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« on: 27 June 2010, 10:52:03 »

First Mates Log, The Flying Dragon, 1548, 17th Day of Burning Heavens

It has been three weeks since we left the port of Strata.  We have been caught in a Doldrums, no wind for five days now.  This may change, for we see dark clouds on the horizon.  Captain Grelbin has told the crew to prepare for a storm.  He claims it will be a severe one.

First Mates Log, The Flying Dragon, 1548, 19th Day of Burning Heavens

After a day and a half of the worst weather I have seen in many a year, we have come through it, though a bit worse for the wear.  Mainsail is damaged, the mizzen mast snapped and became entangled with the mainlines.  The Bowsprit was completely torn from the bow.  Seaman Vasturs was lost overboard, and no sight of him has been found.  A few other minor injuries to the crew, but nothing too serious.  Our greatest loss was that Captain Grelbin was hit on the head by falling timber.  It has been over half a day since he has been conscious.  The ships surgeon does not hold too much hope for his recovery.  I have therefore taken command of the ship and ordered all able men to begin repairs.

First Mates Log, The Flying Dragon, 1548, 21st Day of Burning Heavens

Repairs are going as best as can be done.  I am beginning to think we were blown off course much further than I had originally presumed.  We have spotted an island to the west where none exists on my charts.  It is surrounded by a thick fog, but we have seen the tops of mountains and birds overhead.  I have ordered us to make for the island to finish repairs there.  The Captain has not yet awakened, and the surgeon has expressed doubts that he ever will.  May the gods bless him.

First Mates Log, The Flying Dragon, 1548, 22nd Day of Burning Heavens

We have reached the island.  I, nor anyone in the crew, recognize this island.  We are fortunate that we have put into a beautiful blue harbour formed naturally from the land.  A white sand beach beckons us, but I have put off sending a landing party.  The fog that envelops the island surrounds us, making me quite uneasy.  On the morrow, we will land a rowboat and gather supplies and hopefully a tree large enough to make into a mizzen mast.  If this be blessing or curse, I do not know.
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« Reply #1 on: 01 July 2010, 03:39:53 »

Note: I'm not sure if the word "surgeon" is too modern or not, it seems to also specifically mean a "doctor on a ship", so maybe the term even derived from there somehow? Not a native speaker here, so just wanted to throw this in.

Anyway, looks to me as if your crew is landing on "the Island"... Problem is that the background story should more or less stand before adventures can unfold there. You know, otherwise it reminds me something where a lot was happening when someone reached a certain island, met/fought inhabitants and its about everything and nothing in particular. Therefore I recommend to get the background stuff sorted out first and have already in the back of your head what's behind it. Even if you construct a story that comes from a completely different direction you should know what's possible and why.

BTW: I guess that's always a great rule in general when you work on dramatic matters:

1) Decide where your story should go when you start it. This requires to know the rules in what kind of environment you're working (magic island, fairy tale, you name it).

2) Start off entirely elsewhere and lead to the dramatic point. Add twists and turns as you go along if necessary and where applicable. Either way you need to know what's possible in your environment. (A classic approach would also be: Start off with harmony, break the harmony as this creates drama and resolve it at the end.)

So basically what I wanted to say: First things first, or you might get into trouble later on.
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