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« Reply #15 on: 09 January 2010, 01:43:53 »
Edited for Rayne's comments, think I got em all.
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« Reply #16 on: 09 January 2010, 03:43:30 »
Looks good, Agran! Just a couple small things:

Original: "The Alth’tiert is a large plant commonly found around the vents of volcanoes in the Celeste Mountains."
Change: "The Alth’tiert is a large plant commonly found around the vents of volcanoes in the Celeste Mountains. The name Alth’tiert, Kuglimz'seitre for "Yellow Plant," derives from the colour of the leaves and the dye they produce."

Original: "With egg yolk is added, it will give the mixture a little more hold."
Change: "When egg yolk is added, it will give the mixture a little more hold."

Besides these two small little things, it looks good to me! Nice work!
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« Reply #17 on: 09 January 2010, 04:01:37 »
I got em! Thanks so much, everyone. Have some Loibl Bread!
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« Reply #18 on: 09 January 2010, 04:07:01 »
::munch, munch, munch::

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« Reply #19 on: 10 January 2010, 00:15:38 »
*Chews thoughtfully* "So....what do we do while I wait for another person to help?"
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« Reply #20 on: 10 January 2010, 04:01:08 »
::chews on the loible bread:: Well, I could try to teach you magic.

You know if you turn the xeua links between fire ounia within the car'all of your piece of bread from ahm to soor and turn on the "heat" quality of the ounia, your bread will get warmer. Just make sure you don't go overboard. You wouldn't want to set your bread on fire.

Perhaps Miraran will be along soon to give his comments.  heart
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« Reply #21 on: 10 January 2010, 05:55:14 »
I think this is quite suitable as a first entry, Agran. You have already expanded quite a bit on the original entry, adding much more detail and facts. You put the original short entry into the proper template and you have all of the sections written. Nice job!  thumbup

You have mine and Rayne's approval. I suggest getting Alysse to look this over once more, too. Then, a final approval from Mira will have this blarrowed!

I'm looking forward to some more entries from you, Agran.  :)
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« Reply #22 on: 15 January 2010, 23:03:39 »
And another thumbs up from me, sorry I didn't check this before.  My RL  has been rather crazy lately, though things should be clearing up soon.  As far as I'm concerned, this can go up at the next update.

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« Reply #23 on: 16 January 2010, 04:10:09 »
Excelent, thanks everyone! Guess I should wait for Miraran before I jump for joy.
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« Reply #24 on: 26 January 2010, 18:32:24 »
Blarrowed, with one minor change; added mentioning to Myth that the information present pertains to the Kuglimz people.
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« Reply #25 on: 26 January 2010, 18:51:36 »
Prepared.
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