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Altario Shialt-eck-Gorrin
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« on: April 10, 2007, 08:52:40 AM »

Name: Altario Shialt-eck-Gorrin (Altario Golden Shield in the ancient tongue)

Gender: Male

Age: 35

Race: Human

Tribe: Remusian

Occupation: Land Holder

Title: Adventurer

Appearance: Having been adventuring for the last few months, and not wanting to draw attention to himself, Altario has taken to wearing common, everyday clothing.  These include; tanned leather breeches, a baggy cloth shirt, hardened leather boots, and a tanned leather jacket.  Most of his clothing has been patched, rather poorly, by himself

Height: 1 Ped, 2 Fores, 1 Palmspan

Weight: 1 Pygges, 7 Hebs

Hair Colour: Black with hints of grey at the ears

Eye Colour: Grey

Physical Appearance: Altario is an impressive man, tall with a large chest, though not muscular.  In fact, he appears a little gaunt, though he is quite healthy, mostly due to his privileged upbringing.  What mostly catches other's attention is that he exudes a strength and confidence, and will always look you in the eye. He has that innate aura of someone who has always been in control of his environment, though the lines around his eyes and the little areas of grey hair at his ears betray the fact that this is no longer the case. 

Altario has cold grey eyes that are quite piercing.  He is handsome, but in a mature, weathered way.  When he smiles, somewhat more uncommon than in days previous, dimples appear on both sides of his mouth.  He has a wide scar on his left forearm, a souvenir of a battle long ago.  His black hair falls to his shoulders, longer than he would normally wear it, but the rigors of the road have forestalled any attempt to cut it.  It is kept neat, though, as is the two day growth of beard that adorns his face. Altario sometimes walks with a limp, mostly on cold early mornings, depending on how his right knee feels, as old age is beginning to creep up behind him.

Personality: The cliche “strong silent type” was invented for people like Altario.  He is not one for small talk and prefers to only voice an opinion when it matters most.  Although not officially belonging to any group of knights, he has a strong sense of honour that he adheres to.  It is this honour that keeps him going when his mind and body beg for rest.  Though a born leader, he now prefers to keep a low profile, and tends to act as adviser.  He remembers what it is like to laugh and be happy, though he has found no reason to in many months.  Sullen would be too strong a word, whereas distant would be more appropriate.

Strengths:
------ Altario is an educated, intelligent man.  He can read and write, though he speaks no languages other than his native Ice Tribe language and Tharian.

----- Altario is very competent with sword and shield, as well as a lance.  He can also handle a bow, though only somewhat better than average.

---- Altario is the son of a wealthy landowner in his homeland, thus he has access to funds by producing promissory notes to elites almost anywhere within the lands of the Ice Tribes.  His reputation is beyond reproach and his need for money is minimal, so he usually has no trouble getting money if he needs it, as well as food and a roof over his head.  He is extremely careful not to over use this advantage, and in fact, prefers to keep his wealth to himself.

--- Altario was raised around horses, and is an excellent horseman.

----Altario, being from a wealthy home, fits in well with the elite society, and is quite at home there.

Weaknesses:
----- Altario is on a quest to find his 14 year old daughter, Nayriss.  This is what drives him.  However, it makes him somewhat noncommittal in his dealings with others.  This can germinate into a trust issue, as his priority is now, and always will be, his search for Nayriss.

---- Altario is haunted by the memory of his wife, Riztalyana, who died 8 years ago.  She appears to him in dreams; sometimes offering confusing portents to the future. This makes him agitated, due to the insomnia and vagueness of the dreams, and is a strain on his sanity, leading to bouts of depression.

--- Altario's personal tragedies have caused him to leave his estate, and have expressed themselves in bouts of depression, manifesting itself in drinking binges and gambling, providing he has the money earned from adventuring.

-- His quiet nature, coupled with his commanding presence is often mistaken for haughtiness.  This often puts people ill at ease around him who do not know him.

- Altario does not make close relationships.  He tends to be an outsider, with no real enemies, but no one that would call him “friend”.

---Because he was raised as a landowner, Altario sometimes finds it difficult, if not downright annoying, to deal with "peasants".  Likewise, he finds it difficult to treat other races as equals to him, as he has battled with most of them at some point or another.

----Altario distrusts all temples and clerics because of the secrets that Sebastian kept from him.  As well, he distrusts all types of magic, as where he came from they had been laid waste to for many years by magic.  These are types of racist feelings that he has found difficult to overcome.

---Altario has begun to feel the effects of age, and his right knee is beginning to stiffen on him, especially in the mornings, or after riding for long periods of time.  Cold weather also brings on the stiffness.


