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AnaMirl Goodwill
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« on: November 29, 2003, 11:52:22 PM »

Name: Ana‘Mirl Goodwill
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Tribe: Stratanian upbringing,
           Mother: Sor'inyt
           Father: Shendar
Place of Birth: Strata
Age: 57
Size: Fairly tall, about six fores , well build , strong
Title: Inn Worker




Appearance

Injérà is setting, but still burning hot from a sky which hurts the eyes with its flaming blue. Covered with the sandy dust the winds of the Rahaz-Dath bring with them on their way from the north,  a tired  mare with an even more tired figure sitting on it,  is on the way from Strata to the Thirsty Herald. The animal is looking more like a big pony with a broad back and sturdy legs than one of the fine horses usually sold in Strata. It has a light brown colour, though it might turn out different, once it has seen both a brush and maybe even some water. The yellow sands north of Strata cover all.

„Come on, my dear, you make it, just a few peds left till we get to this nice place!“

A melodious voice is comforting the mare which goes on willingly. It belongs to the figure sitting on it, a woman whom one might want to describe as her mare: A broad back, an ample bosom, sturdy legs, all covered in layers of light coloured clothes  to protect against the sun and the ever-present sand. Bare feet in sandals and a once white trouser is all you can distinguish, the rest seems just to be cloths, sheets , veils or whatever, wrapped around the body. Those two, the mare and the woman are not a sight you would look at twice. But if you manage to take a look behind the fabrics protecting the face, in a moment when it slips down and the woman wipes her forehead, you can see a tanned face with several wrinkles around big  light brown-green eyes with dark lashes, a broad, but straight nose, full lips and a resolute chin. It is a  face which might have been once beautiful when young, but a hard life has carved its lines into it. Dark long hair which is wet with sweat is bound in the neck to a strong knot. Firm hands are clasping the reigns of the horse. Ana‘Mirl Goodwill is on her way to the Thirsty Herald.



Personality

Ana‘Mirl is not really a strong willed person. Being chased around her whole life by the innowners and guests alike, only used to obey orders and not to decide for herself, she is surprised, that she could make up her mind and leave the Seagate, the inn she spent her whole life. But she didn‘t allow life  to beat her down either, she remained friendly to those who didn‘t tease her and often an unexpected  smile on her face brought the visitors of the inn to take a second look at her. She soon was known as a good willed person. A will for surviving and lifting up her head again after people had rode roughshod over her had brought her where she was now: On the way to the Thirsty Herald, with a fine horse which belonged to her , several clothes  to change and even a small dagger, though she doesn‘t know how to use it in another way than she used knifes to cut vegetables with. And the hope for a better life.



History

Coming close to the Thirsty Herald Ana‘Mirl gets first doubts, if her decision was right. She recalls her life to get assurance to have done the right thing.

Her memory goes back to the only person who was close to her,  the woman she called mother, Ria Mandar, the wife of the innkeeper of the Seagate Inn back then in 1606, Niro Mandar. It wasn‘t her real mother, who died when she gave birth to Ana‘Mirl. When Ana was bigger, she heard not just one time how it was when a young woman, her mother,  came into the inn, with worn out clothes, dirty, tired, weeping  and totally exhausted. She gave birth to a girl shortly after she had entered the inn, in  the kitchen near the big hearth. For it was cold in this winter night, even in the with warm nights blessed Strata. The woman died shortly after the birth, the child remained. Ria was a warm hearted woman, called the child Ana‘MIrl Goodwill and raised  it,  though her husband and everbody else in the near neighbourhood laughed at her therefore.
Ana asked Ria, how her mother had looked like, and Ria told her, that she looked different compared to Stratanian woman and even to Shendar woman, but beautiful, with black braided hair, brown eyes and strange dark marks tattooed on her face. There was one little thing, the foreign woman had left her daughter: A small silvery triangle, held by a black leather band. When Ana got older, she learned, that the silvery triangle might be part of Shendar jewellery. From that moment on she imagined her mother being a foreign lady from  far away Aeruillin and her unknown father a Shendar warrior who had loved that foreign woman. Deep inside she knew that this was nonsense, but from there on her wish grew to see the Rahaz-Dath and the there living Shendar. But nothing was farer to achieve than these wishes.

