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31  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: The Nysl on: 19 May 2011, 07:32:05
No worries, thank you for such a great little dragon.

I might have another bash at the Oha-ooy tree too, it would be great to think up a myth that would link the Nysl and the tree together.
32  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: The Nysl on: 19 May 2011, 07:24:32
Hrrm, so, I reckon the Llaoihrr of Sorceress' Peak (dark purple on that map below) would be your best bet - they were going to be mystical/spiriual/magical Llaoihrr, and this would give them a reason to be so!  

Of course, the Copper Nysl could easily have spread to other groups too, but in smaller numbers maybe?  The Llaoihrr of Sorceress' Peak are nice and far up the mountain, close to their usual habitat, and this is also the only place where the Oha-ooy Tree grows naturally - it's used for mage's staffs.

There is also a very nice legend about Sorceress' Peak here (By the wonderful Irid)

I hope that helps, and let me know if there is anything else I can do to assist :)

Rookie x

PS: Also, I'll have a think about myths etc, but too late now, time for my bed!
33  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: The Nysl on: 19 May 2011, 06:50:15

(More comments to follow)


*Small dance of glee*

I have to say, I love these creatures.  I'm going to take a quick look at my Llaoihrr notes and see where it would best fit - I can't see even the copper Nsyl being at home among the noise and bustle of the Council Tree, so I reckon they'd be better suited to one of the smaller Vale settlements.

Only nitpick is that you mention in the overview about them living in groups of up to 50, and then later about them being mainly solitary, coming together only for mating (apart from the copper, but even they seem to be more inclined to love in twos).

Oh and they should be fine to learn Life Magic - any sentient creature can, so long as they put in the time to learn it and have a teacher.
34  Organization and General Discussions / Newbie Information, Joining Requests and Recruitment / Re: I am new. on: 18 May 2011, 06:21:43
Hi Fizz,

Glad to see you made it on to the site :)  If you need a pointer towards anything then let me know - I respond to pms even if I'm not wandering about the boards.

Good luck!

Rookie x
35  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: Help needed ... on: 17 May 2011, 05:53:11
Don't we have super-intelligent cats and rats in Ximax already?  Which makes them "useful" really, and not what you're looking for. Some sort of scavenger bird of prey that has taken to hanging round rubish tips?  You could take a wild bird and expand on the desciption, giving it an urban version.  Rather like foxes have moved into our cities.  Maybe birds of prey that were brought in and then escaped and became feral hunters?
36  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: The silence is deafening... on: 13 July 2010, 02:16:43

Do not fret - lazing in the sun is sometimes the best thing for soothing tired muses!
37  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: The Nirakaa Fish (Commentary Appreciated) on: 11 July 2010, 00:08:51
What a great twist on an electric fish - funny, creative and beautiful at the same time :)
38  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: Dominoore Fish on: 10 July 2010, 23:46:29
Dominoore Fish

Categorization>Bestiary>Water Creatures>Fish>Dominoore

Basic Overview of the Beast
The Dominoore fish is a creature of many shades and hues, coming in many varying colours, ranging from cyhalloian snow to norsidian. It is found in the waters around Milkengrad, and in the Ancythrian sea, and has a few interesting qualities. It is a known mount for a group of rogue Brownies, and even possesses mild telepathy

With its numerous colours, light, graceful and rounded body, and rather odd appendages, the Dominoore fish is quite a sight to behold. It possesses a rounded head with four antennae-like tendrils protruding from it. Two share the centre, while another two are placed a grain above its large eyes, placed on either side of its face. Below its eyes is its small mouth, complete with eight teeth on each row, comparable to the molars of a human. Ooooo weird!  Cue legends that they were evil humans who got punished by a vengeful god? These teeth are great for grinding up plants and other small fish. On its underbelly, there are four fins, positioned as if the fish were on four legs.