History:  Altario Shialt-eck-Gorrin, Altario Golden Shield in the ancient tongue, is the older of two boys born to Johkbar Shialt-eck-Gorrin, a wealthy landowner in Remusiat, at the northern edge of the Heath of Wilderon.  Their estate was known as Urimpaar, and they raised horses that were often sold to the army.  This estate had been in their family for countless generations, from the first patriarch, Teletar, of whom legends recount tales of him fighting with a Golden Shield. Being heir, Altario had a childhood that was spent learning to rule.  He was tutored 8 hours a day by a score of scholars, and trainers.  As a child, Altario was a quick study, and excelled at his lessons, making his tutors, and his father, very proud.

Though close to his younger brother, the wild and impetuous Denrykmar, Altario was secretly jealous of his younger sibling's freedom.  While he was given little freedom between his lessons, Denrykmar was allowed considerable latitude.  When their parents died from plague when he was only 16, Altario became head of the household, and his responsibilities lent him limited time for himself, which drove him and Denrykmar apart. 

At age 18, Altario met the beautiful Riztalyana, and the two fell instantly in love.  She was a young cleric, a healer that was being trained in a temple not far from Urimpaar.  A year later, Altario’s daughter, Nayriss, was born in a tough birth that nearly cost both mother and daughter their lives.   

Immediately after Nayriss’ birth, Altario served his country during the Fifth Orcish War.  Serving with distinction, he proved a capable leader, and a fine strategist.  When the war ended, Altario returned to Urimpaar, which had miraculously escaped the carnage unscathed.

For the next few years they led an uneventful but very happy life together, and when Nayriss turned 6, Sebastian, the cleric who had been most responsible for training Riz, insisted that Nayriss enter schooling at the temple.  Though hesitant, Altario could not dissuade Riz, who had sided with Sebastian, and the young girl went to train to become a cleric.  Shortly after, Riz died while giving birth to their son, who died days later as well.  Altario was devastated.  Following Riztalyana’s wishes, Nayriss continued her education at the temple. 

It was then that Denrykmar left Urimpaar, the family home, preferring the solitude that life as a ranger granted.  Altario has not seen him since, and only knew that Denrykmar was alive from the occasional promissory note that would come in for petty amounts of money.

The years passed without incident until 8 months ago.  After coming home for a visit, Nayriss was kidnapped while on her return trip to the temple.  There was no ransom demand, however, and it was then that Altario garnered the truth from Sebastian.  Nayriss was becoming a healer of substantial talent, able to call forth the power of the gods.  Altario learned that Riztalyana had also had exceptional skills.  It was in Sebastian's opinion that dark forces had taken Nayriss, though he had no answer for why. 

In the intervening months, Altario had been in search of Nayriss, following any clues to her whereabouts though, for the most part, the clues all led nowhere.  The last clue, given to him from a former ranger he had known in the war, had mentioned that she was in Santharia, in a province called Vardynn.  More precisely, in a town called Jernais.  So it is there that Altario now travels in his search.

Altario’s despair has begun to manifest itself in drinking and gambling.  As well, in his dreams, Riztalyana has begun to visit him, urging him in his quest.  He will never give up looking for her, and will scour the world over until he finds her.  He sometimes joins with others in quests to earn his keep.  He prefers to keep his identity known to only a few, as he does not want Nayriss’ captors to learn of his whereabouts.

Weapons: Altario keeps a dagger with him, once encrusted with gems, though long since pried out and used for money when his drinking and gambling had been excessive and unlucky.   His only other piece of equipment that is worth anything is the longsword he keeps always strapped to his hip.  It is the symbol of Urimpaar; his fathers elegant weapon, exquisitely crafted and etched, perfectly balanced for killing.  For hunting, he carries a rather nondescript bow and a quiver full of arrows. 

Belongings: In his saddlebags, he carries his equipment; a flint and steel, a sewing needle and thread, dried meat, a sharpening stone, and a change of clothes, finer than those he currently wears.  His horse has a worn but fine quality saddle, saddle blanket, bit, bridle and reins.  He carries a rope tied to the saddle, and a large cloth sack that holds his shield with family crest; a silver lightning strike across a black background.  He keeps it hidden except when a show of importance is required, but has a battle worn shield strapped to the horse that he uses when needed.  A waterskin hangs from the saddle.

Familiars: Altario rides a strong chestnut gelding, which he has taken to calling Horse, as he has gone through five horses so far in his quest.  It is a good horse, but in no way special.
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« Reply #1 on: April 10, 2007, 09:00:54 AM »

Your CD looks good, but please use the right icon. Players are only allowed to use the pencil icon or the yellow '!' icon.
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« Reply #2 on: April 10, 2007, 09:19:53 AM »

I apologise...this is my first attempt at this...I'm VERY excited about this though...I love to write but have had little RPG experience.....I'm trying to absorb about 800 pages of info right now...I hope you will bare with me while I make mistakes...I have a deep imagination and hope that in time I can add to your world in a productive way...
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« Reply #3 on: April 11, 2007, 12:49:52 AM »

As long as you are willing to learn from your mistakes, there shouldn't be a problem.

