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« on: 17 July 2012, 01:49:00 »

Consumption, 'Feyronn's revenge'

Overview
This disease is named for the legend of Feyronn the Drewynn, the legendary Undead Assasin enlisted to serve Queprur after his death in 1436, who curses people that break vows or do not present him a silver coin upon their passing. Consumption is an assault of the phlegm upon the choleric constituent. Starting with the lungs, phlegm amasses to unsustainable levels, overwhelming and crowding out the choler from the lungs and eventually drowning the victim in their own fluids. A person with consumption undergoes a slow decay of health, 'consumed' by the withering of the body, accompanied by many vague symptoms throughout the body.


Incidence, Causes
Some rare healers believe this is a communicable disease, spread by sneezing or sharing saliva from another person. Others find this idea to be preposterous and disturbing. It is readily apparent to many healers and clerics that this disease is a curse of some sort, though it does tend to affect more than one person in a household. This author posits that this illness is a blight by some supernatural force or entity. In short, current knowledge of the method of contracting the illness is a guess, at best.


Symptoms, Effects
Typically, Feyronn's revenge is heralded by cough productive of phlegm that lasts more than 3 months, blood in any coughed-up phlegm, persistent fever or fever that comes and goes, night sweats that drench the sheets, and weight loss--hence the other name for this disease, consumption. Other symptoms may include chest pain especially with inspiration, loss of appetite, broadening and flattening ('clubbing') of the fingertips, and 'air hunger'--a sensation that one is suffocating or cannot take in enough air.

In most cases, a victim will succumb to the suffocation and drown in their own phlegm. This is actually a humane outcome for this disease, compared to the alternative. This process may take anywhere from 6 months to 5 years, though scholars have not determined who will survive longer with this form of the disease.

The alternative form of Feyronn's revenge is crowding out the choler in other parts of the body, not restricted to just the lungs. If the bones are withered with disease, they make break at the slightest touch or misstep. This may also happen to the spinal bones, which can become brittle to the point of collapsing after a simple sneeze. If the brain and spine are affected, a person may be stricken with Falling Sickness, delirium, or rendered comatose permanently. If the gut and belly are affected, a person will have a slow, grueling wasting which is painful atop the withering of the body. If the heart and veins are affected, the person will be rendered an invalid by the Malefic Grip. This is a very long, protracted process that often lasts from 1 to 12 years, which erodes the sanity of the afflicted.


Diagnosis
Cough producing phlegm for longer than 3 months, especially blood in the phlegm that is coughed up, is almost always consumption until proven otherwise. Tumors may also cause blood to be coughed up, so a healer is directed to methods to exclude the possibility of tumor - of which there are few. In essence, there are very few ways of knowing for sure who has consumption until the disease is very advanced already, and by that time the abundant, nefarious symptoms should make it painfully obvious that the victim is succumbing to Undead Feyronn's disease.


Cure, Prevention
There is no cure for consumption. However, there are methods for ameliorating the suffering of the remaining years of victims' lives. Hjaghrin Jeppreth, an esteemed healer and traveling lecturer from Marcogg, has advocated a conservative approach consisting of confinement to a temple of health or sanitarium, rest, prayer, drinking milk, healthy diet including avoidance of phlegm-producing foods and drinks, exercise, and avoidance of extreme weather.

In addition to these measures, Felina Esai of the Quaelhoirhim, a scholar of healing arts, has suggested some herbal remedies to assuage some of these woes.  Hot juk'lan cha from Northern Sarvonia, is purported to remedy breathing ailments, possibly by liberating stopped-up phlegm. Hearth wine, from the hearth bush, may help to fortify the defence of the body and invigorate the soul. Finally, khmeen seeds or oil can calm the cough and alleviate some of the other aches of the disease.


Lore
In the 1440s, the legend of Queprur-Cursed Feyronn arose, presumably to warn people away from treachery and as a folk tale to frighten children. It is told that Feyronn was enlisted to the service of Queprur after his death in 1436, and he now claims the lives of people who betrayed others or who go against their sworn vows. This same legend instructs people to put a silver coin in the mouth of the recently-deceased before burial, as payment to Undead Feyronn so that he might be appeased in his afterlife and not drag their soul to the Netherworld.


History
Treatment of consumption has not changed much in recorded history, nor have healers made great strides in elucidating the cause of illness. What little we know has come from observation of past paroxysms of this disease.

