although I also changed the tip of the arrow from stone to iron. Though I dont really see arrows as an absolutely fatal weapon, because unless the arrow strikes a critical point in your body, you may only be impaired, or barely affected, until it later becomes infected(of-course I can poison my arrows) but if you get hit with an arrow in the leg or arm then you can still kill the one who shot you with it. Alhough that impairment could be the turning point in a fight.

Edit: someone who carries 7 knives = someone who really likes knives?

Did you read his fighting tactics? I'm not sure if I should add "Dirty Fighting" to his strengths or not. Or perhaps that he's perceptive and add dirty fighting as a sub-strength?
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« Reply #9 on: March 15, 2010, 05:45:51 AM »

I really like knives, but I'm not carrying seve- oh, wait *recounts, incuding the one down each sock and one strapped to his forearm* Sorry, scratch that, I am carrying seven knives...but one's a machete, that doesn't count...

Anyway, "Dirty Fighting" - in my opinion, just an extension of his "Combat" skill. Maybe add it to the S&Ws section as part of the strength? But, I don't know, I don't want to say "No" and be overruled by the mods, 'cause that's embarrassing! Maybe PM one of them (their names are under the link to the CD forum in the "Where to begin" section). Or just let them tell you when they comment on your CD *glares around looking for Dek or Valan*.

Got to go, got my new CD to finish and publish for Athviaro.

Athviaro
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« Reply #10 on: March 15, 2010, 05:51:06 AM »

Alright, i'm putting it up as finished. Cross your fingers. grin
Thanks for all your help, you are awesome :D
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« Reply #11 on: March 15, 2010, 06:07:39 AM »

Ok, two things.

Firstly, you're welcome, I remember my first character (not hard, he was only approved in Feb.!) so I know it makes a difference having swift response - and so does being nice to mods, which brings me to mu second point of:

EDIT: Sorry for shouting, I know I shouldn't have. Hope I haven't scared you right off? We're not all uncouth monsters like I can be. Just had a right royal ticking off from Valan about it, too.

Athviaro

PS. Pity from a cold-blooded orcen fighter? A bit loose, methinks. Bit of explanation of why? Maybe he was trained like that?
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« Reply #12 on: March 15, 2010, 06:24:06 AM »

Okey dokey, now i'm done.

Edit: I know I need the "constructive criticism" because i'm a noob, I should thank you for yelling at me, because now I absolutely wont do it again, LOL
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« Reply #13 on: March 15, 2010, 06:33:55 AM »

Looks great!

The honour thing works better, I think. I can believe that (after all, if they fight with honour, they'd respect honour, surely?)

Now all you need is a handsome mod to sweep you off your feet!

Edit: That's very kind of you, but I could have been more civil. I just wanted to give you a leetle shock because I've seen mods assume you haven't integrated comments because you've got no colour, but I think I crossed the line with the CAPS LOCK.
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« Reply #14 on: March 15, 2010, 07:31:13 AM »

I don't profess to be a Nybelmarian expert in any way, shape or form but I'll give this a look.

Name:Sekros Degrivok

Gender: Male

Age: 32

Race: Orc-Elf While they are technically orcs and elves, the Chyrakisth are classified as orcs. That's the dominant "breed" in the tribe, that's the category you find them under.

Tribe: Chyrakisth (half orc, half elf) See above

Occupation: Bounty Hunter

Title: Fearmonger

Height: 2 Peds, 2 Palmspans, 8 Nailsbreadths, 3 Grains

Weight: 1 Pygge, 6 Hebs, 3 Ods, 3 Mut

Eye colour: His right eye is a fiery red colour, and his left eye is white

Hair colour: Black
 

Appearance: A Ttowering, and slender oOrc. Sekros' features are dark and brooding. His white, blind left eye, and fiery red right eye are each set deeply into his skull and his face is covered in dark scars, one which runs across his blind eye, which he obtained from sect challenges. His long, thin, black hair falls down his back and lies on his shoulders, tied in several irregular places by leather bands. He wears a thin black linen mask that covers his entire face(including his eyes) protecting his eyes from the sun and allowing him to see while outside, which he covers with a sinister looking, horned helmet that allows his ears to protrude from the sides. He wears the flexible cloth made of thin metal wires that is weaved specifically by the Chyrakisth under his spiked plate armor. Over his armor he wears a heavy necklet and distarns to protect his vital arteries, and a thick leather belt adorned with the frontal half of a human skull.This all belongs in a clothing section, at least for ease of reading if not for organization. Remember, if it doesn't say something that amounts to (optional) next to the heading, then you've got to include it. That being said, you've got a decent start here. We really don't see much about the body here. Armor is not pleasant to wear all the time (kind of like a great big metal snowsuit in one way) and would eventually become detrimental. He wears "cloth" so is that what? A toga? We know what it's made of but not what it looks like. You're trying to paint a picture so that other people can understand what your character looks like. We don't even know what colour your skin is for light's sake.

