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« on: 24 June 2010, 04:01:25 »

Authors Note-I am not a poet or a singer, but, I felt drawn to write this. Pretty sure the rhymes are funny to anybody who reads this, but, I did my best.


The Song of Sadness has a rather interesting origin. A young half-elven bard, a Jarem Alke, composed the song in tribute to his mother’s tribe, and has used it often when travelling too the different inns he plays at. The song is made in memoriam of the 18th of Chúh'querín, the day when the orcs raided theCYRATHRHIM  and overturned the ovens in the elf’s houses, setting fire to much of the forest. While the Aellenrhim elves do not sing the song, themselves preffering to simply remain accepting of the past, Jarem was influenced heavily by his human blood, and wished to write the song so the day can be remembered.


Oh come all Aellenrhim
Hear our tale of woe
The Darkfriend have come, with sword and bow
The Orcs have come,

Oh hear our cries
Our blood has been spilled
Oh hear our cries
Our families have been killed

Death has come
To the beat of the drum
Our homes are burning
The Orcs have come, despite our yearning

Hear our screams
Ava listen to your dream
Our world is tearing at the seams
Is this what you have deemed

Oh come all Aellerhim
Hear our tale of woe
The Darkfriend have come, with sword and bow
The Orcs have come

Forgive us Twelve
Pardon our wrongs
Forgive us Elves
And hear our songs

They are burning
Is this our earning
The tides are turning
They are burning

Is this our fate
Our death we await
Are forever lost
Consumed by the cost

Oh come all Aellerhim
Hear our tale of woe
The Darkfriend have come, with sword and bow
The Orcs have come




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« Reply #1 on: 24 June 2010, 04:32:59 »

Here our screams ---> Hear our screams
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« Reply #2 on: 28 June 2010, 07:36:28 »

Fixed the here problem, but I forgot to color the changes, and now the corrected version is saved over the old one.

I also changed the icon to the correct one.
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« Reply #3 on: 28 June 2010, 08:18:09 »

I think you need to remove September from your introduction.
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« Reply #4 on: 28 June 2010, 17:08:49 »

I got bored and tried to translate this into Styrash.  I hope no one minds.   :)

Unfortunately, I didn't get very far before running into problems, mainly the lack of vocabulary and certain constructions, such as passives (as far as I could tell).

          Telor Glasajias

Rethaiah Aellenrhima
Rolgeyaiah glasajthim iuiias
Rethanhe enh Mohisyrorin e scaliam am e kardalaiam
Rethanhe enh Eferaniin

Stygeyaiah lolithian iuiias
Eraisiti pharmar iuiias
Stygeyaiah lolithian iuiias
Coorsiti rhaem iuiias

Rethanhe Cartuulen
...

I'm afraid I don't have much to say about the actual entry though.  I never really understood how poems and songs work. 
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« Reply #5 on: 16 July 2010, 03:38:45 »

I fixed the September bit, and as for it being in Styrash, I figured it would be rough to translate so I say we could always slap a disclaimer on it.

"Has been altered to rhyme in Tharian and make more sense."
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« Reply #6 on: 14 September 2010, 07:14:16 »

Seeing as how it's been awhile since anyone commented on this...any comments?
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« Reply #7 on: 15 September 2010, 22:30:17 »

Though the song is lovely (in a sad sort of way...) I wonder if such a song would be elven in origin given the races' outlook on life. Do elves remember such events with a kind of sadness as this? I am no philosopher, nor do I fully understand elven culture, but I think elves would see a tragedy as something in the past, something tragic but to elves there is no point in time that bears such focus. The elves live in the Dream, an ever changing flow of life that has ups and downs but a focus on a single tragic event is something more akin to human attachment.

Or am I over-thinking this thing?
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« Reply #8 on: 16 September 2010, 03:39:16 »

No, you're not over-thinking, Azhira - I guess you're spot on with your comment here!  thumbup

The elven way of thinking forms more and more if we take all the things into account that were mentioned e.g. in the Netherworlds/beliefs discussion. And part of these discussions is to establish the elves as a race that is entirely different compared to others. So this is a very good example where elves clearly differ.

Most elves would appear to humans as "indifferent" or "accepting" to events like these, especially when they're ages and ages past. The elves are passive, neutral and death just means to fall back into the Dream in order to be reborn again. On the other hand it is very human to "live in the past", sulking about missed opportunities, lamenting about losses or even praising the good old times, and on the other hand imagining one's self to have accomplished goals in the future and revel in that thought. With other words: Humans tend to live in the future or the past, and in their presence try to make a dent in existence. Elves not so, their primary goal is to maintain the equilibrium.

So yes, Agran, the poem can hardly be attributed to elves I'd say. Now you might perhaps make it a human one instead and adjust several things related to it - introduction and poem itself, because we really should stick with elaborating the differences in the races!
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« Reply #9 on: 18 September 2010, 10:01:54 »

Hmm, I see yall are saying. Would it be acceptable to alter it and make it a bard's...or minstrel's, whatever they like to be called, song? Or would it be better to scrap this?
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« Reply #10 on: 20 September 2010, 07:45:38 »

Oh don't scrap this song, Agran. With a little alteration, it can be made to work. The main point is that it is unlikely to be Aellenrhim in origin (or elven at all, for reasons given above). Likely, a human bard wrote it in remembrance of the this particular event. The elves wouldn't recognize it, nor would they sing it, given their philosophy and culture, but who says a human couldn't write it for them? Or maybe a human with some Aellenrhim blood in their family wrote it as a means to remember an ancestor.
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« Reply #11 on: 20 September 2010, 15:48:49 »

I think that a part-elven bard may sing it, just because his human side tells him to. I wouldn't scrap it, though. Make it work, and keep it.
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« Reply #12 on: 10 October 2010, 01:51:37 »

Changed overview, finaly.
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« Reply #13 on: 10 October 2010, 23:26:34 »

I'll take this one in as well, Agran - though I've added the date 293 b.S. now in the overview so that the context is there. Plus I've changed the Aellenrhim references to Cyrathrhim, as you forgot about that in the actual song! :)
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