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16  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Library / Re: The Carteloreen on: 30 June 2007, 05:21:10
Is an introduction a must? I saw Decipher's Venlaken poem didn't have an introduction...but perhaps I'd better do one just in case.
17  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Library / Re: The Carteloreen on: 30 June 2007, 05:12:46
Is this poem too short? I mean, there have been shorter poems, but does it get the message across, or should I add a little more to it?
18  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Herbarium / Re: Liu'lian Tree on: 30 June 2007, 00:17:42
Well, I've done all the edits, and people are still welcome to check this, though I distinctly heard Mira say that he couldn't see any more problems with it....but that was a long time ago, and new problems may have arisen, though it's unlikely.
19  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Library / The Carteloreen on: 29 June 2007, 16:01:15
I know, my title is pretty unimaginative, but at least it's simple! :P

This poem was originally a piece of prose written many centuries ago by an eccentric whale watcher trying to describe the reason for his passion for whales. It was then rediscovered by a poet who was inspired while he was looking through old books, parchment and scrolls which he had found deep in the cellar of the Library of Ciosa. The nearly dissolved parchment instantly got his attention, and he eventually wrote a poem about the Carteloreen based on the writing of this whale watcher.

The Carteloreen

Sometimes called Carteloreen,
Noble as a King or Queen;
Wreathed in waves and breathing air,
Such magnificence is rare!

Heads so soft, triangular,
Body stripes irregular;
Two front flukes and shoulders humped,
Tap‘ring tails to help them jump.

Let Thytellor sweep through seas
With its eerie melodies,
Graceful beaching, dancing pods
Make the watchers all applaud.

Four main types of sentient beasts,
North to South and West to East,
They have Dopholk friends, it’s true,
Allies of the Merfolk too!

Legends tell of Silffin’s name,
Men from ice with eyes of flame;
White Sword-Whale of Baveras,
Riders of the northern pass.

Mystery surrounds these whales
Many don’t know what it veils;
Now let’s all return to land,
Leave behind the shells and sand.
20  Santharian World Development / Places and Map Design / Re: Recnorian Kingdom on: 28 June 2007, 01:45:18
He's been there already, and we told him that because there is no 'Kingdom of Recnor' or 'King Sacorane', to come and develop them here; we warned him that it would take a very long time, and if he really really wanted to do it, then he should head over here before going back there. He's trying to start a story, and we told him that unless he's a Mod or an Admin, he can't. But I guess he's trying. He hasn't even got a character up yet, and he's trying to create a story.
21  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Herbarium / Re: Liu'lian Tree on: 28 June 2007, 00:59:18
I've now added the Krean Men to my entry, but I'm not sure if there's anywhere else I need to mention them in. Help, someone?
22  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: Does Anyone Have Work For Me? on: 27 June 2007, 21:30:28
So I guess I can just do the poem, then? I can't find any poem on them. Will work on it as soon as I get back home and have finished my homework. No putting off for me this time! And maybe I will throw a monster poem n as well...
23  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: Does Anyone Have Work For Me? on: 27 June 2007, 16:03:43
I guess Northern Lights are out of the question, then. Never mind...are whales already created? If not, I'll do them, and follow up with a poem about them. grin
24  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: Does Anyone Have Work For Me? on: 27 June 2007, 15:54:52
Okay, if I wanted to do an entry on Northern Lights, where would it be grouped and what would I have to include?
25  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: Does Anyone Have Work For Me? on: 27 June 2007, 15:28:08
Actually, I've had time to scan through all the poems in the library, and I saw nothing on Northern Lights. Please may I do a poem on Northern Lights? I'll look up tribes living in the icy North. The poem will be about how they believe that the good spirits of their loved ones who died will go join the other spirits to form the northern lights, and about how they dance because they have been freed from their physical bodies. Is that okay? If not, it's fine, I'll find something else to write about.
26  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: Does Anyone Have Work For Me? on: 27 June 2007, 15:11:12
Hey, 2 monsters falling in love, what a great idea... rolleyes Nah, it's the usual cliche stuff about how everybody fears them, I'm afraid. But having said that, now I want to do something different! So many poems are filled with either fear or depression... Hmm....I'll have to think about it later, and I'll look through all the poems ever made (well, maybe not) when I come back from school.
27  Organization and General Discussions / General Santharian Discussions / Re: Does Anyone Have Work For Me? on: 27 June 2007, 15:03:00
My apologies, but I had to resurrect this thread to ask: Is there a specific section on poems about monsters? Degas and Decifer's poems have aroused the poet in me (cheesy, I know, but hey... :P ). I want to look there and do a poem on monsters which haven't been done yet.
28  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Library / Re: The Curse of Tacunija on: 27 June 2007, 14:59:57
He'll look at it eventually, so you don't need to transmit it. :)

This poem is brilliant! I love the rhythm of it, and it really flows and tells you a story. One tiny thing, it's spelt 'Princeling', and did you mean 'Of peaceful, loving kind', or 'Of peaceful, loving and kind?' It would be better if it was the first one, obviously, because the 'and' throws the verse off balance, and 'Of peaceful, loving, kind,' doesn't sound quite right grammatically.
29  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Library / Re: The Venlaken Nightmare on: 27 June 2007, 05:37:07
Hmm... Decipher, how about this for the first verse:

Past the jungles of the west,
Birds of red and yellow,
O'er seas of the richest leaves,
And rivers calm and mellow,

And about the last verse, how about

Stay away from Venlaken,
The land of nightmares true,
Hide from all its evil terrors,
So they won't find you.

Sorry for cramping your style in any way. You don't need to listen to me if you don't want to. I'll look over the whole thing tomorrow, I swear. :) Need to go to bed first.
30  Santharian World Development / The Santharian Herbarium / Re: Liu'lian Tree on: 23 June 2007, 03:29:10
Okay, I think I get you now...so. In which section in the entry should I include the Krean? Would it be the usages section and giving them a mention in the myth/lore/origins section? Just confirming. And should I say the Krean use the fruit, or the Lost Ones use the fruit?
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