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« on: 28 October 2006, 12:14:48 »

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Overview
Daimen Athsinth (1252 a.S. - 1300 a.S), who began as a meagre Avennorian trader throughout the Santharian Province of Manthria became a known, not to mention a much richer man, after establishing the Mithral Minnow. A popular Inn within the Village of Aesthran located on the Mad-Path en route to Crazy Woman Pass through the Mithral Mountains. He would continue his life as a successful merchant until the date of his death in 1300 a.S. leaving behind a small trading company as well as the legacy of the Mithral Minnow.

Appearance
Around the date of his death, Daimen was a shorter than average Avennorian. He kept his greying hair relatively short and tidy. Tidy, actually, could define his appearance in its entirety. He was always well-shaved and dressed presentably. His wardrobe consisted of various alluring clothing, adorned with various pieces of jewellery as he attempted to show off his growing wealth. His outfits often included golden trimming, or other attire that was golden in colour. He found that gold, much like his jewellery made his wealth that much more apparent.

Personality
Over the years, Daimen was labelled as being very hard to bargain with. He held to his price, and rarely wavered from it. This may have been why he was so successful. However, he was a very intelligent person and knew how to read other traders and customers personalities, which made him seem very hard to bargain with. The truth was he knew exactly what he could get and made sure he got it. Part of this apparent stubbornness was due to his family’s financial position when he first began venturing into the marketplace. Daimen and his father, Garrard, clothed like lowly peasants, mingled amongst well-dressed merchants. This eventually brought about a desire to improve his own situation, to rise above what he was born as, a farm boy.

Despite having to sever many ties with his family, due to the hectic travelling schedule, coupled with his wife and family, Daimen still ensured that they were well-off, receiving a portion of his profits, when he was able to spare him. This would occur later in his career. These gifts helped the Athsinth family of Twynor to grow and become the owners of one of the largest farms in the village.

When it came to his wife Illine and their three children, he was very affectionate. He saw them so very little when they first became a family he made the most out of every single opportunity with them. His only son Horran, the eventually heir to his legacy, grew up to become a very similar man. Hard to bargain with, but ensuring that he maintained a balance between his work and his family, wherever possible.



Biography

Birth of a Farmboy: Daimen was born, the third child of eight, in the moderately sized farming community of Twynor. His father, Garrard, despite running the farm, regularly ventured into Marcogg to sell the goods that the family had accumulated over the growing season. He would grow up to be his father’s “escort” into Marcogg where he would develop an affinity for the marketplace. He would learn how to find the best deal possible and barter with the other traders to receive the most for the product he was selling. This however, would only be the foundation that would lead Daimen throughout his life. Garrard eventually became very ill and Daimen took over the duties entirely at the age of 18. Although not as respected or as wise, Daimen was a better trader than his father and pulled in a record for the family during his first venture into the city.

The Founding of the Manthrian Trade Group: After diligently working as the Athsinth family’s emissary into Marcogg, Daimen received a proposal from a fellow merchant. He offers to start a trading company between them in order to try and gain a better foothold in the markets throughout Manthria. Daimen welcomes this change of pace, making the proper arrangements to ensure his family’s well-being. His younger brother Gerard would take over the duties.

At the age of 21, Daimen and fellow merchant, Morien, co-found the Manthrian Trading Group (MTG). At first they only covered a small area surrounding Marcogg where they split this area in half. It extended from Marcogg to the Eastern Shore, as far north as Holt and as far south as Yantelian. Daimen patrolled the north-eastern section of this agreement, frequently passing over the Mithral Mountains.


A Glimpse of a Wife and Home: During a brief stop in Chrondra, Daimen would meet his eventual wife. She was Illine, a local clothier, who was bartering with another merchant when Daimen overheard her. Her spark in the marketplace was what first drew him to her, but a beautiful figure and a supportive personality would keep his heart for the rest of his life. In addition to this Chrondra would eventually become his home and evidently his grave.

