Does Caeaar's Hold become Vaederins, Dekthyr become Jaelynn, and Dalash become Myrmodin after the March of the Darkest Knight, or would you like to keep the original names? According to the text it could go either way. (Maybe the village west of Cardos could possibly take one of those names?)
Will the bridge by Denring look like the one to the west of the Heath? I would guess that it would be one of the largest bridges in the the Heath of Jernais or second largest, though Evergrey could be larger.
I really like the detail of the landscape of Heath itself, and it looks very accurate to the way it is described. The windmills, the farmlands, and even the tree farms are all there.
OK - I'll keep this on my development schedule then. I PM'ed him as well, but so far no response.
Once I have a working draft, I would prefer to set up a separate thread for it - call it version 2 - in order to keep the original text in this thread as a reference.
I agree that the Jernais map is fine the way it is, and I'm looking forward to the more detailed Vardınn map. It is so nice to see the final layout of the entries with the pictures all integrated together, including the picture for Denring which you suggested to include in this update.
This may have been mentioned somewhere and I missed it, and it may not be significant, but I only have one question so far. Which is the oldest triplet and which one is the youngest, Nettle or Daffodil?
Elves don't know ideas in the human sense, abstraction is something strange to the elven race. An example: Altough their language posesses its own word to describe beautiful things (aváth) this is a word always implying the conrete beauty of things. The human word "beauty" and all theoretical consequences deriving from it cannot be understand directly by elves. This is the reason why they speak of "ésh-aváth" (the "false" aváth) when refering to a human abstract expression of beautiful things.
Is this entry still being worked on? I would love to develop Raevalem, and could use some of the material and the comments here as a starting point, but I would like permission first. I see it is says "On Hold, Raevalem 0 Priority" on Valan's schedule, but I'm not sure if this means the entry is available upon request.
Yes, it was a lot of research. So much was contributed about the Heath of Jernais, apparently over the course of years and from several different writers, and I wanted to include as many references as I could.
Thanks Artimidor and Dek, for your high compliments.
I changed the number of farming villages from ten to eleven - I realized that the diagram and text did not match when the Vardınn map was drawn. I have also added that some of the inland water sources are from Twinnean Peak as well as the volcano in order to match the map.
I added an entry for the Raevalem colony to my development schedule, as part of my effort to get a better grasp of the trade between Northern and Southern Sarvonia (and as requested by popular demand ).
To start to expand on the Heath in greater detail, I have also added an entry on the town of Denring to my schedule, which was previously listed on Garret's "up for grabs" list.
I really like the new sizes of Denring and Cardos - Denring really stands out now as a town.
I have changed the number of villages from ten to eleven so the map, diagram, and description all match. Would it be too much trouble to place the newest village further south, along the diagonal road, instead of where I have it in the diagram? I would prefer to change the diagram. That way the three villages described in March of the Darkest Knight - representing Caeaar's Hold, Dekthyr, and Dalash respectively - all lead up along the path to Denring.
It looks like Rayne has three areas of water which are coming from a source other than the volcano (south of the city of Jernais). I guessed that they were coming from Twinnean Peak? I modified my entry. If they are coming from a different source than Twinnean, let me know and I will change it.
I must admit that your map is actually more accurate than my own diagram of it - in my text I describe 10 farming villages, Denring, and Jernais (12 in all), which is what you have, but I have an extra village in my diagram.
I'm guessing that the bridge will come later, as this is a work in progress. Cardos looks very majestic with those towers overlooking the river. My only question is about the overall number of houses there - I'm not sure if Cardos would be the size of the central town of Denring or smaller, since Cardos is a farming village rather than a town? It's up to you though, as I don't know how badly Denring was damaged by the raid.
It is nice to actually see all of the small roads connecting the villages, as well as each village looking unique.
I also added banegasse cheese to the heath's exports. What can I say? I like the cheese entry
I would definitely like the Heath of Jernais to be considered as a masterwork.
I have also updated my development schedule -
The Stormcloaks are my primary interest in trade by sea, but I also wanted to develop areas on the Sarvonian mainland. I wanted to expand the world of the Erpheronian merchant somehow, but that could be just about anywhere, since that network is so vast.
After working on the Heath of Jernais entry, I now know that I want to focus more specifically on developing the area surrounding what I am calling the "Milkengrad-Carmalad" trade route. Spanning from coast to coast, It looks like a key route for Erpheronians, where the natural barriers of the forest to the north and the mountains to the south make the Heath of Jernais an appealing place to travel through by land (for both trade and unfortunately for war).
The Heath of Jernais was definitely not an easy entry for me. Then again, I did not pick it for simplicity, but rather for its unique challenges!
Below is the diagram I created only to reference the accuracy of my descriptions. With so many different aspects to coordinate, I felt the need to "visualize" possible layouts of the heath for feasibility.
My reasoning for shifting Denring to Liosa’s location is that it would make Denring a more desirable place for Jaeth Turncoat to attack in “March of the Darkest Knight”, since overtaking this town would then leave the bridge vulnerable.
Questions so far:
1. I have only found the suffix “-nais”, meaning heath, to be previously documented as being Aerpheriane in origin (in the Erpheronian entry). But I had made up the part about the prefix “Jer-” to mean "flower". Do I have permission to do this or should I rephrase it?
2. I'm still not quite certain about capitalizations, unfortunately. For example, when I refer to the area as "the Heath" instead of the whole name "Heath of Jernais", do I capitalize "Heath" or leave it lowercase?
3. Is my Styrásh translation (“Prán Merínís”) correct?
4. I found the history of the heath to be very complex. In particular, the choices were not always easy where to use the vast amount of already existing history, and when to fill in new history. For existing history I put in where the previous allocations were, based on the "Complete History" listing in the compendium.
What should I do when I just want to add a sentence, but I like the existing phrasing? (Ex. Do I just add the Centoraurian immigration sentence to the messaging system improvements in 184 a.S., write a completely new history entry, or do without the Centoraurian sentence?) How do I add two existing relevant entries during the same year (ex. The destruction of Jernais and the Battle of Four Swords, both occurring in 282 b.S.?)
5. I am not quite sure how to include/phrase the other Myths/lore. I have listed ones I have found and mentioned the other entries using cross references. I would like to mention the other stories but not go into too much detail at length.
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