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« on: 06 October 2009, 04:41:32 »

This is an entry that needed to be written as it is mentioned in some other entries I've done. Yet another piece of my tribe! Comments welcomed!

*Compendiumist's note: The following entry details the little researched artifacts of the Kaaer'dar'shin tribe. Because few solid facts of these masks are known outside of the tribe, the beliefs and opinions herein are written from the viewpoint of the Kaaer.*

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The five masks of the XXX are ancient and powerful relics believed to have been created thousands of years ago by powerful elven druids known as the Lost Ones. These elves, who inhabited the Kaaer homeland of the Themed'lon forests hundreds of years before the half-orcs came to live there, are said to have possessed powerful nature magic. The original mask from which the other four were created from was called in the Styrash tongue "Quelth'ananuá Modiás" (lit. "Mask of the Earth"). The Kaaer believe that the nature spirit named Durgho wore this mask and the other four belonged to his kin, the spirits of the Water, the Beast, the Light and the Darkness. When one of the masks is worn, the wielder possesses the power and strength of the spirit.

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« Reply #1 on: 06 October 2009, 06:37:52 »

A great entry as well, Azhira!  thumbup

While reading it I had some trouble though with the probability of its existence. On the one side it is a very valuable artifact, thousand of years old, but then it is known so well. For me this does not  go together, somehow. I doubt, that your elven researcher would be allowed to wear this mask. You have a fine source though for the whereabouts of those lost ones though!

Maybe a way out would be the existence of more masks of this kind. Not many, but a few. The original mask could then exist, but be more a myth. something which would never be shown to an outsider, only true members should see it at certain, rare occasions. But, there could be similar masks, made out of the same wood, made under difficult circumstances, could take years, until such a mask would be finished, would be a holy item. Many years of spiritual learning, wearing it during times of 'being out of the body'. Maybe such a mask would only come to life after long years of wearing and using by a shamut.

Then myths about shapeshifters might find  a more solid base then, if more than one mask would be around. Such a secondary mask might be lent to your elf..

Would need some rewrite, but would make it more reasonable. You have the problem, that your people are not only far away, but that they have no interest, that their most sacred things and ideas, thoughts find their way into the far away Southern Compendium! So the knowledge about that mask would probably not make it till New Santhala.

Generally I would make the appearance of that mask more vague. Somehow such an important, sacred item should not be displayed, even if only as a description, in a Santharian museum...
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« Reply #2 on: 06 October 2009, 21:11:44 »

Hrmmm...


*thinks very hard*

The mask is one of the most important pieces of the Kaaer religion. I only intended for one to be made. Making more, lesser masks reduces the original's importance, I think. Also, I intended for Saryas Kelweather to wear the mask (the only outsider to do so) as he earned the trust of the tribe during their civil war. All this was told in the Lost Ones entry and I am hesitant to change it. Being such a secretive tribe, the only way for much of Kaaer information to get to the compendium is by an outsider such as Saryas. Being an Injerin elf, he has a special connection to the Lost Ones and the Kaaer.

So...I can make the mask a bit more vague, but adding more masks is something I am hesitant to do as it altars all that I have developed already. undecided
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« Reply #3 on: 06 October 2009, 22:56:31 »

I didn't have the time to read the Lost Ones, just peeked in a bit. Are they already on the site? And you need that elf wearing the mask so that he gets to know about these Lost Ones, right? That is a problem though.

But would not the Kaaer ask him to not to reveal, tell other people about this mask? If it is so sacred, would they want the (very distant) outside world to know about it, in such detail? Therefore I proposed some more masks, this would not take any significance from the precious original.

If that elf gets so close to those people, that he is allowed to wear this mask , he has halfway to become one, and then he would himself hesitate to spread knowledge about this sacred item and even write about something in the compendium.

You have here a nice dilemma!

And, think about if a myth about shapeshifters wold really grow, if that shapeshifting takes place at very rare occasions, or at least is observed. With one mask only one man can shape shift, he will not do it often, and not necessarily with a witness. And then a rumor about it spreads till Southern Sarvonia? Unlikely I think.

But, it is your entry, you have to decide and you have to solve those problems in a believable way.  grin
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« Reply #4 on: 07 October 2009, 22:26:32 »

I am going to put this entry on hold until I can work a way around this issue...what Talia suggests makes sense, but I'll need to think on working it adequately in with what I already developed.

