Santharian Development

Santharian World Development => The Santharian Bestiary => Topic started by: Niccoli on 18 August 2006, 06:07:06



Title: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Niccoli on 18 August 2006, 06:07:06
Basic Overview of the Beast
The mite swarm is a group of minute insects existing collectivly as an airborne pestillence containing thousands or more individuals. that exists around the countryside through out the part of Sarvonia to then north of Heckra

         Appearance
The individual mite is approximatly one nailsbredth and two grains long, and possesses a body divided into approximatly 10 individual segments, all of which are coloured a muddy brown. The mite has approximatly 4 pairs of legs. It possesses minute translucent wings, like those of a beetle, and a pointed stinger like protusion at the end of the body. While this may not do anything it does add to the confusion of discerning whether it is a swarm of hornets or mites. The swarm itself is a loose cloud, appearing to be a group of fast-moving brown dots. A larger central dot will move before the rest of the cloud and is difficult to track. Generally it is easier to find the aftermath of the mites than the beasts themselves.


         Special Abilities
The mite swarm is capable of ingesting almost any organic material. They will move collectivley to avoid being eaten by larger creatures. As a group the mites are almost unstoppable.

         Territory
The mite swarm exists selectivly in a band of Sarvonia between Nyermersis and Heckra from coast to coast. The insects will venture further south but is seldomly seen, and the swarm appears to be smaller, they are not seen anywhere past Santhala. They are more promenent to the north, but do not travel further than Dragon's Maw. This would have something to do with the temperatures. The mites migrate to the south during the winter months, and seem to hibernate, eating very little and becomming near impossible to find.
       
 Habitat/Behavior
The mite swarm seem to move around a central insect, which is larger than the others. This insect will move before the others and appears to be their leader. The swarm will avoid bodies of water of more than 3 peds in diametre, but will go around the water, fly over rivers, or simply go another way. The sasfest place to be if a mite attacks is in the middle of the nearest pond. Mites also seem to avoid fire, however small the flames may be.

         Diet
The mite is completly omnivorous, anything organic, living or dead is on its menu, textiles, wood, plants and flesh are all free for eating. However, this being said, the mites tend to feast on wood and crops, as the other forms of food generally envolve having to go inside houses, which is difficult for the mites, as they


The signs of mites are usually obvious. Very little is generally left whole, rocks and stones will be unscathed, crops will be destroyed as if by wildfire, buildings will be empty of life, fabrics with holes and chunks torn out of them. Many half eaten corpses of both people and animals, trees striped bare of their leaves and bark, chunks torn out of the wood. Entire streches can look like veritable wastelands.

         Mating
There is very little known about the mites, they appear to hatch from eggs, which are layed under the leaves of trees. The eggs are green and brown in colour. Eggs that are pure brown do not appear to hatch. This could be because they have a defect in them.


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Niccoli on 20 August 2006, 00:10:57
PLEASE COMMENT! I am going very slowly crazy with the waiting!  :shocked:


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Ralhag Silverskin on 20 August 2006, 00:33:05
I didn't read it, but you are going to need MORE....

I will read it now, but you will need more of everything...

Ralhag


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Niccoli on 20 August 2006, 00:35:27
do you know that that was extremely helpful...


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Ralhag Silverskin on 20 August 2006, 00:39:07
I want to know more about their behaviours, i.e., who the central bug is and what their role is.  I also want to know more about the water phobia.  I want to know more about everything.

There are places where cleaning up is required.  

For example:  You tallk about the mite swarm, is there only one? Or is it supposed to be the mite swarms?  

I also would like to hear more about mating.

Vagueness is not a good thing, we want/need details!

:)

That is a start!

Ralhag


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Ralhag Silverskin on 20 August 2006, 00:40:26
Extremely helpful?  Why thanks, thats what I'm here for! :)

Unless you were being sarcastic... then it's :(

;)

Ralhag


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Niccoli on 20 August 2006, 00:42:31
That was sarcasm. Its really not much help with anything.


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Ralhag Silverskin on 20 August 2006, 00:52:24
More, more, more is all you are going to hear until you add alot.

You asked for comments, this is it.  "More."

Don't ask for comments if you don't actually want them.

:)

Ralhag


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Niccoli on 20 August 2006, 01:02:45
*Glares*, well then, may as well keep to it.


