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Jituska Kouba
Hungry Nymphet
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« on: October 18, 2007, 01:13:29 AM »

Hello! I've been hanging around this site for a while now, and I recently decided to make a character. When I told my friend about it, she wanted to create a character as well, so we made a brother and a sister. She will be posting soon. I hope I did this all right!
With regard,

Name: Jituska Kouba
Gender: Female
Age: 12
Race: Human
Tribe: Caltharian
Occupation: /
Title: Hungry Nymphet

Height: 1 ped, 1 fore, 5 palmspans
Weight: 1 pygge 2 ods
Eye colour: Brown
Hair colour: Blonde

Physical Appearance: With her 1 ped and not quite two fores, Jituska is a small girl for her age. She's quite skinny, with an underfed and unhealthy look to her. Her large brown eyes seem too big for her face, which is screened by dirty blonde hair bound together in two braids, both usually in some state of looseness. As soon as they don't resemble braids anymore, Jituska's brother Tojzek braids them again for her.
Her skin is pale, with freckles around her nose that disappear only in the deep of winter. The nose itself is small, in contrast with her large expressive mouth. The overall result is more cute than it is pretty. Her arms and legs are pretty skinny, as well as her body. When naked, her ribs can be seen, and she there's not yet a sign of breasts, leaving her chest flat and boy-like.
Her fingers are long and nimble, though the nails are bitten down almost to the flesh. Her hands look just a little too big for her, though that has more to do with the rest of her body than with the limbs themselves.

Clothes: A green dress hangs down from Jituska's shoulders. It was once sognastheen, and of a good quality, but the colour has all but gone from it. Constant wear has left it faded and shapeless like a sack. She also has a spare red dress which looks a little better, which she tries to keep for special occasions. Over this, she has a grey cloak which is also suffering from constantly being worn. It was given to her by her brother, though she's never inquired as to where he got it. Her feet are shod in sandals, which only really give protection to the soles of her feet. Any kind of weather can reach her feet, making it especially uncomfortable to walk in rain or in cold weather.

Personality: For the most part, Jituska is a very quiet-spoken little girl. Though not exactly shy, she won't easily voice her opinion about anything in public, though she will usually tell it to Tojzek quietly. Despite her usual hunger, she has an easy smile that makes one forget the dirt on her face and see the girl underneath it. Without really thinking about it, she tries to win people over, thinking it a way to help her brother get them a meal. Her large, innocent brown eyes are a great asset in getting people's pity, and hopefully a bit of their money to buy some food.

She is very dependant on her brother, letting him take the decisions or running to him when she is faced with one. Rarely will she decide something on her own. Whenever she feels a negative emotion, she will go to sit very close to him so that he can protect her, either from her fears or from a real threat.

She always tries to be optimistic about everything that's happening, though she doesn't usually give a thought to the future. Especially when she notices Tojzek being a little depressed she will put up a bright face to try and cheer him up. For his sake, she tries not to complain too much when she's hungry (because she's still growing, this is almost continually) or tired (only slightly less so).

When it comes to relationships with other people, Jituska is rather physical. She is very fond of hugging her brother in particular, but really any person they happen to meet. She doesn't usually stop to think that some people might not like hugging. When there is an older man present, she feels like the 6-year-old who played secret games with her father again, like the time when it was still quite innocent and fun. She more or less gravitates to them, but Tojzek is always there to stop history from repeating itself. It is quite likely that when a man approaches her again in the same way as her father, certainly like her father in those last few years, that all the hurt and fear and shame will come back, but so long as it doesn't go farther, she is instinctively drawn to them. She knows what is happening, but she can't seem to stop herself, and she needs her brother to put a stop to it.

When she is alone which happens sometimes when Tojzek leaves her alone for a while she is easily scared; by unexpected noises, small creeping animals, the dark. When she is with her brother, however, though she is still afraid of these things she feels safer because she knows he will protect her. Lying close to Tojzek at night is not only a matter of getting warmth for her, she needs him to feel safe.