Ana helped out in the inn as soon as she was old enough to carry a plate or a mug to the guests without letting them fall. When she was ten she knew how to serve the guests, do the beds, help out in the kitchen and had earned by far the „goodwill“ of all people around her she was named after. With twenty she was the best cook the Seagate Inn had seen for years and now even Niro Mandar was pleased to have her. Until she got pregnant from a guest who didn‘t stay long enough to know, that he was about to become father. But her child, a daughter,  wasn‘t a big burden, Ria, meanwhile old and worn out was glad to look after the child.

When Niro Mandar died in 1634, his son, called Niro as well, took the reign of the Seagate inn and nothing changed. Ana worked in the inn, not only cooking but looking over all things which have to be done to run an inn. Till last year, when Niro died. The Inn was sold to a merchant from Thalambath who brought some of his people with him to run it. Ana wasn‘t needed anymore after some time and the new owner started to give her work nobody else from his people wanted to do. That may have been the  cause that Ana started dreaming again - from her princess mother and her Shendar father. Humiliation grew and with it the wish to leave. And when she heard from a guest, that the Thirsty Herald was looking for a waitress, or people to help out where help was needed, she decided to leave. Her daughter had married a blacksmith and lived quite well for her standards. Her husband was it who got Ana the dagger and helped her to buy her horse which she needed to get out of the town. And now the moment had come, the Thirsty Herald comes into sight.



Weakness, Strengths, Belongings

Ana‘Mirl stops: Being now so close, she is afraid to go and do the last step and ask, if they could use her, if they had work for her. Suddenly she looses her way and starts thinking about herself: Isn‘t she too old and unattractive for such an occupation? The Thirsty Herald has surely different guests than the Seagate Inn, what if she would accidentally bother a mage and he would change her into a beast, she is terrible afraid of magic, having not a clue what magic is. What if a guest speaks in a different tongue she would not understand? She knows only the Stratanian dialect.

But then she pulls herself together and reminds herself, that she knows how to run an inn. Some colour on the lips would make her surely younger! And if she didn‘t want to serve the guests, she could always cook or do the beds. Or help out in the stable if needed. A good broom would do a miracle if used by her. She has overcome other difficulties in her life. And what other choice does she have?

She has all her belongings with her, some clothes to change, the dagger, her horse. And with a raised head she rides the last peds towards the Thirsty Herald, the place which is a days ride nearer to the Rahaz-Dath than Strata......



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Edited by: AnaMirl Goodwill at: 12/27/03 23:24
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Khiera Meneris
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« Reply #1 on: November 30, 2003, 01:08:22 AM »

Hello and welcome! :)

Right, there are a few things you need to take note of:

1. You MUST specify a tribe for your character. Your character may not know her tribe because of certain reasons, but you as the creator would and should know. Tribe determines things such as your character's appearance, general personality etc, and story mods would mostly likely want to know her tribe when considering her for their stories. From your history i get the impression that you may be intending for her to be a Shendar. You should therefore state that as your tribe then.

2. You should specify your weight and height in Santharian measurements. This is to give other players a basic overview of your character's physical stature. Check out this link for information on Santharian measurements.

3. You should also specify your character's age. Again, this is important in determining her relevant skills and experience etc. From your history i would assume your age to be around 57 years of age, since the current year is 1663 a.S. If this is not what you intended, then you should edit your date of birth ... and of course state your age.

4. Your strengths and weaknesses section(s) is also very vague, and you almost don't specify any sort of strength or weakness at all. May i suggest you separate your strengths and weaknesses sections, and elaborate each section accordingly. Go to this page and perhaps follow the outlined sections in their order, it might be helpful that way. Same goes for your belongings -- make that a separate section and elaborate accordingly.

5. Also, i don't see any mention of skills for your character except tavern service skills. How does she protect herself when she travels? Does she know any basic weaponry skills?

Right, please go through the above points and make the necessary edits. Then we'll go on again from there. You have a very interesting writing style, and your character is unique too :)  






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« Reply #2 on: November 30, 2003, 05:59:22 AM »

I too will have to stick with the Tribe must be stated policy. Though I am planning to discuss this and relaxing a few other policies with the other admins, we have more important things we must get done first, and it is vary hard to say how long these will take.

As for height and weight, I am not a strickler for this personally, but I agree with Khiera for now. There are to many holes that can easily lead to a conflict with the world in which the RPG is played.

I am also agreed with the Strengths, Weaknesses belongings issue. These should at the vary least be a separate paragraph for each of these, but it is much preffered that they have separate sections. If you need more help to figure out your strengths and weaknesses, let me know and I can help you with these.

Otherwise vary nice work! It is refreshing to have a character that has so few problems from the start.