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« Reply #5 on: 17 October 2009, 02:39:11 »

Ok Talia, see if this revised version works better. It still needs some refinement here and there, but see if the direction makes more sense.  thumbup
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« Reply #6 on: 18 October 2009, 04:52:17 »

Ermm, what about colouring the changes?


I'm still sweating over that weather stuff which does not want to turn out as I want !
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« Reply #7 on: 22 October 2009, 23:44:42 »

Revisions colored Yellow, Talia.
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« Reply #8 on: 23 October 2009, 12:41:01 »

Overview:

The Kaaer'dar'shin half-orcs of Northern Sarvonia are a deeply spiritual people with a powerful connections to the wilds of nature. It is believed by the tribe that before one can become truly one with nature, they must first wear the "A'ng'erg tel Pafalka" (lit "Masks of the Tree Cousins") or the "A'ng'erg tel Durgho" (lit "Masks of Durgho"). It is believed there are at least a dozen masks, each with different capabilities and powers. The original mask from which all the lesser ones were created from was called in the Styrash tongue "Quelth'ananuá Modiás" (lit. "Mask of the Earth"). It is believed to be a powerful artifact created by the Injerin druid sect, The Lost Ones, thousands of years ago. According to tribal lore, the Mask of the Earth was lost when the Lost Ones abandoned the Themed'lon sometime during the Age of Myths. A powerful shamut, Krull'mor, claimed to have re-discovered this mask in 1300 b.S. With it, the story goes, he finally united the various warring clans and ended the civil war. Krull'mor ushered in a new era of peace and developed the druidic culture that the half-orcs are known for to this day. One aspect of this new culture was the creation of lesser masks based upon the original he found. Whereas the original Mask of the Earth is held by many to be a myth, some of the lesser ones are well known outside the tribe.


Ah, you found a fine way around it! Congratulation!
But :p   - in this overview you are throwing the facts of your entry into the face of the reader. Imagine, there is one who doesn‘t know your Kaaer, he will go away, for you are dumping too much information at once. Start a bit slower, tell a bit more about the kaaer in a sentence or two, each entry should more or less be a stand alone. Maybe leave out the Kaaer name for the mask, it is not so important to be in the overview, most readers will forget the name anyway soon. Think about, if it would be not better to start with the original mask and then tell of the others. Say in a side sentence, who the lost ones were.


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Please say some general words to the masks and their overall importance, before you go in detail. Or try to describe, how the mythical mask is remembered.

The Tree Cousin Masks

The Tree Cousin Masks represent the earth spirits - trees, land, sky and water. Each of the Tree Cousin masks is thought to be made from the bark of the drasil memory tree or a pendrowe. When a mask is worn, it covers the top half of the face with two eye holes for viewing and the bridge of the nose is concealed. Each mask varies in appearance, with the Tree Cousin ones colored a deep brown and black, and is rough hewn like tree bark. Each mask measures approximately 25 to 30 nailsbreadths long at its widest tips.

Too accurate for items which though not myth, are nevertheless not really an object of investigation, maybe tell instead, how much of the face they cover or how far they are extended, avoiding numbers would be better , I think.

Some are shaped like a hand with fingers splayed open, with long sections spread outward. Some describe it as antlers or horns spread out. Other masks are more circular in shape, concave that wraps around the face supported by a strap of hide around the back of the head. The masks are sometimes decorated with the feathers of the eagle when used in important festivals such as the Feast of Horkcha. Otherwise, the masks are relatively unadorned and to the untrained eye looks like a simple piece of tree bark.

The Masks of Durgho

The Durgho masks represent the beasts of the land. Each one is made of hides of the animals they represent: uncil cat, wolf, bear, eagle or Tsor-Shotak lizard. It is believed that each mask was created with the hide of a particularly powerful specimen of each beast. The myth goes that the god Durgho brought each beast to the tribe during various periods in the tribe's history for the shamut to sacrifice. Each head shamut claims that the Durgho granted him (or her, during one period in 62 b.S., when the shamut was a woman) the skills necessary to create a mask. Unlike the Tree Cousin masks, most of the Durgho masks have never been seen by outsiders so one can only guess as to their appearance. If one were to guess, the masks would probably be decorated with different kinds of feathers, bone or claws. One Durgho mask has a most fearsome reputation among the Osther-Oc: the black uncil cat mask. It is said that this one is made of rare black hide and the wearer is granted intimidating yellow eyes for which to see in the darkness. Additionally, the wearer can shift into a powerful uncil cat, colored black as the night sky, to pounce on enemies from above unseen.