One wing-like fin makes itself at home on each side of the fish. Its skin is incredibly hard and its scales rough, making it nearly impossible to spear and/or skewer. Are there areas where there are gaps in this scale armour?  Around the sides of the head, or the belly? Its tail splits into two, allowing for much faster swimming when it is required. The Dominoore Fish can control each part of the tail individually. While it jerks from side to side to get forward, the tails 'kick' as a human might kick their legs. The fish possesses the ability to greatly increase the speed at which the tails move, allowing for quick manuvers and hasty retreats, not to mention speedy travels. Very unusual for an aquatic creature, it possesses both gills and lungs. This allows for it to stay out of water, or to fly with its wings for a small amount of time. Strong muscles allow for it to jump high in the air to start the flying process. The reason for its exceedingly tough exterior is that it has a very fragile bone structure. Five ribs on each side connect to its spinal cord. Its head is made of a hard, flexible substance that differs from bone. In its tail, the bones are the strongest, allowing it to swim quickly. Bones very similar to those in a bird's wing extend in the fins at its sides. These fish also are gifted with both lungs and gills. Haven’t you said this? Dissections have suggested that, while underwater, they have the ability to completely seal off the chamber in which their lungs are located, using a think membrane.

 The red Dominoore fish is by far the smallest of its kind. It may grow up to three quarters of a fore, and these are the lucky ones. The eyes of this fish are a red slightly darker than the karikrimson palette of this unusual being. Two black stripes run parallel from its head to the base of its tail where one runs down each side. The yellow Dominoore fish is larger than its red brethren. The average size for it is one fore. Its eyes are a shade lighter than its golden exterior, putting emphasis on the shine of intelligence in its eyes. Stripes run its back in a similar manner of the red fish.

The average size for the green Dominoore is a fore and a half. Its eyes are generally a much darker green. Two black stripes make an 'X' going down its back, and curve to come around to create another 'X' on its stomach, and curving back to make to closed loops formid to Xs What’s this supposed to say?. Black Dominoore fish are the largest of their species. How come the black fish don’t get their own paragraph and all the others do?  They have an average length of two fores. A single white stripe runs down their back. Other fish of the same breed always yield to them. They are considered the dominant breed among the entire species.
Are these breeds that are bred by the Milken or naturally occurring? And how are these distinctions helpful to the species/Milken?

Special Abilities
The Dominoore fish possesses wing-like appendages that allow it to fly at an altitude of about ten peds. This is beneficial to the fish when trying to escape from predators. When preparing to fly, this fish will dive down about two peds. Then, it will begin swimming at an exceedingly fast pace. Once it has built up speed, it will quickly rise to the surface and leap hard out of the water. Then, flapping its fins furiously, it will quickly gain altitude. Once it has reached an appropriate height. It will fully extend its wings and glide, flapping his fins when it is necessary to maintain its altitude. It can maintain this for a rather long period of time before it tires too much to continue. Although you’ve added some great details here, I’m not sure that you’ve actually addressed Deci’s concern, which was more that this didn’t seem necessarily for a fish which is already well-armoured and possibly telepathic too.

The Dominoore fish is also blessed with both lungs and gills. This allows them to breathe underwater and above it while flying. To keep from drowning their lungs to the point of being unusable, their lungs exist in an air tight chambers that let no water in. They can be opened and closed by the fish, and are only opened when they are above the surface.

The Dominoore fish also has a mild telepathy. It can communicate images to its rider, and is theorized to be able to communicate with its fellow fish. It is intelligent enough to send images that warn of danger, weather patterns, the need for food, and even aggression during mating season. I would think it would be difficult for the riders(at least at first) to understand these messages- I mean fish are unlikely to have the same mental images/feelings for danger/weather/hunger etc as a brownie is.  Could be a good way of making sure you have to be taught to ride the fish properly?

