Can't people have quieter mental breakdowns?
Death:A punishment to some, to some a gift, and to many a favor. --Seneca
Quote:1) I would remove some of your commas as there are loads of sentences which don't need them. For example "When stretching to his full height, he stands at about a ped and a palmspan". I'm not an English grammer expert but I don't think you should use them between a time phrase and the main sentence. Plus you definatly don't need one before conjunctions like "and", "but", "or", "because". Ok, doesn't actually do anything to the content but if you wanted it to improve the flow...
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