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« on: 09 December 2002, 21:29:00 »

Ok, this overview is something you would read on the back if this was a book. So it doesn't ruin the whole story:)    

Overview - Merver and Lechuza are good friends that are masters of the Mandolin. Together they have become a legend in Strata for their wonderful music. They have played anywhere and everywhere there is in Strata, but now the duo become tired of the same crowds, people and places. They decide to travel around the rest of Sorren. They become a travelling duo of two of the most gifted Mandolin players Sorren has ever known.
They travel north into other cities such as: Thalambath, Bardavos and Marcogg.
Merver and Lechuza begin to enjoy what Sorren has to offer until they encounter a small plot to kill their idol Ervez Liluz. The organization plans to assasinate Ervez during one of Merver and Lechuza's performances in Santhala. Together they must find a way to save their idol and still complete their performance in one of the biggest concert in all of Sorren's history.


Tell me what you think, I would really appreciate suggestions to improve this idea.

Edited by: Artimidor Federkiel at: 12/10/02 6:53:29 pm
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« Reply #1 on: 10 December 2002, 18:24:00 »

Sparta? Where is Sparta? This is a greek town , not a good choice for here.
Somehow you have to improve your English , I can't say what exactly is wrong, it is more a feeling. I see, that an interesting story is behind it, but  try to write it a bit more compact  and interesting???

Maybe more like this?Or better...

"M.and L are musicians who are masters of the mandolin. They are good friends and together they became a legend in their native town(?) Sparta. Their wonderful music is a pleasure for old and young. They know by now every place in Sparta, every pub, every major house where they were invited to play in, they played on the nearby hills and down where the town meets the river....But everyone who stays at home won#t grow, every artist needs new impressions to get better (take a better expression here). so both decide to leave their home town and to travel the whole of Sorren. (don't know if explore is the right word here).
...mention now which towns they visit..

Edited by: Talia Sturmwind  at: 12/10/02 12:39:25 am
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« Reply #2 on: 10 December 2002, 18:40:00 »

and I would remove your first part of your sig, otherwise we will have an angry webmaster and we don't like this, do we? ;)  

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« Reply #3 on: 10 December 2002, 19:11:00 »

Ok, well thx... darn I knew that city didn't exist:lol  the city I'm thinking of does exist in Santharia though...umm...STRATA.:lol  Got it

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« Reply #4 on: 10 December 2002, 23:07:00 »

Sparta, Strata, same thing(almost) :lol  

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« Reply #5 on: 11 December 2002, 11:27:00 »

I chase you two in the sewers to get lost and robbed by the thieves there, how do you dare to write Sparta when you think on Strata! SPARTA! ***desperately looking at the screen*** I hope you will read the entry of Strata thoroughly before writing your story, otherwise you won't have an easy life with me!!! ;-)

Any questions welcome. Btw, why don#t you take Bardavos as an artists town for a start? And how do you plan to leave Strata?

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« Reply #6 on: 11 December 2002, 20:56:00 »

Oh, and would you mind inventing the Mandolin before you go any further?

Description, History, Famous Mandolinists, a picture link, and a couple of original compositions scored for mandolin, if you please?


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« Reply #7 on: 11 December 2002, 22:20:00 »

ok, but for the famous mandolinists... what should I do for that... and the original compositions?

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« Reply #8 on: 12 December 2002, 02:22:00 »

Well, you have to write some songs of course!:lol  

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« Reply #9 on: 12 December 2002, 10:16:00 »

It was a JOKE, Atrii, for pity's sake!







Hmmmm....

on second thought, it's still a good idea...

(looks over the tops of her glasses at the ranger)  Yes, I think we DEFINITELY need an entry for the Mandolin.

But you may be excused the compositions.  [My darling husband just bought me an electronic keyboard for Christmas, which I will be hooking up to my computer, so....] (rubs hands gleefully)

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« Reply #10 on: 12 December 2002, 18:06:00 »

hmmm... ok. A JOKE? :lol  well it is hard sometimes to realize when something is a joke on the boards:)  

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