  • Jituska is an optimistic girl. She always tries to see the good in things that happen, even if it's bad on first sight. Every time Tojzek is in one of his depressed moods, she tries to cheer him. It might take a while, but it always works.
  • Her open and innocent gaze can be a useful instrument in getting people's pity and from there a meal or some coins. She has no problem with using her dirty and poor looks to beg, if it helps her and Tojzek to eat. It also helps when Tojzek's hostility against someone he felt had come too close to her lands them into trouble. Guards usually have a soft spot for her doe-eyed gaze, letting her brother go out of pity for her.
  • With her long, nimble digits, she is a good pickpocket, though she will only use this skill when there's a real need for it. It's not that she's morally against stealing so long as they need it, and the person stolen from doesn't, why should she care? It's mostly that Tojzek won't allow her to steal, being afraid she'd take too big a risk, and so she only steals when she can add to their few coins without him noticing.
  • Another strength for which she can thank her long fingers is her ability to sew. Though the two of them never have enough money to buy enough cloth for new clothes, she does have a small needle and thread in their backpack, with which she can mend tears in Tojzek's shirts and trousers, and in her own dresses. This has saved their clothes many a time from having to be thrown away.
  • Though she usually doesn't have the right materials, she is a decent cook, having done some of the cooking back home. Unfortunately, they don't have a pot when they're travelling, so she can't make them anything.

  • Often hungry and underfed, Jituska is a small and weak girl. For anything that requires strength, she usually has to turn to her brother or anyone else that happens to be close by.
  • She has a tendency to get ill, which has the same cause but combined with being often tired when they are travelling from one place to another. Most often it's just a cold, but sometimes it'll force her to lie down for a day or two.
  • Although her innocent look has gotten the both of them out of trouble, it has gotten them into it as well, when she let a man closer than Tojzek would like, causing him to fight. She doesn't stop letting them close to her, though. There's always the conflict between her 12-year-old self who remembers her father, and the 6-year-old she used to be, who played secret games with her father. Certainly when she meets an older man for the first, the smaller girl wins the fight.
  • Though she has travelled for a year now, together with her brother, she is still quite naieve in the ways of the world. Without Tojzek, she would quickly fall in with the wrong people, who could take advantage of her in many different ways, getting her to do what they want for their own gain without getting much in return.

One cold day in late winter, in the Caltharian city of Carmalad, a small girl called Jituska was born to two less than loving parents. In the household of four in which she saw the light of day, only her brother Tojzek loved her and played with her. Her mother could dye a cloth in such a colour white that it almost sparkled, but more often than not she could not be bothered to make the dye. Her father... he was really good at sitting around the house and making others feel inferior to him.

Though she didn't know it in her first years of living, her mother didn't like either of her children, although she felt more dislike against her eldest son than against her young daughter. She saw both as nuisances that should keep out of the way, and Jituska learned soon enough to avoid her. Her father at first was just a big entity with a loud voice, but not otherwise noteworthy. Any time something major happened in her life when she found a colourful stone, or she'd fallen and her knee bled, or she just felt happy or sad for some reason, she would run to Tojzek, with whom she shared all her joys and pains.

This changed when she was about six years old. Tojzek had started to go out of the house more and more often, which left her with her lazy father and bad-tempered mother. Mother remained an object to be avoided rather than run to, but one day as she was quietly playing in the small room that she shared with her brother, her father came in to play with her. He tried to make up games the way Tojzek would, and although his were not as much fun, she was glad that she now had someone to play with while her brother was away. The games involved a lot of physical contact. He never played them when Tojzek was there, but when they were alone, he would come over without fail. At first it was innocent enough, tickling each other and laughing, but gradually things became more and more intimate, and she let it happen, not knowing that this was not normal. She thought that every girl's father asked them to take off their dress, or to touch this thing that was somehow part of their body but not her own. She wanted to tell Tojzek about what he did, but for some reason she never did, perhaps keeping in mind all the times her father had said that it was their little secret, that she shouldn't tell anybody. For anything else that happened, she still turned to her brother, whenever he was there and not out in the city.

