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Ganinon

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmaster

« Reply #15 on: November 24, 2008, 12:17:18 PM »

lol so much to change...i could probably just rewrite Galein lol...Depends on how we want to play it. What do we think will work out best? I can roll with whatever basicly lol. Ima go ask someone to bring Galein up since it is gonna have to go through some large changes.


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Zann Lightbringer

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmaster

« Reply #16 on: November 24, 2008, 01:29:19 PM »

When I read the name Hragnur, the first thing that came to my mind was an obese, middle aged village housewife and a mother of eleven children. So I think that would work.

And no, parents do not make any arrange marriages and they rarely intervene with marriage between two dwarves; the elders of the whole clan will only do so if they feel that it is not a perfect match or if they think that another guy will be more suitable for a particular girl. Courting is all about appearance and wealth. Those with long, perfectly kept glossy beard and a cavern full of riches will be more preferred than those with a scraggly beard and a home with less glitters.


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Hragnúr Pakthroon

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmaster

« Reply #17 on: November 25, 2008, 09:36:29 PM »

Alrighty, Hragnúr's transformation is complete! grin

Comments welcomed!


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If only a drink could truly wash away pasts and wipe away fears; maybe then life would be happy.
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Hragnúr Pakthroon

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #18 on: November 27, 2008, 08:18:25 AM »

3-day bump.


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If only a drink could truly wash away pasts and wipe away fears; maybe then life would be happy.
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Kalína Dalá'isyrás

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #19 on: November 28, 2008, 06:46:52 AM »

Oh! I just did a quick read through, and I must admit, I am quite fond of this lady. Might make me share a beer or two with her in her tavern!

*first approval*

Though double check spellings and make sure everything has been transferred from male, to female accordingly, for your sake.


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Simonne Miller

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #20 on: November 30, 2008, 03:47:23 AM »

Alright, I just have one comment really (except the male to female which Kali commented on). My comment is this: when did her mother join her? She finds her mother in the remnants of her own village, she goes out to search for her partner and kids, comes to a port city and doesn't return to the village anymore... There is no mention of her mother coming with her when she sets sail, yet she is in the tavern?

Once you've adjusted that you get my approval as well


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Simonne Miller

Hragnúr Pakthroon

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #21 on: November 30, 2008, 04:21:17 AM »

Before she left, though, she secretly returned to her village to take her mother with her.

Apparently I can't quote myself. Huh?

This sentence is the second to last one in the fifth paragraph of the history.
Hope that suffices for you, it was easy to miss.


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If only a drink could truly wash away pasts and wipe away fears; maybe then life would be happy.
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Simonne Miller

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #22 on: November 30, 2008, 05:24:39 AM »

Hmm, if you could add in a little explanation of why she goes back for her mother and why her mother agrees to move to a completely different continent instead of staying with her people I'll be happy


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Simonne Miller

Hragnúr Pakthroon

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #23 on: December 01, 2008, 08:38:40 AM »

OK, edit made. Thanks for your help!


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If only a drink could truly wash away pasts and wipe away fears; maybe then life would be happy.
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Simonne Miller

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Re: Hragnúr Pakthroon, Kavogerim, Brewmistress

« Reply #24 on: December 01, 2008, 03:38:57 PM »

Ok, I changed some 'his'es to 'her's and some 'he's to 'she's, since you didn't, even though two people asked it. Otherwise it's good for me, so here's your second approval