Title: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Xarl on 24 January 2002, 22:02:00 Mastersmith
Smash and clang, smash and clang Hiss and steam and smash and clang. Blessed metal, Sacred heat Pounding out a firey beat. Tap and blow Tap and blow Smash and clang and tap and blow. Holy hammer deadly strike Thunder crashes through the night. Crush and heat Crush and heat Tap and blow and crush and heat. Massive world Rock and soil Glowing red from Forge-god's toil. Hiss and steam Hiss and steam Smash and clang and hiss and steam. As Sorren cools The new seas gleam All to honor Ava's dream Smash and clang, smash and clang Hiss and steam and smash and clang. So it was in the begining, and so it shall be in the end. *The inspiration for this tune was a dwarven working song; it has been mercifully truncated by the author and given a more cosmological tone.* Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system. Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Bard Judith on 25 January 2002, 03:07:00 (glances at the title)
(shudders) Oh no! I was hoping to beat him to it! (glances again and clicks on the entry, with averted eyes) (can't bear the suspense and peeks at the poem) Hmmmm...... (Looks again more carefully) (in a surprised tone) Um....well...hmm... (resentfully admitting that it's got a very authentic ring) (but still wishing she'd written it first) It looks good, Xarl. Good thing you truncated it, as Dwarves are not known for their brevity when it comes to work songs.... Only one nitpick. The second verse neither rhymes nor scans, while the rest are solid. ' Sacred metal, Blessed forge His work mirrors Foiros' torch. How about Blessed metal Sacred heat Pounding out a fiery beat or something similar? Regards from the Bard (who will translate it into Thergerim Taal once she's home at her own computer, if you like) Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Xarl on 25 January 2002, 19:02:00 Works, I tinkered with that line for a while. Allow me to make the nessecary corrections.
Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system. Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Tarquet Galbar on 25 January 2002, 19:59:00 It's CRAP! Utterly AWEFUL! YOU SHOULD DIE FOR THIS!!!!!!!! But, then again, I haven't read it, just wanted to be the first person to outright dislike one of your poems.
Tarquet Galbar, Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Xarl on 25 January 2002, 22:26:00 Just the principle of the thing, isn't it. (runs off imagining Dwarves working to the tune...)
Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system. Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Greybark on 25 January 2002, 22:44:00 Reminds me a bit of the song the goblins sang as they dragged Bilbo and Co. deep into the mountain.....
But I like it a lot.......you can almost feel the vibration of metalworking in enclosed spaces......
Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Dala Valannia on 26 January 2002, 04:35:00 Hi ho, Hi Ho, it's home from work we go!
That's the most famous Dwarven song I know, hehe ![]() *dala having a headache with blurry vision and its making her giddy and saying stupid things* I think we should nominate Xarl as our official Poet Laureate or something. Oh wait, what about Bard Judith? Can she be our Poetess Laureate then?? Title: Re: And my Muse has snuck up on me again. Urtengor? Post by: Tarquet Galbar on 26 January 2002, 22:42:00 She's the Head Bard, meaning she can smack Xarl upside the head with an instrument of some sort if she feels he deserves it.
Tarquet Galbar, Title: Re: Titles.... Post by: Bard Judith on 27 January 2002, 05:39:00 'Masterbard', please, if you must, but it makes me feel ancient when you use my full title.....
Then again, it might be a real privilege of the order to be able to smack people upside the head.... (thinks for a minute and then glances at her lute) On third thought, my lute already has a dent from when I had to threaten Koldar severely....mind you, the tone is still quite sweet, but it's got a bit of an edge... (blinks sweetly at her listeners, then flashes a green-edged glance at them, just to make sure they get the point) masterbard@poetic.com Title: Re: Titles.... Post by: Capher on 27 January 2002, 11:06:00 ::
![]() ![]() Capher, Tribes and Races Supervisor Moderator.Wisdom is given to those whom it knows. Title: Re: Titles.... Post by: Xarl on 28 January 2002, 16:49:00 Getcher new steel-edged lutes, steel lutes! All the beauty of sunlight shimmering on a sword and just as dangerous!
Musical Melee Inc. Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Arcana, Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead ferret, and tossed in the sewer system. |