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Title: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 25 May 2006, 09:43:00
Ok, since I have had this idea for a weapon that is now bulging out of my brain, I will finally post it.

Overview: The Twinell Blades are serrated daggers, originating from the Eophyrhim Tribe. They differ greatly from the appearance of most other daggers. It has many serrations and a spike at the bottom to thrust. This popular dagger comes usually in pairs. Many people use such a weapon for stealing or fighting.

Weapon Appearance: The weapon contains a different type of appearence then most weapons. They are serrated daggers, though have a different type of handling. The serrations are sharp and jagged, like shark teeth. The jagged teeth of the serrations are pointing outward, to put more of a scratch on the enemy. There is also a spike on the bottom used for thrusting. You hold them downwards, instead of up. You hold the Twinell Blades in your fists, left arm all the way out, only bent a little, and the right arm in, only forward a little. You have the fists as if you where punching, where the top of your hand goes with the top of your arm. By doing so, you will have the stance you will want, and the blades will be going sideways in opposite directions. the Twinell Blades look like a dagger with intricate symbols on it, depending on how the owner would like to put on it. The intricate symbols have no real significance, just making a decoration for the weapon, or something to say to the opponent. For instance, the runes might say something like "Death to my blade" to the opponent, but no real significance.  They are much like backwords serrated daggers, only they are much more lightweight, and they have a piece on the handle, on the bottom, that is sharp metal, which you can use to thrust at the enemy. The weapon itself actually can have different colors, for this weapon can be painted on, while not damaging the weapon. Some are gold, some blue, some red, some might even be green! The weapon, however diplays disfunctions by making almost all of the body unguarded, except by quick movement of the arm and blade. This makes it a bit balanced in how good the weapon can be. A skilled user, however, can usually take on a well trained knight and throw him off, for the weapon contains tricks like hooking the enemies weapons. The weapon is about half a ped long and half a palmspan wide, and about a nailsbreadth thick.

Usage: The Eophyrhims usually use such a weapon, and they use it while hunting or protecting there tribe. The weapon can contain many uses for a skilled user. People can use it different ways, fighting and steal. These weapons are also good for thieves and assasins. They can be easily held underhand so they cannot be seen, once they are behind a target, slash! The target would be dead. Then you would be free to take anything. The weapon is a good weapon for quick attacks and surprise attacks, making it a very useful combat weapon. The spike on the bottom is used for thrusting into the opponents chest, piercing his skin. The weapon, however, as I said in the appearence, contains a disfunction with defense, for it leaves almost all of the body unguarded, and can only be protected by quick strokes to dodge or block. This makes the weapon balanced in how good it is, and making it not the ultimate weapon. The Twinell Blades create a whole new advantage, though, to the wrold of fighting. Because it is so unique and has many tricks, it can be used for many thieves and marshall art fighters.


Fighting style: Fighters usually use it by having the blade point to the sides. To do this, most people have the blade point downwards, by holding the blade backwords, and then slowly move there hands sideways. Then, while people are charging and fighting, these users quickly move on of there hands upwords in a X formation, causing the blade to leave a diagnol mark in the enemy. this could wound an enemy greatly, and sometimes kill the target.  By doing this, you can quickly move from on target to another, killing people one by one. And since there are two blades, a skilled fighter can fight two people at once. This could greatly increase the chances of winning a battle. Also, a skilled fighter usually needs to be quick and agile to use his weapon, for that is the main point of this weapon. To be quick and agile with a blade to attack some with quick strokes with a lightweight weapon. However, there are lots of other tricks and attacks that this weapon can be used for, such as doing thrusts at an opponent's chest, or spinning around while the weapon is attacking everything in the circle.

Origin/History: The Twinell blades were found by the Eophyrhim, who needed another weapon to be quick for hunting. They finally found the Twinell Blades, which were very useful for hunting, because of it being lightweight and small. This got them more food and a lot mor kills in hunting. They got so much more kills that the Eophyrhims wanted to keep it a secret from the other tribes and races. However, Humans finally came and attacked the Eophyrhim. Doing this, one human had found a set of Twinell Blades. After the battle, the human took it to there blacksmith, which made more of these Twinell blades. This is how the Twinell blades spread all over the continent and got more popular. There was many more Twinell blades then. The Eophyrhim still had the weapon, but others had it, too. That was how the Twinell blades spread through out the continent.