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Ralhag Silverskin on 20 August 2006, 02:05:46
Niccoli, why are you glaring?

You asked for comments, I gave you the most pertinent one, which was that you would need alot more information in your entry.  I'm sorry if that bugs you, but it is the truth.  Read other entries and tell me if yours doesn't seem a bit short.  You really must read other works in order to find out what is required.

I apologize for offending you, but you asked for comments, and I gave you one, the same one that everyone would have given you.

Ralhag


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Niccoli on 20 August 2006, 02:12:26
sorry, should have changed that. Was glaring at keyboard trying to think of something to write. My appologies.


Title: Re: Mite Swarm
Post by: Ralhag Silverskin on 20 August 2006, 14:10:09
No problem...

I look forward to the next draft of the entry...

Good luck...

Ralhag


Title: Re: Mite
Post by: Niccoli on 21 August 2006, 02:22:11
there are edits!


Title: Re: Mite
Post by: Ta`lia of the Seven Jewels on 21 August 2006, 03:22:29
 Only some very quick comments


Basic Overview of the Beast
The mite swarm is a group of minute insects existing collectivly as an airborne pestillence containing thousands or more individuals

 Add here as well half a sentence from territory.
Who did count them? Maybe add the size of the cloud

         Appearance
The individual mite is approximatly one nailsbredth and two grains long, and possesses a segmented body coloured a muddy brown, with multiple pairs of legs. It  has minute translucent wings, like those of a beetle, and a pointed stinger like protusion.
 I can‘t picture it yet, is it slender, how many segments, how many legs approximately, where sits this protrusion? How long are the wings?

The swarm itself is a loose cloud, appearing to be a group of fast-moving brown dots. A larger central dot will move before the rest of the cloud and is difficult to track. Generally it is easier to find the aftermath of the mites than the beasts themselves.
 are they so rare?


         Special Abilities
The mite swarm is capable of ingesting almost any organic material. They will move collectivley to avoid being eaten by larger creatures. As a group the mites are almost unstoppable.

 That is a bit unlikely, I know this from fishswarms, but don‘t you think bats and birds wouldn‘t hunt them? Who are the predators?

         Territory
The mite swarm exists selectivly in a band of Sarvonia between Nyermersis and Heckra from coast to coast. The insects will venture further south but is seldomly seen, and the swarm appears to be smaller, they are not seen anywhere past Santhala. They are more prom inent to the north, but do not travel further than Dragon's Maw. This would have something to do with the temperatures.  No proper sentence The mites migrate to the south during the winter months, and seem to hibernate, eating very little and becomming near impossible to
find.
 How far? When can they be seen? Is there a collective movement of them, are they like migrating birds?
Write down what you have in mind
       
 Habitat/Behavior
The mite swarm seem to move around a central insect, which is larger than the others. This insect will move before the others and appears to be their leader. The swarm will avoid bodies of water of more than 3 peds in diametre, but will go around the water, fly over rivers, or simply go another way. The sa()fest place to be if a mite attacks is in the middle of the nearest pond. Mites also seem to avoid fire, however small the flames may be.
 That is a tiny little bit contradicting - avoiding pools of three peds but nevertheless flying over rivers? Maybe tell us something about the distance. (the bigger a river the higher they fly?

         Diet
The mite is completly omnivorous, anything organic, living or dead is on its menu, textiles, wood, plants and flesh are all free for eating. The main component of their diet is any form of wood.
 Write a bit more about how they are attacking, about what farmers or other people observe. add under territory if they are seen in cities as well or only in the country

The signs of mites are usually obvious. Very little is generally left whole, rocks and stones will be unscathed, crops will be destroyed as if by wildfire, buildings will be empty of life, fabrics with holes and chunks torn out of them. Many half eaten corpses of both people and animals, trees striped bare of their leaves and bark, chunks torn out of the wood. Entire streches can look like veritable wastelands.
 I would assume that nothing is left - no half eaten corpses

         Mating
There is very little known about the mites, they appear to hatch from eggs, which are layed under the leaves of trees. The eggs are green and brown in colour. Eggs that are pure brown do not appear to hatch. This could be because they have a defect in them.
 Come on, how is the leader „created“?


Good start so far, hope my comments help!


