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Name: Maerquis (The name Maerquis derives from "Maer", which means "dark" in Tharian and "Quis", being derived from "Equis", which means "horse". The literal translation is therefore "Darkhorse" or "Horse of the Dark")

Category: Mythical Beasts

Overview: The Maerquis is a mythical creature, a winged horse, that is always associated with the High God of Dark Polmaen predominant at the continent Aeruillin, as it is the companion that was created for him by Arkon, God of Creation. The Maerquis was created to aid the god in his eternal struggle against the dark. Though Polmaen has power over the Dark, he is not evil and is responsible for dealing with the evil forces of Caelereth. The winged horse was born of the night, and only a creature such as he could truly fight the forces of evil.

Appearance: The Maerquis has been depicted in murals throughout the continent of Aeruillin, most often within the humble shrines of Polmaen. One such mural in the city of Dion portrays the winged horse in midflight as the Lord Over the Dark weeps nearby. The horse's metallic hide lacks any kind of fur and seems to have been carved of obsidian. A scaled serpentine tail stretches behind its muscled rump and appears as though it could squeeze the life out of a man. Instead of a mane of fur, several razor sharp spikes protrude from the creature's neck and head. A baleful karikrimson eye glares from each side of its head, and within its eyes there is a hatred for all creatures of evil. Instead of hooves, each leg ends in a talon with sharp claws that could easily pierce the hide of any beast. Possibly the most notable aspect of the winged horse is its wings. They extend well beyond the body of the creature and appear to be formed from the shadows themselves. Each wing is the color of midnight with sinuous grey veins and they are supported by thick nor'sidian bones. This creature truly is the stuff of nightmares, though its intentions are good.

Special Abilities: The most astounding special ability recorded in Aeoliran lore has to do with the creature's eyes. It is widely believed that the karikrimson eyes judge the souls of those that dare to look within those dire orbs. A mortal is judged upon his or her past sins, and the souls of the guilty are torn from their corporeal forms and forever doomed to roam the world of Caelereth. It has been said that the wailing of these forsaken souls can be heard on the darkest night when neither the moon nor the stars can pierce the overcast sky.

Another ability of the winged horse has to do with its wings. The wings are said to be made of shadows and will never tire as long as no light shines upon them. The wings will forvever bear the Maerquis through the night sky as it hunts all demons and their ilk.

A third ability deals with the metallic hide of the creature. It is widely believed that no weapon forged by a mortal can pierce the thick hide. Even the famed dwarven weapons are said to shatter when they strike such a creature. The obsidian hide is forged from the earth itself, and as such it has the endurance to outlast all things mortal. Ancient lore even maintains that fire has no effect upon the creature, and nothing upon the world of Caelereth has the ability to harm it.

Territory: The Maerquis resides in Asharvéa, the home of the Aeoliran Gods, and forever remains at the side of Polmaen. Many people have claimed to have seen baleful karikrimson eyes as they went about their business during the night. Those who make such a claim are often silenced as they are questioned about what kind of business they had in the middle of the night. Such sightings have always occured upon the continent of Aeruillin, and most Santharians consider such sightings to be wild fancies from people that have spent too much time in the sun.

Habit/Behaviour: The Maerquis is a merciless creature that only displays loyalty to the Tormented One, as Polmaen is called. Only the pure of heart can truly claim safety from the winged horse, for it has an intense hatred for evil in any form. The mythical creature delights in fighting evil creatures, and demons such as the Chasm Demon are often depicted as its foes. According to ancient lore, the Maerquis never shies from a battle and will fight until not a single drop of blood remains in the corpse of its opponent. It has been depicted in several murals as it fought alongside the High God of the Dark against demons and other creatures of a foul nature.

Diet:  According to ancient lore, the Maerquis feeds upon the essence of darkness itself. Many people have claimed to have seen a dark form as it flew across the moon. They claimed that the creature drew darkness unto itself and only a dark blot upon the face of the moon could be seen.

Rumors circulating among the Aeoliran people state that the Maerquis feeds upon demonic blood. It is widely believed by those that fear the mythical beast that after each battle the winged horse will drink the blood that flows as a karikrimson river upon the battlefield. They claim that the Maerquis will only feed upon demonic blood and will not even taste that of mortals.

Mating: It is said that the Maerquis is an immortal creature that cannot be killed by mundane weapons. Only one Maerquis has ever existed in myth or in the world of Caelereth. The flow of time does not affect this companion of the dark, and it will forever fly through the night sky.

