Time to bring in another diety!

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Time to bring in another diety!

« on: 16 March 2002, 20:56:00 »

Festival of Flame

Writhe and dance
Leap and prance
Before the high one bow
Flirt and grin
Enjoy the sin
Leave all but here and now

Watch the temple dancers
Laughing in the flame
Rise from your seat and join them
To call and do the same

Writhe and dance
Leap and prance
Before the high one bow
Moan and pant
Scream and rant
Leave all but here and now

Feel the power burning
Within body and mind
Release it and enjoy it
In fire, solace find.

Writhe and dance
Leap and prance
Before the high one bow
Want and crave
Lust depraved
Leave all but here and now

Join your fellow dancers
In happiness and pain
The Great one is with all of us
Make pleasure in his name!

Writhe and dance
Leap and prance
Before the high one bow
Laughter and fears
The future nears
Leave all but here and now

Because the future looms above
With terrors of the past
Many will trust the God of Lust
And pay the price he asks..*

Writhe and dance
Leap and prance
Leave all but here and now
But in the end
The One will send
For those who took his vow...

So it was in the Beginning, and so it shall be in the End.

*Trust...asks. This is an allusion to an earlier work by the elven poet Dar'Sideous; meant as something as an answer to the way he used it.

For Etherus, obviously, but tell me. Does it convey the proper effect?

Xarl Bluestride, Archmage of the White Tower of Ximax (c.a. 5 B.S), Master of the Magic Forum, and generally cool guy. All requests are to be written on the back of a ten-dollar bill (or equivelant thereof) placed on a dead spraypainted ferret, and tossed in the sewer system.
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Edited by: Xarl at: 3/17/02 7:14:27 pm


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Re: Time to bring in another diety!

« Reply #1 on: 18 March 2002, 01:38:00 »

okay- first of all, i really like it. but i have a few questions.

i've quoted two sections below- and while i like them very much- i'm not sure worshipers would make festival "songs" negative...

onders this for a minute: i'm not even sure i know what i'm saying here- :lol

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Flirt and grin
Enjoy the sin

Quote:
Because the future looms above
With dark terrors of the past
Many will trust the God of Lust
Yet not pay the price he asks...

"Popai n'o sonko ligta luc for'is a ment'ik, popai o sonko lighta lac o mart."
Sor'inyt saying - "Ask not why the sun sets, but why it rises."


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Re: Time to bring in another diety!

« Reply #2 on: 18 March 2002, 11:45:00 »

This isn't written by a worshipper, this is written by my Archmagical self after observing one of these festivals. The last one was meant to be at a slower, more somber pace than the frenzy I was trying to generate with the rest.

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Re: Time to bring in another diety!

« Reply #3 on: 18 March 2002, 12:00:00 »

sorry then!
in that case- i like this very much indeed.

"Popai n'o sonko ligta luc for'is a ment'ik, popai o sonko lighta lac o mart."
Sor'inyt saying - "Ask not why the sun sets, but why it rises."


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Re: Time to bring in another diety!

« Reply #4 on: 18 March 2002, 12:01:00 »

Fair enough....then my major critique is...

You left the 'e' off "writhe". Put it on, and I will applaud the balance, rhythm, and sardonic design.

(grins)

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Applause.....as promised.....

« Reply #5 on: 21 March 2002, 07:46:00 »

(bard leans back and slowly claps hands together)

Good work, Balance! Way to go, Rhythm! How about that Sardonic Design, eh?

(grins cheekily at the Magus and pops another potato chip into her mouth)