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« on: 25 August 2007, 17:32:20 »

A tribute to Coór. A Mockery to Ava.

Avá the Lady Fair you are called
While Coór the darkness is his name
In your mighty dream he was enthralled
That means both of your will are same

Avá the one, you created all
Even the mighty beast that we fear
In your mighty dream, he is your thrall
In your mighty dream, he first appeared

Avá the fair, you are such a fool
You can't even see your own mistake
In your mighty dream he is your tool
To corrupt all of your children’s fate

O Avá the fair, this is your dream
Yet you can’t heal the wounds of the world
Such a pity you are not supreme
Now let us meet in the Netherworld!



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« Reply #1 on: 25 August 2007, 21:11:19 »

I like this one Shansi/Helvil!

But I am notoriously bad at poetry commentary, so I have put one thing to say that I noticed:

Avá the fair you are called
While Coór the nothing is his name
In your dream, he was enthralled
Yet you cannot destroy him,, what a shame

This part kind of throws it off beat....perhaps just 'What Shame!'
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