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« Reply #3 on: November 30, 2003, 06:22:22 AM »

First of all: Thank you Khiera for spending so much time to comment my char so thoroughly.

However, I disagree with you in most of the mentioned points.

1. The tribe. Ana‘Mirl doesn‘t have a tribe. There are hints in the text, that her mother might have been a Sor‘inyt woman and her father a Shendar. But, she doesn‘t belong to those two tribes, she isn‘t grown up there. And the tribes are not so different described in their physical appearance that you know her better than already described in the actual text. Even if all Sor‘inyt and Shendar are slender, there are always exceptions and her personal life may have added to it.
She could be Stratanian, but she isn‘t of the Stratanian tribe either, not belonging to them through her bloodline.
So all I can say is: She is born and raised in Strata.
Same with personality: What can a tribe she never saw define more than I wrote already? If there is an influence, it is her Stratanian upbringing.

2.Weight and height: Do you know how tall and heavy someone is you meet on the street or you travel with? I think a description says more than peds and hebs.

3. Age: I stated her date of birth, and yes, she is 57, I can add a month however.

4.I made a paragraph for weakness, one for strenghts, she simply doesn‘t have more. She never left Strata, and as I mentioned, she has no weapons skills (can use her new dagger just for cutting vegetables and meat). I could expand her tavern sills, the ability to get along with the people there, but nothing else.

She never thought about any dangers which might wait on the way to the tavern. She can‘t protect herself. She has no more belongings as I wrote and her only wish is to get a job in the Thirsty Herald.

And I would like to remind you, that the requirements for chars have turned down drastically, I think, my char is fine as it is. ;)

But thanks again for your effort, reading and writing takes alot of time. :)
And now I have to add Teras well, thanks.

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« Reply #4 on: November 30, 2003, 06:52:22 AM »

OK, first of all let me clear up the tribe issue a bit. It is our policy and one I do not particularly agree with fully, but it is not solely up to me. I have tried for a change in this policy before, but the others do not agree, so it remains. However usually when a character is brought up outside the tribe(s) of the characters parents, the character is still considered to be of the tribe(s) of his or her parents for the purpose of writing the CD.

I will let the height and weight go at least unless another Admin requests it.

I would still ask you to thing of other strengths and weaknesses besides her skills. Try to make this section a little deeper.

Otherwise really the Tribe policy is the only sticking point that stops me from bumping you up. I will try to push this issue, but till it can be discussed, and a decision one way or the other, it still stands.


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« Reply #5 on: November 30, 2003, 06:52:22 AM »

Hey Ana...Welcome to Santharia!! :hug
I like your character....i read it briefly but I thought I would help out with the already mentioned comments before reading it completely through.

1. I know you have explained why she doesn't have a tribe and what not but she must have a tribe from which she come. She may not know it but it is more for the other players info. This helps to aviod confusion on the board. (Sorry if you didn't want here that)

2. Again...for the the other people on the board. This is a description of your character. We would very much like to create a picture of them in our minds but without a good detailed description, that is difficult to do. Some people need numbers for their own picture to be created. Everyone is diffferent but this helps to have everyone on the same page.

3. Usually when people state their "AGE" they give a number such as 57. Khiera was just making sure that you knew that your character was that age just incase you weren't aware of that.

Though the requirements have gone down drastically, we still want people to put in the effort to make their character as good as possible. That is what we are here for.
She is wonderfully written...keep up the good work.  

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« Reply #6 on: January 01, 1970, 09:00:00 AM »

Ah! I love this character! So well done and so sweetly simply!Based on your response to the commentaries done so far, you don't strike me as being one who hasn't done their research well! After all, few know that the Shendar has lucky numbers of 21 and 3, and thus prefers triangles. You also know the requirements.

The only thing I would suggest is, as others have asked, simply stating your character's age. I know, it is a bit of a hassal, but you would be surprised at how many don't know that the current date is 1663! It would make it easier for your fellow RPers to know your age and thus picture your character a bit better.

Now, it seems to me that you do indeed know your character's tribe, so her tribe isn't unknown. It may be unknown to her and to everyone else in Caelereth, but you yourself know the tribe. Maybe you might add it, including a short note that none know her tribe?

I'm also curious as to the length of her hair.

I honestly think that her strengs and weaknesses are fine. We can assume she has no ability to weild a sword or go into armed combat. It's a given that she's good with people (having been around them most her life) and probably has good endurance from working all day. A lot of the strengths and weaknesses can be implied by the character. As long as your character doesn't suddenly have the power to weild a bastard sword, I think it's fine.

