Miés'áel Cór'yráná/Quaelhoirhim/Writer

[Alexandre Scriabin]

Really, it seems like you were continuing on the same note you were on with the second paragraph (in your personality). So, I still don't know much about her, aside from her being a little bashful.

Try thinking about yourself or someone you know. For example: I could just say that my brother was the middle child (born before me but after my sister) and he's always been a little shy. Or I could say he's a drinker, with a weird sense of humor, who can't cook to save his life and can't do the dishes or the laundry to save his live for that matter.

So, I can only encourage you to get a little animated. Think about yourself and look at the people around you, at how interesting they are. I just want to see a personality section that you enjoyed writing, so that we can know what to expect from your character during a story. As it is, we don't have too much to go off of.

[Miés'áel Cór'yráná]

Edits done in teal. Deleted previous "new" paragraph and added two more.

[Alexandre Scriabin]

Great. I now give you your first approval and wish you a speedy second approval and titling!

[Miés'áel Cór'yráná]

Woo! Thanks! And thanks to Gundi and Valan for giving me inspiration when whining in the IRC. 

[Ridgen Sú'ufanán]

Hello there! I'm not really a mod or anything but I have been known for occasionally giving the odd comment to a few CD's, and one thing I've noticed in yours, even though it might be a bit nit-picky, is your lack of weapons weakness. I don't see how it would be a weakness, because most peasants don't have any weapons to defend themselves with, even if your character is a bit on the frail side. So uhm... I'm suggesting you change that weakness a bit, but it's not neccessary.

Wishing you a second approval soon.
Rid.

[Leif Terskun]

I'm in agreement with Ridgen on that. It was mentioned at the very start of the process - I don't know whether you changed it from then, but not owning a weapon is no more a weakness than not being able to use one. I know Andre approved you, but these are just my two sans.

Hoping to see this otherwise great character RPing.

Leif

[Alexandre Scriabin]

You're right, Leif. I wanted to comment on it but it slipped my mind initially, and I didn't mind giving her an approval once I saw her edits because her character was already balanced.

So basically, that means that we are all in agreement, Mies'ael.

[Miés'áel Cór'yráná]

Okie dokie. I can take that out. Would I need something else to balance her out?

[Deklitch Hardin]

A very quick read through makes me think that yes, another weakness would possibly be a good thing ... however that was only on a quick look through. I'm sure Leif or Alex or another one of the mods/mini mods can give you a more definite answer on that.

Sorry, I'm on my way out to help with more clean up after the Brisbane floods.

Dek

[Alexandre Scriabin]

Since I already gave her an approval, I'll leave the decision to you and Leif, and just observe.

[Malexia Vendu]

I will give a second approval, unless Leif and Dek have objections. I think overall the CD is balanced, the strengths are not so much that the weaknesses make it unbalanced.

[Deklitch Hardin]

I have no objections  ... I just really had a quick look through, and it was just a comment based on a weakness had been removed as it wasn't really a weakness.

[Miés'áel Cór'yráná]

So....I think I've gotten lost in the convo....

Should I delete the "no weapon" weakness? And if I do, do I need to come up with another weakness?

Sorry if I've been a hassle for ya'll. :-/

[Alexandre Scriabin]

Well, technically it doesn't count as a weakness, so yes it shouldn't be there. After that, I (and apparently Malexia) feel that you are balanced and don't need to add a weakness. Malexia will give you your second approval if Leif and Dek are okay with it.

Someone correct me if this wasn't a faithful summary of everything.

[Miés'áel Cór'yráná]

I'll go ahead and delete the weakness, and be on stand-by in case another needs to be written up.

Thanks for the help, guys.

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