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« Reply #15 on: 09 January 2010, 02:30:07 »
Okay Edited for Rayne and Seeker's comments. Emvay, I didn't integrate the percussion because, unless you had told me, I would have had no of what it was, and even though now I know, there might be others who read it and not know.

Or not, everyone can of course overrule me.
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« Reply #16 on: 09 January 2010, 03:46:36 »
How about a compromise: "This long blade, forged of steel, is curved slightly granting a mid-blade percussion range when swung at an opponent. This means that a swordsman's blow has maximum impact power then striking from the middle of the blade." Or something like that?
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« Reply #17 on: 09 January 2010, 03:53:23 »
Done, used your statement Rayne, you know best!  grin
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« Reply #18 on: 09 January 2010, 04:13:49 »
Haha. Oh, I'm sure you can find more than one person who would disagree. But the entry looks good! A few minor changes:

Original: "... a swift, and when in the hands of an expert, a very dangerous weapon."
Change: "... a swift and, when in the hands of an expert, very dangerous weapon. "

Original: "This means that a swordsman's blow has maximum impact power then striking from the middle of the blade."
Change: "This means that a swordsman's blow has maximum impact power when striking from the middle of the blade." [My mistake! ::blush::]

Original: "A large cross-guard protects the Centoraurian’s hand from any of his enemies’ weapons, or from his own hand from sliding onto the blade."
Change: "A large cross-guard protects the Centoraurian’s hand from any of his enemies’ weapons, or from his own hand sliding onto the blade."

Original: "... when stabbed into an enemy’s body and turned, will leave a mess of the organs and body parts of the enemy."
Change: "... when stabbed into an enemy’s body and turned, will leave a mess of the organs and body parts behind."

Otherwise, looks good! You're on a roll, Agran.  grin
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« Reply #19 on: 09 January 2010, 04:22:34 »
Once again done! I think I deserve a shower now! Where's the gnomes when you need em...blast. *Wanders off, handing more Loibl Bread to everyone first.*
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« Reply #20 on: 15 January 2010, 23:06:45 »
I agree this looks good.  This is a nice simple entry that one can quickly get their arms around.  I think it is a good example of a basic weapons entry. 

I will give it a few days to see if anyone has anythig else to say before I blarrow it, but for sure this will be included in the next site update.
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« Reply #21 on: 21 January 2010, 20:59:06 »
Alright this one is ready to go.  Blarrowed
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