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« on: April 11, 2007, 06:18:22 AM »

Name: Khel
Gender: Female
Age: 23
Race: Human
Tribe: Eyelian, of the Eagle Clan.
Occupation: Rogue/Merchant
Title: Rogue

Appearance
Height: 1.6 ped
Weight: 1 Pygge, 3 Hebs
Hair Colour: Raven
Eye Colour: Almost completely black, with a tint of purple.

Physical Appearance
  Khel is short, fairly slender, and agile. She has long, raven hair, a round face, and very unfriendly, faintly purple eyes. Rough hands show a lifetime of exploring and hard work. Nimble fingers serve to craft arrows and other tools.
 
  Khel likes to be comfortable and able to move in whatever clothing she is wearing.  Uncharacteristic of women in her tribe, Khel wears no jewelry. Her clothes are simple and easy to move in, ranging in tans, greens, and other earth tone colors. Also uncharacteristic, Khel wears soft leather boots and a leather jerkin she obtained in her wanderings. A hooded cloak serves to warm her, and in chilly mornings, soft leather gloves warm her hands.

Personality
     Khel has a ranging personality. She is irritable, she finds being around noise, unrest, and immaturity irritating to her. Along with irritability, Khel is flighty in her decision making, neither making tough decisions on her own, or choosing a decision at all. Hard-headed due to solitude and total independence, Khel  is hard to work with and difficult to befriend.

  Although, pushing past the stubborn young lady is easy if you know the trick. Underneath, Khel is overly-giving, if you want something, Khel will probably give it to you. She has no backbone once you gain her trust. Once you reveal something about yourself, Khel will probably respond with her life's story. She seems to feed off of other people's openness.  Due to witty, sarcastic remarks, Khel finds herself with few close friends, but is able to laugh and joke about almost anything with those few-revealing her good nature underneath all the solitude.

  Khel is very concerned with respect. She's always respected and been at one with the creatures around her, and she demands the same from all other species. Khel is also a woman of deep faith. Life and all its creatures have value to her.


Strengths and Weaknesses
Strengths
Sneaking/light of foot/agile: Khel is good in close combat.
Good with small knives/daggers: Although skilled with hands and feet, Khel can fight well with a dagger on her person.
Good with bow and arrow, as well as hunting: Khel can find food for herself sufficiently.
Khel also loves to sing, and she can do so somewhat well.
Khel is loyal and trustworthy. Once you gain her trust, she'll return it in full force. She understands and values friendship to no end.
Khel is intelligent and learns at a quick pace. Solitude gifted her with keen eyes to take in her surroundings and learn quickly the ways of her current environment.

Weaknesses
Solitude: Khel can be very, very hard to cooperate with, working with other humans is difficult for her.
Irritable and flighty: It’s hard for Khel to make serious decisions, causing distress in pressing situations. This flightiness caused Khel to lose her background, her own lineage and identity.
Slow to think: Khel may be good with words, or at least somewhat sarcastic/witty remarks, but in battle or a confusing situation, she can stumble over her words or lose blance.
Clumsy. In thought and action... her wittiness is a major cover-up.

History
     Khel spent a lot of her childhood alone. This wasn't forced, it was by choice. A very solitary child, she spent her time contemplating things like... say, the meaning of life. She always appreciated nature even from a young age, and due to this Khel was not in touch with friends her age while growing up. A lot of time was spent in the marketplace area, befriending the old blacksmith or the old woman barely scraping by. Due to time spent in the smithy, or befriending the elderly fighter on the outskirts town, Khel developed skills most young girls wouldn't have dreamed of learning. Khel took an outward look at things, not focusing on home and family, but overly-curious at the world outside of what she knew and on the creatures around her. Since she spent a lot of time in the forest, learning the arts of hunting and archery, Khel's greatest teacher and parental figure as she got older was a huntsman. She lost touch of this huntsman in her wanderings, straying far from her village while hunting.

     Odd jobs for the huntsman and as a young girl for citizens of her villiage near the Vale of the Brownies in Southern Sarvonia provided Khel with means to clothe herself, fill a small purse, and carry a small sack which serves for her to carry some small tools and morsels. Khel also owns a small cart and a pony, Bristol.