Well, that is my weapon, hope you like it.

The man who dares attack me, shall have pain and suffering beneath my blade. A man who touches me shall know what a beast I can be. Xun Darkwoe, Hunter of Thorns.

Edited by: Xun Darkwoe at: 6/2/06 16:57


Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: so orril miesefer on 25 May 2006, 10:12:00
... not quiet sure, but I can make an image of a changing weapon, please be more specific and descriptive.

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Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Miraran Tehuriden on 25 May 2006, 10:14:00
This has good potential for a flavorfull weapon.

However, i do have some pointers;

-The appearance needs to be determined. As it stands, this weapon is far to unspecified.No-one could ever recognise them , as there are no set rules on how it is supposed to look...

- Do not mention yourself in an entry. Neither wich variety of the blades you prefer, nor claiming to have invented them. It is custom not to refer to oneself in your own entries (although a few exeptions can always be found) And onely rarely does an entry refer to another member, in wich case this is considered quite the honor.

- Usages. Have less! I specifically target the farming functions here, as that would be a tool then. Of course, it might be possible the design of these things makes them usefull gardening tools as well as weapons, but then you will have to describe it accurately.

- Origin and history need mucho expansion! It is verry short and much needs to be added to create a plausible story here.

-Territory... you write this weapon into the whole continent, while this could be excelent as a more specific weapon, distinguishing a certain tribe, or group of tribes, from the rest (do contact the tribe's creators though)

-The entry is, all in all, verry short. Some of the hints i gave you ought to help you to expand it a bit further.

Keep up the good work!

Miraran Tehuriden..

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Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Stormraven on 25 May 2006, 10:39:00
Hail and well met Xun I am Keldren Stormraven and I like to use yellow for my stuff


Weapon Appearence:Appearance should be a general de*****ion of the weapon. You may want to try something like this ( The Twinell blades are a pair of matched blades that vary in length from dagger to short sword size. Generally they have a narrow corved blade. The shape of the handle depends on the personal preference of the wielder) Then you could described the fact that they are serrated weapons with the intricate symbols. the weapon contains a different type of appearence for every different type of Twinell blades. Some are two swords the look like scimitars, but are half as thin as normal and are light weight. though my favorite would be the type that are basically daggers, though have a different type of handle. you hold them downwards, instead of up. you hold your hands to the side, and the daggers will go in opposite directions. the Twinell Blades look like a serrated dagger with intricate symbols on it, dependin on how the owner would like to put on it. I am not sure how well symbols would show up on the blades as the poison that the Eophyrhims use leaves their weapons with a charred appearance.

Usage: The Eophyrhims usually use such a weapon, and they use it whil hunting or protecting there tribe. however, many other tribes use it, ( I don't think this is something that many other tribes would use, it is a vicious and cruel weapon. Any weapon with serrations is designed to rip and tear flesh not make a clean kill and it would be impractical for use as a farming implement because the serrations would trap dirt and you would have to stop and clean the dirt off every time you started to dig. Also no warrior would use a weapon to dig a hole like this, they would use a sharp stick first before getting dirt o their blade.)some use which to dig small holes in which to plant seeds to grow a crop, and others to... to fight. The weapon can contain many uses for a skilled user. Fighting, growing crops, and even steal. These weapons are also good for thiefs(thieves) and assassins. they can be easily held underhand so they cannot be seen, once they are behind a target, slash!


Fighting style: You may want to take out the mention of other things people use it for here. This section should be just about the fighting style used for the weapon. You have a good start on the fighting style here but you need more detail. How does one block an opponents attack, there have to be more attacks then just making an X slash. These blades would be well suited to a dancing spinning style of combat  similar to some found in central and southeast asia. Lots of spinning and slashing attacks.People use it for many different things, so much people use it differently. fighters, however, usually use it by haveing the blade point to the sides. To do this, most people have the blade point downwards, by holding the blade backwords, and then slowly move there hands sideways. Then, while people are charging and fighting, these users quickly move on of there hands upwords in a X formation, causing the blade to leave a diagnol mark in the enemy.