The Founding of the Mithral Minnow: The Crazy Woman Pass became a regular trek for the trader. These ventures were long and tiring, keeping Daimen away from his newfound wife and their first child. To make things worse, once he did complete his journey, he would be far too exhausted to really interact with his family before having to ship himself off back on another excursion. This would all change.

During another weary trek towards the Mithral Mountains, Daimen decided to stop and rest in a small hamlet along the Olantani River on a road known as the Mad-Path, which itself leading up into the Mithral Mountains by way of the Crazy Woman Pass. This hamlet was dependent entirely upon the Mithanjor Minnow, a small fish that flourished in the river that this little settlement was established upon. However, being the intelligent businessman that he was, Daimen recognized an opportunity and began to put it into motion.

Daimen was aware that a lot of traders avoided villages east of the Mithral Mountains as it was very exhausting. By knowing this, he planned on establishing an Inn, the last stop before you made your pass through the Mithral Mountains. This Inn would be called the Mithral Minnow. It started very small, with only a few rooms for patrons on a second floor with a bar and small common room situated underneath. Yet, it was very popular amongst the residents of this village, known today as the village of Aesthran (it became a Village as opposed to a hamlet largely due to this very Inn).

Back in Marcogg, Daimen began to spread the word of this Inn. He received a portion of the profits from the family that he had left to manage and maintain the Inn, the first of these Innkeepers being Lucien Wilibald III.


A Growing Group: The MTG had grown considerably over the years, other merchants buying in to this agreement in an effort to avoid squabbles over territory and the like. However, with a portion of these profits going to Damien, his need to travel decreased dramatically. He was finally able to spend time with his wife and children (the count, by 1292 a.S., had totalled 3 – The third being his only son, Horran, who would eventually inherit Damien’s legacy). Despite his freedom from the marketplace, he still enjoyed the challenge of the trade and still made occasional ventures into the local markets.

Death: At the age of 48, Daimen was still a regular trader in the Chrondra market. The MTG continued to prosper and the Athsinth family was growing incredibly rich because of it. However, his dedication and determination to achieve the best deal in the market eventually led to a squabble with a fellow trader. Later that evening, Daimen made his way home as usual when he was suddenly attacked and murdered. He was found with multiple stab wounds in his back. Being one of Chrondra’s biggest celebrities to date, Daimen was honoured with a plaque that was placed on the town centres fountain. It is accompanied by several other plaques, referencing other great people to have dwelt within the city. The plaque reads:

Daimen Athsinth (1252 a.S – 1300 a.S)
Merchant of Manthria
Founder of the MTG
Founder of Aesthran

Importance
Despite establishing a very successful trade group in Manthria, it remained relatively unknown. Very few people are actually aware of its existence. It is, in essence, more or less a collection of merchants who organize Manthria in a way that they will minimize the amount of competition. This however, was not the legacy that Daimen leaves behind.

What he is, and will always be known for, is the creation of The Mithral Minnow and therefore the founding of the Hamlet known as Aesthran. Only a few years after becoming a merchant and establishing the MTG, Daimen seized a wonderful economic opportunity that not only bolstered his own wealth and that of the Hamlet, but also provided a very important and popular stop for travellers and traders venturing through the Mithral Mountains.
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« Reply #1 on: 29 October 2006, 06:02:11 »

Overview
Daimen Athsinth (1252 a.S. - 1300 a.S), who began as a meagre Avennorian trader throughout the Santharian Province of Manthria became a known, not to mention a much richer man, after establishing the Mithral Minnow.(you need to write how did Daimen establish the inn if he was as meagre as you said)  A popular Inn within the Hamlet of Aesthran located on the Mad-Path en route to Crazy Woman Pass through the Mithral Mountains. He would continue his life as a successful merchant until the date of his death in 1300 a.S. leaving behind a small trading company as well as the legacy of the Mithral Minnow.