The Dominoore fish is primarily found in the rivers around Milkengrad, and also in the Ancythrian Sea and rivers stemming from it. Milkengrad is a city on the coast of the Sea of Tears, in the Sarvonian province of Vardynn. They are sometimes found in other areas, but this is rare as they tend not to swim far from their birthplace. When a River Runner brownie maybe add a small clause here to explain who the River Runners are?  Something like “...River Runner brownie, the group famous for training and riding the fish,” leaves his or her group, they often take their fish with them, traveling in other bodies of water, and sometimes selling them for a reasonable sum of money, as they are valued for their exceedingly tough scales.  Surely this would be very rare - they’d have to be pretty desperate to kill and sell their only means of transport?  Unless the fish died already I suppose.
The Dominoore are both fresh water fish and salt water fish, so they can survive in the ocean or a river.  They are usually found toward the surface of the water. Many believe that they do this because of their fragile bone structure. They believe that even slight changes in pressure cause discomfort for them. When they are undomesticated, they generally wander in groups of two or three. Usually, the largest fish naturally becomes the undisputed leader for the group, although a larger fish may come along and dethrone it. These leaders can be fish of either gender, though the females have dominion over males if the two are relatively the same size. The genders of the members of these groups can vary greatly. Well, not that greatly....they’re either male or female.... There is no “norm” for this. Their behaviour is generally quite docile, except during mating season when the females become very competitive.

Socialization is a major part of the Dominoore's life. Because of their telepathy, they have regular communication. If this were true, they could easily warn each other of coming danger, pass on food-related information, and even instigate games or sometimes brawls in mating season. The last two sentences don’t quite make sense together – one is written as if they are definitely telepathic, the next as if it’s only a rumour.  Choose one and stick to it! ;) They will often chase each other around in their own version of the game of tag. Several accounts of travelers along the river have seen them show kindness to each other, snub feeble attempts at mating, and a few have even claimed that they were having a telepathic argument, though this cannot be proven.  Again, adding “though this cannot be proven” doesn’t change the impression given by the rest of the paragraph.

The normal diet for a Dominoore is plants found in the water, including various algae, the yealm reed, and the waterstar. Their teeth are made for grinding, and they put them to good use. However, if the need arises, they may eat smaller fish about a nailsbreadth in size. If food becomes extremely scarce, they may even resort to eating their young in the early stages of life.   Sounds good!

During mating season in Sleeping Dreameress, one would think that the males would get quite competitive over the fine female candidates, but this is not the case. It is the females who butt heads, slap each other with tales, and bite like crazy. There cannot be more than one female in a traveling group of Dominoore during this time.  So what happens to the other females?

The actual mating process consists of a courtship dance. The females will find a nice spot in the water, and begin swimming in wide, broad circles. Any male who comes along may enter the circle from below. The female will then stop in front of him to appraise her potential mate. If she finds him acceptable, she will resume swimming in circles around him, making them tighter and tighter until they are almost touching. Next, they will both swim to the bottom of the river or body of water. The female will lay the eggs, and the male will fertilize them. A female can lay up to one hundred eggs at a time. As the female then dies, the male will cover the eggs in the silt at the bottom of the water, and proceed to watch over them until they hatch, during which time they must fend for themselves. Male Dominoore Fish usually lives around ten to fifteen years. The females usually reach breeding age around five to seven years old, as is their lifespan.  Nice details

It should be noted that in the rare event of crossbreeding, crossing different colours of the fish may give varying results. When fish of a different colour mate, the vast majority of the offspring will be the colour of the larger breed. The majority of the offspring are female to compensate for the death of the female fish whilst giving birth. after laying her eggs.

For many, this multicoloured fish is woven into tales of exaggerated mystery. An old legend says that if you catch one, it will grant you one wish if you promise not to eat it, and to immediately let it go. If you do kill or eat it, then not only will your wish be unraveled, but bad luck will haunt you for the rest of your days. The old legend was written in the form of a poem, and children in the area sing it often to themselves:

If ever a Dominoore you find, catch it and demand your wish
With luck, it will respond in kind, “If only I be not ye next dish.”

