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Re: Bell ghosts.

« Reply #15 on: 02 May 2010, 14:34:37 »

- Context: The part of a text or statement that surrounds a particular word or passage and determines its meaning.

"Hm... Never mind."

- Okay, dumb it down, got it.

- Who is Mr Fang?


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Re: Bell ghosts.

« Reply #16 on: 22 May 2010, 01:50:12 »

Overview
Like a whisp, the Bell Ghost floats upon the foreboding mists of Osthemangar. Like an unfinished fabric half woven, the bell ghost glides about, a bundle of thousands of <translucent> threads. Like tentacles they hang suspended from the body that resembles a jellyfish, caressing the solid corrupted land over which it slithers. Behold though for if these gentle seeming crystalline tendrils entwine themselves around flesh, the vile and <netherworldly> nature of the bell ghost reveals itself. Bystanders will be helpless to watch as the hollow beast sucks its prey’s insides through its thorn-ridden tentacles up to the bell of the creature. Until research by <___> identified the bell ghost characteristic ‘phantom breathe’ glow, many a foolish traveller attempting to transverse Osthemangar has been ravaged by these silent beasts of the Netherworld.

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Heya Exmortis, here’s a sample Overview I put together from the start of your entry. I hope that the style and thorough cutting out of detail for the overview may help you in further ‘santha-sizing’ this entry. Hope it’s of some help.

* <__> these are words that might still be too modern or that I just wasn’t sure about myself
** This extract was done purely stylistically, so please dun take me up on facts or traits that I may have conveyed wrongly, haha.


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Re: Bell ghosts.

« Reply #17 on: 23 May 2010, 17:07:33 »

Yeah that is essentially what occurs, upon contact with flesh the thorns snap shut, tearing out pieces of flesh which is then sucked up the tendril to the body.

Okay, I see how I can shape this text.

Thanks Jonael, your template here, may, in fact prove invaluable to the completion of this entry.

By the way, I am editing some of my many entries in word processor of late and it may take further time to complete.
So relax guys, I haven't abandoned the boards and left my mountains of work in your hands.


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Re: Bell ghosts.

« Reply #18 on: 23 May 2010, 17:38:16 »

Glad to hear it Exmortis,

Keep at it ^^


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Re: Bell ghosts.

« Reply #19 on: 09 December 2012, 21:48:46 »

Bump...


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Re: Bell ghosts.

« Reply #20 on: 10 December 2012, 04:09:27 »

Welcome back again, Exmortis! grin

I see you've made some progress here - but there are still a couple of sections missing... How about filling those as well?


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