Personality: Sekros lives only to indulge himself in the pain of others, and strike fear into his victim's hearts. His hand is always guided by Malicious and bloodthirsty intent and he believes others should either submit to him, or he has every right to make them his personal toys, to cripple and defile however he pleases. He is not driven by greed, but the causation of pain and fear, although he does find a sense of satisfaction in money. Money stained with the blood of innocents gives him a greater satisfaction.

Strengths:
Potions and Poisons: Since every Chyrakisth studies the arts of magic and witchcraft, Sekros has a wide knowledge of poisons and potions and very often poisons his weapons.

Combat Skills: Sekros is a veteran of many raids and sect hierarchy challenges, and consequently has a large amount of skill in physical combat, both armed and unarmed. Each individual weapon skill is supposed to be a strength on it's own.

Ranged Combat: Sekros also became skilled in using a bow through both hunting and raids, though he has very few arrows and does not know how to fletch more.

Riding: Sekros was trained how to ride, and train wargs by his mentor. Sadly, his warg was killed before he left the Zsharkanion Peaks.The only wargs on Nybelmar are the (tragically undeveloped) Ehebion Wargs. While they might get developed in the future, it kind of makes your skill moot here. Sarvonian orcs would likely kill you, and they don't let their wargs run wild. A sarvonian warg likely wouldn't be able to carry you either.

Interrogation/torture skills: Sekros is educated in the limits of human and elven bodies and vital arteries and organs which are to be avoided in torture. He can easily torture a captured prisoner to his whim and avoid these, or in battle target them to quickly destroy someone who has become an obstacle.

Eyes for the night: Sekros' eyes are sensitive to light, because of his tribal and racial heritage, therefore at night he can see as perfectly as an elf could see during the day.

Weaknesses:
Blinded left eye: Because of all the years he has spent fighting he has accumulated a vast number of scars and a blinded left eye.

Ego: As an orc, and especially a Chyrakisth Sekros believes all other races inferior, and does not view them as a challenge, this can cause him to underestimate a stronger opponent, and because of a massive sense of pride will never decline a challenge.

Mentally Lazy: Sekros is does not enjoy mental labour, not understanding the importance of knowledge a book or scroll can grant him. He is therefore illiterate. He prefers to physically study things in order to gain that knowledge, although this is usually slower and requires much trial and error. Though Sekros has no trouble performing physical tasks.

Scarred body: Sekros' scars often cause him great pain a while after any physical effort(or during it if over exerting himself). Such as at the end of a battle after the rush of adrenaline has left him.

Eyes for the night: Sekros' eyes are very sesitive to light, therefore in bright lights Sekros is effectively blinded. Though he wears a black linen mask to prevent this.

History: Sekros was born in a massive sect in the Zsharkanion Peaks. His mother died when he was 4 years old in a sect challenge, killed by a much younger female orc. Sekros was instructed by his father Tagras Degrivok in the arts of torture.

As a torturer Sekros' father was a sadistic fiend of horrifying ideals, and Sekros eventually grew to become his father, but much more skilled in the aspect of combat. Sekros' father died when Sekros had reached the age of 11 when he challenged an orc much higher in the sects hierarchy and therefore much more experienced in battle. The orc who had killed Sekros' father knew Tagras as an honoured and powerful warrior, and therefore out of honour for him sheltered Sekros, and tutored him in the art of combat.

Sekros grew in to a powerful warrior and hunter and at the age of 14 challenged and won his first sect battle, gaining his first scar. Sekros' mentor was not only a powerful warrior but also the "stablemaster" and caregiver for a good part of the sects wargs. On Sekros' first victory his mentor awarded him with a warg pup and released him from his care.

Sekros continued to work both as a torturer and a warrior, raiding caravans and foolhardy travelers from the mountains and hunting down escaped prisoners. At the age of 16 on a new moon, Sekros, after gaining several additional scars and a higher ranking in the sect, was ascended into adulthood and accepted the mate of the same rank in his sect. Several months after Sekros' ascension, after a raid on a human caravan, Sekros returned to the sect with the decapitated heads of three of his orcish companions, their blood staining his blade. This was ignored, and Sekros was able to keep or sell the all of the items from the caravan...instead of splitting them four ways.
At age 17 Sekros began to train his warg to kill and prepare it for riding. At age 18 he brought it on it's first raid. At age 21 Sekros had his first child, but shortly after it was born he had challenged and defeated a higher ranking sect member, causing him to leave his partner.