You may ask for treasures of body soul mind, but be quick in you request
Or quite soon you’ll find, that they will trick, discuss and jest

Anything this fish will do, to escape back into the water
It will flip, twist and smack you, be you woman, child or squatter

Be careful in what you say, for they will twist, snare and butcher your words
You may end up as a dull bale of hay, and never again be you heard

One use for the Dominoore fish is to make a very tough and thick armour. Their scales are exceedingly impregnable, and many layers of them make for an incredibly strong armour piece. As one would notice upon consumption of a Dominoore fish, they are far from appetizing. In fact, most would empty the contents of their stomach after trying one. Only the Helcrani men see consuming as a testament of proving their manhood. Thankfully, the River Runners have found a more practical, if not exactly legal, use for them.

The River Runners are a rogue group of Milken Brownies who raid boats and innocent travelers along the river. They have incorporated the Dominoore fish as mounts to ride on. Exactly how they do this is rather interesting.  They take advantage of the speed of the fish. When a Brownie is riding on a fish, the fish may not fly. Instead, it can manage quick and powerful jumps along the river to reach its destination.

Because of the Dominoore's telepathy, each River Runner forms a close bond with his or her mount. This makes the fish fairly easy to train, and they are highly obedient. The River Runners run them through various exercises to increase their stamina and to allow them to attain greater speeds.

You’ve got some great ideas Eldor – this is probably the most unusual fish I’ve ever read!  I even think that you might have too many different ideas – there’s a danger of this being a super-fish with the telepathy, flying, armour-scales, wish-granting and intelligence.  Personally I would take one or two of those abilities out and use them for a second fish/creature, as I like to leave the most important ones to shine.  But that’s really up to you as the author!

I do think you need to go through the whole thing and make sure you’re clear that the fish-to-fish telepathy is rumour only.  One way of doing this that I find very useful is to make up a researcher and put in a quote from their research where they basically say everything you want to say.  That way it isn’t certain, because its still only one researcher’s opinion, but you can get in all the details you want to and plant all the arguments which will convince your readers.

And if you’re going to convince Deci that the boat-raids are possible, why not put in a short account of an attack?

From our IRC convo the other day I think you were going to add in some more about how they steer/train the fish?

39  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Bestiary / Re: Dominoore Fish on: 09 July 2010, 03:33:00
Give me until saturday and I'll have a look too!
40  Santharian World Development / Santharian Artists Workshop and Resources / Re: Thiefling Monkeys Pic on: 25 June 2010, 04:19:16
+ Aura from me too!  They're wonderful - the fur on the blue one looks especially velvety where it catches the light.  I want one!  Please? 
41  Santharian World Development / Brownie Development / Re: Who's Doing What? on: 07 May 2010, 03:34:02
Done  thumbup
42  Santharian World Development / Brownie Development / Re: Here be Brownies! (Maps of Brownie Settlements) on: 06 May 2010, 05:38:43
They're in the same area as the Trumarim, it's just I never was exactly sure where that was!  Sorry *hangs head in shame*  Need to find my mouse before I can sort that out.....I've hidden it somewhere.....
43  Santharian World Development / Magic in the Lands of Caelereth / Re: Life Magic Rewrite on: 04 May 2010, 01:03:55
Thankyou! :)
44  Santharian World Development / Brownie Development / Re: Here be Brownies! (Maps of Brownie Settlements) on: 04 May 2010, 00:52:12
There we go! :)
45  Santharian World Development / Magic in the Lands of Caelereth / Re: Life Magic Rewrite on: 02 May 2010, 23:00:18
Done!  (Fox's corrections plus a bit of phrase-tweaking from me.)

Fox:  I couldn't spot any Sarvonias or Santharias that weren't capitalised.  There were a few "santharians" and "sarvonians", but they're adjectives and I don't really like capitalising them, although I know the computer tells me to for things like "a french table" or "a german house".  It just looks weird to me when I give them capitals :P

Azhira:  I just can't see me getting back into everything, sorry.  Too much to read! :P
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