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Rayne (Alýr)
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« on: 21 March 2003, 21:24:00 »

::sighs::

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Aftermath

The emerald blades weep crimson tears.
On slender stalks stand flowers
Stained into a livid red
By a thousand scarlet showers.

The saffron sun in her cerulean dress
Surrounded by lazy cloud–ships
Now caught behind an ashen sky
Like a permanent eclipse.

The haunting moans still echo through
The crowded Queprur's field
Where the bravest souls had fought,
And a hundred fates were sealed.

And as the silver rain streaks down
So will tears streak down the face
Of a mother whose son has flown
Up into Avá’s holy grace.

In the plain where men were felled
The vilerats ‘round them creep
Whilst butterflies land upon the dead,
And bow their heads to weep.

Edited by: Artimidor Federkiel at: 4/10/03 2:35:38 pm
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« Reply #1 on: 22 March 2003, 17:22:00 »

Also breathtaking, all but one line:

Of a mother whose son has flown
Up into Avá’s grace.


The last line here lacks a word... perhaps "Ava's holy grace?"


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« Reply #2 on: 22 March 2003, 18:23:00 »

Perfect! I was looking for a word to put in there and couldn't think of one, but that's great! Thank you! ::hugs him 'till he turns a soft shade of Xazure.::

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"There is much misjudgment in the world. Now, I knew you for a unicorn when I first saw you, and I know that I am your friend. Yet you take me for a clown, or a clod, or a betrayer, and so I must be if you see me so. The magic on you is only magic and will vanish as soon as you are free, but the enchantment of error that you put on me I must wear forever in your eyes. We are not always what we seem..." -Schmendrick the Magician, The Last Unicorn
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« Reply #3 on: 23 March 2003, 00:35:00 »

*throws pen and paper into a bonfire and sinks onto the floor*
I am no poet... I am rubbish...
You are a poet Rayne...a very good one too


From sunrise to sundown I live my life as a song.
Listen to the songbird, don't ignore it.

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« Reply #4 on: 23 March 2003, 01:31:00 »

Gah! No, no, no!!!

You are a wonderful poet, Lucirinia! I have read your poetry, and have found it to be incredibly powerful. You have an astounding talent for words and language. You are a poet, and a extraordinary one at that!

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"There is much misjudgment in the world. Now, I knew you for a unicorn when I first saw you, and I know that I am your friend. Yet you take me for a clown, or a clod, or a betrayer, and so I must be if you see me so. The magic on you is only magic and will vanish as soon as you are free, but the enchantment of error that you put on me I must wear forever in your eyes. We are not always what we seem..." -Schmendrick the Magician, The Last Unicorn
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« Reply #5 on: 11 April 2003, 07:19:00 »

Moving this wonderful poem to top so it isn't neglected - if it can go in the next update that would be great

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« Reply #6 on: 11 April 2003, 07:35:00 »

*pokes Judy* This one is already up - see previous update;)  


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