Sekros continued to gradually climb the sects hierarchy with nothing eventful disturbing him until he aged to 26 when he was brutally injured after foolishly challenging his past mentor in the sect, who was a much older, much more experienced fighter than him and was also a highly greater rank than him.

After several months of regeneration Sekros returned to his old life, although he was scarred with a wicked cut that ran down his forehead, through his left eye and across his cheek which left his left eye blinded. Ashamed he avoided sect challenges, usually forcing lower members of the sect to fight for him if challenged and not challenging higher members at all.

A year after, Sekros; with only his warg steed, had attacked a human caravan. There were several human guards that stood no chance for Sekros and his beast, but upon slaying the last of the lesser guards a heavily armored knight mounted upon a large horse turned around the side of the caravan, he bore a large, beautifully carved falchion, that he swung through the air with ease, Sekros chuckled at the challenge. Their blades clashed and both were knocked off their steeds, but Sekros' steed could fight on its own, and while the human's attention was directed at Sekros, the loyal warg lept at the human. Sadly, the human turned to the warg, with lightning speed, and struck his sword through its chest, the warg yelped, and grabbed the shoulders of the human with its claws, the human, now locked with the warg was helpless against Sekros, who's blade soon pierced his chest and the human fell to the ground. Sekros carved out the face of the still living human and split the frontal half of his skull off with the human's sword and attached the skull to his belt, the armor the human was wearing is now adorned with horns and spikes and is worn by Sekros, and the human's sword is now Sekros' most trusted weapon. After the death of his warg Sekros began challenging higher members of the sect again though he had sunk in the hierarchy fairly quickly. After two years he had reached far beyond all his previous rankings, and was recognised as a powerfull warrior. Though his previous mentor now stood in his way. Sekros challenged his previous mentor who was now fairly old, and without a hint of remorse cut him down, and killed him. After killing his previous mentor Sekros could think of nothing better to do than to leave his sect and search to cause destruction, pain and fear elsewhere. He later accepted bounty hunting and assassinations as his mode of income.Most stories occur on Sarvonia. This is a different continent from Nybelmar, separated by an ocean (think North America and Europe). Nybelmar, where your tribe lives. So you'll need to explain how on earth a bloodthirsty orc managed to obtain passage from one side to the other, and possibly why you aren't dead. Sarvonians do not take kindly to orcs and are likely to try to kill you or lynch you. Kindly break this up for those of us who have to read it. Bricks of text like these are hard and discouraging to read for us mods. I stay away from history sections as a rule though, so this is all you're hear from me about it.[/color]

Fighting Tactics: Sekros typically charges in to battle with his falchion raised above his head, fighting by using his rage as well as his blade. Sekros attepts to instill fear in to his enemies disabling them mentally and at times physically. In battle Sekros will commonly trade blows with an enemy avoiding heavy strikes, and allowing the enemy to catch him with off-blows in order to strike down with all his might. This is one of the reasons he has accumulated several scars, but it also one of the reasons he is so efficient in battle.Sekros does anything he can to win in a fight, even though his falchion is meant for two-handed fighting, he will oftenly use it in one of his hands to lash out with his claw, or will use the enviroment around himself to distract a foe, knock them off balance, or even blind them.

Weapons: A large two-handed falchion reforged with silver to reinforce it, to add a sinister serrated edge, and engrave curses upon the blade, a cedar longbow and a leather quiver filled with 12 cedar, iron-tipped arrows. Silver is not a particularly strong metal. Quite the opposite, it's known for it's ductility and weight, as well as the rate at which it tarnishes. It's a terrible metal to make a weapon out of since it would only weaken the steel.

Belongings: A leather belt adorned with a human skull, A human skull is a fairly large thing. And you're using it as what? A belt buckle? Is the lower jaw still attached (that usually falls away unless you wire it on. That's to say nothing of the idea that someone with a human skull on their belt is likely to be the subject of serious harm.[/color] Chyrakisth wire armor, heavy iron necklet and distarns.I'm not sure if I mentioned it above, but what on earth is a distarns? I've googled it and searched the site. Nothing came up.


Over all, not bad. You're missing detail in a few places and you have a problem with spelling it seems. A spell checker, like the one on the site, would be a great aid for most of that. Your strengths and weaknesses section needs expanding. Not in the number of strengths or weaknesses, but each individual item is sort of a skeleton at the moment, and needs a bit more meat on it before I'd be willing to say whether or not it's balanced. Explain how it is a strength or how the weakness affects him (keeping in mind that your weaknesses and strengths are balanced against a peasant) and perhaps the limits on the strengths. If a weakness is not likely to come up during play, if there are too many "ifs", "ands" or "maybes" we generally don't count them. If that whole shtick was too long to read, the general consensus is spelling needs work, more detail.
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