Title: Re: Mite
Post by: Niccoli on 22 August 2006, 04:30:32
Okay, made some edits to the diet, realizing that obviously they would have to be without large numbers, which would defeat the purpose of being a swarm, or we'd have whole bunches of towns disapearing into nothing. Added stuff to the Overview, and appearence


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Ta`lia of the Seven Jewels on 22 August 2006, 05:33:05
Please go again through my comment, cover all I asked for and color your changes.

some additional remarks:




„or more individuals. that exists around the countryside through out the part of Sarvonia to then north of Heckra“

Unclear sentence

„approximatly 10 individual segments“

Why approximately, has it to do with growth?

how can the minute wings carry them?

Why has it a stinger if there is no use for it?

„This would have something to do with the temperatures.“

this is not a well formed sentence

Why do they migrate to the south in winter? there is snow and ice as well. What about frost and ice and snow?


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Niccoli on 22 August 2006, 21:35:36
did you notice the size of the little critters? slightly longer than the width of a finger, it isn't going to take much in the way of wings to get that airborne.
As to the approximations, obviously you'd have to get a specimen, and of course, it would have to be dead, or it would be rather hard to get the numbers. Do we have a santharian equivelent to a low powered microscope? or a magnifying glass?


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Ta`lia of the Seven Jewels on 22 August 2006, 21:58:29
I did, your beasts are 14mm long and that is not too small, "minute" is a bit vague and doesn't sound as if the wings can carry an insect this long. I think you could even count the segments (if there are 10 or 11)without a magnifying glass. But we do have glasses for people, so we have magnifying glasses as well, might be a precious tool of a researcher.

It shouldn't be too hard to get some of your specimen to have a close look at them and to discover distinctions between them. You should even be able to get the big central one. Don't say "not much is known" to avoid description. Santharian researchers are known for their thirst for infos and their success! I could even imagine that one researcher got hold of a whole cloud , maybe with magical help (ask in the magic forum how this could be done!)


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Artimidor Federkiel on 23 August 2006, 03:47:08
I see you want to use Quellion's picture for this entry, this here:

(http://stuff.santharia.com/quellion/hexagenaswarm2_small.jpg)

Basically that sounds ok, but poses the question: What kind of race/tribe is actually depcited here, who is attacked by this swarm? A Goblin (Gob-Oc) perhaps?


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Artimidor Federkiel on 23 August 2006, 04:02:58
Some more notes:

- I see the title of the entry has changed to "Woodboring Mite". That's good, because the entry should be about the mite, not a swarm of mites. You can mention that the mites form a swarm, though. However, throughout the entry you refer only to a mite swarm, also in the Overview. Here it doesn't really fit, also at various passages further down. Change that accordingly - the single one is the main focus.

- You might also give the mite a secondary name, or a primary name and add "Woodboring Mite" as the secondary.

- Overview part could be a bit longer and more detailed.

- Approximately  too many approximatelys here (note the correct spelling!):

Quote
The individual mite is approximatly  one nailsbredth and two grains long, and possesses a body divided into approximatly  10 individual segments, all of which are coloured a muddy brown. The mite has approximatly

- Territory: Well, what kind of conditions do they really prefer? At the border of swamps perhaps? Within certain forests? You aren't very specific here.


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Ta`lia of the Seven Jewels on 23 August 2006, 05:41:07
The mites on the pic are a bit bigger than.. 14mm.


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Niccoli on 23 August 2006, 22:49:41
Artistic interpretation mayhaps? you wouldn't really be able to get that close...


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Mina on 24 August 2006, 17:39:52
1. The insects depicted in the picture certainly don't look like mites to me.  Perhaps you can make them some other sort of insect.  Termites, maybe. 

2. They seem to have less than 4 pairs of legs.  The one most prominently shown has 5 legs visible, and most of the others seem to have 6 legs. 

3. Your description of them makes them seem like a very dangerous species, sort of like airborne army ants (which would be bad enough if they really existed), but worse, because they are omnivorous.  I think you might want to tone it down a little. 


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Artimidor Federkiel on 26 August 2006, 15:43:50
Any news from here, Niccoli? Update time would be this Sunday if you can make final adjustments.


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Artimidor Federkiel on 27 August 2006, 15:50:56
I'll finish this one for this week's update.