Again, please make that date a bit more vague...

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The Tree Cousin Masks

The A'ng'erg tel Pafalka are believed to possess a great many powers over nature. Tradition among the Kaaer'dar'shin is that they first and foremost have the power to communicate with the beings of the forest. These beings, chiefly their sacred pendrowe, are known to scholars as being unique creatures. Much like trees with a conscienceness, the pendrowe are able to act of their own will. Some say the pendrowe have limited intelligence while others say they act on instinct. Regardless, the shamuts of the Kaaer'dar'shin know the pendrowe have much to say. To them, the pendrowe can tell many things of the forest such as its health and needs. Since most pendrowe are capable of living for many years, they can tell a fascinating tale of history that they have experienced over time. However, the images gleaned from a pendrowe are not as clear as those from the drasil memory tree.

The second power known to the Kaaer'dar'shin is that the masks enable the wearer to experience vivid and clear memories of times long past. The drasil has long been known to carry such memories, but few can actually experience them without a deep understanding of wisdom not known to many creatures. However, with the Masks of the Tree Cousin, the wearer need only touch the tree and a flood of memories come to them. While no shamut has ever described their experience listening to the drasil, one such elf was known to wear a Tree Cousin mask once. The famed explorer and ranger, Saryas Kelweather, was allowed to wear a mask when he when was searching for the nature of the Lost Ones. He describes the experience as follows:

"The mask was rough upon my skin, and smelled of a deep and ancient wood. As I placed it upon my face, I felt a deep sensation of unimaginable power as if the mask seethed with life. As I placed it upon my face, the forest around me changed. I saw not trees and plants and rocks, but each became as a pale light, white and strong. The smells changed to a deep odor, as if my senses all had become as powerful as a uncil cat. I heard noises everywhere, all at once, birds and creatures and leaves falling to the ground. It threatened to overwhelm me, but it soon passed and I was able to focus.

I touched the drasil tree and at first, nothing happened. Then, I saw flashes of brilliant light and my body seemed to hum. Images burst forth in my mind, thousands of them, in brilliant color and detail. I saw so many things past and present that I could never recall them all. I focused on my needs and the tree suddenly showed me what I wanted to know. It showed me the Lost Ones, my ancient cousins of long past, and how they lived and how they died. The tree knew this, and was old even to the druids. My mind captured it all and I was able to recollect the memories in vivid detail. Once done, the tree was silenced and I felt alone and cold. I felt the wondrous power leave me as the mask released my mind. I was saddened, yet overjoyed at the experience."

The Durgho Masks

Though not as widely believed by scholars, the masks of Durgho are said to have the power to grant the wearer the ability to shift into beasts. This ability has been compared to the power of the Feylya Fur Folk, a mythical race of shapeshifters thought to roam the North. These masks are the more mysterious of the group. The shamuts of the tribe have never denied this claim, nor have they affirmed it. To them, the mask's purposes are highly private. The only reason the Durgo masks are known outside the tribe is due to the stories told by the Kaaer'dar'shin's enemies: the Osther-Oc. Some of the more obscure orcen tales say that the most powerful of the Kaaer'dar'shin shamuts and warriors can wear the beast masks and through a highly ritualized ceremony, they shift into the beast of the mask they wear and stalk the wilds for many days. But, scholars agree, these are just stories past down among some Northern tribes for generations with hardly any real evidence to support them.


I‘m never satisfied, am I? ;)

I think it is a good entry, but somehow it feels a bit ‚clinical‘ too me, something of your spirit with which you wrote your other entries is missing. I bet you thought you had to write this entry, for it is part of your Kaaer and had to be done ?
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« Reply #9 on: 24 October 2009, 01:16:16 »



Hrm. It doesn't seem this entry is clicking for me. I'll put it on hold again. Thanks for taking a look, Talia.
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« Reply #10 on: 24 October 2009, 05:01:04 »

Not much to alter, Azhira and it is done! Maybe you really have here a writer's block.
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« Reply #11 on: 14 January 2010, 06:00:56 »

Ok, I need another opinion on this entry. It is near complete, but I am having a hard time seeing what Talia is seeing. Is the entry too specific? Too vague? What does it need?