Myth/Lore: The most well known myth in existence concerning the winged horse tells of the creation of the Maerquis. It is widely believed that Arkon, the God of Creation, took pity upon Polmaen as he wept for the dark that would always pervade the world of Caelereth. Arkon formed a  horse from one of his tears as it splashed to the ground below, and the God of Passion, as Arkon is called, formed wings from the shadows that fled from the light of day. He combined the sorrow of Polmaen with the dark and thus was the Maerquis born. Arkon held the fire that burned deep within the earth in his hands, and he breathed this eternal inferno into the soul of the creature. The hide was formed from black obsidian, and the Maerquis was gifted with the strength of the dark. The winged horse was created from the sorrow of the Redeemer, another name for Polmaen, and it is his faithful companion as he eternally struggles against the dark. The Maerquis was born in the sky with wings perfect for flight alongside its twin of the light, the Avéquis. The light of Nakashi, wife to Polmaen, pervades the essence of the Avéquis, and it is her light that forever attempts to overcome the dark. Though each winged horse is a distinct contrast to its twin, each one struggles against the dark alongside their god or goddess.  A poem composed by the infamous Aeoliran prophet, Kane the Insane, describes the creation of the Maerquis and only this passage survives to the present day.

"Tears flowed from the tormented one
as he wept for what might have been.
Creation himself took pity
upon another of his kin.

Arkon caught a tear in his widespread palm
as the water splashed toward the forsaken earth.
The sorrow of another pervaded his soul
and he created a companion to protect home and hearth.

Baleful red eyes gleamed
as a terrifying warcry corrupted the silence of the night.
This fiery spirit would never die
and only the wicked should fear his vicious bite."

--"Divine Sorrow" (Kane the Insane)

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« Reply #1 on: 08 August 2005, 17:12:00 »

First of good start. But it is really confusing. It says nothing about it being a 'dark' horse but being good. (It gets really confusing, I had to go and read the gods entry for it to make sense.) Try to expand were ever you can, add details. How big is it? Also you should add a section about stories and lore. But it is a good start.

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« Reply #2 on: 08 August 2005, 17:31:00 »

I haven't gotten to the myth/lore section just yet. Also, a mythical creature should not be described in exact measurements.;)  

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« Reply #3 on: 08 August 2005, 19:10:00 »

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reproduction, for his kind will always exist in the world of Caelereth. Also, only one Maerquis has ever existed and mating is impossible.

If there is only one of them there is no "kind" as mentioned in the first sentence.
Also could you please add something to the begining about this creature being of the night, yet is good. (It would make the whole thing alot less confusing to read)

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« Reply #4 on: 08 August 2005, 19:20:00 »

You're right about the mating section, so I edited it. Also, I'm sorry if this entry is confusing to read, but I'm trying to create it with the god Polmaen in mind. I added a little bit to the overview to make it clearer that the Maerquis fights evil.;)  

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« Reply #5 on: 09 August 2005, 01:53:00 »


Erian, ths is only a quick read through, artemis has to do it more thoroughly.




Name: Maerquis (The name Maerquis derives from "Maer", which means "dark" in Tharian and "Quis", being derived from "Equis", which means "horse". The literal translation is therefore "Darkhorse" or "Horse of the Dark")
Well, Tharian is English, but the inhabitants of aeruillin speak certainly no tharian anymore, though their language has derived from there. Maybe we could call the language which prevails there (apart from strong dialects) Thaeruillin ARTEMIS?? Then you have just to replace Tharian with Thaeruillin
Otherwise, I LIKE this name!



Category: Mythical Beasts

Overview: The Maerquis is a mythical creature, a winged horse, that is often not always?
associated with the High God of Dark Polmaen predominant at the continent Aeruillin, as it is the companion that was created for him by Arkon, God of Creation. The Maerquis was created to aid the god in his eternal struggle against the dark. The winged horse was born of the night, and only a creature such as he could truly fight the forces of evil.

