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« Reply #15 on: 30 October 2006, 02:06:22 »

Had a lot of building to do but I manage that and now it is ready for comments!  :)
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« Reply #16 on: 01 November 2006, 05:09:30 »

Ok, had another look here:

- I see you've now integrated the surrounding properly, e.g. by mentioning the Hawkeye Quarry, so that makes perfect sense to me. :)

- Here and there I would add some small references to explain things a bit better, especially when you look around first on the site to see how gnomes usually build their homes. E.g. when you write the following line I would adjust the rest in yellow like that:

"From the outside it doesn't look like a gnomish house at all - while typical Gnorian gnome houses are usually small and squat and Golgnomes build their homes up in trees, the Daran try to impress with very human structures. This is the case at Nolan's Inn as well, which is quite a large, square shaped building, the lower floor made out of the granite stone from the Hawkeye Quarry and the upper one made all of wood.

- Location: Should include the precise info you now have at the beginning of the Description as well.

- D’S’T (Dara'saq'turik)  - suggest to add "Daran drinks brewery" in the brackets as well here.

- Function: A bit more could be added here that the inn became famous for the gnomes living there. Maybe first workers from the Ironwell Mines stayed there for longer periods, and in the course of time it became some sort of attraction. Maybe some gnomish specialties are served as well.

- The rest I like, maybe I can add a bit here and there still upon uploading in the final version :)
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« Reply #17 on: 01 November 2006, 05:28:36 »

Finished working on Arti's latest comments!
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« Reply #18 on: 02 November 2006, 06:16:23 »

I think of drawing a layout for Nolan's Farm. Does it have to be in correct measures?
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« Reply #19 on: 02 November 2006, 06:44:31 »

Uhmm... Layouts aren't that much use on the site in an entry, unless you want to do a little map and make rooms with descriptions and a little interaction in Santhtalk. You could walk around then that way and talk to people of the inn in case you write some dialogues.

I personally encourage that, because that's the whole idea of this program - to make it come alive by adding small areas with persons in it and thus make Santharia interactive and accessible.
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« Reply #20 on: 03 November 2006, 04:20:00 »

I'l have to think about that.
And everything else, is this version of the Farm OK?
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« Reply #21 on: 03 November 2006, 06:51:13 »

Yep, I will try to do the descriptions of rooms and maybe some of the people for Santhtalk! And of course the layouts of the rooms to.
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« Reply #22 on: 03 November 2006, 07:27:05 »

I can only give a final check once I'm done with the whole site migration thingy.

If you do Santhtalk rooms, don't worry about the format (textfiiles and such), but just collect the descriptions, talk keywords of the rooms in one document and send it to me (or post it somehwhere), and I'll take care of the rest. A rough map how the rooms are connected would be nice.

You'll get some more examples on how this could look like once I upload an updated version - 20 or so additional rooms in the Nepris area are prepared by now, but this will have to wait until after the site transfer.
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« Reply #23 on: 04 November 2006, 06:13:43 »

I'l first make some layouts and then e-mail them to you.
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« Reply #24 on: 10 November 2006, 04:44:55 »

Ok, I've marked this entry now for integration, though a few more details and linguistic ornaments here and there would still improve it. So when I look through it again upon integration, I might add a sentence here and there like I did at the Svaq entry, okeydokey? :)
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