This entry delves kinda deep into the lore of my tribe up North, but I would appreciate any who is relatively unfamiliar with the Kaaer to comment.  ;)
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« Reply #12 on: 14 January 2010, 13:27:34 »

I have just finished reading 99 pages of text, and I may be SLIGHTLY mentally fatigued and a little crunched for time. My comments/corrections/explanations are a bit spare.  buck

I think the details are well-presented. Just be careful of over-using phrases like "It is believed." If you throw a character in there, you can make constructions like "Kaaer'dar'shin believe" or "Scholars believe," or you can re-arrange things to remove it entirely. Otherwise, it looks good to me.

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Overview:

The Kaaer'dar'shin half-orcs of Northern Sarvonia are a deeply spiritual people with a powerful connections to the wilds of nature. It is believed by the tribe [ You begin three sentences in one paragraph with "It is believed"! Perhaps we can vary it a little: "This tribe believes"/"This tribe subscribed to the belief"/"This tribe holds the belief"?] that before one can become truly one with nature, they must first wear the "A'ng'erg tel Pafalka" (lit "Masks of the Tree Cousins") or the "A'ng'erg tel Durgho" (lit "Masks of Durgho"). It is believed there are at least a dozen masks, ["There may be at least a dozen masks"?] each with different capabilities and powers. The original mask from which all the lesser ones were created from was called in the Styrash tongue "Quelth'ananuá Modiás" (lit. "Mask of the Earth"). It is believed to be a ["This mask is regarded as a"] powerful artifact created by the Injerin druid sect, The Lost Ones, thousands of years ago. According to tribal lore, the Mask of the Earth was lost when the Lost Ones abandoned the Themed'lon sometime during the Age of Myths. A powerful shamut, Krull'mor, claimed to have re-discovered this mask in 1300 b.S. With it, the story goes, he finally united the various warring clans and ended the civil war. Krull'mor ushered in a new era of peace and developed the druidic culture that the half-orcs are known for to this day. One aspect of this new culture was the creation of lesser masks based upon the original he found ["... the druidic culture for which the half-orcs are now known"]. Whereas the original Mask of the Earth is held by many to be a myth, some of the lesser ones are well known outside the tribe.

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The Tree Cousin Masks ("A'ng'erg tel Pafalka")

The Tree Cousin Masks represent the earth spirits - trees, land, sky and water. Each of the Tree Cousin masks is thought to be made from the bark of the drasil memory tree or a pendrowe. [Thought by whom? You can removed the passive if you know the subject and don't mind throwing it in.] When a mask is worn, it ["When worn, the mask"] covers the top half of the face with two eye holes for viewing [Readers will ask "viewing what?" Perhaps: with two holes through which to see" or just "two eyes holes," without the "viewing"?] and the bridge of the nose is concealed. Each mask varies in appearance, [Most of the sentences above this seem like they could go in a general description section. Perhaps you can move these details up?] with the Tree Cousin ones colored a deep brown and black, and is rough hewn like tree bark. Each mask measures approximately 25 to 30 nailsbreadths long at its widest tips. Some are shaped like a hand with fingers splayed open, with long sections spread outward. Some describe it as antlers or horns spread out. Other masks are more circular in shape, concave that wraps around the face supported by a strap of hide around the back of the head. The masks are sometimes decorated with the feathers of the eagle when used in important festivals such as the Feast of Horkcha. Otherwise, the masks are relatively unadorned and to the untrained eye looks like a simple piece of tree bark.

The Masks of Durgho ("A'ng'erg tel Durgho")

The Durgho masks represent the beasts of the land. Each one is made of hides of the animals they represent: uncil cat, wolf, bear, eagle or Tsor-Shotak lizard. It is believed ["The half-orcs believe"?] that each mask was created with the hide of a particularly powerful specimen of each beast. The myth goes that the god Durgho brought each beast to the tribe during various periods in the tribe's history for the shamut to sacrifice. Each head shamut claims that the Durgho granted him (or her, during one period in 62 b.S., when the shamut was a woman) the skills necessary to create a mask. Unlike the Tree Cousin masks, most of the Durgho masks have never been seen by outsiders so one can only guess as to their appearance; the masks would probably be decorated with different kinds of feathers, bone or claws. One Durgho mask has a most fearsome reputation among the Osther-Oc: the black uncil cat mask. It is said [Who says?] that this one is made of rare black hide and the wearer is granted intimidating yellow eyes for which to see in the darkness. Additionally, the wearer can shift into a powerful uncil cat, colored black as the night sky, to pounce on enemies from above unseen.
[maybe "from above without being seen," or else perhaps add a comma after "above."]