Appearance
Around the date of his death, Daimen was a shorter than average Avennorian, said to stand at approximately 1 ped and nearly 6 handspans. He kept his greying hair relatively short and tidy. Tidy, actually, could define his appearance in its entirety. He was always well shaved and dressed presentably. His wardrobe consisted of various alluring clothing, adorned with various pieces of jewellery as he attempted to show off his growing wealth. His outfits often included golden trimming, or other attire that was golden in colour. He found that gold, much like his jewellery made his wealth that much more apparent.

Biography
1252 – Daimen was the third child in an eventual family of eight in the moderately sized farming community of Twynor. His father, Asgard, despite running the farm, regularly ventured into Marcogg to sell the goods that the family had accumulated over the growing season.

1267 – At the age of 15, Daimen becomes his father’s escort into Marcogg. He begins learning the tricks of the trade and how to manipulate the market into gaining the best possible deal.

1270 – Asgard, growing both old and sick, leaves all trading duties in the hands of Daimen. He is an immediate success in Marcogg, bringing home a record profit for the family.

1272 – Daimen receives a proposition from a fellow merchant in Marcogg. He offers to start a trading company between them in order to try and gain a better foothold in the markets throughout Manthria.

1272 – Daimen trains his younger brother Gerard to become the new merchant and trader for the Athsinth family.

1273 – Daimen co-founds the Manthrian Trade Group (MTG). They split a small area surrounding Marcogg in half. This territory would extend as far north as Holt and as far south as Yantelian, a city along the base of the Caeytharin Mountains

1275 – At a stop in Chrondra, Daimen meets his future wife. Chrondra would become Daimen’s future permanent home

1277 – After making a few trips through the Mithral Mountains to make stops in Nepris and Marduran, Daimen decides to stop and rest in a small fishing community along the Olantani River. This would be the future site of Aesthran, a hamlet and home to the famous Mithral Minnow.

1285 – The Manthrian Trade Group has grown and his need to travel decreases dramatically. The MTG, now encompasses all of Eastern Manthria. However, enjoying the marketplace, Daimen would still occasionally venture into the markets.

1292 – Has his third child, first son, who would eventually inherit his father’s legacy.

1300 – After a dispute with a trader, Daimen is attacked and murdered on his way home in Chrondra. He suffered multiple stab wounds to his back.

Importance
Despite establishing a trade group in Manthria, it remained relatively small and unknown. Very few people are actually aware of its existence. It is, in essence, more or less a collection of merchants who organize Manthria in a way that they will minimize the amount of competition. This however, was not the legacy that Daimen leaves behind.

What he is, and will always be known for, is the creation of The Mithral Minnow and therefore the founding of the Hamlet known as Aesthran. Only a few years after becoming a merchant and establishing the MTG, Daimen seized a wonderful economic opportunity that not only bolstered his own wealth and that of the Hamlet, but also provided a very important and popular stop for travellers and traders venturing through the Mithral Mountains.

As I said in my comment, you have to write how he could establish the inn and  the hamlet by himself. Maybe he was working with some other traders on the establishing of the hamlet? Write more about the establishing of the hamlet itself because he was most famous about it.
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« Reply #2 on: 29 October 2006, 06:33:27 »

Gah, my Microsoft Word is stuck on American English angry Will change those few errors later on. However, for the spelling of grey and greying, both are acceptable - it's merely preference :) I've grown accustomed to Grey as in "Gandalf the Grey" :P

Thanks for the comment. Will try and elaborate on how he established the Inn.
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« Reply #3 on: 29 October 2006, 06:48:12 »

Both English as American spelling is correct here..
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« Reply #4 on: 29 October 2006, 06:59:16 »

I read somewhere on the site that the English-English is better here 'cus it sounds more old than American-English. ( grin no offense meant grin)
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« Reply #5 on: 29 October 2006, 07:49:29 »

yeah, but we're not going to bother to correct every american writer on their spelling.. i use both versions intermingled (sometimes even within the same entry, accidentally) Use whatever versioin you might feel like, but if you want to make the extra effort, no-one if going to object against you changing it all to english style of course :D
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« Reply #6 on: 30 October 2006, 01:28:38 »

