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« on: 24 July 2007, 07:02:48 »

All changes made from are in yellow.

Categorization: Flower

Overview: As the name suggests this is a very foul smelling flower, though beautiful in appearance it lets off the aroma of rotting flesh and blood. It is usally found located around the boarders of the Paelelon forest, home to the Eophyrhim Dark Elves. Any person who is most unfortunate to run into its habitat and horrific smell normally suffers from stomach pains and sickness afterwards.

Description: The Malodours Maiden flowers are have a very beautiful appearance despite their foul smell. They are a bright red, like rubies, the colour of blood like there smell. Each flower is of quite a large size with an average of a one palmspan and seven nailsbreadth diameter when the bottom layer of petals are spread out, and the height of six nailsbreadth for the stem.

There are twelve petals on each flower; six of those petals are all of about two grain in thickness and curl back from the middle of the flower so the tip of each petal is normally found just touching the stem. The other six petals stick up to form a kind of pod shape just with a small opening at the top, these petals reach lengths of up to 10 nailsbreadth. This is believed to be the place in the plant were the smell arises from.

When seen up-close it could almost be said that the petals create the shape of a woman’s clothing. The pod on top quite like the shape of a bodice and the bottom leafs going down creates the shape of a skirt. This shape gives the name of maiden and malodorous is due to the foul smell it produces.

The odour that these flowers produce smells almost of rotten flesh and blood, also due to the bright red colour it can sometimes be mistaken for blood all over the floor like a murder scene.

No leaves or any other parts grow on this plant, it is just the stem and the flower. But on rare occasion a flower is found were the stem has grown in a spiral, like a ringlet. The reason for this phenomenon is as of yet unknown for certain, but one explanation used is that it is to do with the gender of the plant.

Territory: The Malodorous Maiden flowers grow in big groups together, it would be almost unheard of to find one of these flowers surviving on it's own. These flowers only known habitat is located just on the boarders of the Paelelon forest, homeland to the Eophyrhim Dark Elves. Some people say the Elves keep these flowers growing and reproducing to protect their forest and keep out trespassers. There could be other habitats for these plants, though they are as of yet undiscovered.

Usage: It is believed by some people that The Malodorous Maiden flower is used by the Eophyrhim Dark Elves for the purpose of protecting their forest by keeping out trespassers.

Reproduction: People of knowledge about this plant know that is smell they produce is not just a pointless inconvenience, but it is the main reason of their survival for so long. That also explains why they always grow in groups, because the smell prepares the plant for reproduction.

When the seeds are almost ready to move on to the next stage in there existence, which is growing, the flower will die. The seeds are contained inside the pod on the top of the plant so the pod detaches itself from the rest of the flower when it dies. Then the seeds are kept safe inside the pod for on average another couple of months, before they are completely ready to be let free and grow into flowers.
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« Reply #1 on: 24 July 2007, 20:40:05 »

Okay, I think I have finished this now but it probably needs a bit more work so I am just posting to say, comments are now welcome. Thank you.
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« Reply #2 on: 25 July 2007, 12:37:29 »

Very nice, or should i say very smelly!! ;)

The only problem i have with it, is that it is not lenghty enough, try putting that wee bit extra detail and it will be as right as rain! remeber Quantity is juat as important as Quality!!! :D ( maybe add more to the history and the uage section perhaps)

Very Good first try though
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« Reply #3 on: 25 July 2007, 12:40:07 »

Thank you Petros for the comment, though unfortunately I do not believe there is a history section. But I will try to add more detail. I added a bit more too the usage already but there are still only 433 words.
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« Reply #4 on: 25 July 2007, 12:52:29 »

And now I have added another paragraph to the description there are 497 words.
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« Reply #5 on: 25 July 2007, 12:55:54 »

In my opinion thats really quite good grin, but well just wait and see what Mira and the bard say!! :)
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« Reply #6 on: 25 July 2007, 21:24:45 »

Thank you Petros, I do so hope this one is okay, I want to try and get out of just doing poems for a while to do something different.
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« Reply #7 on: 25 July 2007, 21:40:02 »

You better write more poems though cause i fair enjoyed them!! ;) heart
... i love the herbarium, Plant entries are just really fun to do! grin (dont ask me why, becuase i dont even know my self!)
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« Reply #8 on: 26 July 2007, 01:36:56 »

A few loose comments, per section.


Overview; this usually contains a bit about the location. the Overview section is meanth for people who are searching the pages of their Compendium, making all of the most important information available at first glance.


Appearance; Science? *raises a cynical eyebrow* and plant genders are not that complicated, with only three options :P (male, female, hermaphroditical <-this one is most common)


Teritory; What set pieces of land? Why won't it grow anywhere else,surely someone tried? How do smelling flowers keep out unwanted visitors? the unwanted visitor will know about it, and take proper measures...


Usages; strange overall format, almost as if adressing the reader. "sadly there are no other uses" is odd as well, as it implies uses are standard on plants, while many plants are of no use at all.


Reproduction; Quite unlikely. Plant reproduction is usually quite easy to spot, and the appearance of the Malodorous Maiden (a name not explained by the way!) does not seem to be preventing some researcher to find out..
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« Reply #9 on: 26 July 2007, 06:44:26 »

Okay, thank you very much for those comments. I have done the changes you suggested and hope they are good enough. I also added a reason for the smell, which I hope will not cause any further troubles.
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« Reply #10 on: 11 August 2007, 03:07:38 »

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People of knowledge about this plant know that is smell they produce is not just a pointless inconvenience, but it is the main reason of their survival for so long. That also explains why they always grow in groups, because the smell prepares the plant for reproduction.

but... whát does it do then?
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