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The Tree Cousin Masks ("A'ng'erg tel Pafalka")

The A'ng'erg tel Pafalka, the Tree Cousins masks, are believed to possess a great many powers over nature. Tradition among the Kaaer'dar'shin is that they first and foremost have the power ["According to Kaaer'dar'shin tradition, these masks have the power, first and foremost," to communicate with the beings of the forest. These beings, chiefly their sacred pendrowe, are known to scholars as being unique creatures. Much like trees with a conscienceness, the pendrowe are able to act of their own will. Some say the pendrowe have limited intelligence while others say they act on instinct. Regardless, the shamuts of the Kaaer'dar'shin know the pendrowe have much to say. To them, the pendrowe can tell many things of the forest such as its health and needs. Since most pendrowe are capable of living for many years, they can tell a fascinating tale of history that they have experienced over time. ["... they can recall events and tales from history, ones living within their memory as real experiences" Or something like that @_@.] However, the images gleaned from a pendrowe are not as clear as those from the drasil memory tree.

The second power known to the Kaaer'dar'shin is that the masks enable the wearer to experience vivid and clear memories of times long past. The drasil has long been known to carry such memories, but few can actually experience them without a deep understanding of wisdom not known to many creatures. However, with the Masks of the Tree Cousin, the wearer need only touch the tree and a flood of memories come to them. While no shamut has ever described their experience listening to the drasil, one such elf was known to wear a Tree Cousin mask once. The famed explorer and ranger, Saryas Kelweather, wore a mask when he when was searching for the nature of the Lost Ones. He describes the experience as follows:

"The mask was rough upon my skin, and smelled of a deep and ancient wood. As I placed it upon my face, I felt a deep sensation of unimaginable power as if the mask seethed with life. ["seethe" is generally associated with loathing, anger, and other negative emotions. It's a judgement call, but you may want to consider another word: surged, flowed, brimmed, pulsed, flooded, etc.] As I placed it upon my face, the forest around me changed. I saw not trees and plants and rocks, but each became as a pale light, white and strong. The smells changed to a deep odor, as if my senses all had become as powerful as a uncil cat. I heard noises everywhere, all at once, birds and creatures and leaves falling to the ground. It threatened to overwhelm me, but it soon passed and I was able to focus.

I touched the drasil tree and at first, nothing happened. Then, I saw flashes of brilliant light and my body seemed to hum. Images burst forth in my mind, thousands of them, in brilliant color and detail. I saw so many things past and present that I could never recall them all. I focused on my needs and the tree suddenly showed me what I wanted to know. It showed me the Lost Ones, my ancient cousins of long past, and how they lived and how they died. The tree knew this, and was old even to the druids. My mind captured it all and I was able to recollect the memories in vivid detail. Once done, the tree was silenced and I felt alone and cold. I felt the wondrous power leave me as the mask released my mind. I was saddened, yet overjoyed at the experience."


The Durgho Masks ("A'ng'erg tel Durgho")

Though not as widely believed by scholars, the masks of Durgho are said to have the power to grant the wearer the ability to shift into beasts. This ability has been compared to the power of the Feylya Fur Folk, a mythical race of shapeshifters thought to roam the North. These masks are the more mysterious of the group. [What group?] The shamuts of the tribe have never denied this claim, nor have they affirmed it. To them, the mask's purposes are highly private ["secretive"; "sacred and therefore secretive"?]. The only reason the Durgo masks are known outside the tribe is due to the through stories told by the Kaaer'dar'shin's enemies: the Osther-Oc. Some of the more obscure orcen tales say that the most powerful of the Kaaer'dar'shin shamuts and warriors can wear the beast masks and through a highly ritualized ceremony, they shift into the beast of the mask they wear and stalk the wilds for many days. But, scholars agree, these are just stories past down among some Northern tribes for generations with hardly any real evidence to support them.[/color]

History/Origin:

