Ancianá Silarná'yráná/Jhehellrhim Elf/Rogue or Wanderer

[Simonne Miller]

Well, I agree that you're almost ready for an approval, but I do have one or two comments before I can give you mine.

-In the strenghts and weaknesses: 10 peds isn't very much for shooting the bow. I looked it up on Wikipedia (the longbow, which I believe elven bows are based on) and it says that 'a hit can't be guaranteed at more than 75 meters'. That's 75 peds (handy, huh ). Keeping in mind that she misses her left eye, I would tone it down to perhaps 50 peds?

-Still in the S&W section, another major weakness for her in missing her left eye is the lack of depth perception. This is really going to hinder her in hunting and in every day life, as it is really hard to estimate where something/a prey is exactly in relation to herself.

-In the history, you say that she retrieves her father's bow from the fire, and later that she uses his bow, arrows and quiver. That's all very well, but I believe you're going to have to explain how all of those survived the fire, when the houses have gone up in cinders. Remember, a bow is made entirely of wood (even composite bows are partly made of wood, so they wouldn't normally survive a fire either).

When you've done those things, I think you're ready for a second approval

[Ancianá Silarná'yráná]

Alright, I think I've done what you asked. I think. I think I think. Thank you, Simonne!

Yeah, me too, Sil! I'm pretty darn excited!

*Cracks fingers.* Alright, I'm ready. (I think...)

[Eléyr Fásamár]

~Second Approval~

You may want to go ahead and begin removing the colors from your CD, while you wait for an admin to come around~.

I see you've removed the bow, but everything else still looks great~!

[Ancianá Silarná'yráná]

Thank you! Yes!!! Thankyouthankyouthankyou, everyone who has helped me to improve my CD! My gratitude is boundless!

[Silmarwen Elanessë]

You earned it! Great Job Ancianá!!! *huggles*

[Ancianá Silarná'yráná]

Thanks! I am so ready for my name to be in blue!

[Twén Aråerwén]

Congrats Ancianá! ~Titled and Archived~

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