Well-done character! I like her very much!

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« Reply #7 on: November 30, 2003, 07:45:22 AM »

As for tribe you don't necessarily have one that fits your personality and everything.  For the time being focus on the look of your char.



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« Reply #8 on: November 30, 2003, 07:38:22 AM »

First off, let me say that i did not explicitly nor implicitly state in any way that your character was "not fine". If you read some of my other posts around here, you will find that i'm one of the least nitpicky commenters in terms of character flexibility and creativity. I am very well aware of the current minimum restrictions, thank you.

Enforcing requirements does not mean that i agree with all or even specific parts of the requirements, such as the tribe aspect, as Terra has pointed out. However, it is my responsibility to ensure that there is a streamlined standard to make things easier in general for all the Admins, Mods and players on the board.

As long as you can reasonably and logically explain the rationale for the way your CD is written and the various aspects of your character regarding the way you made her (eg. the tribe, her height and weight etc), then it is all fine by me. Though of course, an Admin will have the final say in any requirements that they might want or not want you to include.

Seems like you have a good handle on what you are doing. May your wait for a title be a short one!



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Edited by: Khiera at: 11/30/03 0:03
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« Reply #9 on: November 30, 2003, 09:58:22 AM »

Thanks again for all your comments, though I think they are, partly at least, not making sense.
Nothing I said is meant as an affront to you Khiera, I know you are only doing your work.

The tribe: The only thing what counts is her Stratanian upbringing and it doesn‘t help other players at all to know from which tribe her mother and father where. It is important for her, that she thinks her father could be a Shendar, but not his actual tribe.

Numbers are not necessary: It really doesn‘t matter, if you imagine her being 1,7, 1,8 or 1,9 peds. Same with the weight. It doesn‘t really matter, if she has a heb more or less than two pyggies!
Maybe she has only  40 hebs, I don‘t know!

I don‘t think, that I want to expand the skills/strenghs/weaknesses.
Of course she will never touch a sword unless she has to clean it, and I would not recommend that, it might be useless afterwards. She might try to hold one in need, but never be able to use it.  

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« Reply #10 on: November 30, 2003, 08:49:22 PM »

Well, I don't agree here Rayne. Maybe an inclination for magic and a talent for singing can be inherited, yes. But if she hasn't inherited this talent, who cares, which tribe she is from?Upbringing and the circumstances she lived in is the factor that counts. Maybe she has the will to survive inherited from her mother, this noble Sor'inyt woman, but it is not necessary to know it from where it derives. Her situation in the tavern is what forms her.
And now we are in a scientific discussion about what counts more: Heredity or education/upbringing?LOL, well, I'm the opinion it is more the upbringing than heredity.

Btw thanks Rayne, for your nice comment above  :-)

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« Reply #11 on: November 30, 2003, 08:54:22 PM »

WOW! We have a deep thinker on our hands...this should be interesting indeed. Very nice...just here to agree with Rayne...

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« Reply #12 on: December 01, 2003, 02:22:22 AM »

*Radaroc smacks his forehead*
Ok how about her ancestry?  Just tell us what the lineage of you char is?  Would that be so wrong?  I want to title you but its this little "tick", you know?



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« Reply #13 on: December 01, 2003, 07:33:22 AM »

OK, two last thing and these are vary small.

First there is a sentance in your personnality I find vary confusing. I ran it by another admin and she was a bit confused to, so it will at least require to explination of its meaning. The sentence in question is as follows:

"Being chased around her whole life she is surprised, that she could make up her mind and leave the Seagate, the inn she spent her whole life."

As I understand it she was born in the inn right? And lived there her whole life, until recent history. So was she chased in some way? If so, this should be mentioned in her history.

Second it your title. We need to know what to give you before we can give it to you. We can change it later if you wish. How does "Inn Worker" sound? Nice a genaric, and will fit just about any position you may get, but your title need not be your proffession, as long as it fits the character.

Otherwise I would title this character.


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« Reply #14 on: December 01, 2003, 08:34:22 AM »

Thanks Terra, changed the sentence to following (it was clear for me, , because I knew what I wanted to say, lol - is it a prper expression at all?)

Being chased around her whole life by the innowners and guests alike, only used to obey orders and not to decide for herself, she is surprised, that she could make up her mind and leave the Seagate, the inn she spent her whole life.

I don't really know, what for title I want, inn worker is fine for the moment

I don't know if "gofer" or "Girl Friday" sounds right, especially  in a medieval surrounding.

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