I read somewhere on the site that the English-English is better here 'cus it sounds more old than American-English. ( grin no offense meant grin)

No offense taken. I'm Canadian actually, but my copy of Word seems to... not like me? I change the language settings, but whenever I re-open it they are back to American-English *sigh*
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« Reply #7 on: 30 October 2006, 01:32:06 »

Try to go to tools, choose English (U.K) and then click on "Default..." in the lower left corner of the window. That should do the trick.
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« Reply #8 on: 30 October 2006, 01:39:53 »

Made my first edit. Explains how the Mithral Minnow was very small and therefore not very expensive for Daimen and now how it has grown. Just a little story in itself to open his biography as it is the real importance of this character.
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« Reply #9 on: 30 October 2006, 02:12:50 »

Much better now, but do put the story under year 1277.
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« Reply #10 on: 30 October 2006, 06:17:37 »

The chronological biography would be in a table wouldn't it? The story in its entirety seemed a bit bulky to go there, and is, the focus of this character is the founding of the Mithral Minnow. I'll wait and see what Artimidor's preference is.
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« Reply #11 on: 31 October 2006, 05:34:48 »

Ok, some comments from here:

- Don't forget that Aesthran is not a "little hamlet" anymore due to the changes we made last minute - it is now a village, and we have Aesthran Station, which resembles more the initial hamlet (a few lines regarding that should still be put in the main entry!). Some fishermen might have left the growing village, seeing that too many guests are streaming into the inn and disturbing a small hamlet's idyllic life.

- "...said to stand at approximately 1 ped and nearly 6 handspans..." I always recommend not to mention exact sizes in descriptions. You know, this doesn't say much about a person. If you say "Artimidor was 1.84 peds in height..." - well, somehow this doesn't help to characterize me as a person, so I would just omit that. You can of course say something like "he was even smaller than an average Avennorian, which is already pretty small compared to other tribes" or something like that. This is much more "descriptive".

- Good for celebrities is always a "Personality" section - was he jolly guy, a guy with visions, a person with a good character, or someone who went straight for business, and so on.

- "The fish in question was the Mithanjor Minnow..." That's somehow not correct, as you don't talk about a special fish in the previous sentence.

- As for time tables: I usually prefer it this way, as you can see e.g. in the Knupp the Sneaker entry. Instead of time tables we make a paragraph (or two) for each life passage, and put a little caption in fron. This way one can easily skim through the entry. The captions also are more "speaking" than the numbers alone. The numbers could still be add in brackets close to the caption or put into the text if you summarize two paragraphs as you have them now.

- The Founding of the Mithral Minnow is put on top of the Biography as I see - why not put it where it belongs within the time table?

- You could stress a bit more that he specializes on the route over the Mithral Mountains, which mayhaps was not so frequently used until his time. The inn was a good opportunity to strengthen trading in this region.

- Very nice so far, Eatherion! A few more details and addtions here and there, and I'm happy with it. - For example: Maybe there's a remembrance stone somewhere where Daimen was murdered with a nice text on it or something like that. :)
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« Reply #12 on: 31 October 2006, 13:27:09 »

Will work on the rest over the course of the week Artimidor. But, was this what you had in mind for the biography? There will be more added, I just went through one little "phase" in his life and wanted to see what you thought of that. If it is what you were looking for I will complete the rest of his biography like that thumbup
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« Reply #13 on: 01 November 2006, 13:57:51 »

Will add personality section when it is completed, later this weekend some time thumbup

Other than that though, it is complete (in my mind) Comments are welcomed!
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« Reply #14 on: 01 November 2006, 22:57:37 »

Yep this form is very nice now :) - I'm busy at the moment with moving the site, but it surely looks great. Will get back to that once I have some more time again.
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