Origin/History: Creating a weapon used by an entire tribe and more in what you have here is not something your character could have created. How would it have spread so far and so fast. If you want a specific weapon for your character then make it but trying to make a weapon that is widely available and recognized is not possible for a starting character.You can make a unique individual weapon, lots of people have.  The Twinell blades were found to the Eophyrhim eles, and they most commonly made it. The first person who made it, however, was a elf named Xun Darkwoe, who had shown the rest of the tribe. The tribe used it often, for many different uses, mostly for hunting. The Eophyrhims held it secret, but humans finally found it, just on Twinel blade, and decided to make there own. That was how the Twinell Blades cam around the world and almost all tribes, however not always commonly used for different tribes, can use it.

You should check out Drasil Razorfan's JheVai Dagger. He developed the weapon that his character uses very well.

Edited by: Stormraven at: 5/24/06 18:50


Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 25 May 2006, 10:50:00
Thank you all for the comments, and well met, Keldren, and i have fixed mistakes and am now ready for more comments.

The man who dares attack me, shall have pain and suffering beneath my blade. A man who touches me shall know what a beast I can be. Xun Darkwoe, Hunter of Thorns.



Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Stormraven on 25 May 2006, 11:07:00
Ok. I would first suggest that you color your changes, this is done with the tool bar at the top, just highlight what you want colored, select a color then click the set font button. It will help others when reading for changes.


Weapon Appearence: the weapon contains (maybe use "has" here instead of contains)a different type of appearence then most weapons. They are basically daggers, though have a different type of handle. you hold them downwards, instead of up. you hold your hands to the side, and the daggers will go in opposite directions.( Always take the time to check your spelling and punctuation as well as capitilization. Rushing through things on this site doesn't work as people will get frustrated with reading and not botherto comment or ignore the entry alltogether. Also making an entry is a long and evolved process. you won't get it authorized in a day, not even a week. There are few moderators and they have their hands full with the hundreds of various entries.) the Twinell Blades look like a dagger with intricate symbols on it, depending on how the owner would like to put on it. They are much like backwords serrated daggers, only they have the type of handle you need to use. The weapon itself actually can have different colors, for this weapon can be painted on, whill not damaging the weapon. Som are gold, some blue, some red, some might even be green! The weapon, however diplays disfunctions by making almost all of the body unguarded, except by quick movement of the arm and blade. This makes it a bit balanced in how good the weapon can be. A skilled user, however, can usually take on a well trained knight and throw him off, for the weapon contains tricks like hooking the enemies weapons.

Usage: The Eophyrhims usually use such a weapon, and they use it while hunting or protecting there tribe. The weapon can contain many uses for a skilled user. Fighting and even steal. These weapons are also good for thieves and assasins. they can be easily held underhand so they cannot be seen, once they are behind a target, slash! The target would be dead. Then you would be free to take anything. The weapon is a good weapon for quick attacks and surprise attacks, making it a very useful combat weapon. The weapon, however, as i said in the appearence, contains a disfunction with defense, for it leaes almost all of the body unguarded, and can only be protected by quick strokes to dodge or block. This makes the weapon balanced in how good it is, and making it not the ultimate weapon. The Twinell Blades create a whole new advantage, though, to the wrold of fighting. Because it is so unique and has many tricks, it can be used for many thieves and marshall art fighters.


Fighting style: Fighters usually use it by having the blade point to the sides. To do this, most people have the blade point downwards, by holding the blade backwords, and then slowly move there hands sideways. Then, while people are charging and fighting, these users quickly move on of there hands upwords in a X formation, causing the blade to leave a diagnol mark in the enemy. this could wound an enemy greatly, and sometimes kill the target. By doing this, you can quickly moe from on target to another, killing people one by one. And since there are two blades, a skilled fighter can fight two people at once. This could greatly increase the chances of winning a battle. Also, a skilled fighter usually needs to be quick and agile to use his weapon, for that is the main point of this weapon. To be quick and agile with a blade to attack some with quick strokes with a lightweight weapon. However, there are lots of other tricks and attacks that this weapon can be used for, such as doing thrusts at an opponent's chest, or spinning around while the weapon is attacking everything in the circle.

Origin/History: The Twinell blades were found by the Eophyrhim, who needed another weapon to be quick for hunting. They finally found the Twinell Blades, which were very useful for hunting, because of it being lightweight and small. This got them more food and a lot mor kills in hunting. They got so much more kills that the Eophyrhims wanted to keep it a secret from the other tribes and races. However, Humans finally came and attacked the Eophyrhim. Doing this, one human had found a set of Twinell Blades. After the battle, the human took it to there blacksmith, which made more of these Twinell blades. This is how the Twinell blades spread all over the continent and got more popular. There was many more Twinell blades then. The Eophyrhim still had the weapon, but others had it, too. That was how the Twinell blades spread through out the continent.
I will go through this more in more detail later this evening and send you some suggestions to your EZ mail box.

