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« on: 29 March 2001, 07:01:00 »
Aye! I just read the first two chapters, and feel the need to say, I'm proud to be working with such a great writer as yourself, Dala! Such a sad story so far, and incredibly well written! I was forced to use the babylon.com dictionary, more then once, to be able to fully appreciate the rich descriptions... Wow! :)
Oh, and there's just one tiny bit of a thing that just bothers me (me being a humble perfectionist from time to time) and wown't let go - in the first chapter, where you describe the dragons teeth  -you say: "each teeth"... wait - I'll have to verify that.... <<mumble.>> .. yes, I'm correct. shouldn't it be "each tooth"? please forgive me if I'm wrong!
Oh, and before I start to read the 3rd chapter - the image of katya says it's her ENTERING the forest... but she didn't even have hair, back then!?

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« Reply #1 on: 29 March 2001, 09:23:00 »
oohh... the torture! I hate to wait! is the next chapter of the story ready yet? I  sure hope to see it in the next update!! please don't let me down, Dala!?
Magnificent story! And the battle scene - with the dragons attacking the fortress - W O W! It was alive, and I was there, I could feel the heat on my face...

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« Reply #2 on: 29 March 2001, 14:56:00 »
:lol  Yes, now that I think about it, it is 'each tooth', not 'each teeth'! My grammer is putrid, it's one of my weakest points I know :(  I really should get a proof-reader or something like that! I'm very happy that you like my story so far, Faugar!! Thank you muchly for taking the time to read it :)  It's really nice to get feedback I must say!

Eh, about the blurb underneath Linda's wonderful drawing, it was Art who wrote it I assume....so you'll have to ask him about the entering the forest part..... ;)

Chapter 4 on the way! It's almost completed :)  I had to finish a stupid paper on the Colosseum first. Not being very interested in ancient architecture unfortunately, there were times when I felt like just writing these three words and be done with it; appendix : see Gladiator!

Heavy usage of emoticons here, I just realise :lol  They're such useful little buggers.

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« Reply #3 on: 30 March 2001, 07:01:00 »
Tooth thing was corrected. And "the entering the forest"-part was me, yes, have to admit that. But no, no, please don't hit me! Changed that too already;)  
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« Reply #4 on: 30 March 2001, 16:09:00 »
Thanks very much, Art! Don't worry, ain't gonna hit you, you're the best :lol  Really!

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« Reply #5 on: 31 March 2001, 07:02:00 »
Ahhhhh... I needed that... *grin*

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