Cerubell - Plant

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Re: Cerubell - Plant

« Reply #15 on: 07 July 2002, 03:03:00 »

I did not say I was confused, it is clear to me. I am thinking of our readers and visitors. So, to best show what I mean, I will take your description and write it as you see below. It is not meant as a criticism of you but just trying to point out what I was trying to get across. You will notice I have not taken out all of your science words. But I have explained certain ones without using them. I have added a few things, only because I did not know exactly what you had in mind. Take a look:

The Cerubell, considered a medium sized plant, grows anywhere from a little over a fore to a ped in height. The stem is very smooth with many lance-shaped leaves emerging from it. These leaves are a palmspan long with tiny jagged edges along their length and attached directly to the stem from their base every few nailsbreadths. . Each year in the middle to late spring the Cerubell will blossom with many small blue flowers. Anywhere from 21 to 25 blossoms will cluster around the last palmspan of the stem. The petals are united where the sepal has opened and separate forming five seemingly single petals. These petals come to a point at their tips giving a roughly star shaped flower. The cleft shaped stamen are tucked a little in the flower while two white pistil extend beyond the petals. These flowers give off a pleasant fruity scent. During mid to late summer the petals will fall away and a small berry will start to form. Initially this berry is yellow in color but becomes a rich blue color as it ripens into autumn. When these berries ripen they are a nailsbreadth in size, juicy, with a slightly sweet taste to them.

Again this is not meant as criticism to you in anyway. This is just to show my concern. We are not just a plant book, or an animal book or any specialized book. I try to think who else will read what I have written.

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« Reply #16 on: 07 July 2002, 22:20:00 »

::waves a little white flag:: I fold. You're right. I hope you don't mind me using your description. I do think it's a lot easier to understand for those who may not be experts at plants and such. Thank you, Thuja, and I'm sorry.

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« Reply #17 on: 08 July 2002, 01:03:00 »

Nothing to be sorry about or wave a flag of surrender. All I was trying to do was help you out a bit. I have first hand experience with the language problem. Sometime the people here use a technical word and I am totally lost (not to mention many other words

). Like I already said and you have proven, you have the ability. I was trying to gently push you (OK dragging and screaming) into a fuller potential.

If you want to use my description that is fine or change it a bit to better fit your idea better. It was an example.

Now go forth and create, create, create.

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« Reply #18 on: 08 July 2002, 02:43:00 »

No, no, no.. I like your description. I don't think I could write it better myself. ::goes forth to create, trips and falls, then gets up and goes forth again:: o.o;;

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Edited by: Rayne Avalotus at: 7/7/02 2:47:33 pm


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« Reply #19 on: 09 July 2002, 14:17:00 »

Very happy flower. I like blue, but there are a few grammatical things that I noticed upon a read-through. For one, is pistil spelled that way? i may be wrong, but that's not how I see it. Also, you wrote that the flower is a delightful addiction to a garden. It might wish to be changed to addition.

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« Reply #20 on: 09 July 2002, 17:49:00 »

Oops. ^_^;; Thank you. I wrote these things at about 2 or so in the morning, so I suppose their bound to have a few mistakes. Pistil, according to my plant book, is the correct spelling, but your right, addiction should be addition.

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« Reply #21 on: 11 July 2002, 10:57:00 »

Okay. I'll remember that I was wrong about the spelling. I just find that usually if something feels (looks) like its not spelled right, it usually isn't. Because my subconcious mind is nearly as good at spelling as I am. I also almost never work while looking in a book, so I have many misconceptions oif how things are actually spelled, I'm sure.