On a quick glance I noticed that you did not mention a tribe. I'd just like to say that everyone here has a tribe. It defines your appearance, and to a lesser extent your personality.

Also, we do not usually allow nobility to be played, because they have too much historical influence.
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« Reply #4 on: April 11, 2007, 01:08:19 AM »

Thx for reading and commenting on my CD, it's appreciated.   My tribe, I'm still researching, any hints would be appreciated.  As for the nobility part...Altario is noble, but it is in a country a long way off, and will not be something that I will exploit.  Other than the occasional free meal and lodging from nobles here, I really don't plan to use it to influence the game, however, it IS a big part of what makes him who he is, and shapes his outlook on life.  I don't want it to be an advantage in the game, just the direction from whence he came.  For the most part, it will be his secret from the world, except for, perhaps, the odd Catillion, where his dancing skills and manners will come in handy.  I will not try to shift any balance in the game.  (If I do, by accident, my kingdom can be overthrown by an evil tyrant or a band of Orcs, etc.)  Like I said, it is just a direction that I wish to come FROM, not toward.
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« Reply #5 on: April 11, 2007, 01:13:35 AM »

Well what he is saying is that you shouldn't be a noble. Too muc influence whether or not you try, cause all nobles do something to influence history, whether or not noted for. Maybe you should try someone famous, like maybe a world renowned dancer or something. Or maybe try someone that can talk people into giving him free stuff or just be someone that money from inheritance where a rich uncle that owned a business and died and liked you so much to give you money. Try something besides nobility, even if it is that you own a shop.
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« Reply #6 on: April 11, 2007, 05:23:54 AM »

THE ERPHERONIAN MEN ("AERPHERONIANS", "PROUDMEN")
THE REMUSIAN MEN
THE KASSITE MEN
THE KYRANIAN MEN

I'm thinking one of these 4 tribes for myself.  Still researching.  As for the nobility thing, I guess I can change it to being from a wealthy family, which would still afford me the background I need for the character.
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« Reply #7 on: April 11, 2007, 05:37:16 AM »

Weivoc, I believe that you mixed up the ban slightly, a very common and easy to make mistake, which I have often done myself.

Altario, its not against the rules to be a noble, just to have certain titles, such as King, Prince, queen, thane ect. because they carry historical significance.  Other than that, you can be any type of noble you want for the most part.
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« Reply #8 on: April 11, 2007, 06:13:30 AM »

ok...yes then i am confused...isnt the definition of being a noble to have the title??

The Human Helcrani
This would be another tribe i'm contemplating, as opposed to THE KYRANIAN MEN, whom i just discovered are extinct.
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"Ack!" - Bill the Cat
"I did not have sex with that woman, Monica Lewinski." - President Bill Clinton

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« Reply #9 on: April 11, 2007, 11:48:49 PM »

I'll look up for you what the ban says exactly and let you know. However, a wealthy landowner would work quite nicely ;)

I'd go for the Erpheronians if I were you, they seem to fit your character best. But that's just my opinion ;)

Edit: this is what the ban says:
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Those with too much influence
This category is made up mostly of nobles and political leaders, but also includes some others who wield too much influence or political power to be used as Player Characters.

However, after 'lord/lady' is is stated that it is allowable if there are no special occurrences like the whole family dying or something. You can look this up in the Restrictions thread, to be found in the left hand bar of the forum :)
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« Reply #10 on: April 13, 2007, 08:32:39 AM »

I've reworked some of the suggestions into the CD, and polished it somewhat.  I hope I can get some more criticisms on it.  Not trying to seem impatient, and I am waiting my turn.
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« Reply #11 on: April 17, 2007, 10:56:14 PM »

Hey, Altario!

There are some more comments that I have

-You mention 'churches', 'abbey', 'father'. We do not have these things. We do have temples, which is where his daughter might have gone to study.

- please put the horse from belongings into familiar, which is where it belongs ;)

I think that's all I had to remark for now, when you've altered these things I will give you a uri :)

With regard,
Simonne
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« Reply #12 on: April 18, 2007, 01:23:42 AM »

Thank you Simonne for your comments and help.  I have made the requisite changes and look forwrd to your next post.
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« Reply #13 on: April 23, 2007, 08:25:21 PM »

nothing for 6 days...just a freindly bump  :P
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"Ack!" - Bill the Cat
"I did not have sex with that woman, Monica Lewinski." - President Bill Clinton

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« Reply #14 on: April 24, 2007, 01:36:27 AM »

I don't see anything wrong, but I'm not nit-picky, so I didn't check for spelling or grammar issues along the way. I will be back later and look tough, hopefully, if time permits.
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