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« Reply #15 on: 17 July 2008, 21:27:31 »

Ahhh, 3rd person, first sign you are going mad.

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I had a Myth/Lore section, but it got lost somewhere along the line. *Shuffles through notes* Ah, here we go! Stuck that on the end.

Nsiki, I think that in the case just the simple description of the steaks is enough. Eventually I have a cook who will write a book with seafood cooking, and I'm going to save it for that if you don't mind. He's currently an in-progress entry, but a I need to write up a few more fish before this receipt book.  ;)

Thanks for the approval, I'm going to be bold and take the liberty of blarrow cause you said its good, Deci,  other than that section... so yeah. I'm so bad. Of course, if someone needs me to take it down cause somethin that I goofed on strikes you I will be more than happy to oblige. :)

Yay! Progress is made...
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« Reply #16 on: 17 July 2008, 21:42:57 »

Hi Dru, I only reread the mating section. it is fine, the hurting of the female is ok (and if I do say this, then it is ;) ). There is just one sentence which is odd

"Only about half of the eggs will actually be born"
The eggs are not born, the fish :)

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« Reply #17 on: 17 July 2008, 21:46:53 »

Glad you're okay with it, cause yes, I was mainly afearin that you wouldn't like it. ;)

No problemos, the eggs are no longer born, the baby fish are.

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Then take me disappearin' through the smoke rings of my mind,
Down the foggy ruins of time, far past the frozen leaves,
The haunted, frightened trees, out to the windy beach,
Far from the twisted reach of crazy sorrow.
Yes, to dance beneath the diamond sky with one hand waving free,
Silhouetted by the sea, circled by the circus sands,
With all memory and fate driven deep beneath the waves,
Let me forget about today until tomorrow.


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« Reply #18 on: 17 July 2008, 23:32:00 »

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