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Miraran Tehuriden on 28 August 2006, 23:08:17
reading through this quickly.. mac doesnt allow me to enter codes?! oh well, ill use hard returns to seperate my comments from the text. sorry for the inconvenience (minor text edits are in full caps)



Basic Overview of the Beast
The mite swarm is a group of minute insects existing collectivly as an airborne pestillence containing thousands or more individuals. that exists around the countryside through out the part of Sarvonia to then north of Heckra.

 sentence still doesnt make sence. "--- thousands of individuals. They can be found around the countryside  almost everywhere north of mount Heckra." would be a nice replacement imho.

         Appearance
The individual mite is approximatly one nailsbredth and two grains long

that is verry precise, actualy.. little approximate about it :D

, and possesses a body divided into approximatly 10 individual segments, all of which are coloured a muddy brown. The mite has approximatly 4 pairs of legs.

the amount of segments and legs may vary?

It possesses minute translucent wings, like those of a beetle, and a pointed stinger like protusion at the end of the body. While this may not do anything it does add to the confusion of discerning whether it is a swarm of hornets or mites. The swarm itself is a loose cloud, appearing to be a group of fast-moving brown dots. A larger central dot will move before the rest of the cloud and is difficult to track. Generally it is easier to find the aftermath of the mites than the beasts themselves.

         Special Abilities
The mite swarm is capable of ingesting almost any organic material. They will move collectivley to avoid being eaten by larger creatures. As a group the mites are almost unstoppable.

i see Art has already ok-ed this, but personally i would ask for a little more detail on this ability, as im sure there is more to be told here..


         Territory
The mite swarm exists selectivly in a band of Sarvonia between Nyermersis and MOUNT Heckra from coast to coast. The insects will venture further south but is seldomly seen, and the swarm appears to be smaller, they are not seen anywhere past Santhala. They are more PROMINENT to the north, but do not travel further than Dragon's Maw. This would have something to do with the temperatures. The mites migrate to the south during the winter months, and seem to hibernate, eating very little and becomming near impossible to find.

near impossible suggests it can be done.. where do they hibernate then?

       
 Habitat/Behavior
The mite swarm seem to move around a central insect, which is larger than the others. This insect will move before the others and appears to be their leader. The swarm will avoid bodies of water of more than 3 peds in diametre, but will go around the water, fly over rivers, or simply go another way. The sasfest place to be if a mite attacks is in the middle of the nearest pond. Mites also seem to avoid fire, however small the flames may be.

nothing on the habitat (type of country they prefer) apart from the water bit. a bit more on the behaviour would be appreciated as well.

         Diet
The mite is completly omnivorous, anything organic, living or dead is on its menu. (INSERTED END OF LINE) Textiles, wood, plants and flesh are all free for eating. However, this being said, the mites tend to feast on wood and crops, as the other forms of food generally envolve having to go inside houses, which is difficult for the mites, as they

as they what?

The signs of mites are usually obvious. Very little is generally left whole, rocks and stones will be unscathed, BUT crops will be destroyed as if by wildfire, buildings will be empty of life, fabrics with holes and chunks torn out of them. Many half eaten corpses of both people and animals, trees striped bare of their leaves and bark, chunks torn out of the wood. Entire streches can look like veritable wastelands.


         Mating
There is very little known about the mites, they appear to hatch from eggs, which are layed under the leaves of trees. The eggs are green and brown in colour. Eggs that are pure brown do not appear to hatch. This could be because they have a defect in them.

do we know something about the male/female ratio? (most swarm insects are not 50% male/50% female) mating period? hatching period? do they guard their eggs? etc etc


I know i have commented heavilly on this entry, even though it has already been prepared by our dear webmaster. Thus, i cannot claim you will HAVE to make changes accordingly in order to get uploaded, but it would be verry much appreciated, for i feel there is a lot more to be told about these interesting insects.
I do not in any way wish to denounce you with this list of comments, since i think there has already been a lot of time put into this. (and it shows, i realy did like the idea) But, as we all strive for perfection  :)

(hint; use www.spellcheck.net, it works perfectly for me. (if you don't mind using american spelling))

Good luck,
Miraran Tehuriden


Title: Re: Woodboring Mite
Post by: Irid alMenie on 29 August 2006, 00:52:40
Miraran, you were just a tad bit too late: this entry was included in sunday's update, with a little additional information by Arti ;)