Yes, you do use apostrophes when using a possessive s  ... apart from when you use the word it as the possessor. So yes, you go bear's food, cat's tail, John's skateboard, but Its food, its tail, his skateboard.

You can believe me on this one ... I teach English amongst other subjects for a living and that is one thing I know for sure. It is just one of the many idiosyncrasies about English that make it so wonderful to teach.


Yes, those colours makes it much easier on the eye, thank you.

 

I am completely blown away by this picture of yours, Seeker ... well done!

 

Thank you very much for this information, Capher. It is very much appreciated. I was having a lot of trouble working out exactly how the crescent part of the axe was supposed to look, and be joined to the rest of the Sengren. This helps me greatly.

I think I have integrated everyone's comments into this entry so far ... so I suppose I should set up cookies and milk to attract new revisions of it.

Well, it is freezing to us ... we never get snow here Yesterday at school, some kids were wearing gloves, scarves, multiple shirts, multiple jumpers, track suit trousers ... and a couple of the female teachers also discussing buying skivies and tights (I presume stockings) to school. I was just in a single jumper (and long trousers, of course), shoes and socks but it was plenty cold for us.

I had to send one girl home yesterday morning ... she looked really awful. Some of the kids wanted the windows to be opened ... I said not a chance ... I was pleased that my two playground duties were out on the oval ... at least that way I got to stand in the sun.

-1 degrees centigrade for us this morning ... and apparently it is going to get up to 19 degrees centigrade or something like that.

Sorry if I came across as snippy in my last comment, Grendal, it wasn't meant to sound that way.

Is absolutely freezing! 2 degrees centigrade this morning and it is meant to be -1 degrees centigrade tomorrow morning. As I said, absolutely freezing!

Congratulations Seth

yes ... all noble children of the Kyranians (male and female) received training with weapons ... the Sengren, a bow and one other weapon ... they worked in groups. When they reached the age of maturity, the noble chidlren were required to serve in the military for a set period of time. Those who showed particular promise in the weapon continued on training it, those who didn't, dropped it after a while.

Thanks for your comments, Valan.

Capher indicated to me that the weapon was always made completely out of metal. Capher said that there were a couple of reasons for this.
1) For the axe to have a wooden handle, it would have to be much bigger to be as useful on the field. That would mean additional weight, slower reaction times, etc.
2) With the whole weapon being made of metal, it was virtually indestructible, that it would have to be melted for it to be destroyed.

Garrett's intention with the axe is that it is only used by nobles. So, while yes, it would be more expensive, the nobles would have the sans to throw away on them.

I have still yet to contact Capher about the issues that Seeker raised earlier about the Sengren ... I'll do so now.

When I saw the first version, I thought William Shakespeare for some reason ... I've got no idea why, because it no longer looks like him to me.

EDIT: Oh ... I see the source of my confusion ... it was the Bard's other picture that made me think of William Shakespeare. The 'A little B-Day present for a wonderful sage...' one

Oh yeah ... good point on the thrown weapon thing ... excuse my dumbness please.

Oh ... so you were actually meaning humans had difficulty pronouncing it because of their tongue? I see

Glad to have been of help.

Hi Silvartius,

I have just run my eye over your entry for you. Overall it looks good to me. Before I get into those comments, I'm wondering whether you'd consider changing the subject of this entry to 'Inkfish: The Aquatic Master of Disguise'?

I did see a few things that weren't clear to me ... so I've raised them below ... hope it is of help for you.

In ‘Description’ paragraph 2 …


The above sentence almost reads to me as though you are saying that people eat the ink of the various inkfish. Is that what you meant to say? If you are meaning that the flesh of most of the other inkfish is good to eat, you might think about putting that in.  One thing I am certain of, however is that paralyzation should be paralysation.

I’ve noticed that you have inkfish throughout your entry with a lower case i, and that when you mention chameleon or chameleon, that has a lower case c. I’ve also noticed that each time you’ve mentioned ‘Kraken’ it has a capital K. Does ‘Kraken’ refer to the proper name of a single creature as opposed to a species of creatures? If not, you might want to consider changing it to a lower case letter as well or having inkfish and/or chameleon as capital letters.

On first reading, the following sentence from your ‘Territory’ paragraph wasn’t clear to me. Then I reread the sentence before and realised what the sentence was referring to.


Would you consider putting a ‘therefore’ before ‘cheered in this sentence? In any case, it really should be an inkfish in that sentence, not a inkfish.

Apart from those really minor things, it looks good to me! 

Yes please Seeker, that would be greatly appreciated. Whenever you are able to do it would be fine with me. That sounds like a great idea to me.

I like your weapon here, Grendal ... I maintain that my picvture is worse ... anyway, here are a few comments for you ...

1 The Human Tongue in Santharia is called Tharian ... you might like to use that instead of 'The Human Tongue' in your entry.

2 I love 'Those blasted melon splitters'.

3 I assume it is wielded one handed? You have hinted that it is in the entry, but I'm not sure that you have specifically identified it in that way.

4 This next bit doesn't make sense to me ... (it is in the last paragraph)

I think you left out a word in there. I also think it might be better as two sentences ...

Maybe ...

The blades of these were made of aurium covered in runes that were said to be the names of every being that fell victim to the dwarf. No one knows for sure as anyone who got close enough to see them were added to the list.

5 I also noticed a couple of double spaces between some words, and some other places where a comma seemed necessary. Try reading the entry to yourself. If you find you need to take a breath, add in a comma there.

I like your entry overall Grendal ... I hope my comments/opinions/thoughts were of help to you