Have a Liu'lian, one of the stinkiest, ugliest (but most delicious) fruits in Nybelmar (And it happen to be one of the 3 entries I made!) I don't trust any other entries except mine, you see.
I don't really know what you should stay away from, because I haven't been to the Dev board for a few months now. :blush: But what I started with when I first came was a Bestiary entry, followed by a Herbarium entry and a rather badly written poem. I've only done 3 entries ( :blush: again), but it's quite fun destroying the plants in Miraran's greenhouse. Brownie gadgets sounds cool!
I don't know if this is the right place to post, but just thought to let you guys know that over on the RPG board, we're planning an awards ceremony, with loads of different awards, where approved characters nominate who they think should win. This idea was thought up by his Excellency Altario Shialt-eck-Gorrin and we have four main categories of awards, one of them being Development awards (Which Alt is in charge of, obviously ). Awards which have been made since the 1st of January 2007 are eligible, so if one of you guys wins an award, you might be expected to come over and give a thank you speech, and maybe even participate in a RPing Winners' Celebration Party (we stole the idea form the Dev board's inauguration ).
Thank you so much, Talia, I've changed that verse. I know it's definitely not a prize-worthy poem, and I wouldn't be surprised if Art thinks it's too bad to be integrated. But it's worth a shot! I probably shouldn't embarass myself writing poems. I think in the future I'll stick to writing instead.
I know! Could I include in the intro that it was written by a poet famous for his bad poems? Maybe I could say that his whale poem was so bad that it became famous. Now that's an idea!
I've changed the 'triangular' issue, but I'm still not sure if it works. Having only just become a teenager a few months ago, I'm unsure to some extent of the rules of poetry.
'Heads soft and triangular...' And I don't know what to put next. Possible rhymes are 'irregular', 'particular', 'peculiar' and 'popular'. I've probably missed something out.
Okay, I've fixed everything except the bit about their triangular heads...I have no idea how to replace it. I'm open to all suggestions. Also, I'm not sure about the last line of my 5th Stanza. I need somebody to confirm that it fits in. That's it so far.
Thanks for your comments, I fixed the introduction. And here's the whole poem with the stressings, just thought I'd show you in case you have any more critique on it.
Known as the Carteloreen, Majestic as a King or Queen; Wreathed in waves, breathing air, To them, nothing could compare.
Their soft triangular heads Guide them down to the seabed; Two front flukes and shoulders humped, Tapering tails to help them jump.
Let Thytellor sweep through seas With its eerie melodies; Graceful breaching, dancing pods Make the watchers all applaud.
Four main types of sentient beasts, North to South and West to East; They have Dopholk friends, it’s true, Allies of the Merfolk too!
Legends tell of Silffin’s name, Men from ice with eyes of flame; White Sword-Whale of Baveras, Northriders none can surpass.
Mystery surrounds these whales Many don’t know what it veils; Now let’s all return to land, And leave behind the shells and sand.
Glad I did one, then. I actually had no problem doing an introduction, it was the poem which I found more difficult to do. I chose to set a challenge for myself and write the poem in the way I did instead of only having every alternate line rhyme, or not having it rhyme at all. As much as I admire poems which don't rhyme, I just don't feel comfortable with writing one. It has to rhyme. I really like poems and songs which have a regular clear beat to them.
My lovely darling Judy, I would be eternally grateful to you if you'd take a look at my Liu'lian entry. Mira was hoping you'd be the one to give the final OK on it. I'd like if possible to have it ready for this coming update.
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Brownie gadgets sounds cool!
and we have four main categories of awards, one of them being Development awards (Which Alt is in charge of, obviously 
). Awards which have been made since the 1st of January 2007 are eligible, so if one of you guys wins an award, you might be expected to come over and give a thank you speech, and maybe even participate in a RPing Winners' Celebration Party (we stole the idea form the Dev board's inauguration 
).
