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Quote:"Air can be seen as Wind that is being still." still bothers me, because in the - so far unwritten - Wind entry we'll have to define Wind as movement as opposed to Earth, so I wouldn't state it that drastically. Passage only needs small amendments.
Quote:"At the same time, she takes some sand..." Seems our mages are now mainly female...
Quote:"The target is simply the area where the caster wishes the wind to be, which could be around herself, or some distance away." You should make a difference between "target" and "focus", we've been very loose with these terms. I guess this is also something we should perhaps update at our spells scheme and say "Focus/Target". The focus doesn't necessarily need to be the target (see e.g. Fireball spell). The focus is where the magical action takes place, while the effect can affect targets as well.
Quote:Here the caster would focus on a spot in the air, and the resulting wind would e.g. envelop the mage as the "targeted" person with the wind drawn from the focus.
Quote:You also should mention that the focus is the air - you don't mention that.
Quote:Would recommend in general though to mark changed passages with another colour to make it easier for commenters to see where there were modifications.