     As life passed her by and she roamed farther and farther from home, Khel forgot family. She forgot those at home and found herself completely at peace with nature and immersed in the life of the creatures around her. Over time, she realized she was entirely lost. Her identity, her origin, her self-worth. Now, on a path to recover herself and discover what she missed as a child, Khel finds herself far from home, knowing only that she must travel home and rediscover herself. Her only hesitation in the matter is that she may be refused by her kin due to her differences from them. As she travels, Khel poses as a merchant, but has very little possessions as her supply and demand runs dry. From her wanderings, though, Khel has learned and taken on much of others, especially races other than her own, and possesses many characteristics not of Eyelian origin.

Weapons
Khel has in her possession a bow and arrows she crafted herself, as well as a small dagger tucked in her boot --given to her as a child.

Belongings
Khel carries only a small amount of items. She has some food in a small pack and a waterskin. Khel also acquired a small cart to carry items, as well as a horse to pull said cart.

Familiars
Khel has a small pony, Bristol, purchased with the cart.

I'm not good with last names, and I think the history needs a bit of work, but I hope it's not too horrible! =) Changes will be in orange and italics!
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« Reply #1 on: April 11, 2007, 07:38:22 AM »

If she is irritable, i think she is actually more likely to bicker, as irritable people will be immature and go on in a point and say the dumbest things just to yell about a point they know they are wrong in...
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« Reply #2 on: April 11, 2007, 09:01:21 PM »

Hmm, good point. Thank you! I guess I should use a different word than irritable...
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« Reply #3 on: April 11, 2007, 09:20:05 PM »

Hello, Khel! Welcome to santharia!

At the moment I have two small remarks:

1) Could you maybe put the personality section into full sentences and an alinea, like you did with the physical appearance?

2) Surely she has more strengths than purely combat-related?
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« Reply #4 on: April 11, 2007, 09:37:57 PM »

thank you! =) for the welcome and the input.

I'll start working on it immediately. I've rp'd, but never on a message board like this so I've had a hard time thinking up all the details.
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« Reply #5 on: April 12, 2007, 12:21:19 AM »

I noticed that you did not have a weight section, please add one below or above your height section for reference.

Also:

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Since she spent a lot of time spent in the forest, learning the arts of hunting and archery, Khel's greatest teacher and parental figure as she got older was a huntsman.

In this, the colored spent is not required, and can make the sentence confusing.

These are just 2 things i noticed, i hope they help.
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« Reply #6 on: April 12, 2007, 12:35:53 AM »

It's a good first attempt already :) I'll try to give this a uricheck soon.

Weivoc: it is stated in the CD guide that weight is optional, it doesn't HAVE to be added. I do appreciate it that you are willing to help out with commenting :)
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« Reply #7 on: April 12, 2007, 10:30:00 PM »

Thanks! I know you guys are busy, I dont know how the heck you get through them all in the first place!

I'm not a good judge of weight even in the REAL world.... so I tried to get it with the short, slender,and agile bit. :)
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« Reply #8 on: April 13, 2007, 12:31:00 AM »

Well I wasn't sure, I'm always told that it should be added for reference and haven't been to that section in a while. Well Khel, if you would like help creating the weight, I'll be glad. You are 1.6 peds, which puts you about 5 foot tall or so. You say you want slender, agile, yet ok strength. This would put you about 100 to 150 pounds, just tell me what you want and I can look it up, or you can get it bby going to the measures converter at the right, just make sure to set it to the right setting.
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« Reply #9 on: April 13, 2007, 07:39:08 AM »

alrighty, thanks Weivoc.. like I said, I'm a very bad judge of that =) I'll look it up!
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« Reply #10 on: April 15, 2007, 12:31:58 PM »

I updated some stuff, I hope it's better.

Also, I think this is what I do to get my CD back onto the first page... if not... then I guess I'm just posting myself a friendly little message.

Hi self -wave-
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« Reply #11 on: April 15, 2007, 05:30:18 PM »

The only thing wrong with your weight, is the fact that you don't need to go that far, just to heb or hafeb.
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« Reply #12 on: April 16, 2007, 02:06:33 AM »

Mmk, thanks =) I just put in everything that it showed in the conversion, hehe.
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« Reply #13 on: April 16, 2007, 06:07:58 AM »

Yeh I did the same thing at first.
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« Reply #14 on: April 17, 2007, 09:39:44 PM »

Right! Could you maybe divide your appearance and personality into a few paragraphs? And change the 'Sardonia' in your history to 'Sarvonia'?

When you've done that, I think you're ready for a title :-)
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