After two years, when she was 8 years old, things with her father changed again. Before, he'd been careful of her, trying to make what they did nice for her, but now he came more and more often, and was less and less nice, so that he often hurt her. It made her ashamed of herself, partly because he still talked about 'their own fun little secret' while she didn't find any of it fun anymore, partly because she was becoming very afraid of him, and partly because she started hating him. None of it was right to her feelings, but she didn't know how to stop him from doing it. For one thing, she still thought that it was normal for fathers to do this, and the one time she had tried to get him to stop, he'd taken her arms and proven that he was the powerful one, and still he did the thing that hurt her so much, only now it was worse because he held her pinned down and refused to see the tears that streamed down her cheeks. After that, she never had the guts to say no to him again, but she never trusted him the way she had when they'd first started playing their games. Since that day, she hated him with all her heart, and her mother too for allowing him to do this.

Two different emotions warred within her from that day on. One was a longing to tell Tojzek everything that happened, and let him make things right again the way he had when she'd fallen down. The other was a shame so deep that she thought she could never tell anyone what had happened and what was still happening. In the end however, the hate and longing won it from her shame and she told Tojzek everything, with tears in her eyes, fearing that he'd be mad at her. But he wasn't; he was mad at the old man. She had never seen him quite so mad. He told her that he'd wanted to run away from home for a while, but that she had kept him there because she 'needed looking after', as he said it. For the smallest moment the thought crossed her mind that he hadn't done very well looking after her, but it was immediately abandoned. Of course she knew what Mother had been like, and why he'd spent so much time away. And Father had been cunning enough never to let him notice anything. So she let him dry her tears and they decided to run away.

They started from home early one morning in the spring when she was 11 years old. She depended on Tojzek to survive, though she helped in any way that she could. She taught herself a little pickpocketing, though she knew he would never approve of her doing so. Whenever she could, she begged for a little food, which she of course shared with him, however little it was. She tried to keep him from landing in too much trouble, if she possibly could, or to get him out of trouble if he was in a tight spot.

When they were around other people, especially around older men, she suddenly felt like a young girl again who played secret games with her father, and she more or less gravitated towards them. It was always a strange feeling for her, because she did remember her hatred of her father, and the hurt and shame, but she couldn't stop herself. Luckily Tojzek is always there to start trouble for her, challenging those men before they have the chance to do the same thing with her that Father did.

In this way they have travelled for a little over a year now, the older brother protecting the younger girl; the girl looking after the brother in any way she can.

In Tojzek's backpack, Jituska keeps her spare dress and the needle and thread with which she mends their clothes.
« Last Edit: October 18, 2007, 10:54:28 AM by Kalna Mrnwn » Logged

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« Reply #1 on: October 18, 2007, 03:58:47 AM »

Its generally asked that you list your Strengths and weaknesses in bullet point format with a overlying classification described by at least one sentence. A basic example would be:

Optimism - Jituska is always looking at the bright side of things....
Jituska Kouba
Hungry Nymphet
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« Reply #2 on: October 18, 2007, 04:15:45 AM »

Oh, sorry about the bullet points. They were visible in my word document, but they didn't copy...

But if that overlying description is 'generally asked', why is that not stated in the character creation guide? I read it through carefully and it doesn't say anything about that...

But thank you so much for your comment, I really appreciate it :)

Niccoli Faust
« Reply #3 on: October 18, 2007, 04:26:19 AM »

Word bullets don't carry over (nothing does, except for spacing [tabs and the like]). The whole bullets thing isn't exactly mandatory (mods are just lazy, and it does help sort it out. Bugs the heck out of me personally.) Typically, anything that's OPTIONAL (ie. Overview) is generally taken for granted that it says that. Most people do so anyways. Familiars and magic are the exceptions (as not everyone likes either)
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« Reply #4 on: October 18, 2007, 07:38:18 AM »

In truth, this is one of the finest writings I have had the pleasure of reading in a very long time. More than once this little girls story nearly brought tears to my eyes. Absolutely wonderful! Outside of a few grammatical mistakes there is nothing wrong here. ~First approval~
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P.S.: Sorry got ahead of myself. Welcome to Santharia Jituska! If this is a sample of your writing then I eagerly await your posts in a story.
« Last Edit: October 18, 2007, 07:40:41 AM by Twn Arerwn » Logged

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« Reply #5 on: October 18, 2007, 10:55:08 AM »

And titled! Best of luck dear!

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Jituska Kouba
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« Reply #6 on: October 18, 2007, 02:58:08 PM »

Ooh, I'm already titled? blush Thank you! I'm going to wait for my friend to post her CD and get approved before I join a story though :D

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