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Galden
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« on: December 12, 2007, 02:09:30 AM »

Name: Galden
Gender: Male         
Race: Dwarf
Age: 120
Tribe: Mitharim Tribe   
Occupation: Singspeaker
Title: Dwarven Bat

Appearance
Height: 1 Ped, 1 Fore
Weight: 1 Pygge, 5 Hebs, 1 Hafeb, 3 Ods, 8 Mut.
Hair color: Brown   
Eye Color: Brown

Physical Appearance: Galden looks like a typical dwarf, short and stocky. His brown eyes flick about taking in everything. During the day he often has a hat the droops to just above his eyes. This makes the light bearable to his dark trained eyes. His pet bat may often be seen sitting on his shoulder. In fact, the tan shirt he wears has a dark depression where his bat sits. His black pants fit comfortably, loose but not terribly baggy. A smile or smirk is commonly on his face, but when he thinks deeply his mouth becomes a line. His beard flows down to the middle of his broad chest. He smooths it often, and when he thinks he strokes it.

Clothing: A tan shirt with a depression on the right shoulder come down a few nailsbreadth below the waist of his loose fitting pants. Galden also has a hat with a droopy brim to lessen the suns light on his eyes. Finally he has a dark brown cloak to wrap around his body to keep warm.

Personality: Galden enjoys jokes, maybe a little to much. He sometimes stirs up trouble with his bat, making people scream like they have seen a ghost. He can become serious too, when he thinks he makes little noise and often stares at nothing. To him his eyes just cloud over when he thinks, to others it seems he is trying to find a Bavereye Beetle hidden on the wall.

Galden's view on life is a common dwarven one. Humans can sometimes be tolerated. Elves can rarely be trusted, and gnome are the best race to trade with. Though this is his view, Galden practices common courtesy and is semi-polite to everyone. Sure he may be a bit more gruff on an elf but they won't be treated like vermin. With humans he speaks suspiciously for a while before actually talking to them normally, just to make sure that they are trustworthy. Gnomes are treated the best by far by Galden, he starts off in a normal voice and slowly they may forge a friendship.

Strengths:
-Hearing, he has been trained since he was a boy to hear a bat's radar message. He hears quite well and is very hard to sneak up on.

-Night Sight, training to hear a bat in the dark has made Galden's eyes at home in the dark. He may spot his bat in the night flying high in the sky eating insects.

-Jukuthas, he can relay positions of people, streams, lakes, etc.

-Singspeaking without machine, Galden can singspeak without the machine to interpret. Though he can only understand simple things.
 
Weaknesses:
-Mischievous, Galden enjoys letting his bat loose in places as a prank. This gets him into trouble often and has been kicked out of several places for doing this.

-Daylight, in daylight his eyes often hurt. He tries to avoid bright lights at all costs for if something is to bright he often can't see for a while.
 
-Loud noises, due to his good hearing loud noises, which won't affect most people, give him very bad headaches.

-Day Sight, Galden doesn't have very good sight during the day, he can see things 2 peds in front of him. Jukuthas can be a better pair of eyes than he could ever have.

History: Born with a brother by the name of Kulan, Galden was the youngest of the 4 siblings. The oldest was their other brother, Luthas. And the 2nd oldest was their sister, Jude. His early child hood was just like most, learning things from his older siblings and parents.

When he was still young he was playing hide-and-seek with his siblings. This is when Galden's father, Jutun, notices his son had a nak for finding his brothers and sister. When Jutun asked Galden how he did it Galden said, It's easy because they laugh when they hide. Jutun listened for giggling and heard none. Galden turned around and found Jude hiding behind a chair. Jutun realized that his son had abnormally good hearing and at once thought of his friend that was a singspeaker. He talked with his friend and the friend decided to train Galden to become a singspeaker.

Galden was shown a bat on the first day when he was 15. When Rimus(his father's friend) said that the bat was sending out very high radar messages right then. Galden thought he heard very quite sounds coming from the bat. The next thing Rimus showed Galden was the machine used to interpret the radar messages. The training, at that point, was fairly simple. Learning about bats and how to feed them and such. Galden spent time just sitting with a bat in his lap thinking some days.

When he turned 30 he began to be taught about the machine. He learned how to repair it from a brownie. The brownie was harsh on him, but Galden learned how to do it right and it is very unlikely that Galden will forget how to do it. Eventually, Galden learned how to use the machine. The same brownie taught him this. He practiced with the machine for 30 more years.

When Galden was 60 he could hear the radar messages without the machine. He couldn't translate them yet but he heard them. This made him study the machine more closely and what certain sounds meant. He learned more of the machine, enough to build certain parts of it, and learned how to interpret the bats messages. At first he could only understand a few, but learned more and more over the years.

At age 90 he proved he was mature by calling down a bat and, without the machine, interpreted the message. Similarly he sent back a responded message. Everyone was impressed by him being able to do all this without the machine. 

He prepared for choosing but none of the females chose him. He tried again and again, with no luck. He had become a traveling Bachelor." At age 105, Galden asked if he could keep a newly trained bat as his own as company on his traveling and surprisingly they allowed him to. He named the bat Jukuthas, using a part of each of his siblings names in it. He went aboveground and started to travel. Galden has been traveling ever since, doing shows for what little money he needed. He hates doing this but he needs money and people were always astounded at his ability to understand bats. He earns enough to buy him and Jukuthas food, drink, and a place to rest.

Weapons: He has no real weapons just his belt knife. He is better at informing the real soldiers on enemy positions if he is needed to.

Belongings: He has his clothing, a pack with some dried food and a waterskin in it, and a small money pouch.