According to Kaaer'dar'shin myth, the original Mask of the Earth was created thousands of years ago by the Lost Ones, an Injerin druid clan who inhabited the Themed'lon during the Era of Consolation. The exact date of creation is not known, but Saryas Kelweather believes that around 6000 b.S. is a reasonable time frame. [Time frames are frames/windows (i.e. between X date and Y date). Perhaps "estimate"?] According to tradition, the mask was created from a single piece of the drasil tree and blessed by the Lost Ones. The Singing Glade, a large glade within the Themed'lon, is where the drasil stands tall and where it is believed the mask was made. ["Kaaer'dar'shin believe the mask was made by a large drasil within the Singing Glade, a large glade within the Themed'lon"]. The drasil gave this gift to the druidic elves to further their communion with the forests. Ancient records say the elves called the mask "Quelth'ananuá Modiás" (lit. "Mask of the Earth"). Since the drasil is a being born of earth, the name was appropriate. [Usually researchers don't evaluate in this way. Perhaps the Kaaer'dar'shin thought it was appropriate?] However, the mask was one relic forcefully/regrettably? abandoned when the orcs drove the druids from the forests in 2800 b.S. Some say as the mask, the Kaaer'dar'shin say, must never leave the forest where it was created. The Kaaer'dar'shin believe this and guard the mask and hide it deep within the Singing Grove. ["Today the Kaaer'dar'shin guard the mask, hiding it deep within the Singing Grove"? Here you refer to it as "Grove." Above you refer to it as "Glade." Unless they're different? And how did the Kaaer'dar'shin come to retrieve/find the mask when the elves were driven away? This last part also seems to not really follow the chronology continued by the next paragraph.][/color]

The mask was left behind as the druids, for reasons not truly known for certain, left for other areas. Within the glade, the mask slept for hundreds of years, undisturbed by anyone. In 1200 a.S., a Kaaer'dar'shin shamut named Kulk'bek claimed to have been spoken to the Earth Brother himself through a group of very old trees within the forest (likely the Singing Grove) and he proclaims [Sudden tense change. You can speak in present tense if you're going to organize this section like a history--otherwise, stay with past!] the entire wood sacred. He begins to live exclusively within the forest and soon forsakes the company of his people. Further stories are told of living guardian trees and plants within the forest and the Kaaer'dar'shin regard the Themed'lon as a sacred area and come to believe that the Earth Brother in mortal form lives within the woods. [You have three "and"s in this sentence acting as conjunctions between independent clauses. Perhaps break them up?]

A civil war broke out in the tribe in 1250 a.S over the true nature of the Beastlord faith. A shamut named Krull'mor took it upon himself to end the war by declaring a new faith and way for his people. To prove it, he embarks on a journey alone in the Themed'lon to find and bring back his ancestor Kulk'bek's bones as he believes that the people will once again come together if the bones of Kulk'bek can be seen.

Krull'mor finds a hidden grove within the woods and discovers his ancestor's bones beneath a thick, ancient looking tree. He reveals a mask made of bark that covers the skeleton's skull. He calls the mask "A'ng'erg Pafalka" (lit. "Mask of the Tree Cousin"), then buries the skeleton in the grove but keeps the corpse's partially decomposed clothing and bone totem. He stays there for many days. Upon his return, he shows the people his findings and takes several of them into the grove to experience the wonders of the Earth Brother.

[I think this section might be best arranged as a history table with Date: Name: Description.

Myth/Lore:

Among the people of the Kaaer'dar'shin, the masks are truly sacred items. The faith [What faith?] centered around the mask's powers have renewed the tribe's faith in themselves and likely helped save them from their destructive civil war in.... The Injerin Lost Ones are told to have been a powerful clan of druids who blessed the mask with powerful magics. The half-orcs believe that only they can use it, or bless others to use it, and that it must never leave the forest. [The information in this paragraph is already stated in your history section.

Only holy shamuts (typically druids themselves) are allowed to wear the mask. Anyone else who dares wear it without the blessing of the shamut is believed to fall under a death curse. The mask is kept under guard by warriors at all times within the Singing Grove, a peaceful and sacred place located deep within the Themed'lon forests. It is worn rarely by the shamuts in times of trouble, strife or to commune with the forest for guidance. Although much of the powers of the mask cannot be proven, the tribe knows well its capabilities and their faith revolves around this artifact in many ways. [What ways?]
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« Reply #13 on: 15 January 2010, 05:12:34 »

Excellent! Thanks Rayne. Between Talia and your comments, I think I have a good deal to work with here. This will help me work out some more detail for my religion re-write currently in limbo.  :P
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« Reply #14 on: 26 March 2010, 03:05:55 »

Azhira, I see we have left you in the hands of two of our toughest commenters.  Well with patience that can only lead to a better entry.  The only comment I have is the Mask of the Earth.  Can we get a description of that Mask as well?   Someday someone may want to draw that mask.  Even a rumour of what it may have looked like would work.

Overall good entry of a very detailed aspect of half-orc culture.  This kind of stuff really brings out the uniqueness of a tribe and makes the tribe come to life.  thumbup and Aura + from me.
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