bombox palm pic

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bombox palm pic

« on: 13 August 2002, 07:21:00 »

I drew a pic of the palm I made. I hope it's good enough at least for a tree. If it's too rough..., then don't post it.

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Re: bombox palm pic

« Reply #1 on: 13 August 2002, 11:26:00 »

Very nice sketch. One problem, may or may not be correctable. The shading. I notice that the whole left side of the tree is in shadow, but the right is sunshining. However, the shadow cast on the ground by the palm is as if the sun was almost directly overhead. This shadow should also be larger. I like the color of the piece, but I see a part of it that looks as if it were blurred. Maybe the whole pic should be blended to make it look a little less like a sketch.

What did you use for the picture? The paper must be awfully rough... And sometimes the pencil looks like it blended nicely, but at others the grain of the paper shows up horribly. I would suggest coloring it a bit harder so that the grain doesn't screw things up. Example: the light-colored background, and some of the leaves. Also, the coconuts are very dark around the edges, but light in the center. They should be completely in the shade, and thus all dark-colored; that looks as if there was glare on a smooth surface.

What is that place that is outlined vaguely with blue, and is white inside? Perhaps supposed to be water? It just distracts from the tree. The trunk just underneath the top should be shaded from the branches. Finally, the grass at the bottom (I suppose that's grass) shoud be worked on a little. It has no substance compared to the other parts of the picture. At least add some shadows beneath the blades, and some shade on the blades of grass themselves.

I hope nothing menitoned here is too hard to correct... I tried to make the things I said easy to do jsut that, I really did.

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Re: bombox palm pic

« Reply #2 on: 13 August 2002, 15:01:00 »

About the shadow: that other palm is tilted, see? Tilted to where the sun shines from, so it should be like that, I assume. As for the paper and all other things... yeah, it's pretty rough, and I could do a nicer background, sure, only I was lazy *rrrr!* The whole thing took about 15 min, I rushed. I should probably fix it. *guilty look* I'll come back with a fixed one as soon as I can.


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Re: bombox palm pic

« Reply #3 on: 14 August 2002, 08:05:00 »

Yup, I also see mainly a shading problem here as was pointed out and a lack of detail at the background. Please note that we are very choosy about using pics as we want to maintain the highest quality standard as possible for the site.

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Re: bombox palm pic

« Reply #4 on: 14 August 2002, 08:26:00 »

Sorry to say it but the whole shading thing is kinda messed up. If the sun were more overhead (as the shadow shows) then the top of the tree (mainly the left side) would be lighter. Also the trees in the back left area have shadows as if the sun were directly behind them, so the shadows are conflicting there.

I also think that you may want to work on defining the horizon a bit, on the left side it just goes to white, and the rest just kinda fades behind the tree. I think you lose a lot of depth there that would help define the drawing more. I am not sure if someone else mentioned this but the coconuts are just black outlines, I think they need some brown. I also think that more blending of the ground would help give it more of a finished look (maybe too much black mixed in?) These are simple things that I think you can fix if it is not pastel. There are certain parts that make it look as if it were done in pastel, but I dunno.


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Re: bombox palm pic

« Reply #5 on: 14 August 2002, 09:48:00 »

Hey, if I remeber right, this tree has no coconuts, but another kind of fruit, does it look like a coconut though?

Take some more time for doing your pics, say three hours, and it will be fine

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« Reply #6 on: 15 August 2002, 07:10:00 »

Yeah, you're right. I just didn't think spending so much time on a frickin' palm(!) is worth it... Well, on the other hand, I can't expect myself to do anything else better, lol. Well, I'll see if I ever pick this drawing up again. I hope I do...