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Author Topic: 'The Poetpriests are Coming...'- A poem by Deci  (Read 4703 times)
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« Reply #15 on: 09 February 2009, 08:12:25 »

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Beware the that tricks he may try,

Surely: "Beware the tricks that he may try"?

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« Reply #16 on: 09 February 2009, 18:59:09 »

As Smee once said, 'that' is a very sneaky word, and it just loves to sneak into any and every sentence when your not looking. I'm not sure 'that' is actually vital in this sentence. Not saying it can't go in the sentence. With my very, very limited knowledge of poetry, I'd say it all depends on the the tempo, or whatever the proper term for it is. :)

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« Reply #17 on: 10 February 2009, 01:34:06 »

Yep, adding 'that' is not neccesary but it evens out the metre much more!
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« Reply #18 on: 11 February 2009, 21:18:55 »

So...Blarrow Blarrow Blarrow?
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« Reply #19 on: 15 February 2009, 18:57:34 »

BUMP!



Hmm...I may seem pushy...but thats only because I'm pretty sure there are no more errors in this!
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« Reply #20 on: 15 February 2009, 21:53:54 »

Am I wrong, or is "'ppraiser's" spelt wrongly?
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« Reply #21 on: 15 February 2009, 22:23:10 »

I think it comes from 'appraiser' with the a dropped, not 'praiser' ;)
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« Reply #22 on: 15 February 2009, 23:36:40 »

Ah. I'll get my coat, shall I?
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« Reply #23 on: 17 February 2009, 04:34:12 »

Ok, marked this one as well for integration :) - Though I see that the orcs from the north have troubles with the subtle use of words in the verses hailing from Nybelmar...

Anyway, I was just wondering to which poem page we could allocate this poem... It's not really one that one could call "a religious poem" methinks, it's more about people reacting to something, or about people... So more a Misc. poem... Maybe we could also add a poem page that deals specifically with Nybelmarian stuff? Any suggestion?
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