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Phara ach Artajthe
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« Reply #15 on: 27 January 2012, 22:49:43 »
Altario: Implemented. Thanks for help.
 Awkward sentence: I will try to explain feud :) Feud I tried to describe was present in antique Greece, and is present in rural parts of Albania.(among Vikings, Serbs and Croats, Iranians, Kurds and as far as i know in every society with clans).
Example:If man from clan A kill man from clan B(In that way of thinking: clan A take warrior from clan B). =>Justice is to clan B take warrior from clan A. (A tooth for a tooth ).=>Every man from clan B, try to kill any man from clan A (not necessarily murderer).
In this way of thinking individual is not legal subject. Clan is legal subject.
Athviaro: I like his sense of humor to. :) It is very good.
Judith: It is great honor when your poem inspire someone, especially a lady. And when it inspire creation of such a beautiful picture. Can I give aura?
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« Reply #16 on: 27 January 2012, 22:59:01 »
Suggestions implemented. Ready for more.
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« Reply #17 on: 28 January 2012, 03:04:22 »
Concerning your picture, Judy: It's a great idea to use the masses of ravens up there to suggest a kind of bad omen, the inevitable fate - this part is very well done! Also the background sky is very effective and reused or not, it does its job very well!

I have a bit of a problem with the face part however, which I think isn't quite as good as it could be. I assume the intention is to show the foreshadowing of death on her partly dark face (could even be literally a raven's shadow...), but the black interferes a bit too much with the face and/or the transition isn't soft enough. It might also be worth a thought to engulf the whole body half a bit in darkness so express that she's in transition, but that's just an idea. Basically I think a bit playing around with it could make the central idea behind it work better. But with everything else I'm quite happy! thumbup
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« Reply #18 on: 28 January 2012, 10:20:34 »
 :D Phara, I understood what you were trying to say, just pointing out that how you said it was a bit awkward.  There are some places where you removed the strike out words, but failed to put in the yellow replacement words.  Maybe take a second look at my revisions.

If you have further questions, let me know.  I'll get to the next Poem tomorrow. :)


Judith;  A wonderfully moody pic full of emotion and as Arti says, foreboding.  thumbup
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« Reply #19 on: 28 January 2012, 11:01:10 »
Implemented.  Waiting for tomorow. :)
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« Reply #20 on: 30 January 2012, 11:15:28 »
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« Reply #21 on: 30 January 2012, 11:50:54 »
will work on pic, just busy in RL atm.   Got back from immigration office with good news regarding our new visas (and hence our ability to remain in country, work, and live for next two years!) 
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« Reply #22 on: 30 January 2012, 12:25:24 »
Don't they know who you are?  It should be automatic. :D
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« Reply #23 on: 30 January 2012, 18:23:07 »
Are they not grateful that you want to stay and falling over themselves to persuade you?
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« Reply #24 on: 04 February 2012, 11:16:38 »
No more sugestions?
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« Reply #25 on: 25 February 2012, 03:57:04 »
In immortal words of Erick Theodore Cartman: " SScrew you guys Im going home"        ,,!,,
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« Reply #26 on: 25 February 2012, 04:04:27 »
Statements like these don't seem to be the proper way to communicate around here, Phara...
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