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« on: 03 December 2006, 10:34:06 »

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« Reply #1 on: 03 December 2006, 18:33:10 »

Hello Niccoli. I have a few remarks about this weapon.

-What is the use of concealing the top blade if you have to use both hands to use it? I think using both hands would be kind of conspicuous, so there's not really that much point in concealing it.

-I have the feeling this is greatly inspired by the Miraje Fingerblade that Decipher is working on. Maybe just a little too much?

-I think you could expand quite a bit on everything. For example, your origin does not explain why it was first created. Apparently, it already existed if the assassins could use it to sneak into the enemy camp. Also, I believe (though I could be wrong) that it was more common that the people sneaking in were soldiers, not assassins, who used swords. And fire, most likely. So why were it assassins here?

-I do think you could invent a better name for it, don't you? "Sabotagifying" isn't even English, the English term would be "Sabotaging".
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« Reply #2 on: 03 December 2006, 21:59:49 »

And  your history section needs a bit of work as well.
Milkengrad is occupied (mostly) by Helcrani, who would think that stealthy assasination is way below them. The Helcrani are a proud people who value the honor of open combat.
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« Reply #3 on: 04 December 2006, 05:16:54 »

sorry, went a wee bit stir crazy. Probably shouldn't have posted this anyway. If i could just remove it I would.
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« Reply #4 on: 05 December 2006, 09:14:40 »

you could remove it by editing your post to blanks, i think.

It does sound somewhat like the finger blade. Also to stab through a piece of siege equipment was a little too much of a stretch. I think if you concentrate more on the sheath of the weapon, and the mechanics of that, maybe even make a little prototype using a paper towel tube, you will see what you are proposing is awkward at best. You would not be able to swing your arm with enough force if you had your other hand crossed across your chest holding the backend of the tube. Try it, you may find it fun, the elbow angle is just not right for what you suggest, you'd almost to have to have a position of folded arms across your chest with a throwing motion, to even get the blade to angle into something, so this entry as you say definitely needs more work.
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« Reply #5 on: 06 December 2006, 01:01:39 »

Please do not erase your posts. It may remain here as a lesson to others, as we usually do with failed or abandoned entries.
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