Edited by: Stormraven at: 5/24/06 19:09


Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on 25 May 2006, 12:21:00
Um...No offense Xun, but how is this different than just holding your daggers in a different manner?  Maybe make it a fighting style not a weapon as your description does not fit one.

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 25 May 2006, 22:32:00
Ack!! hey, how do you make our picture from paint go to here?

The man who dares attack me, shall have pain and suffering beneath my blade. A man who touches me shall know what a beast I can be. Xun Darkwoe, Hunter of Thorns.

Edited by: Xun Darkwoe at: 5/25/06 6:38


Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Miraran Tehuriden on 26 May 2006, 02:51:00
You will have to ask Arti to upload the picture.. But something done in paint will probably not be accepted anyway...

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Title: Re: Twinell Blades
Post by: Ta`lia of the Seven Jewels on 26 May 2006, 05:57:00
Send it to me, I can upload it for you, but as Miran said, we are picky what the quality of the pics for the site concerns. Look for contact info to theRPG-board.

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Title: it is just the general...
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 26 May 2006, 08:51:00
It is just general idea, i don't think it would be the pic, next to the description of the weapon.



Title: Re: it is just the general...
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on 26 May 2006, 13:21:00
Xun, read my question above as I see you have not adressed me.

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: it is just the general...
Post by: Stormraven on 29 May 2006, 18:48:00
Xun, Sorry it has taken so long for me to get to this but I have been working hard to catalog the various poisons of our world. I will help as I can but My Poison Project is taking up a lot of time.



Title: Re: it is just the general...
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 29 May 2006, 19:55:00
Quite fine, Stormraven, quite fine.

The man who dares attack me, shall have pain and suffering beneath my blade. A man who touches me shall know what a beast I can be. Xun Darkwoe, Hunter of Thorns.



Title: Re: it is just the general...
Post by: Artimidor Federkiel on 31 May 2006, 14:07:00
Ok, let's see what I can comment on this one, Xun...

- First of all I notice the absence of an Overview section. You should do one, summarizing the most important things about the weapon in 3-4 lines.

- I find a bunch of typos and strange sentences, so I suggest to look through the entry again (examples: appearence, backwords, are have, there tribe, contain many uses, fighting and even steal, leaes, marshall art fighters etc.)

- A bunch of repetitions here and there as well, like here: They are much like backwords serrated daggers, only they have the type of handle you need to use, and they are much more lightweight, and they are have a piece on the handle... - Try to reword things! Or "uses for a skilled user" should be avoided as well.

- Appearance. "The weapon contains a different type of appearence than most weapons" is not a very good start. Well, in general the appearance is not described too well so that one could recognize how it looks precisely, though I see the general idea. You write e.g. that the weapon "has a different type of handle" (or did you mean handling?). Because how the handle looks precisely you don't say (unless I've missed that). I could assume that the handle is wrapped around the fist, but that's only how I imagine the weapon to look like. Are the jagged teeth pointing inward or outward etc. How long are the blades? You also say "You hold your hands to the side, and the daggers will go in opposite directions." Also not very clear.

So far some brief comments on the first part of your entry, you should look again how you can improve things in this area, then we'll see further.


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Title: Re: it is just the general...
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on 31 May 2006, 14:26:00
...Xun, I'm still waiting for an answer.  How is this weapon any different than holding a serated dagger "backwards" if this is even possible considering there are so many different fighting techinques.  Why not make this an entry on a fighting style?

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: it is just the general...
Post by: Stormraven on 31 May 2006, 22:39:00
Drasil, I am helping Xun with his entry. the reason he doesn't want to make it a fighting style only is because of the unique design of the daggers. I am going to work with him this weekend to try and get things better worded and a more clear description up.



Title: thanks stormraven
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 31 May 2006, 23:10:00
Yeah, well, that is kind of it. I guess Drasil thinks it is not "unique" but it is. First off, they are serrated, and have a spike on the back. so It has some differences. If that is not enough, then why is the Helcrani Shortsword different from the sword? It can be painted or dyed. It can have runes put into the blade. It is pretty different. Well, thanks for explaining it, Stormraven.