Appearance: The Maerquis has been depicted in murals throughout the continent of Aeruillin, most often within the humble shrines of Polmaen. One such mural in the city of Dion portrays the winged horse in midflight as the Lord Over the Dark weeps nearby. The horse's metallic hide lacks any kind of fur and seems to have been carved of obsidian. A demonic tail How looks a demonic tail? stretches behind its muscled rump and appears as though it could squeeze the life out of a man. Instead of a mane of fur, several razor sharp spikes protrude from the creature's neck and head. A baleful karikrimson eye glares from each side of its head, and within its eyes there is a hatred for all creatures of evil. Instead of hooves, each leg ends in a talon with sharp claws that could easily pierce the hide of any beast. Possibly the most notable aspect is
its wings. They extend well beyond the body ??? of the creature and closely resemble those of a dragon. How do dragon wings look like? Each wing is the color of midnight with sinuous grey veins and they are supported by thick nor'sidian bones. This creature truly is the stuff of nightmares , though its intentions are good .

Special Abilities: The only special ability recorded in Aeoliran lore has to do with the creature's eyes. It is widely believed that the karikrimson eyes judge the souls of those that dare to look within those dire orbs. A mortal is judged upon his or her past sins, and the souls of the guilty are torn from their corporeal forms and forever doomed to roam the world of Caelereth. It has been said that the wailing of these forsaken souls can be heard on the darkest night when neither the moon nor the stars can pierce the overcast sky.
There is surely more - it can fly, it can fight the evil - what about its claes, how much is said that they can carry? its tail has surely a purpose as well!

Territory: The Maerquis resides in Asharvéa, with Polmaen . Many people have claimed to have seen baleful karikrimson eyes as they went about their business during the night. Those who make such a claim are often silenced as they are questioned about what kind of business they had in the middle of the night.
Make it more vague - that it resides in Asharvea belongs to myth - just say, people claim to have seen it all over Aeruillin (rarely though), but mainly there of course, where the Aeriolian religion is predominant.

Habit/Behaviour: The Maerquis is a malicious creature that only displays loyalty to the Tormented One. Only the pure of heart can truly claim safety from the winged horse, for it has an intense hatred for evil in any form. The mythical creature delights in fighting evil creatures, and demons such as the Chasm Demon are often depicted as its foes. According to ancient lore, the Maerquis never shies from a battle and will fight until not a single drop of blood remains in the corpse of its opponent. It has been depicted in several murals as it fought alongside the High God of the Dark against demons and other creatures of a foul nature.

Diet: There are three conflicting theories as to the diet of the Maerquis. The first is believed to have originated among farmers and others that raise horses of the mundane variety. They believe that the winged horse eats what any horse would, but in larger quantities.
Oh no, I would skip this, a mystical beast doesn‘t feed on normal food!

The second theory is that as a creature of the night, the Maerquis feeds upon the essence of darkness itself. Many people have claimed to have seen a dark form as it flew across the moon. They claimed that the creature drew darkness unto itself and only a dark blot upon the face of the moon could be seen.

The final theory is that the Maerquis feeds upon demonic blood. It is widely believed by those that fear the mythical beast that after each battle the winged horse will drink the blood that flows as a karikrimson river upon the battlefield. They claim that the Maerquis will only feed upon demonic blood and will not even taste that of mortals.

Mating: It is said that the Maerquis is an immortal creature that cannot be killed by mundane weapons. Only one Maerquis has ever existed, and there is not a creature in the world of Caelereth that can mate with itself.The last half sentence is unnecessary!

Myth/Lore: There is only one myth in existence No, don‘t say that, other myths may be invented later, just say : The most known  or most told myth is... concerning the winged horse, and it is one of the creation of the Maerquis. It is widely believed that Arkon, the God of Creation, took pity upon Polmaen as he wept for the dark that would always pervade the world of Caelereth. Arkon formed a horse from one of his tears as it splashed to the ground below, and the God of Passion formed wings from the shadows that fled from the light of day. He combined the sorrow of Polmaen with the dark and thus was the Maerquis born. The winged horse was created from the sorrow of the Redeemer, and it is his faithful companion as he eternally struggles against the dark. A poem composed by the famous Aeoliran bard, Erceri the Wise, describes the creation of the Maerquis and only this passage survives to the present day.

"Tears flowed from the tormented one
as he wept for what might have been.
Creation himself took pity
upon another of his kin.

Arkon caught a tear in his widespread palm
as the water splashed toward the forsaken earth.
The sorrow of another pervaded his soul
and he created a companion to protect home and hearth.

Baleful red eyes gleamed
as a terrifying warcry corrupted the silence of the night.
This fiery spirit would never die
and only the wicked should fear his vicious bite."

--"Divine Tears" (Erceri the Wise)


Which tribe? Or does nobody know anymore, from which tribe he is, every tribe claims him as his member?
Write an overview for him!


