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Title: The latest in poetic art from the blue-faced wonder!
Post by: Xarl on 10 December 2001, 22:24:00
And now, a poem starring the ever so aloof... Seyella!


 Grey Destiny

A tale of sadness, tale of woe
A tale of that now gone
A tale, good sir, of ancient Her
Lady who watches on

She watched the dream with happy eyes
That saw and held all dear
But then he came, the light's true bane
The watcher felt our fear

Her joy was watching the great Tree
The Tree of Life, now lost
For he, the Bane, kindled the flame
That turned the warmth to frost

The Goddess watched, but could do naught
As creatures burned and fled
At her sister's grin, as she waded in
As so many dropped down, dead.

The flame that day cost Her her sight
It shocked her to the core
The Grey Lady of Destiny
Vowed to watch us nevermore.

The Seer, the Closest, the Owl
One more remains
The Eye and Single Tear.

So it was in the Beginning, and so it shall be in the End.

Another quick job by me... Howzit?

Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system.
Xarl Bluestride
Owner of the longest sig in Santharia



Title: Re: The latest in poetic art from the blue-faced wonder!
Post by: Xarl on 19 December 2001, 18:21:00
*Loudly coughs*
It's been a week, people, HOW IS IT! I need feedback to live, let alone feed my Diegos! Look, they've resorted to eating stray ideas that you cast off! *small yips heard in background*
Hold on... Yes, Diego 8743Oogie42? *yipyipbarkyip* Bard Judith was about to integrate Calvin and Hobbes? *yip* BAD! You stole a good idea! BAD! *Hurt noises*
Anyway... FEEDBACK!

Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system.
Xarl Bluestride
Owner of the longest sig in Santharia



Title: Re: Hungry for feedback....
Post by: Bard Judith on 20 December 2001, 10:24:00
(bard, slapping her pockets and looking around in puzzlement)

hmmm...now where did I put that piece of paper with that spikehaired little guy and the fuzzy Slinky sketch?

(spots it sticking out of a Diego maw)

Xarl!  Can't you keep those things under control, out of our hair, and...and...and better fed, for pity's sakes?

(glares at relevant Diego as the paper vanishes with chomping sounds)

Hmph.  Now I'm really in a good mood to do some savage critical slashing apart of that last piece of doggerel!

Erm, hem, er...I mean, I'd love to give some helpful feedback regarding your poetry, of course, Xarl!  (mutters to self) now WHERE did that quill pen with the red ink go...?

(patting pockets again, accidentally dropping the idea about creating a new race of dog-headed, horse-tailed, butterfly-winged, fanged savage poisonous evil warriors and not noticing it flutter over to the salivating Diego....)



Title: Re: Hungry for feedback....
Post by: Capher on 20 December 2001, 10:46:00
I am not a poet Xarl, though I was taught it many many moons ago. I forget the rules, like rhyming, timing, line length, ect. But as far as the writing, I like it.

But who am I?

Wisdom is given to those whom it knows.Capher



Title: Re: Hungry for feedback....
Post by: Xarl on 20 December 2001, 19:50:00
*kicks his Diegos away*
There we go... Oh yeah, and here's your proposal that "Xarl should be made a demi-god on my level...."
(On close examination, the note is in my handwriting, and there is the unmistakable imprint of my massive sig on it.)
Anyway... M'dear Bard, I beg your indulgence and mercy regarding this poem, I kinda made it off the top of my head.

Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system.
Xarl Bluestride
Owner of the longest sig in Santharia



Title: Re: Hungry for feedback....
Post by: Artimidor Federkiel on 21 December 2001, 16:27:00
If you only do quick jobs, Xarl (and we like those!) - what would we get if you'd work on such poems a while longer?

Well, this it also sounds nice... Maybe we should put them all together and give the poems a general title?


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