Familiars: Jukuthas, a flittermouse, has been with Galden for 30 years. Galden got Jukuthas when he became a 'Traveling Bachelor." Galden asked for a bat and they gave him a newly trained one. Jukuthas has soft light brown fur and this wings are a deeper brown. He has no distinguishing marks really but Galden can always pick him out from other bats, maybe because he is a little more chubby than most. Galden feeds him a more fatting foods than insects. Jukuthas has created many problems, though Galden has sent him do create them. He has flown into many rooms and scared many people. Many a time he has been swatted at with many things, always a near miss. Jukuthas can relay positions of people and other things from the air and send to Galden a message bearing this information. Other than that Jukuthas is just a companion for Galden. 
« Last Edit: Today at 08:49:00 PM by Mina » Logged
Niccoli Faust
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« Reply #1 on: December 12, 2007, 03:25:11 AM »

the singspeaking is accomplished more through the use of a device made by brownies and manipulation and training of the bats, hopefully that helps.
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Galden
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« Reply #2 on: December 12, 2007, 03:49:39 AM »

i plan on making Galden one of the few who have learned to interpet the blips without the machine. I relize this will take good explaining.
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« Reply #3 on: December 12, 2007, 03:51:31 AM »

It would be much easier if you just left it to the machine, because you do have to be trained from a very early age, and it would have to be listed as an extreme strength. Dwarves don't typically like daylight much to begin with I'd imagine but not important right now. Also, the bats are not used exclusivly for being sent out from the mountains, they could also be used within the mountain chain itself, assuming tunnels were built, and if you're underground night isn't going to matter much anyways.
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Galden
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« Reply #4 on: December 12, 2007, 05:37:13 AM »

ok there is a finished begining for it. hopefully it provides a good enough reason for his singspeaking. if not i may have him learn more about the machine and less about understanding the blips. perhaps have him build a simple transportable machine to interpret simple messages.
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« Reply #5 on: December 12, 2007, 06:37:01 AM »

Hello, Galden, and welcome to Santharia!

I have a few things that I would like to comment on.

You realise that your weight is currently at 8 tonnes, 890kg and 317g? You'll need to cut it down a lot. I would also like to see more on the personality section. Does he have a short fuse? What is his definition of serious? Does he have a particular quirk?

Your sight is somewhat unclear. You say that he can't see 2 peds in front of him, but then you say he can see his bat in the night's sky. I'd assume the bat would fly higher than 2 peds. Could you elaborate or make it clearer? Does he have any skill with his belt knife? If so, you'll have to add it as a strength. I have also spotted numerous grammar and spelling mistakes. Please fix them.

Those were all the things I spotted, though I may have missed some as I only took a quick scan. Good luck!

Seh'nara
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« Reply #6 on: December 12, 2007, 11:41:48 AM »

One more thing: could you add some more explanation about the machine in your history? Just for those of us who do not know much about dwarven culture ^.^
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« Reply #7 on: December 12, 2007, 11:14:15 PM »

Also, the machine may or may not be previously portable, I don't think the brownies would build anything particularly big, it just...doesn't work.
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« Reply #8 on: December 12, 2007, 11:18:41 PM »

lol yea i suppose it doesn't work quite right for brownies to make big things. I made this last night and tried to quickly find more info on this machine but couldn't i plan on reaserching some more on this machine.

@Seh'nara Wow thanks for pointing that out. didn't notice that or mean for it to be that big.
« Last Edit: December 12, 2007, 11:21:53 PM by Galden » Logged
Miraran Tehuriden
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« Reply #9 on: December 13, 2007, 11:24:20 PM »

Although it is not mentioned in the entry, flittermice live just as long as terran bats.. which means about 20-25 years. Your bat is at the moment quite elderly!
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« Reply #10 on: December 14, 2007, 12:56:01 AM »

i was afraid of that...ill try to think of a way to make it plausible


EDIT:ok changed him to asking for the bat at age 105, making the bat 15.

@Seh'nara just finished changing spelling and grammar as i saw it. I'm not to good at grammar. And a belt knife is a common dwarf item. They use it to eat mostly, cutting meat and stabbing it to put in their mouth. I don't think it is a stregth since an average dwarf has this skill.
« Last Edit: December 18, 2007, 12:42:07 AM by Galden » Logged
Rutami Goodmountain
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« Reply #11 on: December 17, 2007, 08:47:30 AM »

i was looking at your strength about his hearing, and what i thought is: every mitharim dwarf is nearly impossible to sneak up on, because they have natural Exquisite hearing... It is stated that an average mitharim dwarf can clearly hear the heartbeat of a being even at a distance, so i think you might want to change your description about this strength a bit, since your current description is suitable for any mitharim dwarf, i suggest you change it to something only a mitharim singspeaker can do. just my 2 cents worth.  :P

p/s: belt knives and eating knives are different, really. belt knife is smth like a spare in case smth needs to be cut, and that includes dirty stuff....i think. while eating knives are especially for eating, which means its dull and it wont cut your mouth. which means, the 'belt knife' you described is actually an eating knife. hope i cleared it up, and yes, i checked it in the dwarves eating habits page. dwarves gotta look out for each other! XD
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Galden
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« Reply #12 on: December 24, 2007, 07:16:43 AM »

bumpity bump
and you are compared to a normal Sasntharian peasant and most peasants do not have great hearing.
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« Reply #13 on: December 29, 2007, 07:15:55 PM »

might wanna change the green into a darker color so everyone can see it....
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« Reply #14 on: December 30, 2007, 02:44:34 AM »

Galden darling, the spell-check is your friend. Throughout the entire CD you have misspelled words, wrong word choices and sentence fragments. Please address these issues before placing the exclamation mark back up, as it stands there are sections that are befuddling.

I Love the originality of this character! I can only express my deep desire to see him in a story and how his unique lifestyle shall be RPed.
~Sincerely~
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