A nice concept and entry so far. Erian. I didn‘t check though, if the religious aspect is ok - I didn‘t want to read up Polmaen. I didn‘t find it confusing, but Lucius has a point: The problem is - how can he be evil(malicius) himself AND fight the evil creature like a demon?  maybe you describe him not as evil, but just as cold, merciless etc...  

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« Reply #6 on: 09 August 2005, 07:24:00 »

Thanx for the comments Talia, edits have been made.;)  I would just like to point out that both the Unicorn and the Avequis mention the mythical creatures eating what a normal horse would. Also, with the special abilities I'm trying to stay away from anything mundane like sharp claws. The Maerquis has the same territory as the Avequis, so I think that is fine as well.

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« Reply #7 on: 09 August 2005, 10:13:00 »

It is surely not seen outside of Aeruillin, so I would add some more here, this paragraph is a bit small! you can say something about it without going inot detail! Just let your imagination FLOW! Our gola is not not to get an entry up quickly and fast, but to make it as good as possible!

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« Reply #8 on: 09 August 2005, 11:28:00 »

I know, I know. Quality is the most important thing. Truthfully, I think I've run out of ideas for the Maerquis. Edits have been made, and I'm trying to elaborate. I really need comments from Artemis to see if this is the kind of thing she had in mind for the companion to Polmaen.

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« Reply #9 on: 23 August 2005, 14:18:00 »

I see Artemis has noticed this entry already, so I'm sure she'll pop up sooner or later with comments...

Just wanted to mention here: If you want, Artemis, you can try contacting Mia concerning the pegasus pictures - maybe you can point her to the already existing entry or something and get her to give a definite ok. Would be really a shame to have the entries, but not the pictures to give them. I personally have written all in all I guess 4 long mails already and didn't see the needed enthusiasm for my taste, so I'm out of trying to convince her. But maybe with your horsy charme talking from one horse-lover to another, maybe there's still a chance;)  


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« Reply #10 on: 06 September 2005, 13:26:00 »

Just a note: Artemis is having serious computer problems, so it will last quite a while till she can fix it - therefore I'll look at this entry soon to see if there are no major contradictions, and then I'll integrate it next time:)  


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« Reply #11 on: 09 September 2005, 14:43:00 »

Okeydokey, I've checked this entry now as well as Artemis has computer problems and would like to get the entry completed, though. - So here are my comments:

- I guess at the beginning just a little more explanation on Polmaen is needed, because you mention Polmaen's function only briefly, and if you're not that much in the Aeoliran religion, you might miss the point a bit. In the Polmaen entry is written: "Polmaen, despite having power over the Dark, is not evil. It is however, an eternal struggle for him to remain with the good, for the Dark wishes to bend his will to their ways. Polmaen is responsible for dealing with the evil forces of Caelereth, a great and unimaginable task." - So I would suggest to include the essence of these sentences here somewhere as it gives a good explanation for the horse's purpose.

- Territory: "The Maerquis resides in Asharvéa" - again, for non-Aeoliran experts, please state what this place is.

- "...only displays loyalty to the Tormented One" - as Polmaen is called as well, I would add here.

- Diet: These "theory" talk is a tad strange, as a "theory" is usually something scholarly - and "theorizing" that a mythical horse might eat regular grass isn't the best expression. Would stay away from that and just let "farmers believe that" etc. or that "myths tell us that the horse feeds upon the essence of darkness itself", just get rid of the "theory" thingy.

- The Rytar Overview I would add to the People Resources thread.

- What I miss a bit here is the relationship of the Maerquis woth the Avaequis, the Darkhorse with the Lighhorse. Maybe you can add something in this context here, so that we get the whole picture?

A nice entry, Erian - really wished that we'd have the two pictures to go with both entries...


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« Reply #12 on: 10 September 2005, 07:50:00 »

Okay, edits have been made.:D   Should I mark this for intergration? Yeah, those pictures were great.

Edit: I added the prophet to the People proposals thread and changed his name to Kane the Insane. I just couldn't resist an opportunity to rhyme.;)  


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« Reply #13 on: 10 September 2005, 12:10:00 »

Okeydokey... I've already marked it for intgeration:)  


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« Reply #14 on: 12 September 2005, 16:31:00 »

Just remembered that the Polmaen entry needs to be updated, as it currently says that the jackal is the god's mythical companion. Just change that sentence in the symbols section, and the rest would be fine.;)  


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