@Stormraven: nice name by the way.



Title: Re: thanks stormraven
Post by: Stormraven on 31 May 2006, 23:32:00
Xun, you need to put the spike in the description as well and you do need a brief overview. I will send my email address to your ezbox and we can work on it over this week. If that is okay.



Title: Re: thanks stormraven
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 31 May 2006, 23:39:00
Oh, don't bother with my EZmail, then. I looked at that before i looked at this. Gotta work Gotta work Gotta work...

The man who dares attack me, shall have pain and suffering beneath my blade. A man who touches me shall know what a beast I can be. Xun Darkwoe, Hunter of Thorns.



Title: Re: thanks stormraven
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on 01 June 2006, 17:57:00
Drasil's URI check time!  Comments are in lime

Overview:
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A serrated dagger containing many differences, this dagger is used differently.(This is a very awkward sentance and it makes little sense.  Please re-pharse to something like "The Twinell Blades are serrated daggers, originating from (insert origin here) that differ greatly from the appearance of most other daggers.";)   It(Don't use it here. You are introducing the dagger for the first time so you can't automatically expect your reader to know what you are talking about.) has many serrations and a spike at the bottom to thrust. Used around the world, this is a popular dagger, usually in sets of two(Awkward again.  Try "This popular dagger usually comes in pairs.";)  

Weapon Appearence:
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The weapon contains a different type of appearence then most weapons(If you remove this sentance I believe the paragraph will read better.  Either that or rewrite this sentance to read something along the lines of "This weapon varies in appearance from most others.)  They(Try substituting Twinell Blades here.  You seem to use pronouns alot without identifying what you are talking about. ) are basically <-- basically is a very informal word and is not often used in these types of articles.  It would be better if you removed it.  serrated daggers, though have a different type of handle. The serrations are sharp and jagged, like shark teeth(No sharks in santharia. :p   Maybe you should dev one up?  Until then, use a Santharian beast.). You hold them downwards, instead of up.(awkward sentence structure) You hold your hands to the side, and the daggers will go in opposite directions. The Twinell Blades look like a dagger with intricate symbols on it, depending on how the owner would like to put on it. The intricate symbols have no real significance, just making a decoration for the weapon, or something to say to the opponent. For instance, the runes might say something like "Death to my blade" to the opponent, but no real significance. They are much like backwards serrated daggers, only they have the type of handle you need to use, and they are much more lightweight, and they are have a piece on the handle, on the bottom, that is sharp metal, which you can use to thrust at the enemy.(Not only is this a run on sentance, you have stated this seperatly in many places.  Articles are not required to be lengthy so don't force yourself to be wordy if you are just going to be repeating yourself) The weapon itself actually can have different colors, for this weapon can be painted on, while not damaging the weapon(wow!  try using some pronouns in this sentance.  You use the word weapon alot and it reads funky). Some are gold, some blue, some red, some might even be green! The weapon, however diplays disfunctions by making almost all of the body unguarded, except by quick movement of the arm and blade. This makes it a bit balanced in how good the weapon can be. A skilled user, however, can usually take on a well trained knight and throw him off, for the weapon contains tricks like hooking the enemies weapons.


I am going to leave you here.  Try re-reading through your entry.  Seeing as English is your natvie language you should be able to pick on most of the wierd sentances and such.  As Vesk mentioned to you in your CD, the way this reads it makes you seem like you are very young.  I know you are very creative and you can write more complex sentences than this from reading your CD.  Therefore I would suggest that you reread everything you wrote in these two sections aloud and try to make it flow better.  Also, try breaking up each section into various paragraphs based on ideas.  Each new topic should get its own paragraph.  For example, you might have a paragraph for the spike, and one for the blade.  Also, Just as a side note, when you do break this into paragraphs, make sure that there are at least 5-6 good sized sentances in each.

I know this is going to sound contradictory, but try not be so wordy either.  You repeat yourself many times, just re-ordering the words.  If you see any sentances like that while reading your entry, try to remove them or disect them to find new information and then re-write them to highlight it.

Remember, you have this wonderful idea in your head, but we can't see it until you write it out.  It would be a shame to see such an interesting weapon idea to be wasted.

