The Kharim River (Caaehl'heroth) WIP

Comments ahead!

- Your mentioning of the "Hero's Pool" reminds me of that orcen tale posted in the Library... I hope it's possible to finally get this on the site as well, and that there's a way you can compromise on Talia's comments without having to change everything dramatically. Especially as the myth is also referred to in this entry. Anyway, here's hope for that, I really liked that one!

- I assume the picture we have in the Caaehl Mountains entry is actually Hero's Pool, so in that case we can use the picture here as well, eh?

-Didn't find anything problematic throughout the whole entry, Azhria

You have a firm grip on your area, where tribe development (Aeh'os'th'er'oc and Kaaer'dar'shin), history, geographical environment, even myth and lore with the Hero's Pool tale all come together and add something to the general picture. Like this river, which is not just a river - and as we can see one can write a whole lot about something which seems rather simple like water flowing from A to B... *haha*

Even fauna and flora are richly present, even the famous stone/rock crab is here, which has crept through a dimensional hole from Tamriel, maybe with a shortcut through the Netherworlds or something...

Anyway, very much enjoyed the read, Azhira! Good to see a vision of developing an area being followed, and adding the missing parts of the puzzle bit by bit with such love for detail!

And here's the nitpick portion of this post with some minor things to fix:

- "During the winter, the Kharim and Avessa at this location tend to freeze over come winter..." - Could better be written "Come winter, the Kharim and Avessa at this location tend to freeze over for the months of the cold period..."

- "Oun'tran'phu fields" is a proper name, so you should write it "Oun'tran'phu Fields". Same with "Themed'lon forest", "Caaehl mountains" further down.

- "Finally, the Kharim's journey is at an end when it exists into the seas on either side of the peninsula." - *hehe* I'm sure it still exists there, but I would propse to let it "exit".

A bit further down again: "Finally, the river exists..." - I call that existentalism à la Azhira! cool

- "eastern most side" - should be "easternmost" methinks...

- "Herds of ulgaroth and Thunderfoot beasts ..." (thunderfoot)

- "coloration" (colouration), "behaviors" (behaviours)

- "For generations, both of the fish has been a food staple for the orcs and Kaaer." (have)

- "In the river young red salmon (also known as "kuk'arg") hide under logs, undercut banks and riffles to avoid predation. ." (a full stop too many)

- "...rekindles the Salmons' interest..." (salmon's)

- "This we know from an albino fish that the Injerín elves noticed returned to the same location on the upper Luquador each fall." - There seems something missing in this sentence...

- "Karfu's celebrated his victory by casting his weapon into a pool ..." (Karfu)

- "This belief likely stemmed from early elven druids who had settled the Themed'lon after the destruction of the ancient realm of Fá'áv'cál'âr." (stems ... who settled)

Okeydokey, that's what I've got... Oh, and of course an aura +1 and a round of applause! clap