Consumption comes to Cavthan by sea
In 1034, Cavthan encounters a merchant ship bringing 8 living souls and 43 deceased crew members which drifted into port. All aboard are withered husks of people, gasping and coughing bloody phlegm. Soon after the unwelcome arrival, many townspeople come down with similar ailments. Town healers suggest sick people go on sea voyages, hoping that the salty air will clean their throats. Unfortunately, all 63 of the sick townspeople die slowly over the following 4 years.

Consumption strikes outskirts of Nyermersys
In Nyermersys, 1287, the outlying city quarter of Charka suffers the appearance of a withering disease or blight which runs rampant among the squatters' huts. Town officials close the city gates to anyone showing signs of illness, denying sick people access to shelter, food and healing. There is some mention of a close association of the squalor of living conditions with the chance of getting the cough with bloody phlegm.

Presumed outbreak of consumption in Voldar prison
In 1349, the prison in Voldar reports several drunkards who all strangely come down with a wracking cough of bloody mucus and night sweats within days of each other. Because it is feared that they are cursed and might spread their curse to anyone who attends them, they are sectioned off from other prisoners and allowed to die in conditions of solitude, obscurity, and ignominy.
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« Reply #1 on: 19 July 2012, 07:50:41 »

Okay, I guess this will be adequate for a first draft. Could I please ask for comments?
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« Reply #2 on: 19 July 2012, 13:57:18 »

No time for a thorough check, but a quick read found nothing wrong. Was good to read despite the content...
Is it tuberculosis?
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« Reply #3 on: 19 July 2012, 21:36:05 »

Good guess, yep it is tuberculosis!
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« Reply #4 on: 26 July 2012, 04:09:50 »

Ok, let's see what I can comment on this one, Kelancey:

- You mention Feyronn at the Overview and continue using the name, but don't really explain it as far as I can see. For one the name should be briefly explained (even if it's only in a sentence) in the Overview. Always assume that reader has no ideas who Feyronn was and what's the connection there.

- Aside from the Overview the whole Feyronn thing would be a great addition to the Myth/Lore section. That's what Myth/Lore is all about, right?

- History events will be added in an own history table. In these tables we use present tense and a caption on top of the events. Try to adjust your entries to that scheme and you'll get a nice table in the final entry :)

- You refer to "your friend/colleague" etc. in the text (great idea!), which however in general is something we don't do in Compendium entries - think about a lexicon, where objectivity is the norm and there are no "I"s in the text. This usually works in what we have in books in the Library - see your latest addition there. So you can either adjust that or mention in the Overview/Introduction that these details were gathered by your Santharian alter ego, in order to make that perfectly clear to the reader.

- You used the words "toumuors" and "tumors" - either use just one, and if it's the Santharian writing explain in brackets what you mean, or use both and explain the second spelling. Anything to make things clearer to the reader!

- I trust the general content is in order, because I've not studied medicine, so my main interest is always to get it as Santharian as possible. There are some nice touches here already. So with the adjustments I suggested this should turn out nicely - and aura +1 awaits after the next update then! :)
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« Reply #5 on: 30 July 2012, 00:44:00 »

I hope this is a bit more palatable now after some much-needed edits.

First-person references were removed wherever possible.
Lore regarding Feyronn the Drewynn was added to the Lore section.
The History section has been formatted into what I hope will suffice for a proper history layout.
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« Reply #6 on: 31 July 2012, 03:23:24 »

Is the date in the overview a.S. or b.S.?
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« Reply #7 on: 31 July 2012, 04:28:19 »

I'm revealing my ignorance here. I meant it to be a.S. for each instance, but I don't know for certain if this conflicts with more significant (read: already known) historical events. I'm just inventing these outbreaks at what I thought would be random times in not-too-distant history.
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« Reply #8 on: 01 August 2012, 03:43:26 »

Changes look fine, so aura +1 for that, Kelancey! Maybe the Overview could use some basic information on that Feyronn fellow, basically what you've put in the Lore section, just briefly summarized, so that the reader sees the connection. :) But I guess we can mark this one already for integration then!

At dates you can generally leave out the a.S. if it's current, just like we say 50 BC, but don't add AD to 1960.
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« Reply #9 on: 01 August 2012, 05:43:25 »

Yay! Thank you!

I made a couple of edits:
Some description provided on why Feyronn is connected to the disease in the Overview.
The year indication a.S. was removed from the History section, since they all occur in the common era/ after Santhran.
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