Finally, this last comment is probably be ignored seeing as you will most likely not want me to do another look over your entry, however when you are done color your changes and then give me a bell-ring in the bell ringing forum in the Drasil thread.  I'll stop by and continue my commenting.  If you don't(which you probably won't not that I blame you.  I'd hate to have my own picky comments) I'll check back in 2-3 weeks to either continue my URI or see if you adressed any of my comments or provided reasons as to why you did not.

Drasil Razorfang CD

Edited by: Drasil Razorfang at: 6/1/06 1:58


Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Stormraven on 02 June 2006, 21:51:00
Ok, I am going to work on this one section at a time starting with your overview.

Overview: The Twinell Blades are serrated daggers, originated by the Eophyrhim tribe(period) that differ greatly from the appearance of most other daggers(change this sentence to They differ from other daggers in appearance.) It has many serrations and a spike at the bottom to thrust. This popular dagger comes usually(remove usually) in pairs. Many people use the weapon for stealing or(remove the stealing part)fighting



Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Stormraven on 02 June 2006, 22:07:00
Weapon Appearance:
The weapon contains a different type of appearence then most weapons. ( Alter this sentence. Contains is not the correct de*****ive here, try something like Twinnel Blades have a very different appearance compared to most daggers. or something like that)They are basically(take out basically, the ARE serrated daggers.) serrated daggers, though have a different type of handling. The serrations are sharp and jagged, like shark teeth.( Look in the bestiary for a specific shark or nasty fish with jagged teth since that is what you are going for.) The jagged teeth of the serrations are pointing outward,(Point outward) to put more of a scratch on the enemy. There is also a spike on the bottom used for thrusting. You hold them downwards, instead of up. you hold your hands to the side, and the daggers will go in opposite directions. ( this is difficult to see in my mind, try something along the lines of holding them so that the blades run along the forearm)the(remove the and start a new paragraph) Twinell Blades look like a dagger with intricate symbols on it, depending on how the owner would like to put on it. The intricate symbols have no real significance, just making a decoration for the weapon, or something to say to the opponent. For instance, the runes might say something like "Death to my blade" to the opponent, but no real significance.(Couple of things here, I don't think this particular tribe is likely to put catch-phrases on their weapons. Secondly, why bother if your opponent will be dead and never see your nifty slogan. Third, this tribe uses a poison that leaves their blades with an almost charred appearance, this would cover any runes or symbols. Other people who have them may put something on them like this but it would be an individual basis and not common practice.) They are much like backwords serrated daggers, only they are much more lightweight, and they have a piece on the handle, on the bottom, that is sharp metal, which you can use to thrust at the enemy. The weapon itself actually can have different colors, for this weapon can be painted on, while not damaging the weapon. Some are gold, some blue, some red, some might even be green! The weapon, however diplays disfunctions by making almost all of the body unguarded, except by quick movement of the arm and blade. This makes it a bit balanced in how good the weapon can be. A skilled user, however, can usually take on a well trained knight and throw him off, for the weapon contains tricks like hooking the enemies weapons.(This section needs some work as well. Going on what I have here and what others have posted you should have a passable entry soon but you need to pay attention to other peoples posts and suggestions. It will make it easier all around.)

Edited by: Stormraven at: 6/2/06 6:14


Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on 03 June 2006, 06:05:00
Xun, a serious grammar and spelling check is needed on your work.  By presenting this, you show, as Lady Talia told me, that you don't really care about wasting other's time correcting your petty mistakes which could easily be picked up by even a word processor.  In the future try to Spell/grammar check your work before you post it.  I assure you people will be more willing to read through it if they are not constantly editing your sentance structure, spelling and capitilization.

Drasil Razorfang CD



Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 03 June 2006, 08:45:00
Got it. ok. What is going wrong with me? i was an excellent speller in all my grades of school...

The man who dares attack me, shall have pain and suffering beneath my blade. A man who touches me shall know what a beast I can be. Xun Darkwoe, Hunter of Thorns.



Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Xun Darkwoe on 07 June 2006, 13:43:00
Can somebody please post about my weapon?

~> Enemies shall die, attackers shall have no mercy. Enemies shall live, and be slaves for eternity.<~

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Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Stormraven on 08 June 2006, 00:36:00
Still waiting to see some changes made.



Title: Re: Twinell Blades (edited!!!)
Post by: Drasil Razorfang on 08 June 2006, 10:55:00
Xun, like for CD's you can't pick and choose which comments you want to hear and which you wish to ignore.  It doesn't work that way.

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